rockyang的独立写作~~2010年1月8日起

rockyangleiUID: 2721636

1.8题目：Some people think that the automobile has improved modern life. Others think that the automobile has caused serious problems. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Obviously, the automobile has brought more convenience for many aspects of human beings live. No matter the situation ofworks or the normal lives of people, even the other entertainment for people,we could not ignore that the contributions from automobile to our modern life.

First of all, the automobile make our workand job more efficient. Before the invention of automobile, human should spendmore time on the road when they want to transport something from one place toanother. For example, in the ancient period, people used the horse or otherlivestock to be transposition. And the horse or other cattle had a limitedability for carrying freights and people should take care of livestock toprevent them from being sick or dead. However, when the automobile emerges,people could save more time for transporting from one place to another. Inaddition, even the trains have come out and improved efficiency for people, butthe trains have always depended on the rails. In this case, without many limitsthe automobile brought people surprise in the ability of transposition absolutely.

Moreover, the automobile also make people'snormal life more varied and convenient. With the car, people could travel tomany places if they want and they could use the automobile to do many thingswhich could cost people more time and money before the invention of car. It isvery popular for modern family to go out at every weekend. Imaging that peopledrive their car with their family, bring some delicious foods and take a campto outskirt, it is impossible for people to get these sweet imagination easilywithout the automobile. More than that, people could use the car to go forshopping or carry some heavy things such as refrigerator, sofa and so on. Thus,the car brings more conveniences for modern people.

Finally, besides the convenience for peoplelife, automobile also makes people life colorful. There are many entertainmentswith automobile for people, for example, the automobile rally gives an intenseand wonderful view and scene. Many people who wonder the excited effect watchthe car rally every year. Also, many movies and games about the automobile havegained widespread popularity for many younger people. Therefore, people getvaried happiness and feelings by the automobile.

Overall, if we do not have the automobile,we could still live in a slow-stepped period and our world could not be aswonderful as nowadays. The automobile not only improve the efficiency for ourmodern life but also make our life more vivid. That is to say, the automobileis one of the most power of influence invention in our modern society.

poplindaUID: 2747233

Obviously, the automobile has brought more convenience for many aspects of human beings live (lives). No matter(引导从句) whether we are talking about the situation of works（ the working situations） or the normal lives of people, even the other entertainment for people, we could not ignore that the contributions from automobile to our modern life (lives).

First of all, the automobile make our work and job (work can be efficient, but I don’t think job can be efficient.) more efficient. Before the invention of automobile, human should spend more time on the road when they want to transport something from one place to another. For example, in the ancient period, people used the horse or other livestock(s) to be transposition (traffic transposition). And the horse or other cattle had a limited ability for carrying freights and (in the meantime), people should take care of livestock(s)

to (and) prevent them from being sick or dead. However,（Fortunately，） when the automobile emerges, people could save more time for transporting from one place to another.(多余了，transporting的解释就是To carry from one place to another) In addition, even the trains have come out and improved efficiency for people, but the trains have（are） always depended on the rails. In this case, without many limits the automobile brought people surprise in the ability of transposition absolutely.

Moreover, the automobile also make people's normal life more varied and convenient. With the car, people could travel to many places if they want .(A)and they could use the automobile to do many things which could cost people more time and money before the invention of car. It is very popular for modern family to go out at every weekend. Imaging that people drive their car(s) with their family, bring some delicious foods and take a camp to outskirt. (I)it is impossible for people to get these sweet imagination easily without the automobile. More than that, people could use the car to go for shopping or carry some heavy things such as refrigerator, sofa and so on. （细节很好！）Thus, the car brings more conveniences for modern people.

Finally, besides the convenience for people’s life, automobile also makes(把它当集合名词还是普通名词，你有的加了s 有的没加) people’s life colorful. There are many entertainments with automobile for people, for example, the automobile rally gives us an intense and wonderful view and scene. Many people who is wondering the excited effect watch the car rally every year（不太确定怎么改这句）. Also, many movies and games about the automobile have gained widespread popularity for many younger people. Therefore, people get varied happiness and feelings by(from) the automobile.


