小心littleheart的独立作文，自1.27，更新至2.14

奇流沙UID: 2698749

2.18 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Letting a friend make a mistake is better than saying or doing something that may destroy your friendship.3 }# m5 i) R  V

People usually treat friendship as a crucial part of their life. So when our friends make mistakes, it is a difficult choice for us whether we should tell him/her the fact or not. Some may insist that it could destroy the relationship between friends if pointing out friends' errors. However, I hold the belief that a truly(true) friend is loyalty(a loyal) person who will support you when you are in a right direction, but is also willing to indicate and help you when you are wrong.
首段真好，很自然，语言逻辑流畅~
Admittedly, there is no denying the fact that it is not a funny(fun, funny多指滑稽的) thing to correct a mistake and
nobody desires their own mistakes pointed out by others(有点中文的味道，没人想要别人指出自己的错误……不过这么说也没错，就是稍微有点别扭). Whereas, it is the best way to improve our ability that recognize and correct our mistakes.（意味不明认识到自己的错误和提高自己的能力么有必然联系啊~） Due to that a truly(ture) friend hopes you will become better and better, whether in aspects of personality or mental development, they, without a doubt, will point out your mistake. No matter how serious a mistake you have made, a stranger will not care about, while instead your parents and your good friend will be worried about you and even try their best to provide you some solutions just because they love you. After careful analyses, you will be not angry about friends but show appreciation to them. Then in my opinion, after such matters, it will not only never destroy the friendship, but also gain the relationship(strengthen the relationship咋样咧) between you.
论点：好朋友是真心为你好才会指出错误，关系不会被破坏反而会更好。
Furthermore, in some special circumstance, to tell a friend that he/she is wrong is likely to reveal the drawbacks of a person, which makes him/her feel embarrassed or lose face. When confronting such cases, we should take proper measures to avoid such consequence. For example, we could not criticize our friends in front of others, but tell him/her our thought when there are no one around except for us two. Take my friend Danny as an example, Danny is one of my best friends. A few days ago, she told me that she broke up with another girl Jane just for a little affair that once Jane laughed at her newly-unsuccessful hair-style in the face of the public. This matter greatly annoyed Danny and it follows that they could no longer be friends. As can be seen from the example, it is important to choose a right method when you want to attention your friends something you feel incorrect.
论点：有时给朋友指出错误会使之尴尬或丢脸。
这段语言我觉得不错~~没啥毛病可挑的~
By and large, based on I mentioned above, a true friend have the responsibility to remind you of mistakes and eager to give you some guidance. A good friend is not a person who merely praise you everything but a person who tells you the truth.
只是这两段吧论点列出之后，是不是感觉有点相逆？还是我的问题？第三段列出的例子虽然是说当面指出错误会是朋友尴尬，但反而是在证明指出问题所在会破坏朋友关系，虽然只是发型问题，跟错误相差一截……没有明确表态啊，我上一篇就被批评了，说么有明确的表态到底同不同意不大好的样子，小心mm你觉着咧？
有问题再Q我啊~~

lavenderelaineUID: 2689477

2.19 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for a teacher to help students gain self-confidence than to teach them specific knowledge?7 \9 J3 t$ \7 j, O/ Q


When asked me about which is more important for a student, self-confidence or specific knowledge, I will definitely choose the former one.开头好句学习了！ And in my point of view, when giving （instructing会不会好些）specific knowledge, at the same time teachers should place a high value on gaining（gain主语是学生，这句主语是老师，改成motiving） students' self-confidence for it encourage students' both personality and mental development. $ B1 G: N) s3 }* O0 v


