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12# hulinlin24
Along with the rapidly economic development (Of what? If you use 'the', your noun must be specific, e.g. the rapid economic development 'of the modern society'.), people in growing numbers are beginning to complailn that work is more stressful and less leisurely. In order to release the pressure from work, people tend to take some physical exercises. In my view, playing sports not only contributes to our physical fitness, but also teaches us courses about life.
The primary reason is that playing sports will develop our interpensonal skills, which will put us in a favorable position in the future job market. Many sports activities ('Sports' is a collective noun, and it can be either singular or plural depending on your context, so I'd always rather stay safe by using it in an adjective sense.) are involve team work, such as basketball ball and soccer. If we want to play them well, we must master some skills to care about what our team members are thinking and how to adapt to each other to achieve a common goal. Sports are not an individual activity (This has all the singular/plural forms confused within one sentence, and what you mean by 'individual activity' here is unclear. Do you mean that all sports activities involve more than one practioners, or more than one event participants? E.g. a 100-m sprint is considered an individual activity, but many people would compete within an event of 100-m sprint.), it needs corporation and mutual understanding. This is not easy to master. In addition, if we are the team leaders, we cannot seem to fail to take into account the ability of coordination (Of what? Match schedules? Equipment supplies? There are so many things a leader may coordinate, and what exactly are you talking about?) ability. Merits of each person should be placed given considerable emphasis and used in a suitable position? (You seem to be saying something like each person should be cast to a suitable position, within a team I suppose, depending on his/her strengths.). Consequently, by instructing us knowledge? (About what? You can't 'instruct' knowledge because knowledge is something you 'gain' from instructions. Plus, I don't really see where sports 'instruct' important knowledge in your examples. Yes, you need all those abilities in your team, but WHAT do thse abilities have to do with YOUR LIFE? You need to make that connection clear - e.g. teamwork skills will also be needed in work so what you learn in sports can be applied. You need to be very clear about where exactly 'sports' and 'our lives' are connected.) sports play an important role in our lives.
Another reason is that taking parts in the sport games teaches us how to face the difficulties. I may take the running as an example. I joined the women’s 800m long-distance running (FYI: 800m is no where near 'long-distance running'. It's the shortest common event of the 'middle distance' runs in formal track events. We'll be talking about at leat 3000m and up for 'long distance' runs.) in the last sports meeting (Which sports meeting? At your school? In your city? A national championship?). As we know, the last part of a long running is hard to stand. Even though I lost the game, I also still learned that persistence can lead to victory, which is essencial for our career. What is more, these games also teaches us to face defeats bravely, which is in turn helps us to face failures in life. When we confront the failures, we should not give up and should try up to live up with our ideals. An old saying goes that failure is the mother of success. Thus we acknowledge? a lot from sports. (Now this paragraph is a lot better in terms of logic development, because you made very clear connections between the lessons you learned in sports, and their relevance to your life.)
From what have been discussed above, I safely draw the conclusion that we gain a huge amount of knowledge (The question is very specific about what kind of knowledge you're expected to discuss, so you need to be specific too.) from sports games. Because it not only develops our interpersonal skills, but also teaches us how to face the difficulties. (This is an incomplete sentence. You should remove that 'because'. And again, you need to make that connection that such lessons are about life.)
总结:
你的单复数比较混乱,要注意一下。语言方面的问题不大,表意基本清晰。主要的问题是说理的时候没有坚持紧密地联系sports和life - 这个问题如果你做正方,那么本身就是要你证明sports如何能教导关于life的东西,引申就是sports和life要有可比性,要关联密切,那么如果你没有显示出这种可比的密切关系的话,当然说理就没法说清楚了。要随时集中在题目的要求上来写作。 |
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