Issue125 "The past is no predictor of the future."

jinziqiUID: 2387034

125"The past is no predictor of thefuture."

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The author simply claims that the past isno predictor of the past. As I see, the past is something happened andunchangeable, no matter how long it past, while the future, no matter tomorrowor after too many years, is going to happen in some pattern, like a mystery.However, I believe, in some extent, we can create the future just like wethought, in other words, we can predict the future from the past.

Although the future is unknown, just as mostpeople thinks, it is sometimes hard to predict the future. We don’t know whatwill we do after graduate, no matter how we make efforts to make things intothe direction as we hope, but the determination is not only ourselves. Take theworld as an example: no one can assert that all human beings will all die onwhich day for which reason. Even the Maya Calendar said on December 20, 2012,the world will be ruined, but at least nowadays, no scientist can find enoughevidence to prove it.

However, to some extent, we have to saythat we succeed in predicting the development. With technique being invented, peoplewant to have more convenient computers to work everywhere, so smaller laptopsborn instead of heavy and huge personal computer. In addition, old cameras canonly take photos with limited numbers, so with the help of our imagination andthe invention of technique, digital camera born and people have the opportunityto take down a lot of beautiful scenes at every corner of the world and caneasily delete those bad photos and retake. When people’s imagination is beyondtechnique, it is our imagination that prompts human beings to create newtechnique to satisfy our need.

The past is like a mirror, which reflectsthe advantages and disadvantages of the past, so that people can regard thepast as precious experience to build the bright future. Scientists have alreadyknown that temperature all over the world is increasing according the data formany years, so we should control the temperature with the endeavor of allnations. It is time to study from those countries whose exclusion of carbondioxide was a small number and how did they make it. If biologists find thatsome animals are being endangered, they should try to make them live in suitableenvironment from the past experience that what kind of condition they can livebetter. Indeed, sometimes even we can predict the danger is around the cornersuch as the eruption of volcano, but we cannot change the situation. All we cando is to tell people who live there to move away from their homes as soon aspossible to reduce the damage.

To sum up, the past is a significant rolefor contemporary us to know what to do in the future and how to create the worldas we thought. We should learn about the true past first as possible as we can.And then we can make use of the experience to build the future.


大家来拍吧~多谢！

小灵易碎UID: 2733622

The author simply claims that the past isno predictor of the past. As I see, the past is something happened andunchangeable, no matter how long it past, while the future, no matter tomorrowor after too many years, is going to happen in some pattern(你想表达“以某一种形式发生”的意思吗？pattern的解释我附在后面了，好像没有说“形式、形态”的意思，更多用在衣服的样式之类的地方，个人见解), like a mystery.However, I believe, in some extent, we can create the future just like wethought, in other words, we can predict the future from the past.（TS）

Although the future is unknown, just as mostpeople thinks（think）, it is sometimes hard to predict the future. (“尽管未来是未知的，但是有时还是很难预测未来”~不是一个意思吗，为什么这里要用让步呢？)We don’t know whatwill we do after graduate（graduating）, no matter how we make efforts to make things intothe direction as we hope, but the determination is not only ourselves(ours). Take theworld as an example(world 这例子真够大的，呵呵): no one can assert that all human beings will all die onwhich day for which reason. Even the Maya Calendar said on December 20, 2012,the world will be ruined, but at least nowadays, no scientist can find enoughevidence to prove it.
(这一段讲预测未来很困难，就算是玛雅人说了世界毁灭的日期，科学家也没找到足够证据证明它)

However, to some extent, we have to saythat we succeed in predicting the development. With technique being invented, peoplewant to have more convenient computers to work everywhere, so smaller laptops（were）born instead of（instead of 是“是……而不是……”的意思，建议took place of ） heavy and huge personal computer(s). In addition, old cameras canonly take photos with limited numbers, so（but） with the help of our imagination andthe invention of technique, digital camera born and people have the opportunityto take down a lot of beautiful scenes at every corner of the world and caneasily delete those bad photos and retake. When people’s imagination is beyondtechnique, it is our imagination that prompts human beings to create newtechnique to satisfy our need.
(这一段讲运用新技术，我们可以预测未来)

The past is like a mirror, which reflectsthe advantages and disadvantages of the past, so that people can regard thepast as precious experience to build the bright future. Scientists have alreadyknown that temperature all over the world is increasing according the data formany years, so we should control the temperature with the endeavor of allnations. It is time to study from those countries whose exclusion of carbondioxide was a small number and how did they make it. If biologists find thatsome animals are being endangered, they should try to make them live in suitableenvironment from the past experience that what kind of condition they can livebetter. Indeed, sometimes even we can predict the danger is around the cornersuch as the eruption of volcano, but we cannot change the situation. All we cando is to tell people who live there to move away from their homes as soon aspossible to reduce the damage.
（历史可以反映过去的优缺点，同时可以为现在提供经验，例如全球变暖）