Overall, if we do not have the automobile, we could (might be) still live in a slow-stepped period and our world could not be as wonderful as nowadays. The automobile not only improve the efficiency for our modern life but also make our life(lives) more vivid. That is to say, the automobile is one of the most powerful of influence invention in our modern society.
细节挺好，思路也不错，句子再斟酌斟酌。

rockyangleiUID: 2721636

1.9 Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.


As far as world developed, there emerge many new technique for human beings' life and hence people make the Earth a better place to live. On the other hand, the great human beings also make so much more burden on the Earth that the Earth has been damaged increasingly.

First of all, human beings are very intelligent creature, who makes the Earth comfortable and convenient for people from a big glacial ball to a prosperous, vivid and colorful world. Human activity change many aspects of people's live, people could use natural source such as forest, river, and mountain to work for them. For example, the electric power plants, which could use fire, ocean and even wind to produce the electricity, brings people light so that human beings could do anything at night. Also, people have achieved many projects that it is unbelievable when we look back for 100 or 200 years. We could change the Earth according to our demands, the most impressive thing is that we make some arable land by fill the sand and soil into the ocean, and these could solve the deficiency of land for cultivating.

Moreover, human make many useful implements for people to make efficient life. As information technology developed in a hyper growth, computer, internet, automobile, airplane and many inventions which beyond the imagination of people many years ago brings convenience for people's lives. For example, people could use the automobile to go any places in a short time; we could not be limited by the distance between any two different places. The internet not only brings the human a virtual world for communication but the most importantly it improves efficiencies of human activity, such as the incredible ability of calculating.

However, there is always says that a sword has double sides. Human are also destroying the ecosystem of nature and breaking the regular pattern of the Earth, and the Earth also pays back for our human beings. The globe warming-one of the most intense topics in recent years of the world-is due to the pollution by cars and that people are cutting down the forest immoderately. More and more animals extinct even we claimed that we should protect them by our best. How do we our human ameliorate the Earth, How do we never destroy the Earth as same time as we develop our human, these are the primary problems for us.

Overall, certainly we create many miracles for our human and make human life more colorful and convenient. But we also should notice that we are destroying our Earth increasingly. We could not wait ability of recovering by Earth itself but should do something right now. Therefore, it is necessary for us to face our activity rationally not only on ourselves but also on the Earth.

zoelinUID: 2723606

As far as world developed(develops), there emerge many new technique for human beings' life and hence people make the Earth a better place to live. On the other hand, the great human beings also make so much more burden on the Earth that the Earth has been damaged increasingly.( You’d better to state your choice in the first paragraph, otherwise, readers will feel confused at the beginning)

First of all, human beings are very intelligent creature, who makes the Earth comfortable and convenient for people from a big glacial ball to a prosperous, vivid and colorful world. Human activity changes many aspects of people's live (life), people could use natural source such as forest, river, and mountain to work for them. For example, the electric power plants, which could use fire, ocean and even wind to produce the electricity, brings(the subject is plants, isn’t it?) people light so that human beings could do anything at night. Also, people have achieved many projects that it is unbelievable when we look back for 100 or 200 years. We could change the Earth according to our demands. The most impressive thing is that we make some arable land by fill the sand and soil into the ocean (filling the ocean with sand and soil, I think this is more commonly used), and these could solve the deficiency of land for cultivating.

Moreover, human make many useful implements for people(it sounds like people are not human beings) to make efficient life. As information technology developed in a hyper (?) growth, computer, internet, automobile, airplane and many inventions which beyond the imagination of people many years ago brings convenience for people's lives (life, you used three different words, while expressing the same idea,^_^ except the first one, others are incorrect). For example, people could use the automobile to go any places in a short time; we could not be limited by the distance between any two different places. The internet not only brings the human a virtual world for communication but the most importantly it improves efficiencies of human activity, such as the incredible ability of calculating (calculation).

