2.8 作文互改作业 求拍……

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Being creative, rather than planning carefully, will come up with better solution to a problem.

What factors will be taken into consideration when we are faced with a problem? Here I give my answer: time limitation, efficiency, and convenience. Compare being creative to planning carefully in these aspects, the latter is my favorite.

Firs of all, in the aspect of time limitation, planning well obviously takes advantage. Inspiration is the most important thing which one needs to be creative. But, as a common sense, the inspiration can not be attained easily. The duration of getting inspiration will take a long time. On the contrary, if you arrange everything you need in order, every single minute will be utilized to get ready to solve the problem. For example, once one wants to go out with his friends, he has to arrange his schedule, call his friends, and give the plan where and when they will go out. Since a person will not always has spare time, calling friend out and going where he just flashed in his mind is undoable.

Coming up with a creative solution is excellent, despite of the fact that creative solution usually can not be applied into practice. Honestly, without creation, human beings can hardly gain evolution. But having a good plan is more efficient
in contemporary life. On the other words, planning is easier to manipulate. Take the case of advertising company for instance. Such companies need inspiration and creation. But too fashionable idea can not be accepted by the administrator, since the idea will take a prolonged time and a lot of money.

Having everything planned will at least guide one to complete every single part of the task. Planning carefully is more reliable, though sometimes creative thoughts will coax with the problem. The creative solution may be more convenient, but such solution can not always be effective.

Because of the reasons given above, being creative may be convenient, but it will also take time and a lot of money. Having a good plan can solve problems in an conventional, efficient and time-saved way.

呃，不知道在哪里可以求问分组怎样分，今天才写了一篇，加了qq群。希望筒子们猛拍作文……

mangohahaUID: 2758178

同学，我也是昨天写完忘记发链接了。。。要不我们改 行不？
我在你楼下。。。

mangohahaUID: 2758178

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Being creative, rather than planning carefully, will come up with better solution to a problem., P5 P/ X0 T& y! ]4 ]2 |  z9 N8 s* u

What factors will be taken into consideration when we are faced with a problem? Here I give my answer: time limitation, efficiency, and convenience.（两句中间跳跃性比较大，有句过渡性的话比较好） Compare being creative to planning carefully in these aspects, the latter is my favorite
首段简单明了，同时为下文做铺垫，给出自己观点plane. 0 }0 P! n( b1 Y! C. o% U
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Firs of all, in the aspect of time limitation(background), planning well obviously takes advantage（本段论点，）. Inspiration is the most important thing which one needs to be creative. But, as a common sense, the inspiration can not be attained easily. The duration of getting inspiration will take a long time. On the contrary, if you arrange everything you need in order, every single minute will be utilized to get ready to solve the problem. For example, once one wants to go out with his friends, he has to arrange his schedule, call his friends, and give the plan where and when they will go out. Since a person will not always has spare time, calling friend out and going where he just flashed in his mind is undoable.
虽然例子里提到了，person will not always have spare time. 不过感觉上和开始立论时候的 limited time 还是不能最好的联系到一起，要让人想好久，两者之间带联系，如果想不出来，这个例子就失败了。。。论证方面没什么问题，在想想例子如何去写 能和题目最好的结合，不知道这样说你认为是否可以：just like the last weekend, I had a trip with my friend without a good schedule. As a result, we spent most of our time on the way and looking for hotel, attractions and so forth. Obviously, this travel was failed. 虽然这里面没有体现出 creatively 的不好，不过也足以证明你的观点了。  
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（Coming up with a creative solution is excellent, despite of the fact that creative solution usually can not be applied into practice. Honestly, without creation, human beings can hardly gain evolution. But having a good plan is more efficient( c# e! _2 o  p/ n% p  O7 r
in contemporary life.) On the other words, planning is easier to manipulate. Take the case of advertising company for instance. Such companies need inspiration and creation. But too fashionable idea can not be accepted by the administrator, since the idea will take a prolonged time and a lot of money.
本段你刚好用了一半的语言说明creatively没有plane好，一是没有例子，而且篇幅太长， 而且例子中无理假设：creative ideas is fashionable…. Plane is long term.
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Having everything planned will at least guide one to complete every single part of the task. Planning carefully is more reliable, though sometimes creative thoughts will coax with the problem. The creative solution may be more convenient, but such solution can not always be effective.
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Because of the reasons given above, being creative may be convenient, but it will also take time and a lot of money. Having a good plan can solve problems in an conventional, efficient and time-saved way.

本篇文章，最大的长处便是从始至终你都没有跑题，每一段你都在用较大的篇幅强调 creative is less-effective, plane is more reliable, 这样做很好，不过你用的每段里面篇幅都较大，虽然角度有些许变化，但给人感觉是再一直重复一样的话，
总体说来，还是篇好文章，加油。。。
语言方面，因为自己烂的可以，就不敢班门弄斧O(∩_∩)O~

能力有限，如有说的不对或是过分的地方，请您原谅，希望对您有帮助

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3# mangohaha

谢谢亲了啊~我也知道自己最弱的就是举例子了……