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Argument237

The notion that the fastest way to stimulate Beauville's economic development and reduce unemployment is to provide tax incentives and other financial inducements which can encourage private companies to relocate in the city seems at first glance to be an obvious conclusion. After all, it is the intent of developing economics. However, the conclusion may mask other causes.

First of all, there is no sufficient information to show that the economy of Dillton has been improved, and the unemployment rate has been reduced. The speaker just said that two manufacturing companies moved to Dillton without anything else, such as the incomes, the costs, and whether the companies earned money or not. Meanwhile, the author just claimed 300 people were hired. Maybe the total 300 people were all from other cities rather local citizens. Hence, we cannot get the conclusion that Dillton's economy and unemployment were stimulated.

Secondly, perhaps low corporate tax rate and favorable rates on city utilities are not the reasons that the two companies moving to Dillton. There are other factors which can influence the companies' moving, for instance, the restrictions on pollution emissions. Maybe in the former cities where the two manufacturing companies located, there are laws which forbidden pollution exhausts. As we known, manufacturing companies would produce poison emissions which can cause serious damages to environment. Maybe in Dillton, there is little laws on pollution issues. Thus, we cannot draw a conclusion that the two companies came by for low tax and the favorable rates on city utilities.

Thirdly, even if the moving reasons of the two companies are just as the speaker said, there is still no evidence to indicate that all these strategies are suitable to Beauville City. Perhaps it is not a good choice for Beauville to develop manufacture. Maybe tourism is more suitable for Beauville because of its beautiful view. And as far as we know, that reducing tax rate will lead the income less which cannot stimulate economy. If Beauville reduces the tax rate, and the companies which move in the city have not earned money, then the economy in Beauville will set back.

Besides, maybe encouraging private companies to invest is not the fastest way to stimulate economy. There are many other faster methods to improve economy, for example, investing by state-owned companies which also play an important role in modern society. Perhaps this kind of companies can improve economy much faster because that they have stable resources, such as capital, materials.

Based on what have discussed, we find that the article does not provide enough information to support its opinion. To strengthen the argument, the author would have to provide evidence that tax rate reduction, relocation grants and favorable rates can stimulate Beauville's development of economy.

改link的A237 by yeshen

The adviser suggests that Beauville should reduce tax rate and provide other financial inducements to encourage private companies to relocate here due to the evidence about the economic policy of Dillton. However, I think the evidence the adviser gives fail(fails) to support the notion.

  First of all, the adviser only mention the number of decreased percent of Dillton's tax rate, but does not give any information about the tax rate of Beauville's. It is possible that Beauville's tax rate is lower that Dillton's, even after the Dillton had reduced its coporate tax rate. Then the tax rate will not be a factor to affect Beauville' economy（这句话和前面一句话好像没什么关系。前面一句说“有可能B市税率比D市的下降后还低”，后面一句话跳到了“税收就不是刺激B市的因素”。）. Thus, we could not conclude that Beauville should provide tax incentives to stimulate its economy without comparison of Dillton's and Beauville's tax rate.
作者只提到D市税率下降了，并没有说关于B市税率的情况。这一段攻击逻辑性不强。

  In addition, the adviser fails to prove that two manufacturing companies relocating to Dillton is due to the financial inducements. There are numerous factors affect companies' policy. For example, those two companies may discover that there are a lot of potential consumers in the Dillton, or Dillton has a convenient traffic, which Beauville does not have. Before the government makes decision, it should assure that the condition of Dillton is similar with Beauville's. Only on this premise, can the Beauville government consider whether it should imitate the financial policy of Dillton.
作者没有说明制造公司搬迁到D市是因为财政诱因。最后提出了解决措施，很好。但是不要说得太绝对，把only换成perhaps可能会更好。

  Beside, the adviser did not consider that if the Beauville's financial revenues are sufficient to support the financial inducements. The tax incentives and other financial inducements would reduce the financial revenues. But the adviser did not give any information about it. And if government does not have enough financial revenues, it will not be able to support other fundamental living condition of citizens, which is also very important. Thus government cannot decide to provide these financial inducements without sufficient financial revenues.
作者没有考虑B市的财政收入是否足够支撑那些财政措施。这一段有点重复，翻来倒去总是那几句话。

  Finally, even assuming that Beauville government could provide these financial inducements and these inducements would work. We also should consider if the financial policy would be very effective to relive the condition of unemployment of Beauville. The adviser did not mention ratio of 300 in all unemployment. If this 300 people are all employed before, and they just changed a job for better salaries. Or the number of unemployment is very high and more than 300, such as ten thousand. Then this policy does not have significant effect on number of unemployment but can only reduce revenues. Thus, we cannot assert that we can reduce unemployment through this economic policy.
必须考虑这些措施是否能使B市的失业回复。
  To sum up, the evidence the adviser gives that Dillton has an(a) significant effect through financial inducements, do not support his view. And the government should collect more information before make decisions.

总结：攻击点找到了，但是有些段落攻击的逻辑性不够强。

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by懒蚂蚁
（52分钟，617字，语句单调， 越写越像issue，）
13:46
The article argues that the fastest way for Beauville to simulate economic development and reduce unemployment is to provide tax incentives and other financial inducement as what Dillton done eighteen months ago. This argument relies on assumptions that those policies in Dillton have already attracted two manufacturing companies, and the two companies have already employed 300people, which reduces the unemployment rate of Dillton. However, these assumptions are logically unconvincing in several aspects.