However, there is always says (a saying) that a sword has double sides. Human are also destroying the ecosystem of nature and breaking the regular pattern of the Earth, and the Earth also pays back for our human beings. The globe warming-one of the most intense topics in recent years of the world-is due to the pollution by cars and that people are cutting down the forest immoderately (by cars and other human activities such as cutting down the forest immoderately, may be this is better). More and more animals extinct even(though) we claimed that we should protect them by our best. How do we our human(human beings) ameliorate the Earth, how do we never destroy the Earth as same time as(I am not sure whether there is such a phrase) we develop our human, these are the primary problems for us.

Overall, certainly we create many miracles for our human and make human life more colorful and convenient. But we also should notice that we are destroying our Earth increasingly. We could not wait ability (for the process) of recovering by Earth itself but should do something right now. Therefore, it is necessary for us to face our activity rationally not only on ourselves but also on the Earth.
整体挺好的，每段都有个总起句，让读者一开始就能知道该段讲什么。
不过也存在的几个问题：
1，        第一段没有陈述自己的观点；
2，        论述中没有加入一些例子；
3，        谓语动词需不需要加s要特别注意，这个问题出现的比较多；
4，        句型可以再多改进，可以增加连接词的应用
Btw：你花多少时间写的？482个单词，好长啊，O(∩_∩)O哈哈~

rockyangleiUID: 2721636

1.10: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their older (15 to 18 year-old) teenage children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

In a process of a person's growth, parents play an important role in many aspects in children life. Especially they indicate a direction for children when they encounter the intersection of their career, normal life and even emotional life. Thus, I think parents and other adult relatives should make important decisions instead of children themselves.

First of all, many children get useful advice from their parents and other experienced adult, and sometimes these suggestions determine the children destiny. Since the children are too young to understand what a real opportunity is and which kind of opportunity they must hold up, parents and other adult relatives should make some decisions for them. For example, George Roosevelt, who established one of the largest computer companies in the world, has been lived in a literal family. His mother makes the decisive decision for him to choose the computer science and technology when he confused to make a choice which kinds of major he must determine. That is to say, in some degree, parents could understand you more than children themselves.

Moreover, parents should also take care of the normal life for their children. Besides basic tendance like dinner, clothes, and so on, they should put more attention on contact between the children with other outside thins. Since there are many things that could influence children more and more, how to be a man and which is a real definition of kind-hearted and all of those the parents should care for their children. For example, parents should make decision which kinds of person the children could contact with. This is a very important topic because many teenage criminal incidents happened from abetting by other bad persons.

Finally, even the emotional life, I believe that some relatives should care their children increasingly. Some children are so shy that they would not like to talk to anyone especially their parents, so other adult relatives should try to come into their emotional world and determine what children should do. In many intense topics such as teenage children suicide, self-destructing, violence and so on, the most important reason for these is that they have not enough communication with others, so parents should make their decisions when they begin to have some symptoms.

In a nutshell, parents should keep paying close attention to their children not matter on the normal life or on the emotional life, especially for the situation that children have been confused about how to make decisions and which kinds of decisions they should determine. Therefore, it is necessary for parents and other relatives to make decisions instead of their children.

shirley072UID: 2712200

In a process of a person's growth, parents play an important role in many aspects in children’s life. Especially they indicate a direction (Especially they always give out instructions) for children when they (这个主语指代不明，好像是在说parents) encounter the intersection of their career, normal life and even emotional life (?emotional life的交叉路口？). Thus, I think parents and other adult relatives should make important decisions instead of children themselves./ T8 a- \$ e# U, t1 q, K
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First of all, many children get useful advice from their parents and other experienced adult, and sometimes these suggestions determine the children’s (要注意children是一个名词) destiny. Since the children are too young to understand what a real opportunity is and which (what) kind of opportunity they must hold up, parents and other adult relatives should make some decisions for them. For example, George Roosevelt, who established one of the largest computer companies in the world, has been lived in a literal family. His mother makes the decisive decision for him to choose the computer science and technology when he confused to make a choice which kinds of major he must determine. That is to say, in some degree, parents could understand you more than children themselves./ T9 s( k- n" }+ M  s  P; W

