1-17号独立作文by zhengping

zhengping001UID: 2689322

4 d" Y  ]: q( K1.17It has recently been announced that a new restaurant may be built in yourneighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons anddetails to support your answer.

Recently, there was a large event that a new restaurant maybe built in our hometown. It might brings some problems, but as far as I amconcerned, I strongly agree with that the new restaurant certainly brings moreadvantages than disadvatages to our neighborhood. There are following severalreasons supporting my idea.

First and foremost, the new restaurant will gives a boostto improve the local economy or businesses. In order to build a new and largerestaurant, it is necessary to employ a lot of workers from the local area,thus it provides a lot of positions for those who have not steady income inhome or jobless people. That would be a good thing, because there are a lot ofjobless people. Not only that, these people do not have to leave their home outfor making extra money. In addition, the second major thing for building ismaterial, so a plentiful materials and stuff the patrons have to buy from otherareas. Furthermore, these businesses will improve other businesses and make thelocal economy more thriving. At the other hand, after the accomplishment of thebig project, the patrons of the hotel also employ a good deal of people aswaiters, managers and others. There also are many jobs for local people.

In addition, for travelers the restaurant is indispensable.The restaurant could offers convenience to visiters, travelers and even thelocal people who want to dine or cost. For tourists, it is very pleasant thatthe restaurant offers a comfortable room and a delicious meal to them whotravel a whole tired day, and they just cost a little money. If without thehotel, many tourists would like to visit other place instead of our townbecause of inconvenience. Moreover, with fewer and fewer of tourists, the localpeople could lost many chances to make money, so some of people have to leavetheir home and family to find jobs for livelihood.

All in all, from what has been discussed above, if the newrestaurant would be built in my neighborhood, it could boosts the localeconomy, the improves quality of people and even offers more convenienceservice to the tourists. So I totally support the attractive and magnificentplan.

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1-17号独立作文by zhengping

1.17It has recently been announced that a new restaurant may be built in yourneighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons anddetails to support your answer. Recently, there was a large event that a new restaurant maybe (may be) built in our hometown. It might brings (bring) some problems, but as far as I am concerned, I strongly agree with that the new restaurant certainly brings more advantages than disadvatages to our neighborhood. There are following several (several following) reasons supporting my idea. First and foremost, the new restaurant will gives (give) a boost to improve the local economy or businesses. In order to build a new and large restaurant, it is necessary to employ a lot of workers from the local area, thus it provides a lot of positions for those who have not (do not have) steady income or jobless people (are still jobless). That would be a good thing, because there are a lot of jobless people.(为什么这里又再说一次jobless?不是与上面重复了吗？) Not only that,(有点中国化的句子) these people do not have to leave their home out for making extra money. In addition, the second major thing for building is material, so a plentiful materials and stuff the patrons have to buy from otherareas.(这一点接的有点奇怪，没有表现出建餐馆的优点，至少意思上不是很明白) Furthermore, these businesses will improve other (others) businesses and make the local economy more thriving (stimulate the local economy). At the other hand, after the accomplishment of the big project, the patrons of the hotel also employ a good deal of people as waiters, managers and others. There also are many jobs for local people.(这点前面不是说过了吗？提供工作岗位。貌似这段重复的内容很多) 3 j' \! m3 |0 x" q* Y# l3 U In addition, for travelers the restaurant is indispensable.The restaurant could offers convenience to visiters, travelers and even the local people who want to dine or cost (?消费？consume,既然用了消费，那dine就不必了，dine是消费的一种). For tourists, it is very pleasant that the restaurant offers a comfortable room and a delicious meal to them who travel (have travelled) a whole tired day, and they just cost a little money. If without the hotel, many tourists would like to visit other place instead of our town because of inconvenience. Moreover, with fewer and fewer of tourists, the local people could lost many chances to make money, so some of people have to leave their home and family to find jobs for livelihood. 6 l8 \) M4 }8 t9 T0 J' m$ f All in all, from what has been discussed above, if the new restaurant would be built in my neighborhood, it could boosts (boost) the local economy, improves (improve) quality of people and even offers (offer) more convenience (convenient) service to the tourists. So I totally support the attractive and magnificentplan.

