周四作业，体育运动对yong people重要

summerdingdavidUID: 2718039

Compared with young people, doing exercise is much important to older people.

As more and more people have realized the importance of their quality of life, the issue of how to keep healthy has received increasing public attention, and participating exercise activities is fairly considered as a good approach. In my opinion, doing exercise can bring favorable impact on every individual, regardless their gender and age, however, it plays much more important role in young people’s life, compared with older people, for the following reasons.

The first reason taken into account is based on the widely accepted view that as the increase of age which inavoidly leads to the general degradation of bodily functions, elder people often feel exhausted and overwhlemed by participating in exercise, which cannot bring benefit to them. Therefore, for elder people, taking place some leisure activities such as reading books, walking around in park, chating with old friends is the optimal way to prevent them from some age-related maladies.

Nevertheless, the more exercises young people take place, the better for their physical health. The modern society is a rapidly developing one, in which only those who do adequate prepartion not only in intelligent capability but also on physical aspect can survive. By involving in various exercises, young generation can acquire an excellent quality of body, which is definitely benefic to their future occupation and career. What’ s more important, taking place exercises is invariably considered as a panacea to help young people relax and relieve from the burdensome working and studying, especially in this fierce competitive society. For example, my best friend lily, who always use jogging to keep mental balance between heavy workload and daily life. And it really works. Contrary to older people, exercise is kind of dispensible aspect in their life, for young generation, it is necessary and is likened to medicien without side effect to cure mental disease.

In summary, taking exercises undoubtedly produce manifold merits for both young people and older one, but due to their respective physical and working situations, participating exercise is much suitable for young generation and much more important for them than older people.

summerdingdavidUID: 2718039

莫有人拍啊？

shirley072UID: 2712200

不好意思哦，我很久没有去那个小组了，所以我现在都是在自己的小组里面写作文呵呵

fatruiUID: 2726256

Compared with young people, doing exercise is much important to older people.（不太那么建议一上来就把自己的opinion给写上来，用一个引子把这个话题带出来会更加自然一点）As more and more people have realized the importance of their quality of life, the issue of how to keep healthy has received increasing public attention, and participating exercise activities is fairly considered as a good approach. In my opinion, doing exercise can bring favorable impact on every individual（individuals）, regardless their gender and age, however, it plays much more important role in young people’s life, compared with older people, for the following reasons.

      The first reason taken into account is based on the widely accepted view that （有模板嫌疑噢）as the increase of age which inavoidly（inevitably） leads to the general degradation of bodily functions, elder people often feel exhausted and overwhlemed（overwhelmed） by participating in exercise, which cannot bring benefit to them. Therefore, for elder people, taking place some leisure activities such as reading books, walking around in park, chating （chatting） with old friends is（are） the optimal way to prevent them from some age-related maladies（这个词组用得好 学习了）.（感觉这段要拓展一下会更加的好单单论理视乎太少）    Nevertheless, the more exercises young people take place, the better for their physical health. The modern society is a rapidly developing one, in which only those who do adequate prepartion （preparation）not only in intelligent capability but also on physical aspect can survive. By involving in various exercises, young generation can acquire an excellent quality of body, which is definitely benefic to their future occupation and career.
    What’ s more important, taking place exercises is invariably considered as a panacea to help young people relax and relieve from the burdensome working and studying, especially in this fierce competitive society.（这句也是很好） For example, my best friend lily（Lily）, who always（少用always这种绝对性的词，不过我也是看别人文章的时候别人说的） use jogging to keep mental balance between heavy workload and daily life. And it really works. （我觉这个例子可以再拓展一下，就是这个朋友Lily跑步，是怎么减压的，然后每次都表现出一副良好的精神状态）Contrary to older people, exercise is kind of dispensible（dispensable） aspect in their life, for young generation, it is necessary and is likened to medicien （medicine）without side effect to cure mental disease.
    In summary, taking exercises undoubtedly produce manifold merits for both young people and older one, but due to their respective physical and working situations, participating exercise is much suitable for young generation and much more important for them than older people.
总结：写得比我好多了，你一句话的意思，能用很多的表达方式，我学习了，然后就是文章的逻辑思维和逻辑结构很好，我觉得可以再加入一段说：其实对于老人老说，运动都是很重要的，因为老用运动可以增加肌肉的活动，有利于老人的健康，而且能少得病，但是，运动对于老人很重要，还需要吃好，睡好。而且老人做太多活动也会使得老人身体劳损什么的。