Moreover, parents should also take care of the normal life for their children. Besides basic tendance (providing basic materials) like dinner
(food), clothes, and so on, they should put more attention on contact between the children with other outside thins (their children’s communication with others). Since there are many things that could influence children more and more, how to be a man and which is a real definition of kind-hearted and all of those the parents should care for their children. For example, parents should make decision which kinds of person the children could contact with. This is a very important topic because many teenage criminal incidents happened from abetting by other bad persons.6 h2 r- ?( Z) `# I- G

Finally, even the emotional life (?), I believe that some relatives should care their children increasingly (用得不恰当). Some children are so shy that they would not like to talk to anyone especially their parents, so other adult relatives should try to come into their emotional world and determine what children should do. In many intense topics such as teenage children suicide, self-destructing, violence and so on, the most important reason for these is that they have not enough communication with others, so parents should make their decisions when they begin to have some symptoms. (这一段的论点不清晰，为什么小孩缺少足够的交流就需要父母来做决定？)

In a nutshell, parents should keep paying close attention to their children not (no) matter on the normal life or on the emotional life, especially for the situation that children have been confused about how to make decisions and which kinds of decisions they should determine. Therefore, it is necessary for parents and other relatives to make decisions instead of their children.

恩，说一个本文最大的问题，楼主写成了父母应该替小孩做决定，但是有一个关键词their older (15 to 18 year-old) teenage children，文章一点都没有提到，之所有有15-18的限定，在我看来，就是这个时期的小孩不一样，应该要针对这个时期小孩的特点来写哦

rockyangleiUID: 2721636

1.17  It has recently been announced that a new restaurant may be built inyour neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specificreasons and details to support your answer.


Even though we have some convenient stores, supermarket and several street side food stands, we still need a restaurant to satisfy people’s normal demand. I’m personally in favor of opening a new restaurant in our neighborhood, and I believe it will make people’s lives more convenient, strengthen development in community’s economy and even create a heather spirit.

First of all, people could get benefit and convenience from a new opening restaurant. In our country, each city has its special dishes and these dishes are different from each other such as Sichuan-style dishes, Guangdong-style dishes and so on. Some restaurants have many chefs which come from different places, so people could eat the famous foods of many cities instead of going to other cities. In addition, cooking at home every night is tiring and time-spending in single family. After a whole day at work or study, the first thing people want to finish is to have a delicious and convenient dinner. If a new restaurant opens in our neighborhood, it would allow us to relax and have a nice dinner with our family for a night.

Moreover, a new restaurant could bring an increasing in local economy. Building a restaurant could drive the consumption with local lumber, rolled steel, cement. Also, the new restaurant provides some opportunities of job for local people such as chefs, waiters and managers. And there could be a continued demand for food materials from local market, products from local merchants. Perhaps, most importantly, it brings some potential investment from other cities.

Finally, opening a new restaurant could also make some contribution on the spirit aspect for the local people. In our normal life, people general pay attention on their own little family world. There is no suitable place for them to communicate with each other. The supermarket is too noise and convenient food stores are too narrow to have a nice conversation. People who are strangers could meet in this restaurant. New friendships could be established while old friendships could be strengthened.

In conclusion, a new restaurant could not only bring benefits for local people in material aspects but also could create a better atmosphere in the spirit aspects. And the benefits of a new restaurant to community life are harder to measure than its economic benefits, but in my opinion are sorely needed in our community.

shirley072UID: 2712200

Even though we have some convenient stores, supermarket and several street side food stands, we still need a restaurant to satisfy people’s normal demand. I’m personally in favor of opening a new restaurant in our neighborhood, and I believe it will make people’s lives more convenient, strengthen development in community’s economy (这句话有点奇怪，要不就说develop economy) and even create a heather spirit.