Admittedly, knowledge is not only a prerequisite for学习了，tpo里好像也出现过吧前提 students' further study, but also a crucial part for their further work. From primary to college, it is acknowledged that the basic task of teachers is to teach their students' related knowledge. However, we easily ignore another more important responsibility of a teacher, which is to help students build self-confidence. Self-confidence contributes to physical health and mental health, whether you want to be a doctor or just be a blue-collar. Take a common thing for example, if a student made a mistake or failed at a certain subject, at the moment(at that moment 好不好) what he desired most is encouragement and a next chance, but his teacher was merely angry about him and say （said）some bad words to him. Wow, those words may deeply hurt the boy and then he may have no confidence for himself, what' s more, from then on, his self-esteem was greatly dampened.学习了！ It follows that the poor boy may become isolated from his classmate. As can be seen from the consequence学习了，请问这个是状从的省略么？, lack of self-confidence may lead to serious consequence to a person.' h0 L" \9 R8 `
From another perspective, students, especially primary and high-school students, are immature to shape their own sense of value and build strong ability of enduring burden.学习了 They need adults, such as respected teachers and beloved parents, to give them a right direction. According to a recent survey conducted by a group of experts, the best stage of building one's confidence is the students' age( the students' days), which benefits a student's (读起来难理解，person's 比较好，跟开头one's呼应)whole life. The survey also shows that students with more encouragement and praise are more competitive in the further career than those without. This is not hard to think about, only when you gain self-confidence, can you have the confidence and courage to overcome the coming difficulties and try your best to achieve your goal学习了only 的强调倒装. On the other hand, when your further job has little relation with what you have learnt in the school, you will gradually forget the ever acquired specific knowledge because they are useless now, whereas the self-confidence will contributes to your success all long.
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By and large, base on what I mentioned above, I personally holds that gaining confidence is more important than acquiring specific knowledge for students and thus teachers are supposed to think carefully about how to help students build confidence.

:$ 真是不好意思了 littleheart同学的文章太好了， 几乎里面没什么错误，都是我的“学习了！”
我水平真的有限呢！ 提不出更有建设性的意见了。 希望楼主继续加油！~

学到了不少好句型啊！
请问这篇文章 是从论述知识、信心哪个更重要这个角度写 还是我那片那样从老师的角度写更好一些，因为我发现我修改的lz的文章还有刀小静的文章 好像都是从前一个角度论述的。  希望指教~ 谢谢

刀小镜UID: 2618532

When asked（ask） me about which is more important for a student, self-confidence or specific knowledge, I will definitely choose the former one. And in my point of view, when giving specific knowledge, at the same time teachers should place a high value on gaining students' self-confidence for it encourage students' both personality and mental

Admittedly, knowledge is not only a prerequisite for students' further study, but also a crucial part for their further work. From primary to college, it is acknowledged that the basic task of teachers is to teach their students' related knowledge. However, we easily ignore another more important responsibility of a teacher, which is to help students build self-confidence. Self-confidence contributes to physical health and mental health, whether you want to be a doctor or just be a blue-collar. Take a common thing for example, if a student made a mistake or failed at a certain subject, at the(this) moment what he desired most is encouragement and a next chance, but his teacher was merely angry about him and say some bad words to him. Wow, those words (behaviors)may deeply hurt the boy and then he may have no confidence for himself, what’s more, from then on, his self-esteem was greatly dampened. It follows that the poor boy may become isolated from his classmate (classmates). As can be seen from the consequence, lack of self-confidence may lead to serious consequence (换成其他的词更好一些 避免和前半句重复) to a person.

From another perspective, students, especially primary and high-school students, are immature to shape their own sense of value and build strong ability of enduring burden. They need adults, such as respected teachers and beloved parents, to give them a right direction. According to a recent survey conducted by a group of experts, the best stage of building one's confidence is the students' age（student times）, which benefits a student's whole life.（这句话的意思成了学生时代有益于学生一生了） The survey also shows that students with more encouragement and praise are more competitive in the further career than those without. This is not hard to think about, only when you gain self-confidence, can you have the confidence and courage to overcome the coming difficulties and try your best to achieve your goal. On the other hand, when your further(future) job has little relation with what you have learnt in the school, you will gradually forget the ever acquired specific knowledge because they are useless now, whereas the self-confidence will contributes to your success all long.

By and large, base on what I mentioned above, I personally holds that gaining confidence is more important than acquiring specific knowledge for students and thus teachers are supposed to think carefully about how to help students build confidence.

