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1.9 Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

It is clear that human activity increasingly influences the Earth in various ways. Some people argue that human activity has a harmful impact on our Earth, while others hold the opinion that due to the effect of human activity, our Earth is becoming a better place to live. As far as I am concerned, I agree with that human activity makes the Earth more suitable to live.

First, As a result of human activity, various kinds of transportations are invented, and people are able to save time when travelling. In ancient time, it may take several mouth go from one city to another, while it may only need few hours nowadays. So, it is unimagable for an ancient people to travel around the world, while it is easy to achieve now as long as you have enough money and you are willing to. In addition, the transportation is continuously improved. For example, the railway from my hometown to Hangzhou has been improved last year, and it only take 3 hours now to travel between these two cities, much faster comparing to 8 hours before.

Second, Due to human activity, we are able to live in a more comfortable environment, especially with the invention of electrical instrument. Light enable us continue our work or have a good time in the evening; television enable us know the outside world; telephone enable us communicate with friends or relatives far from us. You can see, it is human activity makes life so colorful for us nowadays.

Finally, because of human activity, the longevity of human beings has been realised. We are able to survive from natural disaster as we can forecast the weather more than 2 weeks earlier, which enable us to prepare for a natural disaster before it arrives. Also, we are able to resist from many kinds of diseases, which once killed a majority of people's life in ancient period, due to the continuously development in medical. For instance, in Qing dynasty, a lot of people died because of the epidemic disease—— variola, which now is easy to treat.

In a nutshell, though human activity do has some harmful impacts on the Earth, the dramatic significance of it obscures the minor disadvantage it brings about. When we enjoy the benefits result from human activity, it is necessary that we consider human activity takes an important role in making our Earth a better place to live.

rockyangleiUID: 2721636

It is clear that human activity increasingly influences the Earth in various ways. Some people argue that human activity has a harmful impact on our Earth, while others hold the (other) opinion that due to the effect of human activity, our Earth is becoming a better place to live. As far as I am concerned, I agree with that human activity makes the Earth more suitable to live.

First, As a result of human activity, various kinds of transportations are invented, and people are able to save time when travelling. In ancient time, it may take several mouth(s) to go from one city to another, while it may only need few hours nowadays. So, it is unimagable for an ancient people to travel around the world, while it is easy to achieve now as long as you have enough money and (add "if" better?) you are willing to. In addition, the transportation is continuously improved. For example, the railway from my hometown to Hangzhou has been improved last year, and it only take 3 hours now to travel between these two cities, much faster comparing to 8 hours before.

Second, Due(due) to human activity, we are able to live in a more comfortable environment, especially with the invention of electrical instrument. Light enable(s) us continue our work or have a good time in the evening; television enable(s) us know the outside world; telephone enable(s) us communicate with friends or relatives far from us.(I have no idea, whether there need add to behind "enable", I think it should be like this: sth enable sb to do sth) You can see, it is human activity makes life so colorful for us nowadays.

Finally, because of human activity, the longevity of human beings has been realised. We are able to survive from natural disaster as we can forecast the weather more than 2 weeks earlier, which enable us to(it's right, hehe!) prepare for a natural disaster before it arrives. Also, we are able to resist from many kinds of diseases, which once killed a majority of people's life in ancient period, due to the continuously development in medical(I think the last sentence should be deleted, it's redundant). For instance, in Qing dynasty, a lot of people died because of the epidemic disease—— variola, which now is easy to treat.

In a nutshell(good, I like this), though human activity do has some harmful impacts on the Earth, the dramatic significance of it obscures the minor disadvantage it brings about. When we enjoy the benefits result from human activity, it is necessary that we consider human activity takes an important role in making our Earth a better place to live.

总结：省去夸奖的话！
整体来讲，你想论述的是为Earth becomes better for people to live because of human activity. 但是整体讲的大多是invention，应该强调与Earth is suitable for human多一些。
每一段个人认为，与Earth联系不是很大，倒像是在讲什么使得人类生活更好！思路及内容个人认为在TOEFL中还是占很大比例的！
其他语法等小问题标注了，有些是个人的意见，仅供参考，呵呵！不足之处，还望见谅！


BTW，我用的时间比较多，45mins，正在努力提高！呵呵！

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1.10 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their older (15 to 18 year-old) teenage children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Making decision as one of the most important element of people's life, plays a significant role in deciding one's life path. When facing choices, different decision may lead to quite different life. It is wildly accepted that when we are young, our parents or other adult relatives make decisions for us. But for older teenage children, some people argue that parents or relatives should let their child make decisions by themselves, even important ones. As far as I am concerned, I totally agree that teenagers should make decisions by themselves.

