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TOPIC: ISSUE43 - "To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards."
WORDS: 492
TIME: 00:50:13
DATE: 2010/1/30 21:54:27

Different from the faultless leader, effective leaders commonly appraised for their super-normal efficiency and intelligence to smooth the operation of the community and achieve the final goals or their top-notch ability to settle down tough tasks which blockade their way towards success. Therefore, I take the assertion that high standard ethic and morality may be an important character for an effective leader but not a must.

Undeniable, high level of ethic and morality is not only the precondition for a leader to be elected but also the guarantee for a concientious term of office after the official steps on the stage. In a domestic society, every candidate is required to enjoy a perfect performance both before the camera and off the office, otherwise, he may not gain a piece of ballot. It is hard to imagine a candidate suffering from notorious reputation and low moral standard is capable to meet its kind of rigorous demand. Furthermore, the high level of ethics should also be maintained during his official time. Thanks to the advantage of election system, any person getting on stage could be recalled through another voting if he cannot meet people' need and suffers from some scandal which could not be tolerated. Nixon is a good example, the Watergate Scandal interrupted his presidency permanently.


However, the importance of high standard of ethic and morality could not come to a conclusion that every leader should maintain the highest level in his official time to show his competentness and efficiency. To be a leader, especially a effective one, it is inevitable to break some ethical lines to reach the final destination which is beneficial to the community. In the realm of business, to maximum the profit of company, the manager may apply some anti-ethical but legal measure; in the realm of politics, to minimum the harm brought by the enemy, the president may arrange some international defense method which seems inhumane to opponent’s people, yet how can you classify these leaders into the inefficient category? They definitely contributes a lot to the prosperity of our community.

Therefore, the ideal leader for any groups or communities is the combination which possesses the adorable ethics and morality and at same time, be flexible enough to bring benefit to the members. Just as a old proverb says,” it is impossible to meet a person excellent in every aspect”, so are our leaders. The good morality gives leader the guideline to make any decision that fulfill its members’ demand, the flexible way to handle affairs permits the rewarding target’ completion. It is totally unfeasible to require any end’s perfection, otherwise the absolute balance would be interrupted and the effective leader may not exist any more.

In sum, high standard of ethics and morality would be essential to every leader who wants to be effective or appraisable. And equally important respect effective leader should possessed is their ability and flexibility, because they are the foundation to be success.

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Different from（用different形容词这样开头，感觉不太对，直接用unlike就好了吧） the faultless leader, effective leaders （are) commonly appraised for their super-normal efficiency and intelligence to smooth the operation of the community and（建议加个to。毕竟本句有好几个and或者or，加上to之后比较能够分辨结构） achieve the final goals or their top-notch ability to settle down tough tasks which blockade their way towards success.（此句的问题是：就不能来个标点么！一连串的And和or让人有种不好把握结构的感觉。可以试着用逗号把各个成分分开，当然是要在语法大体不出格的情况下，比如后半句的or就可以独立出来：xxx, or, xxx。这样子看上去起码轻松一点） Therefore, I take the assertion that high standard ethic and morality may be an important character for an effective leader but not a must. 

Undeniable, high level of ethic and morality is not only the precondition for a leader to be elected but also the guarantee for a concientious（conscientious） term of office after the official steps on the stage. In a domestic society, every candidate is required to enjoy a perfect performance both before the camera and off the office, otherwise, he may not gain a piece of ballot. It is hard to imagine a candidate suffering from notorious reputation and low moral standard is capable to meet its kind of（这个kind of何意？在正式文体中，kind请取原意，即种类。如果想表示程度，好比kinda那种感觉，不要用kind。如果这里取的是种类的意思，那么我不太理解为啥要塞个‘种类’进去） rigorous demand. Furthermore, the high level of ethics should also be maintained during his official time. Thanks to the advantage of election system, any person getting on stage could be recalled（召回？按意思应该是被驱逐吧） through another voting if he cannot meet people' need and suffers（suffer） from some scandals which could not be tolerated. Nixon is a good example, the Watergate Scandal interrupted his presidency permanently. （道德对于政客保持政治地位的重要性提到了，但是貌似没有提到道德如何保证公仆辛勤工作。）