姑娘结构很好 而且例子也值得学习（个人觉得例子里能提到survey很洋气^^）
建议姑娘多做点同义替换 比如confidence self-assured一类的可以避免重复

小心littleheartUID: 2726034

48# lavenderelaine
As can be seen from the consequence（example）学习了，请问这个是状从的省略么？,   不好意思，我打错了，应该是As can be seen from the example,....  经帅帅这么一提醒，我突然发现好像应该主要从老师的角度写，因为题目的范围是老师和学生啊~·不过最好兼顾下，那样也更好写，更有话说~O(∩_∩)O~

小心littleheartUID: 2726034

2.22Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to success, you should be more like others, than be different from anyone else.

Recently, there is an ongoing discussion online, with sharply risen volume, as how a person could be successful. Whether he/she should try to behave similar to others or do things differently from others. Some may insist that distinguished persons usually have strange minds, especially some famous scientists. However, I hold the belief that one's behavior alike with others may contribute to his/her success.
Admittedly, in the past, people who think strange and behave differently usually could be a distinguished professor in their area, such as Newton and Van Gogh. Considering their great contribution to society, they are indeed successful men/women, whereas such kind of examples is rare, as well as the present situation dramatically differ from the past times. Nowadays, with the advent of various technologies, the earth is becoming a global city. It follows that everyone's life relies on society, let alone success. If you want to be successful, you need others' help, especially the approval of your boss, so you must assume an active role in demonstrating your ability to your boss. While if you often think different from your colleagues, you will be regarded as an antisocial person and no one wants to cooperate with you. Then your boss will be angry with you owing to the opinion that it is you who adversely affect the efficiency of the whole team. Maybe your thought and behavior are right after thorough proven, but at that moment you may have been fired. Therefore, it is wise for a person to be similar with others thus you will never be the first bird to hunt.
From another perspective, in fact, in many cases, the view of a majority of people is considerable and logical, which could be a good reference for you. Accordingly, there is no reason for you not to accept the public viewpoints, after all much intelligence outweighs one’s wisdom. Take my own experience as an example, I have studied toefl for a long time but suddenly I found that I always was in a low efficiency because of incorrect methods of learning, and then I tried to learn from some friends who were also preparing the test. It is really a perfect way of improving myself, from then on I came to realize that I behaved so strange and reviewed in a different way from my toefl friends, thus I could intensify a little everyday. Lucky as I was that could I realize the mistake in time and eventually I successful passed the examination. As the can be seen from the example, being like others always benefits you a lot, as well as gain the opportunity of success.

By and large, based on those mentioned above, I personally support that it is a good choice for you to behave like others. Establishing your own mind, meanwhile utilizing others' wisdom can easily make you succeed.

小心littleheartUID: 2726034

2.24作业~
To be well-informed people should get information from many different information sources.

People seldom agree with each other in such a controversial issue as how to become a well-informed person. Some may insist that a well-known person should be specialized on several certain subjects and have a deep research on them. However, in point of view, a person who takes step into many areas, as well as grasps a variety of information, could be called a well-informed person. My reasons are listed below.
Initially, so called "well-informed" indicates that a person who knows almost any field of knowledge, though they may be not proficient in some areas. If a person has a deep research on a certain subject, he/she is usually regarded as a professor, rather than all-rounded person. For instance, my uncle is a successful engineer, and the buildings he designed are very attractive and unique. I admire him most because he is a famous man in his field, while he knows little about other subjects, such as biology, physical and so forth. One day, a fresh rainbow came out after a rainy day, at that moment my little sister asked my uncle:" Dad, could you tell me how the beautiful rainbow comes into being." Suddenly, my uncle regret because he, a high-tech engineer, even could not answer his little girl's question. And he saw a desperate expression on his daughter’s face. As can be seen from the example, a professional person who lacks other aspects of information cannot be treated as a well-informed person.
From another perspective, an all-rounded person should possess a large amount of information in different areas. A distinguished TV host may become such a kind of person for the reason that he/she has to host a wide range of programs which come from different areas. It follows that the hosts need to prepare a storehouse of information to fulfill themselves. Only in this way, could they finish their work without mistakes. As we all known, such TV host cannot be proficient in every aspect knowledge related to their programs for limited time and energy. Whereas, we respect them and holds that they are well-informed.  
By and large, based on what I mentioned above, I personally believe that a person is supposed to get information from many different sources in order to be well-informed.