To sum up, the past is a significant rolefor contemporary us to know what to do in the future and how to create the worldas we thought. We should learn about the true past first as possible as we can.And then we can make use of the experience to build the future.

pattern
1 : a form or model proposed for imitation : EXEMPLAR
2 : something designed or used as a model for making things
3 : an artistic, musical, literary, or mechanical design or form
4 : a natural or chance configuration
5 : a length of fabric sufficient for an article (as of clothing)
6 a : the distribution of shrapnel, bombs on a target, or shot from a shotgun b : the grouping made on a target by bullets
7 : a reliable sample of traits, acts, tendencies, or other observable characteristics of a person, group, or institution
8 a : the flight path prescribed for an airplane that is coming in for a landing b : a prescribed route to be followed by a pass receiver in football
9 : TEST PATTERN


整体逻辑结构还是挺好的，就是有些词汇的用法不太准确，建议用之前先查下字典中的用法，后面写的还行（看来你是“渐入佳境”型的哈~）加油了~↖(^ω^)↗

jinziqiUID: 2387034

2# 小灵易碎 谢谢指正！我会好好查字典的！ ;-)

jinziqiUID: 2387034

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The author simply claims that the past is no predictor of the past. As I see, the past is something happened and unchangeable, no matter how long it past, while the future, no matter tomorrow or after how many decades, is going to happen in some forms, like a mystery or a gift. However, I believe, in some extent, we can create the future just like we thought of, in other words, we can predict the future from the past.

Just as most people think, the future is unknown and it is sometimes hard to be predicted. For example, we even don’t know what will we do after graduating, no matter how we tried our efforts to make things going into the direction as we hoped, but unfortunately, the determination is not only made by ourselves. Take the world as an example: no one can assert that all human beings will all die on which day for which reason. Even the Maya Calendar said on December 20, 2012, the world will be ruined, but at least nowadays, no scientist can find enough evidences to prove it.


However, to some extent, we have to say that we succeed in predicting the development. After the show up of personal computers, IT workers always try developing more convenient computers to make the possibility of working everywhere come true. It is no wonder that smaller laptops have born which took place of heavy and huge personal computers. In addition, old cameras can only take photos with limited numbers, but with the help of our imagination and the invention of technique, digital cameras have born. People get the opportunity to take down a lot of beautiful scenes at every corner of the world and they can also easily delete those bad photos and retake one. When people’s imagination is beyond technique, it is our imagination that prompts human beings to keep on creating new technique to satisfy our needs. In some degrees, people can build the life as they want. And this is why lazy people also do more inventions to help human beings.

The past is like a mirror, which reflects the advantages and disadvantages of the past, so that people should regard the past as precious experience to build the bright future. Scientists have already known that temperature all over the world is increasing according to the data which has been taking for many years, so they are calling all nations to do as much as they can to control the temperature. It is time to study from those countries whose exclusion of carbon dioxide was a smaller number and how did they make it. If biologists find that some animals are being endangered, they will try to make them live in a suitable environment from the past experience that what kind of condition they can live better. Indeed, sometimes even we can predict the danger is around the corner such as the eruption of volcano, but we cannot change the situation. All we can do is to tell people who live there to move away from their homes as soon as possible to reduce the damage.


To sum up, the past plays a significant role for contemporary us to know what to do to make the future wonderful and how to create the world as we thought. We should learn about the past first as possible as we can. And then we can make use of the experience to build the future. Also, we should take down all events in nowadays to give an example for our next generation.

emteddybearUID: 2699606

个人觉得比较好的句子，
TS，
感觉有点点问题的
The author simply claims that the past is no predictor of the past. As I see, the past is something happened and unchangeable, no matter how long it past, while the future, no matter tomorrow or after too many years, is going to happen in some pattern, like a mystery. However【我觉得这个词语可以再斟酌一下】, I believe, in some extent, we can create the future just like we thought, in other words, we can predict the future from the past.【TS】

Although the future is unknown, just as most people thinks, it is sometimes hard to predict the future. We don’t know what will we do after graduate, no matter how we make efforts to make things into the direction as we hope, but the determination is not only ourselves. Take the world as an example: no one can assert that all human beings will all die on which day for which reason. Even the Maya Calendar said on December 20, 2012, the world will be ruined, but at least nowadays, no scientist can find enough evidence to prove it.【这段话是说未来其实不可知，但是他好像没有怎么支持你的论点，我觉得写得有点多了，而且最后应该转到你的论点上去，我觉得有悖于自己论点的话最好不好独立成段吧，容易引起误解】