LZ在贴上来之前不妨先放到word里面看一下错误，还有就是一些语法上的错误也应该注意一下，比如说情态动词后面的动词是原型。
LZ的文章展开得不够，感觉讲了一大圈，又回到了原来讲过的地方，有些论据不是令人很信服。
可以看出LZ想表达很多意思，从句子形式就能看得出来，用了大量的长句，不过是否能和短句结合一起用呢？
陈述语句方面感觉可以多注意一下，读这篇文章给我一个感觉（不知道是否正确，如果觉得我说得不正确欢迎一起讨论一下），就是无论是句子还是内容，都有点像是挤出来的样子，有点拼凑的感觉，觉得在下笔之前不妨先别急，好好构思一下再下笔会更顺畅一些。
加油加油！！

zhengping001UID: 2689322

1.21 by zhengping

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Grades (marks) encourage students to learn. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

When asked a general question concerned for all of people about whether grades or marks can encourage young students to learn, different people have different ideas. Some people think that to exert the grade system would pose some negative effects to the feeling of students. Others disagree with the point, because they believe that during the study most of students need to be encouraged in the form of grades or marks. As far as I am concerned, I strongly agree with the latter point because grades ormarks had brought a great deal of positive impacts into me when I was still in high school.


First and foremost, a high grade or mark can really encourage students to learn better. When a student got a high score in one subject or course, he would firmly believe that he was good at this subject or course, and he had much more confidence to himself. It surely inspired his interests toward on this subject. At the same time, he certainly felt happier when he got a better grade in the next time. A recent survey takenby the Organization of Chinese Children Education and Development, indicates that more than 98 percent of young students want to get a higher grade. Some of experts in education also believe that the grades or marks system can greatly encourage students to study.


In addition, the grade system is the most important method to differentiate which one has high ability in one course and which one has low ability. Especially in China, it is usual fact that many students often study in one same classroom, so it is hard for teachers to allknow the study condition of their students. If schools would exert the grade system to its students, teachers use it in teaching for their students. To different student teachers use different method to help them improve theirscores.

To sum up, from what has discussed above,there are many reasons to exert the grade or marks system in school, such as toinspire students' interests and improve their self-confidence. Therefore, Ithink that grades or marks surely encourage students to learn.

shirley072UID: 2712200

When asked a general question concerned for all of people about (觉得有点复杂，要不就直接用when asked about…) whether grades or marks can encourage young students to learn, different people have different ideas. Some people think that to exert the grade system would pose some negative effects to (on) the feeling of students. Others disagree with the point, because they believe that during the study most of students need to be encouraged in the form of grades or marks (感觉这样的说法有点不合适，是什么in the form of ？). As far as I am concerned, I strongly agree with the latter point because grades or marks had brought a great deal of positive impacts into (bring into me? 这个说法是不对的) me when I was still in high school.) S+ F2 ~% }% J: ^

First and foremost, a high grade or mark can really encourage students to learn better. When a student got a high score in one subject or course, he would firmly believe that he was good at this subject or course, and he had much more confidence to himself (which reinforce his confidence). It (指的是什么？) surely inspired his interests toward on this subject. At the same time, he certainly felt happier when he got a better grade in the next time. A recent survey taken by the Organization of Chinese Children Education and Development, indicates that more than 98 percent of young students want to get a higher grade. Some of experts in education also believe that the grades or marks system can greatly encourage students to study.) `" M$ j+ w1 r2 h- G! F
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In addition, the grade system is the most important method to differentiate which one has high ability in one course and which one has low ability. Especially in China, it is usual fact that many students often study in one same classroom, so it is hard for teachers to all know (?) the study condition of their students. If schools would exert the grade system to its students, teachers use it in teaching for their students. To different student teachers use different method to help them improve their scores.

