【clover】argument2 习作 by 黑竹

黑竹UID: 2753377

TOPIC: ARGUMENT2 - The following appeared in a letter sent by a committee of homeowners from the Deerhaven Acres to all homeowners in Deerhaven Acres.

"Seven years ago, homeowners in nearby Brookville community adopted a set of restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted. Since then, average property values have tripled in Brookville. In order to raise property values in Deerhaven Acres, we should adopt our own set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting."
WORDS: 394          TIME: 01:50:21          DATE: 2010-2-3 14:12:00


In the letter, the committee of homeowners form the Deerhaven Acres recommends that in order to raise the values of their property, they should adopt their own set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting. The committee support this recommendation with the fact that seven years ago, homeowners in nearby Brookwille community adopted a set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting; and since then, average property values have tripled in Brookwille. Well, I don't think this fact can be used for supporting the committee's recommendation.

The average property values in Brookwille have tripled in the past seven years, however, the restrictions on landscaping and housepainting can't be the  only reason for this. In fact, restrictions on landscaping and housepainting plays an unimportant part in determining property values. As we all know, the price of a certain property is determined by the demand and supply of that property. Holding others still, decreasing supply of the goods will cause an increasing price of the goods, and vice versa. Meanwhile, increasing demand of the goods will cause an increasing price of the goods, and vice versa. As a result, either decreasing supply or increasing demand of the property in Brookcille can give rise to the increasing price of the property in the past seven years.

There are a lot of factors affecting the demand and supply of a specific property, so it does with the property in Brookcille. Restrictions on the house's exterior appearance will probably affect the demand of the house in Brookcille, however, this factor is far more unimportant in affecting the demand of the house than other factors, such as the house's position, the interior design of the house and so on. A house with good position and well-designed interior will be more welcome in the market. So, the restrictions on house's exterior appearance can't increase the demand of the house in Brookcille significantly. What is more, the restrictions on house's exterior appearance has nothing to do with the supply, which is another important factor in determining the price of the property. So, I don't believe that the restriction on landscaping and housepainting can cause the increasing price of the property in Brookcille.

In summary, the fact concerning Brookville in the letter is not adequate to support the recommendation that restrictions on landscaping and housepainting can increase the price of the property in Deerhaven Acres.

JulymayUID: 2645085

TOPIC: ARGUMENT2 - The following appeared in a letter sent by a committee of homeowners from the Deerhaven Acres to all homeowners in Deerhaven Acres. "Seven years ago, homeowners in nearby Brookville community adopted a set of restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted. Since then, average property values have tripled in Brookville. In order to raise property values in Deerhaven Acres, we should adopt our own set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting." WORDS: 394          TIME: 01:50:21          DATE: 2010-2-3 14:12:00 In the letter, the committee of homeowners form the Deerhaven Acres recommends that in order to raise the values of their property, they should adopt their own set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting. The committee supports this recommendation with the fact that seven years ago, homeowners in nearby Brookwille community adopted a set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting; and since then, average property values have tripled in Brookwille. Well, I don't think this fact can be used for supporting the committee's recommendation. The average property values in Brookwille have tripled in the past seven years, however, the restrictions on landscaping and housepainting can't be the  only reason for this. In fact, restrictions on landscaping and housepainting plays an unimportant part in determining property values. As we all know, the price of a certain property is determined by the demand and supply of that property. Holding others still, decreasing supply of the goods will cause an increasing price of the goods, and vice versa. Meanwhile, increasing demand of the goods will cause an increasing price of the goods, and vice versa（反之亦然，学了个新词，呵呵）. 到此为止，分析都没有问题，提出了供求关系才是价格波动的关键，而非颜色。As a result, either decreasing supply or increasing demand of the property in Brookcille can give rise to the increasing price of the property in the past seven years.但以这句总结就有点打偏了。这一段意在驳斥作者认为花园和外墙配色是放假上涨的原因，而结尾句as a result 后面讲的是供求关系如何使房价上升。这样看来，是不是偏了呢？个人认为最好在后面添上“该文作者认为花园和外墙配色是房价上涨的原因是错误的。”类似这样的话。攻击就比较完整了~ There are a lot of factors affecting the demand and supply of a specific property, so it does with the property in Brookcille. Restrictions on the house's exterior appearance will probably affect the demand of the house in Brookcille, however, this factor is far more unimportant in affecting the demand of the house than other factors, such as the house's position, the interior design of the house and so on. A house with good position and well-designed interior will be more welcome in the market.（这句有些重复，建议删去~） So, the restrictions on house's exterior appearance can't increase the demand of the house in Brookcille significantly. What is more, the restrictions on house's exterior appearance has nothing to do with the supply, which is another important factor in determining the price of the property. So, I don't believe that the restriction on landscaping and housepainting can cause the increasing price of the property in Brookcille.（到此为止，我认为攻击的优点是先用供求关系来驳斥影响因素，然后再用其分别对供求关系的影响来驳斥下一个攻击点。） In summary, the fact concerning Brookville in the letter is not adequate to support the recommendation that restrictions on landscaping and housepainting can increase the price of the property in Deerhaven Acres.

