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shirley072UID: 2712200

Children have been asked about our dreams and habits (没有问habit这个吧，跟dream一起并列不恰当呢) since we were in a young age, however, never been told that future would not always be bright like the noontime sunshine, and this (指代的是哪里呢？) is the real life. Tough and even (Even tough?) sometimes afflicting, life is mixed with so much experience and thoughts people have no idea until make the trials (?). It is no doubt that the reality also goes against people's expects. Through these unexpected life stories, one can find many special and unexploited aspects in his own personalities and characteristics.
5 i  R, x- M" U; j   Pushing oneself to adapt to a new environment, an unexpected disaster, even a fresh job, one can teach himself several treasure things and burden the understanding of the world, even if the original orientation is not from his wish directly. There are many old stories are saying (As many old stories say) that some of our ancestors were moving to the new land constantly, driven by the changes taking place in the nature. They explored more and more areas and lands all over the world, reasoning that the gradual worsen environment pushed them to leave the homes and tribals. Without their forced moving, the world today is never the one it looks nowadays.
9 P2 B$ @: E& y: {5 B& @   Through forcing oneself to do the things himself or herself do not like, one can burden himself/herself a sense of responsibilities. Undoubtedly, every single of man is making their (单复要统一) best to meet their social obligation, such as some compulsory policies and family pressure. They may just accept something out of their own hope, but through these works and trials, one gains his social value and the experience benefits others, especially the families and friends.7 U, n; ^1 x4 a( @
   It is not a easy task to make sacrifice of one's own thoughts to do something for others and the society. Just as the famous saying goes, no pain, no gain, people learn many influential ideas and gain a mass of life experience in the process. Paying a price in the growth period, we are improving ourselves and qualifying for the further challenges.

个人觉得本文很偏题哦，首先第一段就完全没有提到topic有关的地方，只是说了dream和reality的关系，第二段说适应开发新环境，只有最后一句话force好像在说他们是被强迫的，也许楼主认为被强迫的跟做不喜欢的事情是一回事，但是我觉得并不能划等号，至少要把这层也许非常简单的关系说出来，要写出来。话说回来，楼主是认为人们do not enjoy开发新环境了？这个貌似有点不对吧。最后一段总结也是，楼主一定要扣到点上，直接说出来。比如说No pain, no gain，或者说pay a price不等于做自己不喜欢的事，因为就算是做自己喜欢的事，这句话同样适用。

eddie23508okUID: 2281260

1.19 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing. $ m1 ~, N2 @" C  l. T- }( ~3 w
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Children have been asked about our dreams and habits since we were in a young age, however, never been told that future would not always be bright like the noontime sunshine, and this is the real life. Tough and even sometimes afflicting, life is mixed with so much experience and thoughts people have no idea (have no idea about sth, 这里应该加上个about) until make the trials. It is no doubt that the reality also (sometimes,并不是所有时候吧) goes against people's expects. Through these unexpected life stories, one can find many special and unexploited aspects in his own personalities and characteristics.

Pushing oneself to adapt to a new environment, an unexpected disaster (习惯灾难？前环境，后工作还可以理解，可是灾难？), even a fresh job, one can teach himself several treasure things and burden the understanding of the world, even if the original orientation is not from his wish directly. There are many old stories are saying that some of our ancestors were moving to the new land constantly, driven by the changes taking place in the nature. They explored more and more areas and lands all over the world, reasoning that the gradual worsen (worsened或deteriorateing) environment pushed them to leave the homes and tribals. Without their forced moving, the world today is never the one it looks nowadays.(或多或少感觉例子跟这段的TS不太搭，建议换个例子，原始人的例子有点遥远)

Through forcing oneself to do the things himself or herself do not like, one can burden himself/herself a sense of responsibilities. Undoubtedly, every single of man (everyone) is making their best to meet their social obligation, such as some compulsory policies and family pressure. They may just accept something out of their own hope, but through these works and trials, one gains his social value and the experience benefits others, especially the families and friends.(where are the examples? This paragragh is a little bit abstract.)

It is not a easy task to make sacrifice of one's own thoughts to do something for others and the society (It is not easy for one to make his or her own thoughts subject to obligations they probably do not enjoy but just necessary). Just as the famous saying goes, no pain, no gain, people learn many influential ideas and gain a mass of life experience in the process. Paying a price in the growth period, we are improving ourselves and qualifying for the further challenges.

文章语言和词汇方面不错，没有太大问题，但是内容方面可以稍微斟酌一下，有时候感觉不是很切题，例子方面也可以稍加努力。加油！