To sum up, from what has discussed above, there are many reasons to exert the grade or marks system in school, such as to inspire students' interests and improve their self-confidence. Therefore, I think that grades or marks surely encourage students to learn.

主要谈一下内容方面吧
第一段论证直接提出high grade会鼓励学生学习。但是要注意题目是问的grade，不是high grade。当然，也可以写好的grade啊，但是为了照顾题目，一定要全面的来写grade，可以提一下差的grade会有何影响。
第二段论证的第一个句子不知道是不是作为分论点，应该不是，因为后面就讲到grade这个系统让老师们针对不同的学生用不同的方法。两个方面，首先第一个句子的内容我就不同意，高分低能的现象才应该是china这套教育系统最主要的问题吧，怎么能用分数来判断能力呢？第二个方面，本段主要讲到grade帮助老师区分不同学生，用不同方法，但是这个跟题目有什么关系呢？我觉得是偏题了

shirley072UID: 2712200

奇怪，作业在哪里？

zhengping001UID: 2689322

2.1 Do the movies and television have more negative effect than positive effect on the young people?
按照shirley072(头发卷卷)
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With the rapid development of science and technology, people in increasing numbers are starting to realize that young people should encouraged to pay more attention on what happened outside world, however, to watch movies and television is good method. These mediums might bring them some negative impacts such as some violent episodes and time-consuming. As far as I am concerned, however, compared with these unfavorable impacts, they bring young people more positive effect than negative effect for the development of them in the physically and mentally healthy.

First of all, during the development of the young people, they ought to "absorb" more useful experience, information and knowledge by the movies and television, which benefits greatly on improving their study, enhancing interpersonal skills and broadening their horizon. Let's take myself as an example. I am a young boy. I watch the television everyday, especially the CCTV-5, a sports channel, which is my favorite. It brings me not only news and information about some significant games or events from both domestic and foreign countries, but also happiness. One of My favorite sports is basketball, so when I watch some basketball games such as NBA or CBA, I feel very exciting and confident because these players in games never give up when they face fail. Therefore, as for me, the movies and television can produce a great deal of beneficial impacts on the young people.

In addition, compared with watching some good movies and interesting television,  which could promote the creativity of the young people, its negative effect could be ignored. A new survey taken by the Development Association of Chinese Young People, indicates that more than 85 percent people at the age of between 12 to 18 who have watched television regularly have higher creativity than others who few or forbidden watched television. At the same time, many experts in education often encourage the young people to watch movies and television, and they point out that watching television and movies could help the young people develop their creativity and enlarge their imagination. Television acts as a platform including all kinds of new knowledge and even some new inventions, which could stimulate young people's interests, enlarge their imagination and promote their creativity.

All in all, from what has been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that the movies and television could benefit the young people a lot such as learning all kinds of news and information happened outside world, interests, happiness, improving their creativity and useful experience. Therefore, I believe that the movies and television have far more positive effect than negative impact on the young people.

shirley072UID: 2712200

With the rapid development of science and technology, people in increasing numbers（An increasing number of people）are starting to realize that young people should encouraged to pay more attention on what happened outside world through some manners such as movies and television（这句话很别扭，开始注意到年轻人鼓励在…方面花功夫？）. These mediums might bring them some negative impacts such as violence（这个原因没有写好，什么叫做给他们的坏影响是暴力？是宣扬暴力呢，还是让他们模仿暴力呢，还是什么）. As far as I am concerned, however, comparing with unfavorable impacts they bring them more positive effect than negative effect for the development of the young people in the physically and mentally healthy（compared with…，...这才是完整的一句话。且楼主意思没有表示清楚，看不明白）.. l  ~" d8 r9 `" M4 R' S0 }  a

