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many teachers assign homework to students every day.do you think that daily homework is necessary for students? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.


Never in our school was the issue of whether daily homework is necessary for students more controversial. As is stated according to China Daily, approximately sixty-seven percent of individuals from different backgrounds and experiences agree that daily homework should be considered as necessary as excises in class. As far as I am concerned, the viewpoint that it is beneficial to cancel daily homework is far from being sagacious.
Daily homework does a great amount of favor for students to master skills and acquire knowledge at amazing ease. In terms of the limited ability, we could not expect a student, especially a junior, to understand all during the class. Without doing homework every day, one could fails to remind and review what just has being taught. Therefore, daily homework is a necessity. Take my little sister Daphne as a typical example, she does homework every day. However, last Monday she has something wrong with her stomach, resulting in not doing it only for a single day. To her amazement, she was not able to use the mathematical formula to calculate. It is well illustrated that daily homework does play a tremendous part of studying and necessary for students.
Doing homework every day promotes the form of the excellent habit. ‘It is never too old to learn’-this old saying demonstrated that one should keep learning no matter how old he or she is. Consequently, one should cultivate the sound habit from his or her childhood and doing daily homework provides a wonderful approach to cultivate it. For instance, my father who is over fifty, has sticked to reading books every day for many years. When I asked the reason why he is so crazy about reading, he only said when he was a little boy he got used to do homework every day. Frankly, if he had not done daily homework, he could never read so large number of books. On the whole, necessary as it is, doing homework exerts a huge effect on habit-cultivating, such as reading.





Someone might argue that it is more beneficial if students do something they like such as surfing the internet, instead of the boring homework. Surfing the internet might stimulate creative thinking while doing daily homework, surely, lay the solid foundation for any potential thinking. For example, Tomas Edison attributed his successful and influential invention—light bulb-- to his daily physics homework.
Very true is the saying that daily homework has so many merits, such as helping to master knowledge, cultivating the outstanding habit and arousing the creative thinking. In brief, daily homework is necessary..

mpromanusUID: 2565872

Never in our school did was the tissue? (Don't you mean 'issue'? =.=) of whether daily homework is necessary for students be more controversial. As is state? (Do you mean 'stated'?) from a survey, sixty-seven percent of individuals from distinct backgrounds and experiences agree that homework should be considered as vital as the excises in the class, and are fully against the idea that it should be canceled according to China Daily (You should move this part after '...a survey'. This detail pertains to the survey itself, not the opinions collected. Keep details near the entity that they refer to.). As far as I am concerned, the viewpoint that the least people hold (And what viewpoint exactly is that? Don't ask your reader to do linguistics and mathematics to find out who 'the least people' are or what viewpoint they hold.) is far from being sagacious, since the daily homework does a great amount of favor to absorb (Who or what is 'absorbing'? The homework?) the knowledge and skills which the teachers taught in the daytime at school ('School' doesn't necessarily mean daytime. There are night classes, you know.) as well as to seek (Again, who's 'seeking'? I think by now you should realize that you missed the object of 'favor' - the students.) the little points intended to be ignored, which one might not master well. (This is a huge and confusing sentence because THE SUBJECT KEEPS CHANGING from clause to clause and there's no signal on where each subject's coverage is. My suggestion is to not do this more than twice in one sentence, unless you're fully confident of your punctuation and layering skills. Give your reader some space to breathe.)What is more, doing daily homework is responsible for cultivating the habitats? (I do not understand. Why would you confuse 'habitats' with 'habits'?) that insists on studying (Why don't just say '..the habit to study everyday'?) everyday. At last, it provides a new approach to seek for interests?.

