tpo10 integrated writing

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In the reading passage, the author believes that the pollution seems possible to lead to the declination of otter population based on three evidences, however, in the lecture, the professor casts doubt on the passage and she suggests that the hypothesis of attacking by predators seemed more likely.

To begin with, according to the passage, the sources associated with industrial chemical pollution, such as oil rigs, that present along the coast indirectly cause the death of otter. nevertheless, the professor argues that given they were affected by the pollution, there would be death body of the otter, but, in fact, there were none of them, the only explanation for this is that they were attacked by predators.

In addition, other sea mammal as well as the otter’s declination in this region, in the author's opinion, is caused by environmental pollution other than the predator. In contrast, the professor indicates that it is, in fact, the human being that prey these sea mammals.

Finally, referring to the uneven pattern of otter decline, the author holds that environmental factors, such as ocean currents, indirectly created it, meanwhile, the professor maintains that it's more possible due to the orca. Then he substantiate that since orca is large, the otter populations had a considerable change at the place where orca cannot get in, vice versa.

To sum up, the author and the professor conflict with each other in whether the declination of otter caused by pollution or predators.

小心littleheartUID: 2726034

Tpo10
In the reading passage, the author believes that the pollution seems possible to lead to the declination (用decline就行了，decline 也可用作名词) of otter population based on three evidences,(建议这里断句，读着舒畅些) however, in the lecture, the professor casts doubt on the passage and she suggests that the hypothesis of attacking by predators seemed(改成seems吧，时态最好统一)
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To begin with, according to the passage, the sources associated with industrial chemical pollution, such as oil rigs, that present along the coast indirectly cause the death of otter. Nevertheless, the professor argues that given they were affected by the pollution, there would be death body of the otter, but, in fact, there were none of them, the only explanation for this is that they were attacked by predators.(这个点，我听了好几遍都没听清，怎么感觉听力中说的是otter的死因既与pollution无关，也与predator无关啊~~囧，lz如果确定这个点，麻烦告诉我一声啊~~谢谢~)1 S. q2 A7 b" \5 K6 A

' h9 t/ M" `6 S$ T" _4 }* l/ ]In addition, other sea mammal as well as the otter’s declination in this region, in the author's opinion, is caused by environmental pollution other than the predator. In contrast, the professor indicates that it is, in fact, the human being that prey these sea mammals.(YC这里理解错了，跟我一样，囧~我们都理解为是human杀死了这些sea mammal，而事实上是human hunter lead to the disappear of whales, thus orca began to change their diet for smaller preys. Therefore, it is very likely that it is orcas that cause the big disaster for sea mammals.
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: |$ @' T. f" V! t5 P5 m# kFinally, referring to the uneven pattern of otter decline, the author holds that environmental factors, such as ocean currents, indirectly created it, meanwhile（这里应该是转折吧~whereas）, the professor maintains that it's more possible due to the orca. Then he substantiate that since orca is large, the otter populations had a considerable change at the place where orca cannot get in, vice versa.（这里细节不全我觉得是 owing to some shallow or rocky location where orcas are not easy to access due to the huge body, the otter number has not declined. Besides, the sea otter will be eaten by predators in wide areas. YC参考下啊~）+ R2 T3 f/ t) ?2 ^* z" x
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To sum up, the author and the professor conflict with each other in whether the declination of otter caused by pollution or predators.

Lz是模考的啊~那写的应该还不错，就是一旦模考，可能就估计不了那么多细节了~导致有些信息理解偏差~多练练吧~~一起加油~O(∩_∩)O~顺便想问一个lz用的是tpo的模考版么？为什么我的模考版每次解压后，听力中的听力和小作文中的听力都没声音啊？导致我一直没模考成~你的都有么？

我是chineseladyUID: 2662783

In the reading passage, the author believes that the pollution seems possible to lead to the declination of otter population based on three evidences, 这里可以断开下，一般首句不建议写长however, in the lecture, the professor casts doubt on the passage and she suggests that the hypothesis of attacking by predators seemed more likely. 很好简洁又点题

To begin with, according to the passage, the sources associated with industrial chemical pollution, such as oil rigs, that present along the coast indirectly cause the death of otter. nevertheless, the professor argues that given they were affected by the pollution, there would be death body of the otter, but, in fact, there were none of them, the only explanation for this is that they were attacked by predators。额。。不知道是你听的有出入还是我。。predator的观点不一样。其他写很赞，没有语法问题。

In addition, other sea mammal as well as the otter’s declination in this region, in the author's opinion, is caused by environmental pollution other than总觉得rather than用的多 the predator. In contrast, the professor indicates that it is, in fact, the human being that prey these sea mammals 记得是人hunting whale, otters开始hunt 小的sea mammals所以是导致数量下降不都是人为的

Finally, referring to the uneven pattern of otter decline, the author holds that environmental factors, such as ocean currents, indirectly created it, meanwhile, the professor maintains that it's more possible due to the orca. Then he substantiate that since orca is large, the otter populations had a considerable change at the place where orca cannot get in, vice versa.5 U9 T# f1 w, K8 L
觉得这段不是很详细有点笼统了，跟前2段不太一样。 shallow and rocky areas 没提到。这段写的稍稍抽象了

To sum up, the author and the professor conflict with each other in whether the declination of otter caused by pollution or predators.

文字功底很好的很强大，语法也没问题。继续加油！听力有点出入。如果是限时的就更赞了

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In the reading passage, the author believes that the pollution seems possible to lead to the declination of otter population based on three evidences. However, in the lecture, the professor casts doubt on the passage and she suggests that the hypothesis of attacking by predators seems more likely.

To begin with, according to the passage, the sources associated with industrial chemical pollution, such as oil rigs, that present along the coast indirectly cause the death of otter. Nevertheless, the professor argues that the fact, it is difficult to find any dead sea otters on Alaska beaches, weakens the pollution theory and consistent with the predator hypothesis.

In addition, other sea mammal as well as the otter’s declination in this region, in the author's opinion, is caused by environmental pollution instead of widely occurring predator, such as the orca, because the orca lives on such larger prey as whale. In contrast, the professor indicates that whales have disappeared in this area as a result of the human hunter; the orcas change their diet to survive. Consequently, it is probably that the orca prey these smaller sea mammals.

Finally, referring to the uneven pattern of otter decline, the author holds that environmental factors, such as ocean currents, indirectly created it, meanwhile, the professor maintains that it's more possible due to the orca predation. Then he substantiate that since orca is large, the otter populations had a considerable change at the place where accessible to orca and no decline in shallow and rocky locations where orcas can’t access.

To sum up, the author and the professor conflict with each other in whether the declination of otter population caused by pollution or predators.