First of all, during the development of the young people, they ought to "absorb" more useful experience, information and knowledge by the movies and television, which（指代的哪个？experience还是movies？）benefits greatly on improving their study, enhancing interpersonal skills and broadening their horizon. Let's take myself as an example. I watch the television everyday, especially the CCTV-5, a sports channel, which is my favorite. It can brings（bring）me not only news and information about some significant games or events from both domestic and foreign countries, and also（not only, but also）happiness and exciting thing (意义模糊). One of My favorite sports is basketball, so when I watch some basketball games such as NBA or CBA, （既然前面用了when来引导从句，后面就应该有主句的出现，但是楼主后面又跟了从句）which make me more happiness and confidence because these players in games never give up when they face fail. Therefore, I firmly think the movies and television can produce a great deal of beneficial impacts on the young people（楼主在以自己为例子的时候，最要要特别强调一下自己也是young people）.

In addition, comparing（compared）with watching some good movies and interesting television could promote the creativity of the young people（这个没有用对，compared with后面怎么是一个句子呢）, its negative effect could be ignored. A new survey taken by the Development Association of Chinese Young People, indicates that more than 85 percent people at the age of between 12 to 18 who have watched television regularly have higher creativity than others who few or forbidden watched television because of regulated families（？）. At the same time, many experts in education often encourage the young people to watch movies and television, and they point out that watching television and movies could help the young people develop their creativity and enlarge their imagination. Television like a（acts as a）platform including all kinds of new knowledge and even some new inventions, which could stimulate their （young people’s） interests, enlarge their imagination and promote their creativity.. p5 \* ?0 L: `+ K2 e

All in all, from what has been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that the movies and television could benefit the young people a lot such as learning all kinds of news and information happened outside world, interests, happiness, improving their creativity and useful experience. Therefore, I believe that the movies and television have far more positive effect than negative impact on the young people.

表示观点的时候，一定要清晰，尤其第一段
要注意句子的应用，区分主句从句呢

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2.2 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is being in a group led by a tourist guide.

One year ago, I had been the Forbidden City alone, which is one of the most famous traditional cultural places in China. The consequence was that I got lost in it and failed to find the way to back home. As far as I am concerned, I will choose to be in a group led by a tourist guide in the next time.

First of all, as for every tourist, the safety is the most important factor. It is essential for viewers to know, before start out to travel, that whether where they are going to travel is safe or not. Generally speaking, most of people have not been their dreamed places. So they do not know about how to gauarantee their security. But if viewers take part in a travel agency, they will feel safer than without guides. There are several reasons this idea. In the first place, tourist guiders who have abundant experience can help tourists avoid to be some mistakes or danger. For example, guides introduce visitors where is safe and where is dangerous before visiting. Secondly, if one of tourists is ill or hurted, the workers of the travel group can send him or her to the near hospital. Furthermore, even each other tourists could help together.

In addition to the safety, another major factor for visitors is time or energy. Let's take me as an example. As a fan of travel, I am often boring to spend time to contact with travel places. And another my boring problem is to wait a long line to buy tickets of travel places. Meanwhile, I have to buy train tickets or airplane tickets because I have not access to my own car. Moreover, after a day's travel, in order to have a rest and deal with food and drink, I have to seek for a hotel . So, it surely cost me much time. If I am being in a travel group, it can save me much time and energy; that I can use them to do many other things.

All in all, before to travel a dreamed place, tourists ought to concern many aspects, such as the safety and time or energy. However, if they are attending a travel group, they do not worry about these any more. So, we can safely the conclusion that the best way to travel is being in a travel group.

slimhUID: 2438517

2.2 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is being in a group led by a tourist guide.

