【草莓酱拌饭组】1ISSUE 7 by Gary

gongyuxiang1990UID: 2697832

Issue7:
"The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation that written records."

提纲：
观点：

Video camera 和 written各有优缺，都有其特定的使用价值，不具有可比性。
论证：
1.定义关键词Record
2.Video比书写好的地方是记录客观真实，不受作者主观影响+举例。
3.Video比书写好在它能提供真实的场景，比如拍摄风景。
4.书面记录也有其优势的地方，比如成本底方便。
5.书面记录适用于正式场合，比如一些法令，合同签署。
6.总结，我们应该恰当地应用它们，强调观点都有价值。

Nowadays, video cameras are widely used in our life and become more and more popular, for they provide accurate and convincing records. It seems that without video cameras our records are something boring and inaccurately, and they have become more important than written recordings. However, each of them has advantages and disadvantages in particular areas, and they both have significant effects on document. So we cannot judge which one is more important.

Record is something that can be referred to later, it should be accurately and prolonged storage. Some records need real and objective scene, such as real-time live matches broadcast and some require the authors' commentaries such as archeology. Therefore, video cameras and hand writing both have utility value.

Video camera provides objective records, they are not influenced by the author. In contrast, written records maybe a subjective, because they accord to the writer's thought. For instance, we want to record a demonstrate course in order for other students to study. A radio camera should be more vivid and overall, other students can watch the video record and receive the same information as us who have attended the course. But, if we use written record, of course they are our notes, other students can only learn from what we had written. We cannot write down all the information provided by the teacher, we usually record what we thought important or maybe what we didn't understand.

Video camera can provide the real scenes. For example, the beautiful scenery are better to be taken by a video camera rather than written.
When we watch the digital records, we can see the scenery as if we were there, someone liken video cameras to the artificial eyes. But readers of the written records can only see the beauty through out their imagination.

Writing as a method of recording is more convenient and cheaper than video cameras, for we only need a pan and a notebook to write, that's cost only a few dollars and an educated person can use it easily. But only a well treated person can take well qualified records by a video camera, and a video need electricity support and influence by the environment conditions such as light, heat and so on, more importantly, a video camera is not that cheap.
And if we want to use the records made by cameras, special facilities are needed, such as computers, video.
However, we use written records just found them out and read them.

Written records are widely used in some formal documents, such as a discipline, an order or a contract. Let's take the contract as an example. During a negotiation the two sides have
made a decision and they should sign their name on a contract, written records maybe better for this. If we use video camera, take down the process of the meeting and then maybe a representative make a conclusion speech. It seems that this form of deals is not protected by the law.


In sum, we should choose to use video camera records or written records in suitable conditions. They are the same important in today's information society.

gongyuxiang1990UID: 2697832

写作感想

虽然这第二篇ISSUE不像处女作那样纠结到难产，但也着实也费了很大工夫。
这个题目挺简单，分析也很容易，但是在写作的过程中，发现一些问题：
一. 论据是个大问题，感觉例子很难找啊！我平时没什么积累，脑子里狂想也就爱因斯坦、伽利略之流，我的问题是应该积累什么样的例子？
二. 而且写提纲的时候才发现我不知道提纲是何物，确切的说是不知道那天开会米饭妹妹说的先阶段应该详细写出来的提纲应该是什么样子的？偶滴提纲那个乱啊，写了满满一页废话，整理出来就上边那几句。
三. 时间问题啊，倒是这个肯定在前期是个必须的问题，写一篇ISSUE大概历时3个小时。在练习中提高吧！
四. 字数问题，500+还是有些困难唉，这篇是经过2次增补才到520的，这个问题我一直不知道如何解决，这在前两篇写作中也存在的，希望有人帮偶解决一下下！
五. 遣词造句感觉真是捉襟见肘啊！这个就通过丞相那个资料慢慢练吧！

加油！话说我自从准备GRE女朋友都没了，岂有不成功之理！

cinderella1016UID: 2666652

你的遣词造句确实有问题，嗯。

gongyuxiang1990UID: 2697832

3# cinderella1016
额……这个俺深知~
前辈，可不可以具体一些指导一下下呢？感激不尽哈！

dairymanUID: 2683905

观点：

Video camera 和 written各有优缺，都有其特定的使用价值，不具有可比性。
论证：
1.定义关键词Record（赞定义关键词）
2.Video比书写好的地方是记录客观真实，不受作者主观影响+举例。
3.Video比书写好在它能提供真实的场景，比如拍摄风景。（我怎么感觉2，3是一个，你分成两段说真实，是不是拖沓了？同样是优点，书面记录有两种优势，方便和正式，尽管这个关键词“正式”不是太合理……，你video就一种，还拆成两种写，是不是有些拼凑之嫌？）
4.书面记录也有其优势的地方，比如成本底方便。
5.书面记录适用于正式场合，比如一些法令，合同签署。
6.总结，我们应该恰当地应用它们，强调观点都有价值。（感觉优势是不是应该合并在一起写啊，每个分两个，这样就能显得逻辑很紧凑了？）