john_332UID: 2741978

个人意见

People seldom agree with each other in such a controversial issue as how to become a well-informed person. Some may insist that a well-known person should be specialized on (好像应该用in 吧)several certain subjects and have a deep research on them. However, in point of view, a person who takes step into many areas, as well as grasps a variety of information, could be called a well-informed person.

My reasons are listed below.
Initially, so called "well-informed" indicates that a person who knows almost any field of knowledge(a certain knowledge from every field), though they may be not(not be) proficient in some areas. If a person has a deep(indepth) research on a certain subject, he/she is usually regarded as a professor, rather than all-rounded person. For instance, my uncle is a successful engineer, and the buildings he designed are very attractive and unique. I admire him most(much) because he is a famous man(reputed expert) in his field, while he knows little (little ?几乎完全不懂?) about other subjects, such as biology, physical and so forth. One day, a fresh rainbow came out after a rainy day, at that moment my little sister asked my uncle:" Dad, could you tell me how the beautiful rainbow comes into being."(这句很地道) Suddenly, my uncle regret because he, a high-tech engineer, even (删掉前面的a hi-tech engineer，a high-tech engineer) could not answer his little girl's question(a question from a primar student). And(then) he saw a desperate expression(disappointing face in front of him) on his daughter’s face. As can be seen from the example, a professional person who lacks other aspects of information cannot be treated (qualified to be a well-informed person) as a well-informed person. , 例子很生动，语意连贯，层次清晰，呵呵 nice !

From another perspective, an all-rounded person should possess (这个词用得非常好)a large amount (这个短语也很native)of information in different areas. A distinguished (好词)TV host may become such a kind of person for the reason that he/she(前面的表达太过纠结，个人觉得就用become such person who就可以了) has to host a wide range of programs which come from different areas.(前面用了areas,略显重复，可以尝试territory/field)  It follows(takes for granted) that the hosts need to prepare a storehouse of information to fulfill themselves. Only in this way, could they finish their work without mistakes.(make their work faultless) As we all known, such (a) TV host cannot be proficient (用excel at避免重复) in every aspect knowledge related to their programs for limited time and energy. Whereas, we respect them and holds that they are well-informed.  
By and large, based on what I mentioned above, I personally believe that a person is supposed to get information from many different sources in order to be well-informed.

  文章整体感觉很流畅，例证丰富，表达准确地道，各种词汇和短语搭配丰富。题目确实有点confusion,不太好理解

yuxiao518UID: 2527170

连词用得读起来很流畅，向你学习哟！:) 不过好像你侧重的是well-informed和specialist的比较，我觉得第二段说S太长了。个人感觉O(∩_∩)O哈！

mpromanusUID: 2565872

Recently, there is an ongoing discussion online, with sharply rising volume, as? (Shouldn't you use something like 'which is about'? If you remove the part about 'with...volumn', and read the whole sentence again, does 'there is an discussion online as 'xxx'' sound natural?) " is it right or wrong that teachers show their political or social views known in class" (Again, I doubt the validity of this question in the first place. The language in the question is not even correct. It should be either '..show their..views' or '...make their...views known in class'.). In my point of view, the basic responsibility of a teacher is to modulate his/her students' personalities and make them acquire knowledge (This actually means 'force them to acquire knowledge'..I'd suggest something softer such as 'help them acquire knowledge'.). So I totally assert that teachers should not demonstrate their own sense of value ('political or social views' don't necessarily mean 'values'. For example, to say that President Obama's new policies are not efficient is not really expressing much of a 'value', but it's a political 'view'.) to students.