To begin with,the assumption that those incentives have attracted companies to move to Dillton, decreased the unemployment rate and increased the economy of Dillton is incredible. Firstly, the argument hastily claims that it is those incentives that make the two companies come to Dillton while ignoring the other possible stimulations that can attract those companies too. Perhaps the two companies comes to Dillton because of its great climate, good basic construction and cheap labor price. Secondly, even though the two companies come to Dillton because of those incentives and have already employed 300 people, it is insufficient to support the argument those companies do a lot help to solve the problem of unemployment. Maybe those 300 people is just a tiny proportion of the total unemployed people. Or perhaps the 300 people just changed their work from other companies to those two. In short, it is unconvincing to assert that those incentives can reduce unemployment. Thirdly, it is also unjustified to use the situations of the 18 months to represent the further development of Dillton's economy. It is possible that some big companies would move out of Dillton in the future. So without those conditions that might affect the economy of Dillton being considered and eliminated, it is unconvincing to claim that the change of Dillton's economy is caused by the incentives.

In the second place, the author ignores to consider the differences between Dillton and Beauville, which might make those incentives unfit for Beauville even though they can stimulate the development of Dillton. On the on hand, perhaps Beauville has already used those incentives before Dillton, which makes those polices inappropriate for its further development. As a result, the better way for Beauville's further development is to find some new methods to attract investment. On the other hand, perhaps the conditions of Beauville do not allow it to put this kind of incentives into practice. Maybe the financial condition of Beauville is not as good as Dillton's, or perhaps the climate and basic constructions are not good enough to appeal investment. In a word, without realizing the conditions of Beauville, it is improper for Beauville to make the same incentives as Dillton. If Beauville insists on doing so, it might bring some adverse effects to the development of Beauville.

In the third place, even though those incentives can help Beauville develop its economy, there is no evidence to illustrate that those incentives are the best one. Perhaps there are some other course of action that can improve the development of Beauville's economy, whose effects are the same as, if not better than, those incentives. For example, Beauville can improve its educational level so that it can provide the knowledgeable employers which might appeal new companies to come to invest. Therefore without considering the other course of action, the conclusion that those incentives is the best way for Beauville is unwarranted.

To sum up, Beauville should not hastily make a decision based on those incredible assumptions. Before making a right decision, the real effects of those incentives to the economy of Dillton, the differences between the two cities and the other possible ways for Beauville's economic development must be considered. Only after all other facts that might influence the effects of those incentives being eliminated can we be convinced that they are suitable to Beauville.
14:38

修改yeshen
The notion that the fastest way to stimulate Beauville's economic development and reduce unemployment is to provide tax incentives and other financial inducements which can encourage private companies to relocate in the city seems at first glance to be an obvious conclusion. After all, it is the intent of developing economics. However, the conclusion may mask other causes.

First of all, there is no sufficient information to show that the economy of Dillton has been improved, and the unemployment rate has been reduced. The speaker just said that two manufacturing companies moved to Dillton without anything else, such as the incomes, the costs, and whether the companies earned money or not. Meanwhile, the author just claimed 300 people were hired. Maybe the total 300 people were all from other cities rather local citizens. Hence, we cannot get the conclusion that Dillton's economy and unemployment were stimulated.
说明D城市可能经济没有增长。从两个方面来说，很好。
Secondly, perhaps low corporate tax rate and favorable rates on city utilities are not the reasons that the two companies moving to Dillton. There are other factors which can influence the companies' moving, for instance, the restrictions on pollution emissions. Maybe in the former cities where the two manufacturing companies located, there are laws which forbidden pollution exhausts. As we known, manufacturing companies would produce poison emissions which can cause serious damages to environment. Maybe in Dillton, there is little laws on pollution issues. Thus, we cannot draw a conclusion that the two companies came by for low tax and the favorable rates on city utilities.
说明这两个公司可能因为其他原因来D城市。
Thirdly, even if the moving reasons of the two companies are just as the speaker said, there is still no evidence to indicate that all these strategies are suitable to Beauville City. Perhaps it is not a good choice for Beauville to develop manufacture. Maybe tourism is more suitable for Beauville because of its beautiful view. And as far as we know, that reducing tax rate will lead the income less which cannot stimulate economy. If Beauville reduces the tax rate, and the companies which move in the city have not earned money, then the economy in Beauville will set back.
Besides, maybe encouraging private companies to invest is not the fastest way to stimulate economy. There are many other faster methods to improve economy, for example, investing by state-owned companies which also play an important role in modern society. Perhaps this kind of companies can improve economy much faster because that they have stable resources, such as capital, materials.
可能不适用B地，也可能不是最好的办法。
Based on what have been discussed, we find that the article does not provide enough information to support its opinion. To strengthen the argument, the author would have to provide evidence that tax rate reduction, relocation grants and favorable rates can stimulate Beauville's development of economy.

文章很顺畅，攻击点也清楚。论证也比较有力，比我的好多了。学习了。

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In the third place, even though those incentives can help Beauville develop its economy, there is no evidence to illustrate that those incentives are the best one. Perhaps there are some other course of action that can improve the development of Beauville's economy, whose effects are the same as, if not better than, those incentives. For example, Beauville can improve its educational level so that it can provide the knowledgeable employers which might appeal new companies to come to invest. Therefore without considering the other course of action, the conclusion that those incentives is the best way for Beauville is unwarranted.
不能说明这些方法是最好的。（我个人感觉这么写不太好）


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