11 22 综合写作 T12

jjooyyUID: 2704028

Generally, the lecture holds the opinion that the professionally painted portrait of a teenage girl provided by a family member of Austen’s is not Jane Austen, but still has a loose connect with Austen's family, which contradicts the main idea of the reading.

Firstly, while the passage states the family permission of using the portrait of Austen several decades after her death, the lecture cast the doubt of the owner of the portrait. Since he lives 70 years later, there is no doubt that he or she never had a chance to see Austen alive, and cannot recognize her by a picture.

Secondly, the reading regards the portrait trustworthy as the resemblance with the sketch created by Austen's sister, Cassandra. Conversely, the professor does not have the same opinion. He mentions the resemblance of relatives of Austen's, suggesting the possibility of the wrong one in the painting. For example, there may be a number of teenagers in Austen's family who look alike Austen, at that time. One probability is Austen's distant nephew.

In addition, the reading emphasizes the style of the painting fits the time when Austen was a teenager, which is totally against the lecture. The professor points out that Ozias Humphrey, the painter, did not began to draw on canvas like the portrait until Austen was 27 years old, when Austen is much older than the picture shows.

In summary, the lecture refuted the very portrait was Jane Austen herself by three respects, thus wholly disagree on the idea of the reading. Because of the false recognition of the painting's owner, the possibility of mistaking Austin's family members and her, the unsuitable painting style, rather than Austen, whom the picture depicts are still questionable.


   ms字多了 也超时了很多 难过 总是写的很慢 不知道有没有快速练快的方法。。

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Generally, the lecture holds the opinion that the professionally painted portrait of a teenage girl provided by a family member of Austen’s is not Jane Austen（这句语法有点问题，应该改为the subject of the portrait is not Jane Austen）, but still has a loose connect(connection) with Austen's family, which contradicts the main idea of the reading.

Firstly(First,美国人一般不喜欢用firstly，这是英式英语的写法), while the passage states the family permission of using the portrait of Austen several decades after her death, the lecture cast the doubt of the owner of the portrait. Since he lives 70 years later, there is no doubt that he or she never had a chance to see Austen alive, and cannot recognize her by a picture.
（这一段貌似有不少问题，建议你重新听一下听力材料。听力材料的中心意思是奥斯丁家族允许这幅画作为奥斯丁的肖像使用，但那时奥斯丁已经过世70年了，家族中的任何成员都不可能见过她）
Secondly, the reading regards the portrait trustworthy as the resemblance with the sketch created by Austen's sister, Cassandra. Conversely, the professor does not have the same opinion. He mentions the resemblance of relatives of Austen's, suggesting the possibility of the wrong one in the painting. For example, there may be a number of teenagers in Austen's family who look alike Austen, at that time. One probability is Austen's distant nephew.


In addition, the reading emphasizes the style of the painting fits the time when Austen was a teenager, which is totally against the lecture. The professor points out that Ozias Humphrey, the painter, did not began to draw on canvas like the portrait until Austen was 27 years old, when Austen is much older than the picture shows.
（这一段貌似也有问题，听力中提到了销售canvas的商人直到奥斯丁27岁时才开始销售这种画布，与Humphrey何时开始在 canvas上作画无关）
In summary, the lecture refuted the very portrait was Jane Austen herself by three respects, thus wholly disagree on the idea of the reading. Because of the false recognition of the painting's owner, the possibility of mistaking Austin's family members and her, the unsuitable painting style, rather than Austen, whom the picture depicts are still questionable最后一段可以省略，一般只要在正文中逐条反驳即可。除非时间充裕，否则一般不必加结尾段。

看了你的文章，我觉得你最大的问题还在听力上，很多听力材料中的要点你无法准确把握，建议你按照诸葛斑竹的建议认真练习听写，待听力水平提高后，综合写作水平自然也就水涨船高了。