Issue185，丑闻的作用，限时的，不过字数还是少，sigh..

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Issue185: 481 words  40 minutes
Scandals—whether in politics, academia, or other areas—can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
正文
Debates on the role scandals play in our society began since the very day scandals emerged. While different people hold different opinions on this issue, I tend to agree to the speaker. Though not welcomed, scandals, no matter in which field, do help attract our attentions to many important and essential problems which otherwise may be ignored or overlooked.

To begin with, in the field of politics, scandals always play as the impetus for political improvements' taking place. No matter how advanced a country's political system is, it is never perfect and really completed. While facial peace and prosperity may mask its deepest deficiencies, scandals make them under the sun. These may be surprising and even unacceptable to us at first, but it is also them that force us to think, to improve and to complete our systems and regulations. For example, the Watergate scandal intrigued the congress to think about the necessity of laying limit to the executive's power, and the Clinton's sex scandal makes the issue on leader's ethical and moral standards unprecedentedly hot. Of course, all these scandals are not what we would like to see, but their contribution to the improvement of our political systems is never to be denied.     

Further, when it comes to the academia, the role scandals play is also positive in that they strike the alert bell for us to contemplate and self-examine, which is necessary to ensure healthier and further development of academics. As the most focused issue, education is of imponderable importance to us human beings' future development and has long been thought of the cleanest field without cheating, adulteration and so forth. However, now, it is not the case any more: Professors spare more energy to earn money instead of guiding their students; lecturers are making up or copying others' theses to gain promotion; students are cheating in exams and even buying forged diplomas. Without scandals emerging revealing these kinds of issues, we could not promise that education will not go far away from its right road.

Nevertheless, when facing with scandals, we should be aware that the thinking behind them are more valuable than the events themselves and thus try to avoid focusing too much of our attention to the facial appearance of them, which is valueless and even misleading. Focusing too much on the face of Clinton's sex scandal only brings us entertainment or talking topic after dinner; Blaming on the academic corruptions only make us more indignant and hopeless about the future. Only by intriguing people to think, to contemplate, and then to carry out solutions, could scandals bring us real benefit.

In sum, while scandals are not welcomed, they do benefit us as well as the whole society in its alerting effect for us to think, to self-examine, and finally to improve our deficiencies, which provides the very impetus for society to move forward.

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哎,40分钟480字也叫少,我等作文虾米岂不是要哭死了

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480字不是很够哦~~

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Issue185: 481 words 40 minutes
Scandals—whether in politics, academia, or other areas—can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
正文
Debates on the role scandals play in our society began since the very day scandals用成代词it 避免重复，更通顺流畅 emerged. While different people hold different opinions on this issue, I tend to agree to the speaker. Though not welcomed, scandals, no matter in which field, do help attract our attentions to many important and essential problems which otherwise may be ignored or overlooked.

To begin with, in the field of politics, scandals always play as the impetus for political improvements' taking place不要taking place. No matter how advanced a country's political system is, it is never perfect and really completed. While facial peace and prosperity may mask its deepest deficiencies, scandals make them under the sun意思很好，但是表达上面稍微优点欠缺，尤其是这个动词. These may be surprising and even unacceptable to us at first, but it is also them中文痕迹，而且语法上似乎也有点问题 that force us to think, to improve and to complete our systems and regulations. For example, the Watergate scandal intrigued the congress to think about the necessity of laying limit to the executive's power, and the Clinton's sex scandal makes the issue on leader's ethical and moral standards unprecedentedly hot. 两个例证，工整有力Of course, all these scandals are not what we would like to see, but their contribution to the improvement of our political systems is never to be denied.

Further, when it comes to the academia, the role scandals play is also positive in that they strike the alert bell这个比喻用的不错哈！ for us to contemplate and self-examine, which is necessary to ensure healthier and further development of academics. As the most focused issue, education is of imponderable importance to us human beings' future development and has long been thought of the cleanestmost purified field without cheating, adulteration 最好再并一个and so forth. However, now, it is not the case any more: Professors spare more energy to earn money instead of guiding their students; lecturers are making up or copying others' theses to gain promotion; students are cheating in exams and even buying forged diplomas.这三个例子也举得不错！ Without scandals emerging你是直接从汉语翻过来的吧，但是汉语中有很多动词是不能直译的哦` revealing these kinds of issues, we could not promise that education will not go far away from its right road.

Nevertheless, when facing with scandals, we should be aware that the thinking behind them 这儿又是汉语的习惯吧are more valuable than the events themselves and thus try to avoid focusing too much of our attention to the facial appearance of themtheir facial appearence , which is valueless and even misleading. Focusing too much on the face of Clinton's sex scandal only brings us entertainment or talking topic after dinner; Blaming on the academic corruptions only make us more indignant and hopeless about the future.GOOD! Only by intriguing people to think, to contemplate, and then to carry out solutions, could scandals bring us real benefit.

In sum, while scandals are not welcomed, they do benefit us as well as the whole society in its alerting effect for us to think, to self-examine, and finally to improve our deficiencies, which provides the very impetus for society to move forward.