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First of all, people could get benefit and convenience from a new opening restaurant. In our country, each city has its special dishes and these dishes are different from each other such as Sichuan-style dishes, Guangdong-style dishes and so on. Some restaurants have many chefs which (who) come from different places, so people could eat the famous foods of many cities instead of going to other cities. In addition, cooking at home every night is tiring and time-spending in single family. After a whole day at work or study, the first thing people want to finish is to have a delicious and convenient dinner. If a new restaurant opens in our neighborhood, it would allow us to relax and have a nice dinner with our family for a night (?).

Moreover, a new restaurant could bring an increasing in local economy (bring an economy?). Building a restaurant could drive (encourage) the consumption with local lumber, rolled steel, cement. Also, the new restaurant provides some opportunities of job for local people such as chefs, waiters and managers. And there could be a continued demand for food materials from local market, products from local merchants. Perhaps, most importantly, it brings some potential investment from other cities.

Finally, opening a new restaurant could also make some contribution on (in) the spirit aspect for the local people. In our normal life, people general pay attention on (to) their own little family world. There is no suitable place for them to communicate with each other. The supermarket is too noise and convenient food stores are too narrow to have a nice conversation. People who are strangers (这种表达不好，people may meet strangers in…) could meet in this restaurant. New friendships could be established while old friendships could be strengthened.

In conclusion, a new restaurant could not only bring benefits for local people in material aspects but also could create a better atmosphere in the spirit aspects. And the benefits of a new restaurant to community life are harder to measure than its economic benefits, but in my opinion are sorely needed in our community.

首先呢，我觉得楼主应该响应题目的号召，以第一人称来写，因为题目问的是in your neighborhood。第一个例子的前半部分，饭店做不同地方的菜让我们可以不去其他城市，但是并不能支持为什么饭店要在附近开，我觉得在一个城市的其他远点的饭店也可以吃到不同的菜啊。还有最后一个例子，我觉得不太能归结到spirit方面吧，这个呢可以说跟周围社区的人们更加熟悉方面，进一步就是随便提提可以开展活动啊之类的就很方便。
还有就是有时要注意句子的表达

rockyangleiUID: 2721636

1.18 You have decided to give several hours of your time each month to improve the community where you live. What is one thing you will do to improve your community? Why? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.

Since there are much deficience for our community to be improved, compare with traffic condition, management policy and other aspects, I would like to emphasize the improvement in environment condition in our community. A better quality of environment condition could bring health for local people, help people have a delighted emotion and even strengthen the unity of the community people.

First of all, there is a necessary relationship between the quality of environment condition and the degree of people healthy. Obviously, as the modern society developed faster, people ignore the hazard from advanced technique and convenient tools. For example, the common problem in our community is the noise made by the cars and motorbikes. Since there are many people who go to work by cars or motorbikes, especially they come or go off the work too late, the noise from these cars and motorbikes make people have a bad sleep. In addition, the air pollutions from these cars and motorbikes are also influencing our healthy directly. Thus, the environment condition needs to get a bigger improvement necessarily.

Moreover, besides the hazards on the body, we could not ignore the effects on spirit by the environment condition. A low quality of environmental condition, no matter the louder noisy, terrible smell, dirty roads could bring down people emotion immediately. Think about it, when you go out home to begin a new work day, the first thing you would see is the road with all the dirty things or dust or even the garbage. Could you keep a happy emotion for a long day? On the contrary, the green tree, clean road, and limpid fountain could bring a bighted and easy emotion.

Finally, giving we have a wonderful environmental condition, we all the people in this community would like to go out for a walk after dinner, have a nice conversation with neighbors and friends. Good quality of environmental condition provides a good public space for people to gather and talk in. People could compliment the contribution to the environmental condition and feel satisfaction of being live in this community. Thus, the whole unity in local community is strengthened and it also motivates the local people to have more communication with other people.

In conclusion, community is like a small society, the most direct contact with people in a community is the environmental condition. A better quality of environmental condition not only makes a good sense for the people healthy but also prompts the communication between local people and brings them a happy emotion. Thus, I would like to improve our environmental condition.