One year ago, I had been to the Forbidden City alone, which is one of the most famous traditional cultural places in China. The consequence was that I got lost in it and failed to find the way to(去掉) back home. As far as I am concerned, I will choose to be in a group led by a tourist guide in the next time.
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First of all, as for every tourist, the safety is the most important factor. It is essential part for viewers to know, before start out to travel, that whether where they are going to travel is(一个句子里面有两个is，建议少用) safe or not. Generally speaking, most of the people have not(never) been their dreamed places. So they do not know about how to gauarantee(guarantee吧？拼写) their security. But if viewers take part in a travel agency, they will feel safer than without guides（去掉）. There are several reasons （to support） this idea. In the first place, tourist guiders who have abundant experience（复数加s?） can help tourists avoid to be（keep away from） some mistakes or(换and) danger. For example, guides introduce visitors where（which place会不会更好一些点？） is safe and where（which place会不会更好一些点？） is dangerous before visiting. Secondly, if one of (the)tourists is ill （gets sick）or hurted（hurts）, the workers of the travel group can send him or her to the near（nearest） hospital. Furthermore, even each other tourists could help together.(如果字数够得话，这句去掉吧？)

In addition to the safety, another major factor for visitors is time or energy. Let's take me as an example. As a fan of travel, I am often(often feel) boring to spend time to contact with travel places. And another my boring(去掉) problem is to wait a long line to buy tickets of (the) travel places. Meanwhile, I have to buy train tickets or airplane tickets because I have not access to my own car. Moreover, after a day's travel, in order to have a rest and deal with food and drink, I have to seek（look） for a hotel . So, it surely cost me much time. If I am being in a travel group, it can save me much time and energy; that I can use them to do many other things.
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All in all, before to travel a dreamed place, tourists ought to concern many aspects, such as the safety and time or energy. However, if they are attending a travel group, they do not （have to）worry about these(these problems) any more. So, we can safely the conclusion（conclude） that the best way to travel is being in a travel group.7 n# S0 Z5 w0 U9 y

slimhUID: 2438517

晕。。这个也显示乱码。。。。。。谁能告诉我这个怎么编辑啊。。汗死。。

zhengping001UID: 2689322

2.2 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is being in a group led by a tourist guide.
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One year ago, I had been the Forbidden City alone, which is one of the most famous traditional cultural places in China. The consequence was that I got lost in it and failed to find the way back home. As far as I am concerned, I will choose to be in a group led by a tourist guide in the next time.

First of all, as for every tourist, the safety is the most important factor. It is essential for viewers to know, before start out to travel, that whether where they are going to travel is safe or not. Generally speaking, most of people have never been their dreamed places. So they do not know about how to guarantee their security. But if viewers take part in a travel agency, they will feel safer than alone. There are several reasons this idea. In the first place, tourist guiders who have abundant experience can help tourists avoid to be some mistakes and danger. For example, guides introduce visitors where is safe and where is dangerous before visiting. Secondly, if one of the tourists is ill or hurted, the workers of the travel group can send him or her to the nearest hospital in short time. Furthermore, even each other tourists could help together.

In addition to the safety, another major factor for visitors is time or energy. Let's take me as an example. As a fan of travel, I often feel boring to spend time to contact with travel places. And another problem for me is to wait a long line to buy tickets of travel places. Meanwhile, I have to buy train tickets or airplane tickets because I have not access to my own car. Moreover, after a day's travel, in order to have a rest and deal with food and drink, I have to look for a hotel . So, it surely cost me much time. If I am being in a travel group, it can save me much time and energy; that I can use them to do many other things.

All in all, before to travel a dreamed place, tourists ought to concern many aspects, such as the safety and time or energy. However, if they are attending a travel group, they do not worry about these problems any more. So, we can safely draw the conclusion that the best way to travel is being in a travel group.