However, to some extent, we have to say that we succeed in predicting the development. With technique being invented, people want to have more convenient computers to work everywhere, so smaller laptops born instead of heavy and huge personal computer. In addition, old cameras can only take photos with limited numbers, so with the help of our imagination and the invention of technique, digital camera born and people have the opportunity to take down a lot of beautiful scenes at every corner of the world and can easily delete those bad photos and retake. When people’s imagination is beyond technique, it is our imagination that prompts human beings to create new technique to satisfy our need. 【现在的科技能够推动未来科技的发展，我在想可不可以加一句包含PAST 和FUTURE的TS呢，这样更点题】

The past is like a mirror, which reflects the advantages and disadvantages of the past, so that people can regard the past as precious experience to build the bright future. Scientists have already known that temperature all over the world is increasing according the data for many years, so we should control the temperature with the endeavor of all nations. It is time to study from those countries whose exclusion of carbon dioxide was a small number and how did they make it. If biologists find that some animals are being endangered, they should try to make them live in suitable environment from the past experience that what kind of condition they can live better. Indeed, sometimes even we can predict the danger is around the corner such as the eruption of volcano, but we cannot change the situation. All we can do is to tell people who live there to move away from their homes as soon as possible to reduce the damage.【这段话其实有两个意思，一是过去是一面镜子，能够反映未来；二是现实生活中有时我们是能够预测到危险的，从而采取措施避免它】

To sum up, the past is a significant role for contemporary us to know what to do in the future and how to create the world as we thought. We should learn about the true past first as possible as we can. And then we can make use of the experience to build the future.
【这篇习作，我觉得逻辑结构还有待重新组织一下，首先body1，意思是有悖主题的，body3的两个意思好像不是很有关联，也许可以再想想，看能不能把他们各自成段展开这样可以增加字数。总体上来看，我觉得各段逻辑联系得不是很紧密，应该再想想，(*^__^*) 嘻嘻……，不过我觉得你的语言貌似比我好多了，我的基本都是口水话，惭愧，惭愧啊~~~~~~~~~】

jinziqiUID: 2387034

5# emteddybear

谢谢！的确提醒了我一个很大的问题！基于你的建议，修改如下：

The author simply claims that the past is no predictor of the future. As I see, the past is something happened and unchangeable, no matter how long it past, while the future, no matter tomorrow or after how many decades, is mysterious, like a gift. From my perspective, I believe, in some extent, we can create the future just like we thought of, in other words, we can predict the future from the past.

Although some people may think the future is unknown, to some extent, we have to say that we succeed in predicting the development. Take the computer as an example: after the show up of personal computers, IT workers always try developing more convenient computers to make the possibility of working everywhere come true. It is no wonder that smaller laptops such as the net book and the Mac air have born which took place of heavy and huge personal computers. Another example is our old cameras that can only take photos with limited numbers, but with the help of our imagination and the invention of technique, digital cameras have born. People get the opportunity to take down a lot of beautiful scenes at every corner of the world and they can also easily delete those bad photos and retake one. That is to say, when people’s imagination is beyond technique, it is our imagination that prompts human beings to keep on creating new technique to satisfy our needs. In some degrees, people can build their life into any way only if they want.

The next issue must be how we make use of the past to predict the future. The past is like a mirror, which reflects the advantages and disadvantages of the past, so that people should regard the past as precious experience to build the bright future. Recently, scientists have found that temperature all over the world is increasing according to the data which has been taking for many years, so they are calling all nations on doing as much as they can to lower the temperature. It is time to study from those countries whose exclusion of carbon dioxide was a smaller number and how did they make it. If biologists find that some animals are being endangered, they will try to make them live in a suitable environment from the past experience that what kind of condition they can live better. So, you can see the significance of the past which can provides us information about what to do and it can also save a lot of time for us on discovering what the right thing is.

Indeed, sometimes even we can predict the danger is around the corner such as the eruption of volcano and the earthquake, but we cannot change the situation just because it is beyond the ability of human beings. All we can do is to tell people who live there to move away from their homes as soon as possible to reduce the damage. However, I believe, with the development of the society, there will be one day that people can handle those problems which seem difficult nowadays.

To sum up, the past plays a significant role for us to know what to do to make the future wonderful and how to create the world as we thought. We should learn about the past first as possible as we can. And then we can make use of the experience to build the future. Also, we should write down all events in the contemporary society to give notes to our next generations.