Initially, as a teacher, he/she is bound to give some directions and advices when students are confused. (Who? Both 'as a teacher' and 'he/she' needs a solid noun as their target.) For instance, when a senior student got through the college entrance examination, he/she may hesitate about which major to choose and which university to apply for. Then his/her teacher, whose has a wide range of? knowledge of such education information and who realize (You don't 'realize' a hobby or proficiency. You simply 'know' them, or 'realize' 'what they are'.) the student's hobbies and proficiencies, may contribute a lot, because students usually trust their teachers. While if a teacher has a negative impression on certain majors according to some social reasons, and he considers more about his own feelings than the student's interests when helping his students to choose alter ('alter' means to change.) major. How serious will the consequence will be? (Be cautious. Don't get too used to writing clauses, so much so that you can't write a real question correctly.) The result is that the student may regret to about asking for his teacher's advice and now is thinking about changing main subject (This is not the same as 'major'. Stick to the fixed vocabulary.). What a pity! (You failed to consider the keyword 'in the classroom' in the question, provided the question is as what you've given here. 'in the classroom' is a figurative way to say 'while teaching'. Therefore the question is saying that teachers should not show personal political/social opinions while they're teaching classes. Your example, however, seems to likely happen in a more personal setting, and it might not always be in the 'teaching' context, therefore not entirely relevant.)

From another perspective, each man has the right to pursue his own sense of value ('Value', in the sense of 价值观，is generally not 'pursued', but 'cultivated' or 'acquired'.), whether in the aspect of politics or social studies. Students, unlike adults, seldom formulate their views about matters completely. And they need opportunities to possess a sense of value belonged to of their own. They can finish the process through learning from books and experiences, and/or communicating with others. Even though the whole process of growing is filled with failures and hardness, everyone has to go through it. Sometimes, students are too young to tell the difference between right and wrong, and at the moment they may follow their teachers' and parents' behaviors. Unfortunately, the viewpoints of many teachers are so extreme and have no balance. Therefore, if teachers show their own political or social views to the class, it may adversely affect students' minds and behaviors. Worse still, teachers' totally listeners? may be misled in their life road?. (You need more solid examples, but this is a better argument because it is more relevant to the 'teaching' context I spoke about in the previous paragraph.)

By and large (This means 'in general', so it's not an entirely absolute expression, while 'assert' is a very absolute word. They don't quite go well together.), based on those points mentioned above, I assert that a perfect (Both the question and this essay never mentioned anything about being 'perfect' teachers.) teacher never shows their his/her individual points about politics and sociality to the class. Only in this way, can students lead a healthy development.

总结：

语法和遣词造句的问题不是很大，基本不影响理解，但请注意一下有些不是很准确的使用和一些看起来貌似中式翻译的语汇。。还有就是不要写分句写得太多而在写简单句的时候也用分句语法。。

逻辑上来说就是在第一个分论点提到的，题目里的in the classroom指的是在教学中的意思，所以你的论证也应该随着强调教学中老师怎样。

小心littleheartUID: 2726034

2.27 Movies and televisions should always show audience, good people are being rewarded and bad people are being punished.

Recently, there is an ongoing discussion online, with sharply rising volume, whether television and movie should always show us that good people have a better ending than bad people. Some may insist that television and movie should broadcast some programs which could well reflect our virtually life, that is to say, good people are not usually with a better end and vice versa. However, I hold the belief that TV and movie, as the two main media in our society, should demonstrate us good people indeed are often being rewarded, as well as bad people are being punished.

