issue131 The arts (music, dance, visual arts, etc.) are

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158The arts (music, dance, visual arts, etc.) are vitally important to students' education and should therefore receive as much emphasis as mathematics, science, reading and other mainstream subjects."

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这个题目是和昨天的题目有异曲同工之处, 都将侧重点放在了art的作用，对教育的意义，对社会的意义，对个人的意义。
可以从这个方面来分析.
欢迎跟贴.

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首先: 你写的越来越有条理了,不错.
但是要注意一些非常小的问题: 比如时态的一致, 逗号的用法,等, 给你举出一个, 如下:

最初由 gteryy 发表
[B]is emphasize the importance  [/B]

别骂我呦.:)
还有就是第三个段落, 主题句是不是应该修改一下? 艺术 本身需要鼓励,启发，灵感? 还是艺术本身有鼓励的作用或者赋予灵感? 你的段落里面的例子以及结论明明写的是艺术有启发灵感的作用, 所以, 我想, 是不是...:)

最初由 gteryy 发表
[B] Secondly, art itself needs inspiration, so art in its turn can light up the inspiration in the students. I remember when I was in high school, I am always obfuscated by the mathematic problems which usually made me annoyed, then I would listen to some music, like the No.1 piano concerto of Tschaikovsky. Later, when I looked back on the problems, I found it so easy to solve in certain way. And one of my friends who is an environment major, once told me excitedly that she knew how to design a perfect drainage system of a project which bothered her several days, after seeing a picture show. So art is important for learning science or other subject.
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总的来说, 不错, 5 分左右? :p