Issue104 【clover】第一次小组作业 by CC

chaliaUID: 2589767

104 "It is primarily through formal education that a culture tries to perpetuate the ideas it favors and discredit the ideas it fears."
一种文化要想保留它认为好的思想，消除它认为不好的思想，主要是通过正规的教育。


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正规教育确实是一个好途径。
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随着社会的发展，出现了一些正规教育无法解决的问题。
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还有其他可以传导价值观的手段。媒体。

There is a growing public concern over the function and effectiveness of education. The speaker in the title statement advocates that to perpetuate favorable ideas and discredit adverse ones in today’s society, education is the primarily method. I partly agree with the speaker’s assertion, while I insist that there are many other methods which are equally important to achieve that goal.

First of all, I must admitted that formal education is a traditional method for a society to perpetuate the ideas it favors and discredit the ideas it fears which has been proved useful in the process of the social development. Formal education not only provides academic knowledge, but also gives information on moral and law which help students to set right outlook on life. For example, from the science class, students will learn the law of conservation of energy and hence understand that the perpetual motion machine is just a beautiful dream. Apart from science, from formal education, students also acknowledge that being honest, diligent and courtesy are right, while lying, laziness and rudeness are wrong. Apparently, the traditional ways of formal education successfully help the future generation of the society to form a clear figure of what it favors and what it fears.

Although I agree that formal education help to perpetuate the ideas the society favors and discredit the ideas it fears, I insist there are growing problems arising from the formal education system. In the first place, without practicing, it is meaningless for the young people to possess such ideal set of value the society prefer. In second place, young people today are more independent than their ancestors. They have their own opinion on what is right or wrong, and they would like to act according to their own judgment rather than what they have learned in school. The most common example is drinking alcohol. Obviously it is an illegal behavior which is used by most youngsters to prove their maturity. Therefore, when it comes to the youth who are more eager to taste the things not favored by the society in order to deciding themselves, the traditional formal education seems useless.

Furthermore, as the world develops increasingly rapid, there have existed many other methods to perpetuate the society’s favorable ideas and discredit the opposite ones. The new channels such as internet, TVs can also help to achieve the goal of maintain formal standards. While these channels provide the young people with more chances to touch about the outside world, they also help the society to promulgate their favorable criteria of right and wrong. Besides medium, informal education, related regulations and laws can also help the society to perpetuate its favorable ideas.

From what has been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that formal education is still an effective way to perpetuate social conventions, while we cannot overlook other equally important channels as medium and social regulations in preserving social favorable ideas.

mintshUID: 2460474

1# chalia

There is a growing public concern over the function and effectiveness of education. The speaker in the title statement advocates that to perpetuate favorable ideas and discredit adverse ones in today’s society, education is the primarily method. I partly agree with the speaker’s assertion, while I insist that there are many other methods which are equally important to achieve that goal. TS句

First of all, I must admitted that formal education is a traditional method for a society to perpetuate the ideas it favors and discredit the ideas it fears which has been proved useful in the process of the social development. Formal education not only provides academic knowledge, but also gives information on moral and law which help students to set right outlook on life. For example, from the science class, students will learn the law of conservation of energy and hence understand that the perpetual motion machine is just a beautiful dream. Apart from science, from formal education, students also acknowledge that being honest, diligent and courtesy are right, while lying, laziness and rudeness are wrong. Apparently, the traditional ways of formal education successfully help the future generation of the society to form a clear figure of what it favors and what it fears.感觉这个似乎没有本在段中得到足够的支持        

Although I agree that formal education help to perpetuate the ideas the society favors and discredit the ideas it fears, I insist there are growing problems arising from the formal education system. In the first place, without practicing, it is meaningless前面加个somehow来修饰可能会比较好 for the young people to possess such ideal set of value the society prefers. In second place, young people today are more independent than their ancestors. They have their own opinion on what is right or wrong, and they would like to act according to their own judgment rather than what they have learned in school. The most common example is drinking alcohol. Obviously it is an illegal behavior which is used by most youngsters to prove their maturity. Therefore, when it comes to the youth who are more eager to taste the things not favored by the society in order to deciding themselves这个不是太理解, the traditional formal education seems useless.这里似乎过于绝对了，只能说对于有些方面的教育是无效的。


Furthermore, as the world develops increasingly rapid rapid同样也是形容词，这里能不能改成for the sake of the increasing rapid world development, there have existed many other methods to perpetuate the society’s favorable ideas and discredit the opposite ones. The new channels such as internet, TVs can also help to achieve the goal of maintaining formal standards. While these channels provide the young people with more chances to touch about the outside world, they also help the society to promulgate their favorable criteria of right and wrong.最好详细举例说明媒体是怎么样具体有利于对于文化所认同理念的宣传
Besides medium, informal education, related regulations and laws can also help the society to perpetuate its favorable ideas.
From what has been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that formal education is still an effective way to perpetuate social conventions, while we cannot overlook other equally important channels as medium and social regulations in preserving social favorable ideas. 在结论中可以再谈谈formal education在某些方面的无效性进而更有力地论证其他方式存在的必要性和重要性

全文的构思不错； 先让步，然后反面，进而正面论述其他方式所起到的作用，但是在论证展开中举例部分似乎显得有点单薄。
恩，还有小小的一点，就是topic中的词语最好restate再使用~~
加油咯~~CC

chaliaUID: 2589767

thanks to mintsh~~  一下为修改后版本.~

There is a growing public concern over the function and effectiveness of education. The speaker in the title statement advocates that to perpetuate favorable ideas and discredit adverse ones in today’s society, education is the primarily method. I partly agree with the speaker’s assertion, while I insist that there are many other methods which are equally important to achieve that goal.

First of all, I must admitted that formal education is a traditional method for a society to perpetuate the ideas it favors and discredit the ideas it fears which has been proved useful in the process of the social development. Formal education not only provides academic knowledge, but also gives information on moral and law which help students to set right outlook on life. For example, from the science class, students will learn the law of conservation of energy and hence understand that the perpetual motion machine is just a beautiful dream. Apart from science, from formal education, students also acknowledge that being honest, diligent and courtesy are right, while lying, laziness and rudeness are wrong. Apparently, the traditional ways of formal education successfully help the future generation of the society to form a clear figure of what it favors and what it fears.      

Although I agree that formal education help to perpetuate the ideas the society favors and discredit the ideas it fears, I insist there are growing problems arising from the formal education system. In the first place, without practicing, it is somehow meaningless for the young people to possess such ideal set of value the society prefers. In second place, young people today are more independent than their ancestors. They have their own opinion on what is right or wrong, and they would like to act according to their own judgment rather than what they have learned in school. The most common example is drinking alcohol. Obviously it is an illegal behavior which is used by most youngsters to prove their maturity. Therefore, when it comes to the youth who are more eager to taste the things not favored by the society in order to prove their independence, the traditional formal education seems useless.

Furthermore, for the sake of the increasing rapid world development, there have existed many other methods to perpetuate the society’s favorable ideas and discredit the opposite ones. The new channels such as internet, TVs can also help to achieve the goal of maintaining formal standards. While these channels provide the young people with more chances to touch about the outside world, they also help the society to promulgate their favorable criteria of right and wrong.The most common example is that the society use public advertisement to convey its main favorable spirits to the furtrue genertation. Besides medium, informal education, related regulations and laws can also help the society to perpetuate its favorable ideas.

From what has been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that formal education is still an effective way to perpetuate social conventions, while we cannot overlook other equally important channels as medium and social regulations in preserving social favorable ideas.

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