However, the importance of high standard of ethic and morality could not come to a conclusion that every leader should maintain the highest level in his official time to show his competentness and efficiency. To be a leader, especially a effective one, it is inevitable to break some ethical lines to reach the final destination which is beneficial to the community. In the realm of business, to maximum the profit of company, the manager may apply some anti-ethical（个人建议用immoral就好了，或者不要用ethical，因为此词更强调伦理，与道德略有差异） but legal measure; in the realm of politics, to minimum the harm brought by the enemy, the president may arrange some international defense method which seems inhumane to opponent’s people, yet how can you classify these leaders into the inefficient category? They definitely contributes a lot to the prosperity of our community. （实施对他人不人性的措施，是什么？有点模糊。一般而言如果仅仅是为了自卫，是不至于到伤害人道主义的程度的。如果真的伤害了，而又不是出于必要考虑，那么我确实会怀疑此举是否正当。）

Therefore, the ideal leader for any groups or communities is the combination which possesses the adorable ethics and morality and at same time, be flexible enough to bring benefit to the members. Just as a old proverb says,” it is impossible to meet a person excellent in every aspect”, so are our leaders.（倒装有问题。如果倒回来，是our leaders are impossible to meet a person XXX） The good morality gives leader the guideline to make any decision that fulfill its members’ demand, the flexible way to handle affairs permits the rewarding target’s completion. It is totally unfeasible to require any end’s perfection, otherwise the absolute balance would be interrupted and the effective leader may not exist any more. 

In sum, high standard of ethics and morality would be essential to every leader who wants to be effective or appraisable（意为可估价的。此处不宜）. And equally important respect effective leader should possessed（不能理解这部分的语法构成= =） is their ability and flexibility, because they are the foundation to be success.
观点出来了。但是觉得发展得不太够，有些地方略浮了。是讲理由什么的时候要尽量做到最有说服力，不止是停留在能够说明点问题。

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我的~^ ^

ISSUE50: “In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach.”

初稿50分钟543字， 这个自己修改过一遍，600字。感觉这个题目太容易落入俗套，不知如何是好……

提纲：
1、基础学科老师的职业经验用处不大。
2、实践学科老师的工作经验有用。
3、也不能说所有老师都应该去就职，要考虑实际情况与alternative。

Of various subjects taught in universities and collages, the purpose of teaching differ: while some major emphasize the importance of practice, others value theoretical researches more. Without considering the different nature between subjects and actual situation of teachers, this assertion turns to be partial.

For subjects aimed at imparting theoretical knowledges such as mathematics, physics and chemistry, professional experience of teachers may prove futile. Though essential for most majors to further the practical application, those subjects themselves concentrate on discipline, formula, or hypothesis which, in most cases, can be applied only on paper or in laboratory but not pragmatic positions in companies or factories. In seeking for professionals, teachers of fundamental subjects may deviate from their teaching courses. A mathematics professor, for example, may take a job as actuary. While he may gain more actuarial experience, he can hardly use it when helping students learning calculous. Thus professional experiences, practical as it is, contribute less to the education of a highly abstract and theoretical major. If, on the other hand, the professor tell those experiences when teaching mathematics major students, it may backfire. The anecdotes may be too attractive that students may even focus more on those interesting story than in their textbook study: they may remember the funny tips on actuary yet forget the statistic theory or matrix vector. If that happen, it would be regretful. After all, it is the fundamental theory, not practical experience, that the students should center. 

For subjects whose purposes are training students’ practical skills and adapting them to future careers, such as engineering, law, and economy, working experiences of teachers hold merits. For one thing, the experiences told by teachers help students to associate the theory with practise. While a routine Material Processing course can be saturated with dry book learnings, a professor who know the work in a copper manufacture factory can well take advantage of his experiencs, describing how working shops look like, and explain details in actual forging procedures. This helps students to visualize the theory and deepen their understanding. For another, teachers in working can bring the latest information in the field to students. This is especially true with dynamic areas such as economy. A fiance professor who works out in a bank touches much up-to-date imformation, on which he can talk in classroom. The students, then, acquire not only vivid examples but also real time situation of economy. 

Given the benefits, can we assert that all faculty of applied majors should take extra professions? Probably not. On the one hand, out-campus careers may lead to difficulty to balance the teaching and working. People working in companies or factories are required to obey, by and large, a strict timetable and to pay devotion. This calls up a question: can teachers spare enough time and energy for teaching? After all, students may want a teacher who occasionally works outside, but not a career man who occasionally teaches. On the other hand, professional life is not the only way to gain practical experience; academic researches can do as well. Many professors in engineering, for example, devoted themselves into research programs assigned by companies and factories. Though not employed, they get in touch with actual processing or management procedures, which offers no less professional imformation while limits less flexibility of teachers. 

