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1.28 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important for families to regularly eat their meals together.

As social competitions are becoming more and more fierce, most people prefer devoting as much energy as possible into their work to having meals regularly with their families, which gradually results in the loss of the concept of family for individuals. As far as I am concerned, regularly having meals with families plays an important role in the family life nowadays.

Firstly, having meals regularly with families helps to maintain the concept of family for individuals. As everyone knows, family is the place where individuals originate from. We cannot deny the fact that parents firstly set up a family and then give birth to us. What's more, family is the foundation for everyone, which means family will offer whatever you need including the selfless care from families and the shelter after you get hurt outside. And regularly having meals with families is one of the most important way to root the sense of family deeply into the heart of everyone.

Secondly, regular family meals contribute to tightening the relationship of family members. Nowadays people struggle for their lives day and night and heavy burden of the life or business reduces their communication with their families. It is more and more common that families who should be tied tightly now suffer from isolation, which is not a good trend for the maintenance of the family. On the contrary, this problem could be solved if people regularly have meals with the families, because during the meals families can talk with others what they are up to and strengthen the communication among them.

The most important thing is that through regular meals with the families we can offer more of our care to the ages in the family and try our best to reduce their sense of loneliness. Old people are especially easy to feel lonely because their children are not always with them. Therefore when we have been away from home for a long time, just think about our parents or grandparents. They selflessly bring us up and we cannot left them loneliness as the "reward" for their fosterage. Thus, regularly go home and have meals with parents and grandparents, let them feel your warm care.

To sum up, although now we have various reasons not to have meals with families regularly, it is still our obligation to maintain our family in this way. And people should not ignore the importance of regular meals with families.

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RE: eddie的独立作文 1.28

As social competitions are becoming more and more fierce(因为fierce 是单音节. ... fiercer and fiercer ...
), most people prefer devoting as much energy as possible into their work to having meals regularly with their families(devote a to b是说贡献A去做B,这里你正好用反了), which gradually results in the loss of the concept of family for individuals. As far as I am concerned, regularly having meals with families plays an important role in the family life nowadays.
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Firstly, having meals regularly with families helps to maintain the concept of family for individuals. As everyone knows, family is the place where individuals originate from. We cannot deny the fact that parents firstly set up a family and then give birth to us. What's more, family is the foundation for everyone, which means family will offer whatever you need including the selfless care from families and the shelter after you get hurt outside. And regularly having meals with families is one of the most important way(one of ,ways) to root the sense of family deeply into the heart of everyone.

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Secondly, regular family meals contribute to tightening the relationship of family members. Nowadays people struggle for their lives day and night and heavy burden of the life or business reduces their communication with their families. It is more and more common that families who should be tied tightly now suffer from isolation, which is not a good trend for the maintenance of the family. On the contrary, this problem could be solved if people regularly have meals with the families, because during the meals families can talk with others what they are up to and strengthen the communication among them.



most important thing is that through regular meals with the families we can offer more of our care to the ages in the family and try our best to reduce their sense of loneliness. Old people are especially easy to feel lonely because their children are not always with them. Therefore when we have been away from home for a long time, just think about our parents or grandparents. They selflessly bring us up and we cannot left them loneliness as the "reward" for their fosterage(比喻真好). Thus, regularly go home and have meals with parents and grandparents, let them feel your warm care.

To sum up, although now we have various reasons not to have meals with families regularly, it is still our obligation to maintain our family in this way. And people should not ignore the importance of regular meals with families.

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第二次学习你的作文了,比喻总是用的如此之妙!
美中不足的就是内容上,第一点和第二点意思上差不多,分开稍显生硬!
这简直是个不是问题的问题!
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发表于 2010-1-29 16:23:47 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 lxg198607 于 2010-1-29 16:28 编辑

1.28 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important for families to regularly eat their meals together.

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As social competitions are becoming more and more fierce, most people prefer devoting as much energy as possible into their work to having meals regularly with their families,(good ,写得不错) which gradually results in the loss of the concept (不太明白,改成bond)of family for individuals. As far as I am concerned, regularly having meals with families plays an important role in the family life nowadays.! |  x3 G7 b0 y! M! v  E% r
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Firstly, having meals regularly with families helps to maintain the concept of family for individuals. As everyone knows, family is the place where individuals originate from. We cannot deny the fact that parents firstly set up a family and then give birth to us. What's more, family is the foundation(感觉这次用的不太恰当,用harbour不知怎样) for everyone, which means family will offer whatever you need including the selfless care from families and the shelter after you get hurt outside. And regularly having meals with families is one of the most important way to root the sense of family deeply into the heart of everyone.1 }0 S4 a; }: A5 B3 |  C: G+ D! Y

Secondly, regular family meals contribute to tightening the relationship of family members. Nowadays people struggle for their lives day and night and heavy burden of the life or business reduces their communication with their families. It is more and more common that families who should be tied tightly now suffer from isolation, which is not a good trend for the maintenance of the family. On the contrary, this problem could be solved if people regularly have meals with the families, because during the meals families can talk with (each)others what they are up to and strengthen the communication among them.

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The most important thing is that through regular meals with the families we can offer more of our (去掉)care to the ages in the family and try our best to reduce their sense of loneliness. Old people are especially easy to feel lonely because their children are not always with them. Therefore when we have been away from home for a long time, just think about our parents or grandparents. They selflessly bring us up and we cannot left them loneliness as the "reward" for their fosterage. Thus, regularly go home and have meals with parents and grandparents, let them feel your warm care.

To sum up, although now we have various reasons not to have meals with families regularly, it is still our obligation to maintain our family in this way. And people should not ignore the importance of regular meals with families.

suggestion: 写得很不错, 结构合理,条理清楚,长短句结合很好, 基本找不出语法错误。。
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