issue208 G-89-互助社-21日写作 polymath之终极杀G剑！~

polymathUID：179557

一天就要考试了！:L最后的作品，大家看看，评个分吧！谢谢！:handshake:)

208. The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people.(:L!最大的失误就是写的太多了！考场上怎么打的完呀？:L)

The speaker asserts that people’s appearance and act can reveal their values and interests, and we may deduce a society’s values and ideas by examining their look, dress, and behavior. Admittedly, there are some merits in this assertion, but it is too absolute and overly simple on the whole. So far as I know, a society’s ideas and values are so complex, observing the appearance and act of a limited group of people is not enough to prove the society’s values and views.

First and foremost, from people's outlooks and actions, probability is so rare for us to judge correctly their attitudes and interests. For one thing, People's attitudes and interests are very elusive than its tangible appearances and actions. Persistence, respect of others, honesty, probity and the like cannot be reflected by the outlooks and actions. They are accumulated since one's nativity through education and interactions with people. Besides, people may even deliberately disguise their true selves by their affected behavior, and thus render us unable to see into their within. For another, attitudes and interests of people are tending to change from time to time by stress outside. Draw a figure of speech, ideas and values of a society are mostly the residues of its long tradition, say, mercurial; while people's look and act are only transitory outside impressions, constantly shifting, uncertain. For instance, sometimes in a company, one has to sacrifice his or her personal ideas to be subservient to his or her boss, because the lower ranked must obey the higher ranked. Many other disturbed factors such as mass media, governmental education may also distract people to behave not according to their true values.

Next, but perhaps more important, society's ideas and values are far more inapprehensible than individuals' appearance and interests. Take the dressing and behavior for example, as a result of economical globalization, even if different people in different continents may happen to give a same impression under our observation: dressed in a uniform style of business suit, eat the same taste of Western-style food, etc. That is to say, the French may dress colorfully, while the Americans conversely dress romantically; A Japanese may like to eat pizza, while an Italian loves Kraut best. This case commendably illustrate we cannot clearly ornd thoroughly see a society's ideas and values only from the exterior act and outlooks of its people. Besides, the value system of a modern society in fact has a variegated or pluralistic nature. Only from limited people's views and thoughts, it is hard for us common people to understand the society's real customs and values. In addition, many factors can reflect a society's ideas and values such as educational system, regime, conventional opinions and traditional culture, etc. So to speak, the society's ideology and value are so complex a mingle of individual's views that even if people behave in accordance with their minds, observing the appearance of a limited group of people is not enough to image them.

Admittedly, it is true and commonsense that in certain aspects we did understand a society by its social members' outlooks and actions. For example, a society whose members are pleased in welcoming guests may appear passionate and generous. And a society whose members persist in conservatism might look ponderous and closefisted. Accordingly, we indeed can excogitate a society's mores and values from the outlooks and actions of its people, but this kind of way does not always function pristinely, so we cannot classify all kinds of people by their outlooks and actions.

In conclusion, while to some extent the statement has merits, I would rather modify the speaker's claim into a more fair or objective way, people's attitudes and habits can reflect a colorful corner of their society, yet, this is not a whole sense .(647)

[ Last edited by polymath on 2005-8-21 at 16:15 ]

polymathUID：179557

好不容易可以上网了！抓紧时间帮忙修改一下！还有一天就考试了！:)poly谢谢大家了！
自己顶！

vickycy6UID：2107893

这么多？！
佩服哦：）
是限时写完的么？
厉害哦！一定可以好成绩的
我看看再来给评论啊！：）

liulin12369UID：2112878

我想说，你现在需要追求的是实实在在的限时！！！
词汇很好，论证也不错。这样子很足够了！
加油！

vickycy6UID：2107893

The speaker asserts that people’s appearance and act can reveal their values and interests, and we may deduce a society’s values and ideas by examining their look, dress, and behavior. Admittedly, there are some merits in this assertion, but it is too absolute and overly simple on the whole//既然admittedly用在这么前我想就可以不用逗号分开了吧，我也不清楚，感觉。//. So far as I know, a society’s ideas and values are so complex, observing the appearance and act of a limited group of people is not enough to prove the society’s values and views.

