【Big Fish】02月28日Issue130-By cooltozero

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   TOPIC: ISSUE130 - "How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."
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In this issue ,the speaker tend to give us two claims .One the theory that the desiny of society is determined by socialization of children.The other a fact that we are poor in the ways to raise our children who can bring a better society . As I see ,we can never get a conclusin that the a better society result just from socialization of children. And it is not necessarily to be so pessimitic about the ways we educate our children.

To talk over the first claim,a clear conception of a better society is needed .Usually ,we are concerned with the the science ,culture ,economy and politics of a society when we look into it.Then it is reasonable that a better society means a advanced science and technology ,a enriched culture, a prosperous economy and a open political system.However ,none of these seems to be attainable just by socializing our children. Especially the sicence ,whcih has much to do with the future of a society ,need much intellect and reasoning abilities rather than socialization.An old but striking examples aptly illustrate the point .Issac newton ,who is among the gteatest physicists, mathematicians and determined the destiny of the sicence ,whose achievements have influnenced  even evey aspects of our life ,was not socialized that well .Yet he was so eccentric that many other coeval scientists found it difficult  getting on well with him.The speaker's rationale ,which I strongly agree with ,is that education play a important role in  forming the society.But I oppose to equating education with socialization. Moreover, we have no justification to impose all the obligation on our children when it comes to the destity of  society.

While the speaker's first claim is not tenable ,I would argument more with the speaker about the second point which seems to be a too subjective assertion.In my ken ,not a peice of events can be available to support this view . On the contrary ,all humans' history indicates us that  ways by whcih we raised our children have well served the society .No matters howe  simple or complex these ways are ,through them ,we humans keep literate and be able to develop our culture;through them ,we built up our technology which make us live in a world filled with telephones ,digit cameras and computers ;through them ,our planet become more and more small and flat . Though we confront many problems today ,it is irrefutable that we ,once the  children ,have bring about a better world. Evey generation have its problems to slove ,we too. Our education system is progressing by conquring its barriers.

To sum up,socialization of children have ,but a not main influence on the destiny of a society. Besides socialization,intellec, art and other courses should be fully emphasised.On the other hand ,we should be positive wiht our ways in education which have make a big diffrence in our history.

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先来一个疯狂自拍~~


In this issue（没有这种说法，这不是写argument） ,the speaker tend(tends) to give us two claims .One the theory（用词不太合适） that the desiny of society is determined by socialization of children.The other a fact that we are poor in the ways to raise our children who can bring a better society . As I see ,we can never get a conclusin （跟argument太类似了，应该换种说法）that the a better society result just from socialization of children. And it is not necessarily（错误的用法，改成unnecessary) to be so pessimistic about the ways we educate our children.（ 开头回应题目，选择立场还是没问题的。

To talk over the first claim,a clear conception of a better society is needed .Usually ,we are concerned with the the science ,culture ,economy and politics of a society when we look into it.Then it is reasonable that a better society means a advanced science and technology ,a enriched culture, a prosperous economy and a open political system.However ,none of these seems to be attainable just by socializing our children. Especially the sicence ,whcih has much to do with the future of a society ,need much intellect and reasoning abilities rather than socialization(主题句在这儿）.An old but striking examples aptly illustrate the point .Issac newton ,who is among the gteatest physicists, mathematicians and determined the destiny of the sicence ,whose achievements have influnenced  even evey aspects（aspect) of our life ,was not socialized that well .Yet he was so eccentric that many other coeval scientists found it difficult  getting on well with him.The speaker's rationale(省题有误） ,which I strongly agree with ,is that education play a important role in  forming the society.But I oppose to equating education with socialization. Moreover, we have no justification to impose all the obligation on our children when it comes to the destity of  society.（ 这一段想论证好的社会不光需要社会化，更需要理性能力.问题很多，首先，花大力气去定义什么是一个更好的社会，实际上是不需要的。 真正需要交待定义的，反而是“社会化”这个概念。 而且，本段完全忽视社会化的作用，只强调理性能力的重要性，有失偏颇）