Totally understanding every aspects of the very day’s subjects? ensures that one could accept the following knowledge? more easily. And among all the ways (of what?), doing homework which teachers assigned in deliberation? (What does this have to do with doing homework? Is 'deliberation' particularly important for doing homework? HOW IS IT RELEVANT?) is the most convenient and time-saving one to encourage a student, especially a junior, who do is not be able to master all information which teachers deliver in the class, to review. Take my little sister Daphne as a typical example: she does home work every day, but last Monday she had something wrong with her stomach, resulting in lacking in not doing it for only a day.To her amazment, she was not able to use the formula to calculate what the last day has just been taught on the last day. It is well illustrated that daily homework play a tremendous part in knowledge achievement (You don't 'achieve' knowledge.). (Yeah, well, it's improtant and all - but the question asked is whether it's NECESSARY. All these arguments about its importance actually amounts to nothing if you don't say 'it's very important so it's very necessary'.)

“It is never too old to learn” - this old saying demonstrated that one should keep learning no matter how old he or she is! Therefore, one should cultivate the sound habitat (And, again..=.=) from his or her childhood, and keep doing daily homework is an excellent way. Paralleled with it (What?), I will give you an example: my father, who is over fifty, have sticked to reading books for many years since I can have something root in mind???. When I ask him the reason, every time, he only said it is his hobby and habitat (Urgh. >.<), and when he was a little boy he got used to do homework at first time (I think you mean 'immediately'.) after school. Frankly, this exerts a huge effect on his life and benefits him in a large amount. (Again, doing homework immediately after school doesn't equate to 'daily homework', and the question about whether this is NECESSARY is still unaddressed. You're still stuck on the 'important' or 'useful' aspect of the issue without seeing what the question is really asking of you.)

Someone may say that if students do something they like instead of the boring homework, it is more beneficial. However, some foreseeing teachers set the homework as reading any books he or she appreciates, and writing summaries and moods while reading. No doubtly, it would not only promote the students (Again, don't miss the actual subject of the actions..'it' doesn't stand in as a real actor.) to practice the writing skills, but also push students to find out where he or she poses interests in, which is crucial when choosing a career. When I was sixteen, I read a book related to medicine named The Secret of Our Body, as my homework, which triggered my interesting and laid a meaningful foundation on for my future major-selecting—clinical medicine.

Homework does have a large number of merits, such as helping us understand the knowledge better in class and cultivating the habitat and develop our interests. It is not exaggeration to say that without daily homework, students would never make a progress so quickly? (Did you mention anything about 'quick progress' in the essay at all?). In brief, daily homework is necessary. (Yeah, and now you realize the question is about necessity..but it's too late. Such a hasty conclusion is futile without constantly establishing a solid, relevant reasoning throughout your essay.)

总结：

额。不厚道地说，这位童鞋你这个还叫没高级句子啊 =.= 我怎么觉得是练GRE练多了脑子有点停不下来了呢。。=.=

语法 - 长度惊悚的长句+乱七八糟的基本语法错误+没有标点符号。。I'm not trying to be too harsh but reading through such thick and messy sentences is an agony. 那些用词句式都很基本，句子很破但很短的非高级作文反而不会让人觉得这么痛苦，因为可以看得很快。。It feels more painful to push through a thick layer of thorny bushes than to quickly run through a sparse one..

词汇 - 你用错词的方式让我很迷惑，似乎是近似拼写的词会用错。。=.=

逻辑 - 所说写得这么高级的长句和华丽的词汇但是不保证不会偏题啊。。题目是在问necessary，你一直在说优点好处，至少要有一句说‘因为这么好所以很必要’这样的句子才算。。

fwljessieUID: 2755664

语句太繁琐了。。。， 语法错误也是没法改哦。最重要的是要让人看懂你要说什么

mpromanusUID: 2565872

Never in our schools was the issue of whether daily homework is necessary for students more controversial. As is stated according to China Daily, approximately sixty-seven percent of individuals from different backgrounds and experiences agree that daily homework should be considered as necessary as excises in class (If it is 'homework', then it means it's NOT IN CLASS.). As far as I am concerned, the viewpoint that it is beneficial to cancel daily homework is far from being sagacious. (This is too sudden a turn. You were talking about people think that daily homework is necessary, then all of a sudden you're talking about 'to CANCEL daily homework'. There's no connection whatsoever here even though the connection should be obvious - that most people think daily homework is necessary, THEREFORE you think to cancel it would be foolhardy. Develop your logic. Show how ideas are related to one another. It's not enough to simply pile sentences together and hope the logic would be obvious.)