First and foremost, from people's outlooks and actions, probability is so rare for us to judge correctly their attitudes and interests. For one thing, People's attitudes and interests are very elusive than its tangible appearances and actions. Persistence, respect of others//就respect就可以了//, honesty, probity and the likeannot be reflected by the outlooks and actions. They are accumulated since one's nativity through education and interactions with people. Besides, people may even deliberately disguise their true selves by their affected behavior, and thus render us unable to see into their within. For another, attitudes and interests of people are tending to change from time to time by stress outside. Draw a figure of speech, ideas and values of a society are mostly the residues of its long tradition, say, mercurial//这是什么 意思啊？//; while people's look and act are only transitory outside impressions, constantly shifting, uncertain. For instance, sometimes in a company, one has to sacrifice his or her personal ideas to be subservient to his or her boss, because the lower ranked must obey the higher ranked. Many other disturbed factors such as mass media, governmental education may also distract people to behave not according to their true values.

Next, but perhaps more important, society's ideas and values are far more inapprehensible than individuals' appearance and interests. Take the dressing and behavior for example, as a result of economical globalization, even if different people in different continents may happen to give a same impression under our observation: dressed in a uniform style of business suit, eat the same taste of Western-style food, etc. That is to say, the French may dress colorfully, while the Americans conversely dress romantically; A Japanese may like to eat pizza, while an Italian loves Kraut best. This case commendably illustrate we cannot clearly ornd thoroughly see a society's ideas and values only from the exterior act and outlooks of its people//我觉得应该是说由于全球化，今天世界不能被外表看出，而不要说由于这些不能看出，因为你看的Western-style这类单词，都表明了这些东西是have some value with its culture。不知道明白我意思没有//. Besides, the value system of a modern society in fact has a variegated or pluralistic nature. Only from limited people's views and thoughts, it is hard for us common people to understand the society's real customs and values. In addition, many factors can reflect a society's ideas and values such as educational system, regime, conventional opinions and traditional culture, etc. So to speak, the society's ideology and value are so complex a mingle of individual's views that even if people behave in accordance with their minds, observing the appearance of a limited group of people is not enough to image them.//这段例证很好，只是要注意我说的那个就可以，修改主题句就可以了。就说是在全球化的今天。下面就可以谈：过去，是可以看出的//

Admittedly, it is true and commonsense that in certain aspects we did understand a society by its social members' outlooks and actions. For example, a society whose members are pleased in welcoming guests may appear passionate and generous. And a society whose members persist in conservatism might look ponderous and closefisted. Accordingly, we indeed can excogitate a society's mores and values from the outlooks and actions of its people, but this kind of way does not always function pristinely, so we cannot classify all kinds of people by their outlooks and actions.

In conclusion, while to some extent the statement has merits, I would rather modify the speaker's claim into a more fair or objective way, people's attitudes and habits can reflect a colorful corner of their society, yet, this is not a whole sense .(647)

语言很好，丰富啊。实在佩服！各段内容要再调整一下，你把提纲写出来就知道自己有哪不足了
我也写了一篇这个，可能也不很好，我也有和你一样的毛病
很多人都说这个支持比较好说。。。

polymathUID：179557

mercurial//是不易改变的，不流动的，是从水银的特征中引申出来的。

非常感谢2位的鼓励和建议！:)明天最后一天，希望可以再准备的好一点，尤其是把速度提上来！争取后天考出好成绩！:victory:

[ Last edited by polymath on 2005-8-21 at 21:41 ]

fantasianosUID：207837

说明：没有其他提示的，表示在该处直接添加；只有括号的，表示替换
The speaker asserts that people’s appearance and act can reveal their values and interests, and we may deduce a society’s values and ideas by examining their look, dress, and behavior. Admittedly, there are some merits in this assertion, but it is too absolute and overly simple on the whole. So far as I know, a society’s ideas and values are so complex, 可能还是把逗号换成that会比较通顺吧，并且在and后面加上only之类的表示“仅仅”的词 observing the appearance and act of a limited group of people is not enough to prove the society’s values and views.

