issue48 创造历史之伟人Vs.凡人 精干文章+超详细讨论

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qian兄的，当然要拜读一下

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Issue48
The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten.
我没照着写重大事件而是推广到整个历史来写的，但是例子举的是重大事件。
TS:历史是人民大众创造的，但我们只可能去研究少数名人。
B1 历史是人民创造的。（人民，唯有人民，才是历史的主人，二战的例子）
B2 不可否认伟人的加速事件发生的作用（贞德的例子）
B3 但是我们只可能研究名人。（因为平凡人太多）
其实不想写结尾，因为B3结束感已经很强了。
打字又差又慢！靠word啦。超时一些吧。大家拍我语言哦！因为实在是太久没写了。

[首先，你的ts没有突出题目的关键词most significant events and trends，这个跟一般的历史事件还不一样吧。
我感觉最好首先界定个什么是most significant events and trends，然后往下写才有地基]

Though the historical study is focused on the celebrities, controversy on who realize the events and trends is still going on. For my part, we should bear in mind that the determinant of history is the forgotten masses rather than the dominant figures, but it is feasible to study only the celebrities rather than the masses.

History actually resided in the hands of the forgotten masses. Take delve into the World War II, what comes to our mind first is the celebrities as Roosevelt and the fellow generals who commanded the battle. However, just as a Chinese saying goes, the fame of the general is based on the casualty of the soldiers. What truly defeated the Japanese and Nazi Germany is the hundreds of aircraft carriers and tens of thousands of tanks manufactured by the workers and the death toll of the soldiers that mounted an even greater number. Without their blood and sweat,[对啊，不过要是没有Hitler的发动战争，不就没有workers 和 soldiers的努力了么？]  the generals alone could by no means fight aginst[against typo?] the foe. So, the war was indeed won by the toil of the workers who survived and the sacrifice of soldiers who died. [可以再举个爱波罗等月的例子，人们都知道三个宇航员登上了月球，缺忘记了阿波罗计划是由几百家美国公司大学N万科学家和工程师的努力]

On the other hand, the function of the celebrity which should not be trivialized availed to the acceleration of the events. Looking into the One Hundred Years War, we observe that although the majority of French were only to willing to drive away the British intruders and reoccupy their homeland, but they were hesitant and the wrath was not released until the 17 year old girl Joan of Arc stood out and mustered the people to fight for their own country. Though the French is destined to claim their own land, were it not for Joan of Arc, the victory would be postponed markedly.[因为历史的不可逆性，怎么证明如果没有Joan of Arc, 百年战争法国就会不有利呢]

But, the pitiful truth is that the historical research is focused merely on several celebrity rather than the masses. It is somewhat reasonable but not justifiable. We already know that the determinant of history is the masses, but due to the great number of the ordinary people, it is impossible to identify, record and examine what every one of them thought and did, while the celebrities’ deeds are easy to observe. So, practically, historians always study only the contribution of the famous people which may to some extent representative the trend and masses.[感觉这段是你的文章的重心，最为critical的地方，不过你论证的有点单薄，可以从public心理学上写写，人们往往崇尚英雄。。。。除了历史学家，没有人会从史料中研究历史。。。再分析一段]

We shall all remember that the determinant of history is the forgotten masses and their unknown contribution but we can literally observe only the celebrities readily.
[虽然短小，但是自圆其说，很不错了，就是感觉逻辑性分析有点少]