Daily homework does a great amount of favor for students to master skills and acquire knowledge at amazing ease. In terms of the limited ability (Of/in what? From what you've written after this, I guess you mean 'his/her limited abilities'.), we could not expect a student, especially a junior, to understand all during the classes. Without doing homework every day, one could fails to remind and review what just has been taught. Therefore, daily homework is a necessity. Take my little sister Daphne as a typical example, she does homework every day. However, last Monday she has something wrong with her stomach, resulting in not doing it only for a single day. To her amazement, she was not able to use the mathematical formula (Which formula? The one she was taught to use 3 years ago? You need to be specific about the nouns if you use 'the'.) to calculate. It is well illustrated that daily homework does play a tremendous part of in studying and is necessary for students. (This example falls a bit short of fully illustrating your point because you didn't nail her inability to use a formula to a single reason - not doing daily homework. Do you know the idea of 'controlled experiments'? In such a experiment, you control as many environmental variables as possible and only allow one variable to change, therefore you can get a valid conclusion that the changes in your results IS the direct result of that variable's changes. This is one of the fundamental scientific methods in use. It's the same idea with developing logic. You need to show that 'daily homework' is the only variable that changes, and a difference in result is directly due to this variable's change. To be specific, if you say she's unable to use a formula because she didn't do homework for a day, then you could augment the logic by saying that 'when she does homework daily, she is able to use all the formulae she's been taught'. This then leaves no room for questions - her inability to use a formula is the direct result of her missing a day's homework.)

Doing homework every day promotes the form of the excellent habits. ‘It is never too old to learn’-this old saying demonstrates that one should keep learning no matter how old he or she is. Consequently, one should cultivate the sound habit (What habit? Again, if you use 'the', the nouns must be specific enough to answer 'what' or 'which'.) from his or her childhood and doing daily homework provides a wonderful approach to cultivate it. For instance, my father who is over fifty, has sticked to reading books every day for many years. When I asked the reason why that he is so crazy about reading, he only said when he was a little boy he got used to do homework every day. Frankly, if he had not done daily homework, he could never read so large number of books. (I don't get the logic. How is doing homework related to reading books? Again, you need to SHOW how they are relevant. People have different mental models of how ideas associate with one another, and you can't expect them to understand why things happen in a certain way just by listing out things next to each other. Think about this: if someone puts Bill Gates and Thomas Edison together and asks you what their relationship is, how would you answer? I bet you either think of nothing or think of a lot of things - they're both American, they are both very rich, they both invented important things, etc. Then, out of these many things by which you can relate them together, you need to pick out one relationship that fits your question, AND WRITE IT DOWN.) On the whole, necessary as it is, doing homework exerts a huge effect on habit-cultivating, such as reading.

Someone might argue that it is more beneficial if students do something they like, such as surfing the internet, instead of the boring homework. surely Surfing the internet might stimulate creative thinking while doing daily homework, surely, and lay the solid foundations for any potential thinking?. For example, Thomas Edison attributed his successful and influential invention—the light bulb-- to his daily physics homework (Are you sure about that? His official schooling only lasted for 3 months. And I've seen this guy as an example before. It's potentially dangerous to use examples that the American audience might know very well, especially if YOU never get the facts right about them..).

Very true is the saying that daily homework has so many merits, such as helping to master knowledge, cultivating the outstanding habits and arousing the creative thinking (You don't really have a solid argument for the 3rd point.). In brief, daily homework is necessary.

总结：

语法上请注意定冠词的用法。。词汇上主要是有一些不很地道的表达，不过总体来说不是非常影响阅读。

逻辑方面最主要的是逻辑推理的过程不够明显，就是读者看不出你一个关键字到另外一个关键字的关联是什么。。议论文的三要素是论点，论据，论证，论证就是要把论点论据妥善地联系起来，让读者能理解你的议论是怎么来怎么去的，这样。