Initially, as is widely known, television and movie play a significant role in our life since the programs really affect our minds, sense of value and behavior. What we see on TV or from movie would have a great effect on our future life. If television program tells us that a good person will possess a perfect ending, we will try our best to be a good person for the reason that everyone is willing to live a better life and lead to a good ending. Take my little brother as an example; a few days ago he was absorb in watching the movie "spiderman", which demonstrates justice. In the movie, the main character called spiderman is a considerate superman who always helps others in terms of emergence. Meanwhile he is usually attacked by several monsters and sometimes seems going to die, while finally the spiderman could overcome the difficulties and appreciated by the residents. It follows that my little brother is a fan of the spiderman, even he told me that he desired to become the spiderman because he is a so kind-hearted person who utimately have a perfect ending. Luckily, my little boy also builds his goal after watching the movie, as what he said, he would do things like the spiderman in the future. As can be seen from the example, it is these positive programs that impel people to become a good people and try to help others. Only in this way, can our society become more humorous.  
From another perspective, some critics may argue that such programs which show audience good people have a good ending may mislead people for there are usually some contradicted facts. For instance, some bad persons are not limited by the law, and continuously dangerous to our life. Whereas, I personally suppose that these phenomena cannot avoidable in any nations. If media is interested in showing the bad aspects in society, the situation may become worse. Also, what we should do is to ask the media to show a desirable perfect life where we all make an effort to be good people.
By and large, based on what I mentioned above, television and movie should show us that good people are being rewarded and bad people are being published according to their special function.

duck2010UID: 2757376

Recently, there is an ongoing discussion online, with sharply rising volume, （加个as）whether television and movie should always show us that good people have a better ending than bad people. Some may（may表示“可以”，might表示“可能”，推测语气。这里建议用might） insist that television and movie should broadcast some programs which could well reflect our virtually life, that is to say, good people are not usually with a better end and vice versa. However, I hold the belief that TV and movie, as the two main media in our society, should demonstrate us good people indeed are often being rewarded, as well as bad people are being punished.



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Initially, as （it is，或者as widely known） is widely known, television and movie play a significant role in our life since the programs really affect our minds, sense of value and behavior. What we see on TV or from movie would have a great effect on our future life. If television program tells us that a good person will possess a perfect ending, we will（would，虚拟语气） try our best to be a good person for the reason that everyone is willing to live a better life and lead to a good ending. Take my little brother as an example; a few days ago he was absorb（absorbed） in watching the movie "spiderman", which demonstrates justice. In the movie, the main character called spiderman is a considerate superman who always helps others in terms of emergence. Meanwhile he is usually attacked by several monsters and sometimes seems going to die, while finally the spiderman could overcome the difficulties and appreciated by the residents. It follows that my little brother is a fan of the spiderman, even he told me that he desired to become the spiderman because he is a so kind-hearted person who utimately have a perfect ending. Luckily, my little boy also builds his goal after watching the movie, as what he said, he would do things like the spiderman in the future. As can be seen from the example, it is these positive programs that impel people to become a good people and try to help others. Only in this way（only in this way？是否太武断了）, can our society become more humorous.  



From another perspective, some critics may argue that such programs which show audience good people have a good ending may mislead people for there are usually some contradicted facts. For instance, some bad persons are not limited by the law, and continuously dangerous to our life. Whereas, I personally suppose that these phenomena cannot avoidable in any nations. If media is interested in showing the bad aspects in society, the situation may become worse（even worse）. Also, what we should do is to ask the media to show a desirable perfect life where we all make an effort to be good people.



By and large, based on what I mentioned above, television and movie should show us that good people are being rewarded and bad people are being published according to their special function.（还可以多补充一句话，使得结尾不那么突兀）


我觉得你的语言已经有了很大的进步，比起两个多星期前。长短搭配很好，从句也很恰当到位，词汇更加丰富。
就论述部分来说，我没有什么建议。我一直认为托福作文测试的是语言，论述方面只要能自圆其说就行。你的论述也很不错了。
仍然是那一条，作为一个老外，我相信他能够容忍一个中国人对于英语的语言运用不尽完美，不会过分苛求。
你只需注意一些细节，不断积累改进，没有问题。
加油拉！我很看好你的作文，你的目标完全可以定在28+的。