Holding the goodwill of enhancing the education quality, universities and collages may well ponder the nature of different subjects before rushing to assertion. Taking a profession outside campus is not a panacea. Rather, a truly effective way should take the reality of teachers as well as needs of students into consideration. 

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3# pluka
ISSUE50: “In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach.”
初稿50分钟543字， 这个自己修改过一遍，600字。感觉这个题目太容易落入俗套，不知如何是好……

提纲：
1、基础学科老师的职业经验用处不大。
2、实践学科老师的工作经验有用。
3、也不能说所有老师都应该去就职，要考虑实际情况与alternative。

Of various subjects taught in universities and collages, the purposes of teaching differ: while some major emphasize the importance of practice, others value theoretical researches more. Without considering the different nature between subjects and actual situation of teachers, this assertion turns to be partial.（似乎没有很明确的观点出来，只是分析了一下。而且，我认为这种貌似与Argument有些关联的开头总结要不得）

For subjects aimed at imparting theoretical knowledges（应该是没有复数的） such as mathematics, physics and chemistry, professional experience(看了后面才知道你是想说专业实践方面的经验，这个词容易让人费解的的，因为professional 这个词主要还是在指学术领域的东西，某一方面的特殊知识或能力，professional experience 给我的第一印象就是实验经验) of teachers may prove（be proved） futile. Though essential for most majors to further the practical application, those subjects themselves concentrate on discipline, formula, or hypothesis which, in most cases, can be applied only on paper or in laboratory but not pragmatic positions in companies or factories. In seeking for professionals, teachers of fundamental subjects may deviate from their teaching courses. A mathematics professor, for example, may take a job as actuary. While he may gain more actuarial experience, he can hardly use it when helping students learning calculous（calculus）. Thus professional experiences, practical as it is, contribute less to the education of a highly abstract and theoretical major. If, on the other hand, the professor tell those experiences when teaching mathematics major students, it may backfire. The anecdotes may be too attractive that students may even focus more on those interesting story than in their textbook study: they may remember the funny tips on actuary yet forget the statistic theory or matrix vector. If that happen, it would be regretful. After all, it is the fundamental theory, not practical experience, that the students should center. （此段的后半部分是驳斥你这段的中心论点的，如果想描述academic theory还是重要的话，应该另起一段，不然让人实在弄不清你到底要表达什么）

For subjects whose purposes are training students’ practical skills and adapting them to future careers, such as engineering, law, and economy, working experiences of teachers hold merits. For one thing, the experiences told by teachers help students to associate the theory with practise. While a routine Material Processing course can be saturated with dry book learnings, a professor who know the work in a copper manufacture factory can well take advantage of his experiencs, describing how working shops look like, and explain details in actual forging procedures. This helps students to visualize the theory and deepen their understanding. For another, teachers in working can bring the latest information in the field to students. This is especially true with dynamic areas such as economy. A fiance（finance） professor who works out in a bank（这是想表达什么？） touches much up-to-date imformation, on which he can talk in classroom. The students, then, acquire not only vivid examples but also real time situation of economy.

Given the benefits, can we assert that all faculty of applied majors should take extra professions? Probably not. On the one hand, out-campus careers may lead to difficulty to balance the teaching and working. People working in companies or factories are required to obey, by and large, a strict timetable and to pay devotion. This calls up（很诡异的用法，貌似没有看到过，可能是对的） a question: can teachers spare enough time and energy for teaching? After all, students may want a teacher who occasionally works outside, but not a career man who occasionally teaches. On the other hand, professional life is not the only way to gain practical experience; academic researches can do as well. Many professors in engineering, for example, devoted themselves into research programs assigned by companies and factories. Though not employed, they get in touch with actual processing or management procedures, which offers no less professional imformation while limits less flexibility（中式英语吧。。。呵呵） of teachers.

Holding the goodwill of enhancing the education quality, universities and collages may well ponder the nature of different subjects before rushing to assertion. Taking a profession outside campus is not a panacea. Rather, a truly effective way should take the reality of teachers as well as needs of students into consideration. （尾端似乎对文章没有什么概括，反而有些让人疑惑）

首先，文章不错，除了有些地方语句之间的联系不是特别强，会突然不明白这句话要表达的意思。
我认为此篇最大的问题是：你开头强调到了两者nature的问题，但是我在文章中只是看到了你不停的对theory和practice的权衡与比较，似乎其中之内涵似乎没有涉及。

评的不好，望见谅~

还有就是我文中的recall有罢免的意思，呵呵