While the speaker's first claim is not tenable ,I would argument more with the speaker about the second point which seems to be a too subjective assertion.In my ken ,not a peice of events can be available to support this view . On the contrary ,all humans' history indicates us that  ways by whcih we raised our children have well served the society .No matters howe  simple or complex these ways are ,through them ,we humans keep literate and be able to develop our culture;through them ,we built up our technology which make us live in a world filled with telephones ,digit cameras and computers ;through them ,our planet become more and more small and flat . Though we confront many problems today ,it is irrefutable that we ,once the  children ,have bring about a better world. Evey generation have its problems to slove ,we too. Our education system is progressing by conquring its barriers.

To sum up,socialization of children have ,but a not main influence on the destiny of a society. Besides socialization,intellec, art and other courses should be fully emphasised.On the other hand ,we should be positive wiht our ways in education which have make a big diffrence in our history.


全文对socialiazation的理解要更深入一点。而且不该回避socialization的好处。

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围观中。。。这个题让我疯狂:funk:

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3# 秉烛夜游
我这是2月末写的，当时憋了好久才写的几百字啊，现在反过来看，还是太肤浅。对概念理解不到位。我毅然决定，重头再来。

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Does the children's socialization, which means the process by which the children adopt the behavior patterns of the culture surrounds them, determine the destiny of society? While I agree with that socialization is important for children to adapt to and build a pretty good society, in my view, the society is driven by many factors rather than the socialization of children alone. Additionally, we need not to be so pessimistic about the ways we use to raise our children.




A society functioning well is necessarily based on the socialization of its people especially the children. Through the process of socialization, a child learns how to be a good children, how to be a eligible student. Also, by socializing, they are informed how to respect others, how to aptly express their own emotions. Specifically, take a boy as an example, he learns language as the first step of being socialized, which leads he to receive a certain culture. And then he learns to love his parents and tend to be obedient to parents' orders, which are usually viewed as good action of sons. The next step, when he grows up, the need to learn listen to the teachers and to know how to get along with others.All of this can be called socialization. These process are important to society since without them, individuals will not fully identity themselves, let alone fulfill the role required by the society. If this boy does not realizes his or her position in the society or not understand what the correct relationship between him and the world around him, he may most often seems rebellious. If worse,he could possibly break the laws and agress others.Thus, not only socialization of children is important to a stable and harmony, but also important to these children's life.






However, although socialization of children is important to maintain the society in a healthy state, the development of society more depend on the other abilities in the children. For example, children's socialization are not able to create the bus,telephone, Internet and so on. In fact, the advancement in science and technology, which to a large extent decide the material level of a society, are based on the reasoning abilities.So, these abilities should not be ignored while we socializing our children. In addition, the children's EQ is also one aspect we need to pay attention to, for it is crucial to a child's success, which also means the progress of society.  In one sentence, various characters of children determine the destiny of society, not solely the socialization of them.






Since many factors can influence our children on the way bringing about better society, we can not absolutely say that our current ways are not useful. In reality, our education has got a great deal of achievements although there still exist some problems. Its our education that raise the successful men like Bill Gates, who not only bring all of us into the information age, but also are a moral model in the process of helping the poor. Its our education system that help build the tied and science and technology of today's world. Maybe, someone would argue that, technology has little benefit of our humanity but cause many serious problems. However, in fact, in history, humans always live with trouble,but today, the people global world are much more united more any time in the history to solve the problems confronting people. So , we need not to be that pessimistic about the ways we raise our children, instead, what we meed to do is to  improve our education system to make it work more successfully than ever.




Overall, socialization of children and other many factors altogether determine the destiny of society.  And to really raise children who can bring about a better society, our current way do has many contribution although we can make it more preferable.