2.17独立作文小组By Mason.PD

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To solve problems present and future is it necessary to understand the past.0 L.

With the process of humanity history jumps a serious problem which emphasizes whether it is indispensible to understand the past to solve problems present and future. As far as I am concerned, I think the history of the past plays an essential role to treat today and tomorrow’s questions. Specifically speaking, my opinion is supported by the similar solution for the problems, the guidance for the direction. The reasons are provided in the following paragraphs.

To begin with, based on the understand of the past offers us the almost same method to deal with those difficulties we faced present and in the future, which means we can save dozen of time to the same problem. Widely speaking, for the history usually provides us materials and facts about our ancestors overcoming obstacles, we can easily use for reference. For example, my roommate always gets tired of his poor grade and finds no effective way to solve his own problem----somnolence, so I suggest him to look over books in the library. Fortunately, he gets a book which talks about the experience of our schoolfellow in the early time, in which gives him an effective tip to overcome somnolence. Finally my roommate overcome the problem quickly and leaves his notes on that book, wishing the follows can step out this mire.

Furthermore, it is the past, rather than creative thinking, that offers us the guidance of direction. In general, if there is nothing left from the past, we human beings will always lose ourselves in the history and do not know which way leads to the heaven. Though creative thinking may twinkles for a while, the understood of the past, which regarded as a beacon, does highlight our way. Imagine that without the understanding the importance of the environment imparted by the past, modern industry will on doubt destroy our gorgeous mother—earth; if businessmen refuse to read any about the financial crisis happened before the Second World War, they may someday not be able to survive for the inflation. Past tells us what should do and what can not do, which is really a amazing guider.

Admittedly, to understand the past will inevitably cost much time and energy for human. To be honest, these history materials are documented by people which means the past experience may not be true. Meanwhile, for the time is changing, some problems can be considered in a more effective and creative way so that the past may not be vital as it used to be.

All in all, though considering these shortages about the shortage understanding the past, its advantages still outweigh them. So I insist human should learn the past before they try to solve today and tomorrow’s questions.

憋了半天，严重超时，大家辛苦

dairymanUID: 2683905

2.17独立作文小组By Mason.PD

To solve problems present and future is it necessary to understand the past.0 L. 3 E% r- d5 U9 E3 @) X0 X With the process of humanity history jumps这个词不妥吧 a serious problem which emphasizes whether it is indispensible to understand the past to solve problems present and future长难句露出了楼主火候不到的破绽. As far as I am concerned, I think the history of the past plays an essential role to treat today and tomorrow’s questions. Specifically貌似无此搭配 speaking, my opinion is supported by the similar solution for the problems, the guidance for the direction最好突出一下时间上的关系，不然读不懂……. The reasons are provided in the following paragraphs.' Q' @% Z$ \( F# S( c . i1 u1 V( [+ e- B$ s To begin with, based on the understand of the past 缺主语，仍然是长难句的问题offers us the almost same method to deal with those difficulties we faced present and in the future, which means we can save dozen of time to the same problem. Widely speaking, for the history usually provides us materials and facts about our ancestors overcoming obstacles, we can easily use for reference. For example, my roommate always gets tired of his poor grade and finds no effective way to solve his own problem----somnolence高端单词我没认出来，汗, so I suggest him to look over books in the library. Fortunately, he gets a book which talks about the experience of our schoolfellow in the early time, in which gives him an effective tip to overcome somnolence. Finally my roommate overcome the problem quickly and leaves his notes on that book, wishing the follows can step out this mire好单词，记下。不过在例子当中也应该强调一下这个问题古已有之，不然有点跑题不着边际的感觉.( ~" T4 X$ X1 f) R& G ( {' C. O5 m  N- w Furthermore, it is the past, rather than creative thinking, that offers us the guidance of direction. In general, if there is nothing left from the past, we human beings will always lose ourselves in the history and do not know which way leads to the heaven此处暗喻感觉不太好吧，没见过lead to the heaven啊. Though creative thinking may twinkles for a while亮点, the understood of the past, which regarded as a beacon, does highlight our wayunderstanding这个词较为合适，不过此句式确实很棒. Imagine that without the understanding the importance of the environment imparted by the past, modern industry will on doubt destroy our gorgeous mother—earth; if businessmen refuse to read any about the financial crisis happened before the Second World War, they may someday not be able to survive for the inflation. Past tells us what should do and what can not do, which is really a amazing guider排比颇有气势，是高手.3 M# z; i8 A9 V( s Admittedly, to understand the past will inevitably cost much time and energy for human. To be honest, these history materials are documented by people which means the past experience may not be true. Meanwhile, for the time is changing, some problems can be considered in a more effective and creative way so that the past may not be vital as it used to be这段很突兀.! f6 b( {: }2 W/ P1 g All in all, though considering these shortages about the shortage understanding the past没懂，结构有问题, its advantages still outweigh them. So I insist human should learn the past before they try to solve today and tomorrow’s questions. 优点是文笔，缺点是基本的语法错误，长难句一定要注意，别写着写着丢了主语 倒数第二段有点突兀，没准可以不要，大体上就没什么问题了，作者还是有水平的

Mason.PDUID: 2592013

2.17独立作文小组By Mason.PD
To solve problems present and future is it necessary to understand the past.0 L.
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With the process of humanity history jumps这个词不妥吧 a serio ...
dairyman 发表于 2010-2-18 10:59

同志们我再说下啊，开头那个是倒装啊。。。没有语法错误的。。。。

首段那个我确实犀利糊涂了

Mason.PDUID: 2592013

我把我的想法说在这里了。
大家小时候学过一句非常简单的倒装是吧
here comes the bus.
好吧，试问下here问什么能放到句首呢，这是一句完全倒装句子，状语前置了
正确语句是the bus comes here.