总结一下：这篇Argument本身比较短，攻击点不太容易找，小黑写得很不错了~但是我希望能看到更加明确的攻击点。恩，就是能用概括的语言把作者的错误总结一下，这样可以起到强调的作用，同时也能显示思路的清晰~继续加油~

黑竹UID: 2753377

In the letter, the committee of homeowners form the Deerhaven Acres recommends that in order to raise the values of their property, they should adopt their own set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting. The committee supports this recommendation with the fact that seven years ago, homeowners in nearby Brookwille community adopted a set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting; and since then, average property values have tripled in Brookwille. Well, I don't think this fact can be used for supporting the committee's recommendation.

The average property values in Brookwille have tripled in the past seven years, however, the restrictions on landscaping and housepainting can't be the  only reason for this. In fact, restrictions on landscaping and housepainting plays an unimportant part in determining property values. As we all know, the price of a certain property is determined by the demand and supply of that property. Holding others still, decreasing supply of the goods will cause an increasing price of the goods, and vice versa. Meanwhile, increasing demand of the goods will cause an increasing price of the goods, and vice versa。As a result, either decreasing supply or increasing demand of the property in Brookcille can give rise to the increasing price of the property in the past seven years.

There are a lot of factors affecting the demand and supply of a specific property, so it does with the property in Brookcille. Restrictions on the house's exterior appearance will probably affect the demand of the house in Brookcille, however, this factor is far more unimportant in affecting the demand of the house than other factors, such as the house's position, the interior design of the house and so on. A house with good position and well-designed interior will be more welcome in the market. So, the restrictions on house's exterior appearance can't increase the demand of the house in Brookcille significantly. What is more, the restrictions on house's exterior appearance has nothing to do with the supply, which is another important factor in determining the price of the property. So, I don't believe that the restriction on landscaping and housepainting can cause the increasing price of the property in Brookcille.

In summary, the fact concerning Brookville in the letter is not adequate to support the recommendation that restrictions on landscaping and housepainting can increase the price of the property in Deerhaven Acres.

a08805436UID: 2725634

TOPIC: ARGUMENT2 - The following appeared in a letter sent by a committee of homeowners from the Deerhaven Acres to all homeowners in Deerhaven Acres.

"Seven years ago, homeowners in nearby Brookville community adopted a set of restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted. Since then, average property values have tripled in Brookville. In order to raise property values in Deerhaven Acres, we should adopt our own set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting."

In the letter, the committee of homeowners form（from） the Deerhaven Acres recommends that in order to raise the values of their property, they should adopt their own set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting. The committee supports this recommendation with the fact that seven years ago, homeowners in nearby Brookwille community adopted a set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting; and since then, average property values have tripled in Brookwille. Well（这个词貌似太口语化了）, I don't think this fact can be used for supporting the committee's recommendation.

The average property values in Brookwille have tripled in the past seven years, however, the restrictions on landscaping and housepainting can't be the  only reason for this. In fact, restrictions on landscaping and housepainting plays（名词单复数） an unimportant part in determining property values. As we all know, the price of a certain property is determined by the demand and supply of that property. Holding others still（这个词组我不认识）, decreasing supply of the goods will cause an increasing price of the goods, and vice versa. Meanwhile, increasing demand of the goods will cause an increasing price of the goods, and vice versa。As a result, either decreasing supply or increasing demand of the property in Brookcille can give rise to the increasing price of the property in the past seven years.
提出了供求关系才是价格波动的主要原因，好！

There are a lot of factors affecting the demand and supply of a specific property, so it does with the property in Brookcille. Restrictions on the house's exterior appearance will probably affect the demand of the house in Brookcille, however, this factor is far more unimportant in affecting the demand of the house than other factors, such as the house's position, the interior design of the house and so on. A house with good position and well-designed interior will be more welcome in the market. So, the restrictions on house's exterior appearance can't increase the demand of the house in Brookcille significantly. What is more, the restrictions on house's exterior appearance has nothing to do with the supply, which is another important factor in determining the price of the property. So, I don't believe that the restriction on landscaping and housepainting can cause the increasing price of the property in Brookcille.（这篇Argument本身攻击点不太容易找）

In summary, the fact concerning Brookville in the letter is not adequate to support the recommendation that restrictions on landscaping and housepainting can increase the price of the property in Deerhaven Acres.


1.这篇文章逻辑思路较明晰，建议楼主仔细参考范文，提高文章的攻击严密性。
2.口语化的词建议不要在文章里出现
3.Brookville
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