1-17号独立作文by zhengping

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2.3 Do you agreeor disagree with the following statement? People will feel happier whenthey finish a challenging or difficult work than they finish an easywork.
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When I was still in my childhood, I was very eager to play the bungee jumping. But at the same time I was afraid that I would get hurt as well. Till the last year, I had never felt so much happy when I really was playing the extreme challenging game with my friends. Compared with finishing an easy work, as far as I am concerned, I strongly believe that people will feel happier when they finish a challenging or difficult work.

First of all, the more challenging work you take, the happier you will feel. Generally speaking, if people want to go into rapture, they should choose to do some challenging work, such as bungee jumping, drift and surf-riding. There are several reasons over the phenomenon. In the first place, people prefer to aspire after the higher, the faster and the stronger. That is the natural quality of human beings. Secondly, compared with easy work, the challenging work have more appeal to people, because they are full of  mysteries. Let's take my friend as an example. One day, he told me that he was eager to be a racing driver acting as a star in movies. So he attended a training school to learn the advanced racing methods and knowledge. He trained hard day after night, after ten months he achieved his goal. He can performed some challenging actions by driving his car, such as the "drifting". He also told me that he felt happier when he was driving a racing car than ever he was driving a common car.

In addition, the more difficult work you take, the more benefits you will receive. It is an equal fact that people who can do the difficult work ought to get more payment and honor. Take myself for example. Last year our company received a difficult project. It was so difficult that few people would accepted it. The project called "Improve the strength of carbon nanofibers". However, as for me, it was filled with challenging and interesting. Then I spent three days to collect a great deal of information and literatures related with it. After a long time of analysis, I decided to accept it, because I believed I can finish it. Finally, after four mouths hard work, I finished the difficult project. That was a great achievement for our company. So not only my boss gave me a pot of money as award, but also all of my colleagues were admiring and acclaiming me. I felt so happier than ever.

All in all, from what has been discussed above, I may safely draw the conclusion that People will feel happier when they finish a challenging or difficult work than they finish an easy work.

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2.5 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For future career success, is relate well to other people more important than studying hard at school?

I have a brother, called Jack. When he was in collage, he was relating well to people, including his classmates, friends and teachers, but he had the lowest GPA in his grade. As a result, after graduated, he never got a decent job. Therefore, as far as I am concerned, I strongly disagree with that to average students, relating well to other people will be more important than studying hard at school for future career success.

First of all, it is essential to know that learning to students is the first and most important task at school. To the most of students, the common reason to attend to go to school is learning experience, knowledge and information, because this kind of information will play an important role in both their future life and career success. Take myself as an example. When I was still in middle school, my parents told me that if someone want to get a offer of attending to a famous high school, he must study hard and never give up. From the time, I learnt hard day and night. Finally, I received the offer from my dreamed school. Therefore, as a college student, I believe that I ought to learn hard at school.

In addition, compared with a good relationship with others, mastering a special skill or course at school is more important to students. For instance, my friend, Micheal, was a student in Chinese Technological University once. And his major was the Computer. During the study, he learnt harder than all of his classmates. He received all kinds of awards of computer. But he few communicated with others because he spent most of time learning a variety of programs. After graduated, he was the only in his grade who received the offer from the Microsoft company, which is one of the most famous companies. So, we have no reasons to hold that the interpersonal skill is more important than studying hard.


All in all, as a modern college student, I believe that the harder you study, the more progress you make. From what has been discussed above, I may safely draw the conclusion that students should put emphasis on their study rather than to relate well to other people.

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I have a brother, called Jack. When he was in collage, he was relating well to people, including his classmates, friends and teachers, but he had the lowest GPA in his grade. As a result, after graduated, he never got a decent job. Therefore, as far as I am concerned, I strongly disagree with that to average students, relating well to other people will be more important than studying hard at school for future career success.(首段开头直接引入例子似乎有些突兀)

First of all, it is essential to know that learning to students is the first and most important task at school. To the most of students, the common reason to attend to go to school is learning experience, knowledge and information, because this kind of information will play an important role in both their future life and career success. Take myself as an example. When I was still in middle school, my parents told me that if someone want to get a offer of attending to a famous high school, he must study hard and never give up. From the time, I learnt hard day and night. Finally, I received the offer from my dreamed school. Therefore, as a college student, I believe that I ought to learn hard at school.(这个例子似乎没有写learning hard 对future career success的关系)
In addition, compared with a good relationship with others, mastering a special skill or course at school is more important to students. For instance, my friend, Micheal, was a student in Chinese Technological University once. And his major was the Computer. During the study, he learnt harder than all of his classmates. He received all kinds of awards of computer. But he few communicated with others because he spent most of time learning a variety of programs. After graduated, he was the only (student)in his grade who received the offer from the Microsoft company, which is one of the most famous companies. So, we have no reasons to hold that the interpersonal skill is more important than studying hard.

All in all, as a modern college student, I believe that the harder you study, the more progress you make. From what has been discussed above, I may safely draw the conclusion that students should put emphasis on their study rather than to relate well to other people.


比较简洁,可以适当增强语言应用的丰富性,多一些复杂句式,另外选取例子的角度可以再多样些,简单说一个人成绩好,关系差,但最后取得成功了,就证明学习比人际更重要似乎有些薄弱了.