总的来说文章思路很清晰，论证也不错，但就是注意语言有时留有汉语的痕迹。
这篇是高频吧，我还没写呢！刚才这个变色工具出问题害的我改了三遍，再改下去我都能背了哈~！对了，我觉得你进步挺大的，写的也不错，不用太担心字数了！加油！：）

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Issue185: 481 words 40 minutes
Scandals—whether in politics, academia, or other areas—can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
正文
Debates on the role scandals play in our society began since the very day scandals emerged. While different people hold different opinions on this issue, I tend to agree to the speaker. Though not welcomed, scandals, no matter in which field, do help attract our attentions to many important and essential problems which otherwise may be ignored or overlooked.

To begin with, in the field of politics, scandals always play as the impetus for political improvements' taking place. No matter how advanced a country's political system is, it is never perfect and really completed. While facial peace and prosperity may mask its deepest deficiencies, scandals make them under the sun. These may be surprising and even unacceptable to us at first, but it is also them the scandals that force us to think, to improve and to complete our systems and regulations. For example, the Watergate scandal intrigued the congress to think about the necessity of laying limit to the executive's power, and the Clinton's sex scandal makes the issue on leader's ethical and moral standards unprecedentedly hot. Of course, all these scandals are not what we would like to see, but their contribution to the improvement of our political systems is never to be denied. Clinton 的例子好像归到political system 上不太恰当。

Further, when it comes to the academia, the role scandals play is also positive in that they strike the alert bell 是不是warning bell 啊？for us to contemplate and self-examine, which is necessary to ensure healthier and further development of academics. As the most focused issue, education is of imponderable importance to us human beings' future development and has long been thought of the cleanest field without cheating, adulteration and so forth. However, now, it is not the case any more: some Professors spare more energy to earn money instead of guiding their students; lecturers are making up or copying others' theses to gain promotion; students are cheating in exams and even buying forged diplomas. Without scandals emerging revealing these kinds of issues, we could not promise that education will not go far away from its right road. 这一段应该再突出一下丑闻的作用。过多笔墨花在教育不良现状上了。

Nevertheless, when facing with scandals, we should be aware that the thinking behind them are more valuable than the events themselves and thus try to avoid focusing too much of our attention to the facial appearance of them, which is valueless and even misleading. 这一句没有必要写这么长。Valueless 是对前面…more valuable 的某种重复。  Focusing too much on the face of Clinton's sex scandal only brings us entertainment or talking topic after dinner; Blaming on the academic corruptions only make us more indignant and hopeless about the future. Only by intriguing people to think, to contemplate, and then to carry out solutions, could scandals bring us real benefit.

In sum, while scandals are not welcomed, they do benefit us as well as the whole society in its alerting effect for us to think, to self-examine, and finally to improve our deficiencies improve deficiency？, which provides the very impetus for society to move forward.
结构很清晰。我觉得body3应该是你重点讨论的一段，需要再展开来谈。To think, to …重复次数太多。

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Issue185: 481 words 40 minutes
Scandals—whether in politics, academia, or other areas—can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
正文
Debates on the role scandals play in our society began since the very day scandals emerged. While different people hold different opinions on this issue, I tend to agree to the speaker. Though not welcomed, scandals, no matter in which field, do help attract our attentions to many important and essential problems which otherwise may be ignored or overlooked.

To begin with, in the field of politics, scandals always play as the impetus for political improvements' taking place. No matter how advanced a country's political system is, it is never perfect and really completed. While facial peace and prosperity may mask its deepest deficiencies, scandals make them under the sun. These may be surprising and even unacceptable to us at first, but it is also them the scandals that force us to think, to improve and to complete our systems and regulations. For example, the Watergate scandal intrigued the congress to think about the necessity of laying limit to the executive's power, and the Clinton's sex scandal makes the issue on leader's ethical and moral standards unprecedentedly hot. Of course, all these scandals are not what we would like to see, but their contribution to the improvement of our political systems is never to be denied. Clinton 的例子好像归到political system 上不太恰当。

Further, when it comes to the academia, the role scandals play is also positive in that they strike the alert bell 是不是warning bell 啊？for us to contemplate and self-examine, which is necessary to ensure healthier and further development of academics. As the most focused issue, education is of imponderable importance to us human beings' future development and has long been thought of the cleanest field without cheating, adulteration and so forth. However, now, it is not the case any more: some Professors spare more energy to earn money instead of guiding their students; lecturers are making up or copying others' theses to gain promotion; students are cheating in exams and even buying forged diplomas. Without scandals emerging revealing these kinds of issues, we could not promise that education will not go far away from its right road. 这一段应该再突出一下丑闻的作用。过多笔墨花在教育不良现状上了。

Nevertheless, when facing with scandals, we should be aware that the thinking behind them are more valuable than the events themselves and thus try to avoid focusing too much of our attention to the facial appearance of them, which is valueless and even misleading. 这一句没有必要写这么长。Valueless 是对前面…more valuable 的某种重复。  Focusing too much on the face of Clinton's sex scandal only brings us entertainment or talking topic after dinner; Blaming on the academic corruptions only make us more indignant and hopeless about the future. Only by intriguing people to think, to contemplate, and then to carry out solutions, could scandals bring us real benefit.

In sum, while scandals are not welcomed, they do benefit us as well as the whole society in its alerting effect for us to think, to self-examine, and finally to improve our deficiencies improve deficiency？, which provides the very impetus for society to move forward.
结构很清晰。我觉得body3应该是你重点讨论的一段，需要再展开来谈。To think, to …重复次数太多。

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