2.4 Technology 大作文请修改~~~~

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2.4 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology makes people’s lives simpler in turn to make people’s lives more complicated.
  As a famous slogan said in the advertisement that technology makes our life easier nowadays,I agree with the statement that technology makes our life simplier. More and more people gain benefit from rapidly develped technology.
  To begin with, it is indisputable that technology can help us complete our assignment more effeciently.Take internet for example.In the past, when we should finish a paper in the end of the semester, we'd to rush to library to do the research.In order to find the suitable reference books,we should exhaust more than several hours in finding the book catagories.Neverthless, it is the invention of internet that saves us a lot of time in searching material and resource.We needn't go to library but click the mouse to search by Google in the internet.We can attain the resource we required in several seconds instead of several days.Therefore,it is easy to find that technology can make our work more effecient.
  Furthermore, it is undoubtable that we would feel more flexiable with the help the new technology.Take private car for another instance.it is more flexiable for us to go anywhere by our private car.Also, with the invention of GPRS navigation system assembling in the private, we can easily find the the best routine to get our destination.we can drive our car to rural to have a picnic without fearing that we would miss direction when we back in the night.So, it is apparent that technology make our lives more flexiable.
  However, with the develping technology, we would also face some problems causing by the technology, such as enviroment pollution.As we know, with the wildly use disposal cup, the white waste rubbish are becoming an unignored problem in the society.In order to produec disposal cups, we should cut trees, thus causing global warming issue and environment detrimention.But we cultivate the awareness of our public to avoid using those harmful technologies.
  Juding from the evidence I mentioned above, I still agree with the opionion that technology can make our lives more simpler in the present than in the past.It is obvious that the virtues bringing by the technology preponderate the disadvantages. If we can harness the technology rational and avoild , I belive that our living standard would be elevated more dramatically in the future.

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2.4 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology makes people’s lives simpler in turn to make people’s lives more complicated.
  As a famous slogan said in the advertisement that technology makes our life easier nowadays, I agree with the statement that technology makes our life simpler. More and more people gain benefit from rapidly developed technology.& X4 z5 I; h3 D& C; p
  To begin with, it is indisputable that technology can help us complete our assignment more effeciently（efficiently）.Take internet for example. In the past, when we should (plan to更好些) finish a paper in（at） the end of the semester, we'd to(had to最好写开) rush to library to do the research. In order to find the suitable reference books,we should（have to） exhaust (spend，因为你后面用in了) more than several hours in finding （looking for）the book categories. Nevertheless, it is the invention of internet that saves us a lot of time in searching material and resource. We needn't go to library but (only) click the mouse to search by Google in the internet.We can attain the resource we required in several seconds instead of several days.Therefore,it is easy to find (it is no denying the fact that如何) that technology can make our work more effecient.6 a, D0 I' J/ W  x8 M+ f
  Furthermore, it is undoubtable that we would feel more flexiable with the help the new technology.Take private car for another instance.it is more flexiable（改成convenient吧） for us to go anywhere by our private car.Also, with the invention of GPRS navigation system assembling in the private, we can easily find the the best routine to get（arrive at） our destination.we can drive our car to rural to have a picnic without fearing that we would miss direction when we back in the night.So, it is apparent that technology make our lives more flexiable(可用cozy and easy).' E) }3 r' o4 k# ~2 N
  However, with the develping technology, we would also face some problems causing by the technology, such as enviroment pollution.As we know, with the wildly use disposal cup, the white waste rubbish are becoming an unignored problem in the society.In order to produec disposal cups, we should （are forced to） cut trees, thus causing global warming issue and environment detrimention.But we cultivate the awareness of our public to avoid using those harmful technologies.9 {7 E% J' t3 I
  Judging from the evidence I mentioned above, I still agree with the opinion that technology can make our lives more simpler in the present than in the past. It is obvious that the virtues bringing by the technology preponderate the disadvantages. If we can harness the technology rational and avoid, I believe that our living standard would be elevated more dramatically in the future.
读完你的文章始终不明白你要表达什么呢？到底是否支持题目观点呢？感觉你说了大量的技术可以使生活simpler，也说了一些其反面~最后直接来了个期盼式结尾~~~关于语法，句式没什么错误~但文章中有很多拼写错误，这个自己是可以改的~词汇有点单一，用了太多的为we should~~