好吧我再来一个翻译。“教室里坐着学生”
In the classroom sit students.
大家觉得有没有问题呢？我觉得很好很地道啊。
正确语序。students sit in the classroom

回到我这里的第一句话
With the process of humanity history jumps a serious problem which emphasizes whether it is indispensible to understand the past to solve problems present and future.
我把它变成
a serious problem jumps With the process of humanity history ，which emphasizes whether it is indispensible to understand the past to solve problems present and future.
大家觉得有没有问题呢。。（PS.jump我觉得好是比较拟人化，随着时代变化而突然出来的问题）

至于第二段那个我确实写错了

stefanie299UID: 2667762

To solve problems present and future is it necessary to understand the past.0 L.3 [0 i9 Q4 E* [6 @,

With the process of humanity history jumps（很vivid！） a serious problem which emphasizes whether it is indispensible to understand the past to solve problems present and future. As far as I am concerned, I think（与前面的重复，可以去掉） the history of the past plays an essential role to treat today and tomorrow’s questions.
（这后半句应该可以换一种表达方式）
Specifically speaking, my opinion is supported by the similar solution for the problems, the guidance for the direction. The reasons are provided in the following paragraphs.
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To begin with, based on the understand of the past offers us the almost same method to deal with those difficulties we faced（不用过去时） present and in the future, which means we can save dozen of time to the same problem. Widely speaking, for the history usually provides us materials and facts about our ancestors overcoming obstacles, we can easily use for reference. For example, my roommate always gets tired of his poor grade and finds no effective way to solve his own problem----somnolence, so I suggest him to look over books in the library. Fortunately, he gets a book which talks about the experience of our schoolfellow in the early time, in which gives him an effective tip to overcome somnolence. Finally my roommate overcome the problem quickly and leaves his notes on that book, wishing the follows can step out this mire.
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Furthermore, it is the past, rather than creative thinking, that offers us the guidance of direction. In general, if there is nothing left from the past, we human beings（重复） will always lose ourselves in the history and do not know which way leads to the heaven. Though creative thinking may twinkles for a while, the understood of the past, which regarded as a beacon, does highlight our way.（vivid，赞！） Imagine that without the understanding the importance of the environment imparted by the past, modern industry will on doubt destroy our gorgeous mother—earth; if businessmen refuse to read any about the financial crisis happened before the Second World War, they may someday not be able to survive for the inflation. Past tells us what should do and what can not do, which is really an amazing guider.

（这个词应该换成有转折意思的词，如however,nevertheless等，首句应该是表明你的态度与之前的观点不同）, to understand the past will inevitably cost much time and energy for human. To be honest, these history materials are documented by people which means the past experience may not be true. Meanwhile, for the time is changing, some problems can be considered in a more effective and creative way so that the past may not be vital as it used to be.. b* d3 Y- r! I/ N9 R8 e  l7 H
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All in all, though considering these shortages about the shortage understanding the past, its advantages still outweigh them. So I insist human should learn the past before they try to solve today and tomorrow’s questions.

例子能很好的论证观点，很好，使人一目了然。这是我应该学习的地方，我总是想不到好的例子论证主题
此外就是有些句子有主语重复的情况，多留意。加油！

dairymanUID: 2683905

题目我感觉最好加个逗号
With the process of humanity history jumps a serious problem which emphasizes whether it is indispensible to understand the past to solve problems present and future.
这句话吧……其实我感觉吧，with the process of history， a problem occurs。楼主这个前半句是主句啊，主句没写对。 With the progress还勉强可以，你这个没有伴随动词啊，jump没有突然出现的意思，所以楼主你得掂量一下……

Mason.PDUID: 2592013

题目我感觉最好加个逗号
With the process of humanity history jumps a serious problem which emphasizes whether it is indispensible to understand the past to solve problems present and future.
这句话吧 ...
dairyman 发表于 2010-2-18 22:12

不是啊 请看下地板那层楼我的观点，这是一句完全倒装啊，就看这句话
With the process of humanity history c a serious problem
正常语序是 a serious problem  jumps with the process of humanity history .
正常语序难道说不通吗？with后面全是伴随成分啊

关于jump我查了一下MW
参见第1条b : to move suddenly or involuntarily : START
还有第三条3 a : to move haphazardly or irregularly : shift abruptly <jumped from job to job>
我觉得都可以说的通。jump作为一种突然出现的拟人写法

个人观点，说的过重还望见谅，欢迎讨论

dairymanUID: 2683905

正常语序就不对，jump off in the process of human history还差不多

Mason.PDUID: 2592013

正常语序就不对，jump off in the process of human history还差不多
dairyman 发表于 2010-2-18 23:36

那么你还是承认如果把jump改成jump off，with改成in这样倒装是可以的了？

dairymanUID: 2683905

倒装当然没问题，问题在with上。从开头我们也没人否定你倒装格式有问题，关键是你本身的with就用的不对

Mason.PDUID: 2592013

倒装当然没问题，问题在with上。从开头我们也没人否定你倒装格式有问题，关键是你本身的with就用的不对
dairyman 发表于 2010-2-18 23:41

了解了 谢谢 下次我不用with了