皇甫秋荻UID: 2638790

One year ago, I had been the Forbidden City alone, which is one of the most famous traditional cultural places in China. The consequence was that I got lost in it and failed to find the way to back home. （Therefore） As far as I am concerned, I will choose to be in a group led by a tourist guide in the next time. ---------开头很奇特，呵呵~
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First of all, as for every tourist, the safety is the most important factor. It is essential for viewers to know, before start out to travel, that whether where they are going to travel is safe or not. （插入语很不错！~） Generally speaking, most of people have not been their dreamed places. So they do not know about how to gauarantee
（guarantee） their security. But if viewers take part in a travel agency, they will feel safer than without guides. There are several reasons (for) this idea. In the first place, tourist guiders who have abundant experience can help tourists avoid to be (avoid 后面只能跟名词和动名词，故应为 avoid being) some mistakes or danger(s). For example, guides introduce visitors where is safe and where is dangerous before visiting. Secondly, if one of tourists is ill or hurted (用being hurt 更好), the workers of the travel group can send him or her to the near （nearest） hospital. Furthermore, even each other tourists could help together.
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In addition to the safety, another major factor for visitors is time or （and） energy. Let's take me as an example. As a fan of travel, I am often boring to spend time to contact with travel places. And another my boring problem（another boring problem for me） is to wait a long line to buy tickets of travel places. Meanwhile, I have to buy train tickets or airplane tickets because I have not access to my own car. Moreover, after a day's travel, in order to have a rest and deal with food and drink, I have to seek for a hotel. So, it surely costs me much time. If I am being in a travel group, it can save me much time and energy; that I can use them to do many other things.
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All in all, before to travel a dreamed place, tourists ought to(用have to 更好) concern (about) many aspects, such as the safety and time or energy (safety, time and energy). However, if they are attending （用一般现在时 attend） a travel group, they do not worry about these （problems） any more. So, we（I） can safely （draw） the conclusion that the best way to travel is being in a travel group.

总结：zhengping同学需要在语法上多加注意，有些是一些固定短语，相信如果仔细考虑，你也会想到了。要细心哦~呵呵。。。
           开头的例子，我觉得不错，呵呵。挺新颖的~
           加油~~

zhengping001UID: 2689322

2.3 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People will feel happier when they finish a challenging or difficult work than they finish an easy work.
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When I was still in my childhood, I was very eager to play the bungee jumping. But at the same time I was afraid that I would been hurted as well. Till the last year, I had never felt so much happy when after I really played the extremely challenging game with my friends. Compared with finishing an easy work, as far as I am concerned, I strongly believe the idea that people will feel happier when they finish a challenging or difficult work.

First of all, the more challenging work you take, the happier you make. Generally speaking, if people want to have a good time with excitement, they should choose to do some challenging works, such as bungee jumping, drift and surf-riding, especially for young people. There are several reasons over the phenomenon. In the first place, people prefer to aspire after the higher, the faster and the stronger. That is the natural quality of human beings. Secondly, compared with easy works, the challenging works have more appeal to people, because they often fill with mysteries. Let's take my friend as an example. One day, he told me that he was eager to be a racing driver acting as a star in movies. So he attended a training school to learn the advanced racing methods and knowledge. He worked hard from day to night, after ten mouths he achieved his goal. He can perfected some challenging actions by driving his car, such as the "drifting". He also told me that he felt happier when he was driving a racing car than ever he was driving a common car.

In addition, the more difficult work you take, the more benefits you make. It is an equal fact that people who can do the difficult work ought to get more payment and honor. Take myself for example. Last year our company received a difficult project. It was so difficult that few people would accepted it. The project called "Improve the strength of carbon nanofibers". However, as for me, it was filled with challenging and interesting. Then I spent three days to collect a great deal of information and literatures related with it. After a long time of analysis, I decided to accept it, because I believed I can finished it . After four mouths hard work, I finished the difficult project finally. That was a great achievement for our company. So not only my boss gave me a pot of money as award, but also all of my colleagues were admiring and acclaiming me. I felt so happier than ever.

All in all, although in order to deal with a challenging or difficult work people could spend much time and energy, they can receive more benefits, such as money and honor, than they finish an easy work. So, I may safely draw the conclusion that people will feel happier when they finish the former.

我是chineseladyUID: 2662783

zhengping还有考试么...怎么没见你在新群里

zhengping001UID: 2689322

zhengping还有考试么...怎么没见你在新群里
我是chineselady 发表于 2010-2-4 00:21

也不知道是哪个家伙，老是T我出群。我这个月7号二战，希望是最后一次了