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4. “Of the two leading real estate firms in our town--Adams Realty and Fitch Realty--Adams is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents. In contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams’ revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch, and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch’s $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago, I listed my home with Fitch and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams.”
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1,地产代理的人数只是衡量地产公司好坏的一个因素,还有其他，如经验，名气,办事效率,价格等其他因素.而且,兼职代理也不一定比全职的查，如果F的兼职的全是这个领域的精英人才而A的全制全是毫无经验的新手。而且兼职对于房地产业来讲是最理智的方法,因为不象其他行业随时都有顾客.
2,去年A的年收入比F高并不代表每年都高,也许只是去年高,而且没有说公司的规模，如果A比F大很多，他的收入高也很自然。.而且,A有40人才168000,F25人就有144000,人均收入比A高，其实说明更有效率.
3,一次的售房经历并不代表全部，而且两次售房没说明房子的质量，如果第2次好自然卖得快..两次时间相差远，在不同时期有不同的其他因素影响售房.
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At first blush, the arguer has drawn a strong conclusion from systematic comparsion of digits between Adam and Fitch, and a concrete example one consumer once experienced in the two real estate firms respectively. However, when we take a second  thought and exame the arguer’s reasoning carefully with critical thinking, all of its fallacies will be unfolded since the argument has several flaws such as questionable assumption, incomprehensive analysis, insufficient evidence,etc.

To begin with, the arguer fails to take into consideration of other factors which influence the quality of a real estate firm besides the size of its staff. As a matter of fact, aside from the quantity of agents, some other ingredients of a company such as its experience, nationwide reputation, efficiency in doing bussiness, price it charges and so forth are all carrying weight in the evaluation of a real estate firm.let’s make a hypothesis here, if all factors except the favorable size of Adam's staff are below the average level or even the worst compared with the rest firms in the same industry, can it still be put into the outstanding status? The answer is an absolute “no”. Deep down, full-time workers of Adam is not necessarily an advantage over Fitch whose employees are mainly part-timers in that in most occasions a comparatively small number of qualified and excellent staff plays a more important role in leading a good company than a large number of unapt and unskillful workers. Meanwhile, in light of the special nature of real estate industry, it seems optimal to hire part-time agents because, unlike other fiels, the working schedule of real estate is relatively more flexible with only a small porportion of time being busy. Under such circumstance, what sagacious is to hire part-timers so as to a firm can cut down its cost, meanwhile, pluralistic employees can do much more things in their free time.

In the second place, high revenue of A last year is not an equivalence of high revenue forever. It’s undeniable that there existes the possibility that Adam just made ends meet or even lost money in all other years but last year. If this comes out to be true, high revenue of A last year does not serve as a superiority over F in profit obtaining. In addition, the arguer furnishes us with not even a shred of evidence which lends to explane the scale of the company. Without the acquaintanceship of the real estate firm’s scale, it’s utterly impossile to deduce it’s profit making potential based merely on the total money it gains. Since it’s natural for a large-scale company with a large sum of funds invested to gain more profit than a small-scale firm with hardly no big money invested in. In this sense, this is nowhere more true than on the issue that 40 agents of A made 168000 profit is actually a failure or even disgrace for them when compared with F who has just 25 agents but still won 144000 profits in home sales. As a result, it’s presumptuous to judge selling competitive capability only according to the overall profit with the unit’s profit making ignored.

Moreover, two experiences of selling home are not appropriate representatives of the whole selling trend. Wharever else may be said, there lies the undeniable likelihood that other factors serve to affect the eventual result of the two experiences of selling home. For instance, maybe the two homes involved in the two home trades are of divaricating quality per se with the latter home enjoying better quality, maybe people’s attitude in buying a home varies greatly from year to year, let alone the attitudes ten years ago and last year with almost nine yeas’ time distance. It’s said that people are growing concerned more and more the living standard, so , people living in last year inevitably are more interested in buying good home than people living in ten year ago.

In sum, having viewd all the aspects above,it’s preposterous to make a conclustion that A outweigts F in almost every aspects. And we should analyze and compare the two firms more carefully with a comprehensive perspective before making a  suggestion that people should use A if they want to sell their home quickly and at a good price.

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At first blush, the arguer has drawn a strong conclusion from systematic comparsion of digits between Adam and Fitch, and a concrete example one consumer once experienced in the two real estate firms respectively. However, when we take a second  thought and exame the arguer’s reasoning carefully with critical thinking, all of its fallacies will be unfolded since the argument has several flaws such as questionable assumption, incomprehensive analysis, insufficient evidence,etc.

To begin with, the arguer fails to take into consideration of other factors which influence the quality of a real estate firm besides the size of its staff. As a matter of fact, aside from the quantity of agents, some other ingredients of a company such as its experience, nationwide reputation, efficiency in doing bussiness, price it charges and so forth are all carrying weight in the evaluation of a real estate firm.let’s make a hypothesis here, if all factors except the favorable size of Adam's staff are below the average level or even the worst compared with the rest firms in the same industry, can it still be put into the outstanding status? The answer is an absolute “no”. Deep down, full-time workers of Adam is not necessarily an advantage over Fitch whose employees are mainly part-timers in that in most occasions a comparatively small number of qualified and excellent staff plays a more important role in leading a good company than a large number of unapt and unskillful workers. Meanwhile, in light of the special nature of real estate industry, it seems optimal to hire part-time agents because, unlike other fiels, the working schedule of real estate is relatively more flexible with only a small porportion of time being busy. Under such circumstance, what sagacious is to hire part-timers so as to a firm can cut down its cost, meanwhile, pluralistic employees can do much more things in their free time.

In the second place, high revenue of A(a) last year is not an equivalence of high revenue forever. It’s undeniable that there existes the possibility that Adam just made ends meet or even lost money in all other years but last year. If this comes out to be true, high revenue of A last year does not serve as a superiority over F in profit obtaining. In addition, the arguer furnishes us with not even a shred of evidence which lends to explane(explain the scale of the company. Without the acquaintanceship of the real estate firm’s scale, it’s utterly impossile to deduce it’s profit making potential based merely on the total money it gains. Since it’s natural for a large-scale company with a large sum of funds invested to gain more profit than a small-scale firm with hardly no big money invested in. In this sense, this is nowhere more true than on the issue that 40 agents of A made 168000 profit is actually a failure or even disgrace for them when compared with F who has just 25 agents but still won 144000 profits in home sales. As a result, it’s presumptuous to judge selling competitive capability only according to the overall profit with the unit’s profit making ignored.

Moreover, two experiences of selling home are not appropriate representatives of the whole selling trend. Wharever else may be said, there lies the undeniable likelihood that other factors serve to affect the eventual result of the two experiences of selling home. For instance, maybe the two homes involved in the two home trades are of divaricating quality per se with the latter home enjoying better quality, maybe people’s attitude in buying a home varies greatly from year to year, let alone the attitudes ten years ago and last year with almost nine yeas’ time distance. It’s said that people are growing concerned more and more the living standard, so , people living in last year inevitably are more interested in buying good home than people living in ten year ago.

In sum, having viewd all the aspects above,it’s preposterous to make a conclustio（conclusion)我爱寄托n that A outweigts F in almost every aspects. And we should analyze and compare the two firms more carefully with a comprehensive perspective before making a  suggestion that people should use A if they want to sell their home quickly and at a good price


组长写的很好，没一个论据都批的很到位，文章的逻辑也很好，尤其第一段对全文的概括很好。文章中单词拼写错误比较多。  看了此文感觉你的文章很好，我也学到了你的开头，其实我一直在写这种开头，可是和你的差距好大。

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？？？买看到你改的啊。