First of all, life is full of events which need us to make decisions, so it is wise that people learn to make decisions as earlier as possible. As you know, parents or other adult relatives can’t companion with us the whole life, we have to learn how to make a correct decision by ourselves, then why not begin to learn it when we are young?

What is more, the one who knows you most is absolutely yourself, so only the decision made by yourself is rightly what you want. Parents can’t instead of you doing such thing. For example, before I began my university life，I needed to choose a major first. My parents recommended me to choose the major of medicine, but I knew myself that I hate dealing with human's body. If I chose this major, it would be obviously that I lived in a duff life all days. So I made the decision by myself to study electronics rather than medicine.

Finally, if teenage children make decisions by themselves, then in case they fail in the future, they will have no excuse but to admit that they do not work hard enough to realise it. Still take choosing a major for example. If my parents not I made the decision finally, I may have the excuse when I did bad work in my major, that "It was selected by you, and I was not interested in it at all. You can't blame me as it's your fault not mine". In the other situation that I made decision by myself, I can't say anything but admit it's my fault.

As a nutshell, I absolutely agree it's better for older teenage children make decisions by themselves. I believe, doing this way, teenagers will benefit in the future and parents do not need to worry about their honey children day and night.

shirley072UID: 2712200

Making decision, as one of the most important element (event) of people's life, plays a significant role in deciding one's life path. When facing choices, different decision may lead to quite different life. It is wildly accepted that when we are young, our parents or other adult relatives make decisions for us. But for older teenage children, some people argue that parents or relatives should let their child make decisions by themselves, even important ones. As far as I am concerned, I totally agree that teenagers should make decisions by themselves.( y( h' y' U* y& T0 v; W

First of all, life is full of events (感觉不合适) which need us to make decisions, so it is wise that people learn to make decisions as earlier as possible. As you know, parents or other adult relatives can’t companion (company) with us the whole life, we have to learn how to make a correct decision by ourselves, then why not begin to learn it when we are young? . ^9 Y: ~# k, H$ `' s  H& l
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What is more, the one who knows you most is absolutely yourself, so only the decision made by yourself is rightly (absolutely) what you want. Parents can’t instead (不是动词，放到后面去) of you doing such thing. For example, before I began my university life，I needed to choose a major first. My parents recommended me to choose the major of medicine, but I knew myself that I hate dealing with human's body. If I chose this major, it would be obviously that I lived in a duff life all days. So I made the decision by myself to study electronics rather than medicine.

Finally, if teenage children make decisions by themselves, then in case they fail in the future, they will have no excuse but to admit that they do not work hard enough to realise it. Still take choosing a major for example. If my parents not I made the decision finally, I may have the excuse when I did bad work in my major, that "It was selected by you, and I was not interested in it at all. You can't blame me as it's your fault not mine". In the other situation that I made decision by myself, I can't say anything but admit it's my fault.

As a nutshell, I absolutely agree it's better for older teenage children make decisions by themselves. I believe, doing this way, teenagers will benefit in the future and parents do not need to worry about their honey children day and night.

本文的论证部分还应该更深入一点，就是说内容要更丰富一点。我觉得最好要强调出15-18岁这个年龄段的older teenager，其实楼主举的例子都挺好的，比如说选专业，可以说15-18岁一般来说是high school的时候，这个时候最重要的父母可能会帮我们做的决定就是选大学啊，选专业啊，要是他们选了我们不喜欢的，如楼主提出的那个medicine的例子，可以再顺着继续写要是真的选了medicine，强调一下我的以后的生活如何如何，或者假设我没有学到我喜欢的，我会很低落啊，不努力学习啊，导致以后找不到工作啊等严重问题，然后再收回来强调一下要自己做决定。这样就比duff life的内容丰富，论证也就更充分了：）