小心littleheartUID: 2726034

57# duck2010 额~~真的啊~我一直挺怕作文的呢~~谢谢鼓励哈~~~~O(∩_∩)O~

小心littleheartUID: 2726034

3.1
Physic exercise is more important to older people than younger people.

Recently, there is an ongoing discussion online, with sharply rising volume, which is about whether physical exercise is more important to older people than younger people. Some people may agree with statement owing to that young people are much stronger and don't need to waste time on exercising. However, I hold the belief that physical exercise is crucial to everyone, whether among the young or the old.
Initially, as a young woman, I treat regular exercise as a vital part in my life because from which I can benefit a lot. I am a university student, busying with all kinds of affairs, such as my professional lessons, the matter related to the student union and the plan for future career. It follows that it takes me most time to deal with various affairs, resulting in that I cannot keep fit compared with before. Even worse, seldom can I concentrate on my courses, which dampens my disposition. Then one of my friends suggested to me:" Oh, Jane, look at yourself, you need to exercise and keep healthy, that is you." Thanks to her advice, she reminded of the importance of exercise. Therefore, I began to run on every morning, as well as swimming at afternoon in summer. After a few days, I felt better and be interested in reading, writing and communicating with my roommates. As can be seen from the example, as for the young, physical exercise could contribute to release heavy burden, as well as make people enjoy themselves. Sometimes, regular exercise could improve the efficiency of work.  
Furthermore, old people also require physical exercise to keep healthy. As is known to all, as people gets older, their health condition would become worsen. As a result, what they need to do is exercise themselves regularly. Take my grandpa as an example, a few years ago, a serious disease hit him, making him live in hospital for several months. Before he left the hospital, the doctor told him that he should do more exercise to prevent more illness. Then my grandpa did as what the doctor said, and it proves that exercise really give my grandpa a healthy body and a good mood. Meanwhile, in the process of doing exercise, he made many friends who have similar interests with him and they usually chat with each other. I feel happy about my grandpa because he will no longer feel lonely with some many new friends. In addition, my mother would not be worried about his health. Just imagine that if an old man is ill, his son has to leave his work and care about him. On the one hand, his son's job will be adversely affected and delayed. On the other hand, the family has to pay the heavy fee of cure. In all, doing physical exercise is the cheapest way to live a happy life in older age.

By and large, based on what I mentioned above, I personally support that doing physical should all place a high value on it.

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Movies and television have more positive effects than negative effects on the way the young people behave, Do you agree or disagree with the following statement

Recently, there is an ongoing discussion online, with sharply rising volume, which is about whether televisions and movies have more positive effects than negative effects on young people or not. Some may insist that televisions and movies play a crucial role in our life for the reason that we feel relaxed, as well as get a variety of information from them. However, I hold the belief that televisions and movies will bring young people more drawbacks. And my reasons are listed below.
Initially, we would waste a lot of time while watching television or seeing a movie. Among people of all ages, the young are the most busy group because they are exposed to all kinds of affair, such as school work or job assignments. Accordingly, if they take the precious time to watch television, their work or study might be delayed, as well as the productivity would be lowered. Take one of my friends for example, Jane is my high-school classmate and she studied so hard that she had an excellent mark record before senior 3. Whereas, in the year of senior3, when other classmates were busy with all kinds of exams and preparing for the college entrance examination, Jane was addicted to the soap opera and she even became a watch-potato after school. More badly, she often talked with us about the scene of the opera soap and meanwhile has no interest in learning subjects. Unfortunately, she failed at the college entrance examination. What a pity! As can be seen from the example, it is the tedious television programs that adversely affect Jane's study and even future. I argue that Jane will regret about her former behavior at the moment.
From another perspective, on the one hand, watching television or seeing a movie would greatly reduce the opportunity for the young to communicate with others. Just imagine that if a young man usually sits in the sofa and stars at the TV, he would have no desire for chatting with his families. Thus it would cause a bad effect on the relationship between family members. On the other hand, it would also go against the young's health when touching such media. A person will become much lazier when he/she is attracted by a movie or television program. As for me, a few months ago, after went through the term exam I really want to relax myself by watching movies day and night. As a result, I was in a bad health condition and even got a cough a few days later. Luckily, one of friends gave me some advice, and she told me that I need more exercise to keep fit. Therefore, I began to swimming afternoon and now I feel better. Regarding this issue, televisions and movies indeed do harm to the young' health, whether among mental health or physical health.

By and large, based on what I mentioned above, due to lack of the self-control, televisions and movies have more negative effects on the young.