First and foremost, from people's outlooks and actions, probability is so rare for us to judge correctly their attitudes and interests. For one thing, People's attitudes and interests are very (more) elusive than its tangible appearances and actions. Persistence, respect of (to/from) others, honesty, probity and the like cannot be reflected by the outlooks and actions. They 这个they可能引起歧义 are accumulated since one's nativity through education and interactions with people. Besides, people may even deliberately disguise their true selves by their affected behavior, and thus render us unable to see into their within. For another, attitudes and interests of people are tending to change from time to time by stress outside. Draw a figure of speech, ideas and values of a society are mostly the residues of its long tradition, say, mercurial; while people's look and act are only transitory outside impressions, constantly shifting, uncertain. For instance, sometimes in a company, one has to sacrifice his or her personal ideas to be subservient to his or her boss, because the lower ranked must obey the higher ranked. Many other disturbed factors such as mass media, (and) governmental education may also distract people to behave not 如果把to behave not改成from behaving会不会好一点 according to their true values.

Next, but perhaps more important, society's ideas and values are far more inapprehensible than individuals' appearance and interests. Take the 不需要the dressing and behavior for example, as a result of economical globalization, even if (even) different people in different continents may happen to give a (the) same impression under our observation: dressed (dressing) in a uniform style of business suit, eating the same taste of Western-style food, etc. That is to say, the French may dress colorfully, while the Americans conversely dress romantically; A Japanese may like to eat pizza, while an Italian loves Kraut best. This case commendably illustrates that we cannot clearly ornd (or) thoroughly see a society's ideas and values only from the exterior acts and outlooks of its people. Besides, the value system of a modern society in fact has a variegated or pluralistic nature. Only from limited people's views and thoughts, it is hard for us common people to understand the society's real customs and values. In addition, many factors can reflect a society's ideas and values such as educational system, regime, conventional opinions and traditional culture, etc. So to speak, the society's ideology and value are so complex a mingle of individual's views that even if people behave in accordance with their minds, observing the appearance of a limited group of people is not enough to image them.

Admittedly, it is true and commonsense that in certain aspects we did 用do就行吧 understand a society by its social members' outlooks and actions. For example, a society whose members are pleased in welcoming guests may appear passionate and generous. And a society whose members persist in conservatism might look ponderous and closefisted. 为什么不断说话的人民会胖呢？ Accordingly, we indeed can excogitate a society's mores and values from the outlooks and actions of its people, but this kind of way does not always function pristinely, so we cannot classify all kinds of people by their outlooks and actions.

In conclusion, while to some extent the statement has merits, I would rather modify the speaker's claim into a more fair or objective way,(--) people's attitudes and habits can reflect a colorful corner of their society,(--) yet, this is not a whole sense .(647)

总评：红宝背得好象蛮不错的，好多单词我都忘了。文章只稍微改动了一点，见上；反倒有好多可以学习的地方:)
搞笑一句：日本最出名的应该不是泡菜，换成寿司、鱼生、芥末什么的都可以；泡菜的话还是韩国或者是中国四川好了

vickycy6UID：2107893

哦
我知道那个单词好象是红宝的，它也是这么解释的．
哎，为了作文，我都近一个月没有看单词了．．．５５５５５５５５５５５５

llllll3002UID：2125167

6分，虽然还没看！先鼓励一个！马上就看！

llllll3002UID：2125167

注意一些小小的错误了！good luck!

fishjoyUID：2116013

你今天就不要再写了吧。建议看看以前自己写过的作文和提纲（如果你已经写得足够多了的话），背argu的模版和issue的例子就可以了。你的水平很高了，写得要比我好:)
啰嗦一句：依据我的印象，你写文章有这么几个通病：
1. 对论据的分析不够;
2.语法错误比较多;
3.有的时候一个段落内的层次结构不清晰，比较没有条理。
你看自己的文章时好好体会一下。
如果你有空的话，推荐你阅读老舍的文章，条理性超强无比。这对你写论文也是有好处的（你应该是研究生吧）:)
祝你考出好成绩:victory: