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本帖最后由 纪晓晴 于 2015-4-18 18:30 编辑
老师好~~自己试着写了一下issue91 限时30分钟只写了400多一点,自己有重新改了一下,麻烦老师帮忙点评一下~~谢谢老师!
91) The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The ubiquitousness of technology has provided myriads of advantages and great convenience for us. Someone claims that the primary goal of technology advancement is to boost productivity which enables people to have more leisure time. However, I can only partly agree with that. Indeed, the technology boosts the efficiency, but various technologies serve different functions in our society. The function is beyond the goal of more leisure time. For example, the transportation stimulates communication between different regions, and the medical technology enables people to lead a healthier and longer life. Moreover, compared with the ancient times, technology does not seem to provide more leisure time for people.
(交通技术改变生活 促进不同地区人们的交流,人们可以更加有效的利用时间 )
Transportation technology has been developed for years and changed our life a lot. Indeed it boosts efficiency but the primary goal is to enhance communication rather than provide more leisure time. Although we do not have more leisure time than before, we utilize the leisure time in a more efficient way. We no longer need to waste lots of time in the boring journey. For example, in the current days, it only takes us half a day to fly from Beijing to New York, which is unbelievable to our ancestors. Thus more people are willing to visit other places and experience different culture during their leisure time. So a much more intense communication between different regions flourishes.
一段基本在讲交通带来的改变 这个和题目所讨论的to increase people's efficiency 似乎并不矛盾 整个这一段并没有支持你首段所讲的观点
感觉你要否定科技的目的是提高效率是很难的 不如肯定前半部分 然后不同意后半部分
(医药技术的发展是为了我们能够更好的生活 对抗疾病黑死病的灾难不会再重现,疾病可以被有效控制)
In addition, some technology development such as medical development is useful to enhance the health condition and mortality of human beings. Thanks to the medical technology, more disease can be controlled and cured effectively. However, the target for medical technology is beyond offering more leisure time. It enables us to lead a health and longer life. It is hard to imagine the condition in the European during the 14th century, when the plague spread across the continent. But in the modern society, owing to the advanced medicines such as antibiotic, human beings hardly experience such disaster. Even the scary HIVs, technology exist to keep it under control. Thus, the development of technology in medical field may not enable people to have more leisure time, but it can strengthen the capability of people to enjoy life.
其实也可以说提高了人们治愈疾病的效率 我总觉得要反对前面的观点是很困难的
(与古代社会相比,科技并没有带给我们更多的休息时间,很多人工作到凌晨,没有时间与家人相处,休息)
Besides, compared with ancient time, we engaged more time in our work and become much busier than people in that time. So the idea that technology provides more spare time should be reconsidered. For example, without the invention of bulb, People in the ancient time ceased work after the sunset and spend the rest of time with family or have a sound sleep. However, nowadays, many people still have to work until midnight and spend less time with their family. Thus, it is hard to draw the conclusion that people have more leisure time after the advent of technology.
你的主题句没有明确的观点啊 只是说需要考虑?
Thus, the primary technology is not to provide us more leisure time but to provide a higher standard of life, such as a more intense communication with different regions and better medical facilities. |
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