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TOPIC: ISSUE208 - "The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people."
WORDS: 435
TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2010-2-28 22:59:12

Casting a look lat our society, we can often judge a person's attitude and interests from the look, dress and act. Appearance and behavior plays an important role in showing ourselves. However, it is not always the case, some hidden ideas and emotions can not easily be revealed just from the exterior manifestation.

First, as a Chinese proverb runs, it is the clothes that people first notice and then followed yourself, which show the important function of the clothes. Generally, we are first to evaluate a person through his or her appearance before we really know about him. For example, a man with formal suit indicates he may works in a official company, while the jeans and sports clothes show one's easy lifestyle. Even the first impression may not so effective to estimate the interest or attitude, however, the behaviors and dress are the only part we first know him.


When we take the phenomenon to a higher view to our whole society. Different ideas and value system may be released by the whole society's external appearance and behavior. We can analyze it from various countries' characters. Chinese people incline to be modest, so they generally do dress formally and act politely. Showing the individual interest and style is the character of Americans. While the citizens in Pair are always eager to behave romatically and so forth. Observing the appearance and behavior is the original and direct way to look into a kind of culture.

However, sometimes we pretend to show a kind of feeling and emotions on the face which are not the reflection of our heart and idea. Jealous we may sometimes become, when our co-worker accomplishes a much more brilliant job then us, most of us, if we are not cynical, will congratulate the colleague happily. Yet, someone may feel uneasy and at a loose end, holding the view that I work much harder than him, why it is not me who achieve the masterpiece. Even these people think so, nevertheless you can not distinguish these people who congratulate by heart and who just pretend to be so. For some specific reason, it is very opinionated and rude to show how you feel directly. We must learn to hide something for the better of us and our friends.

To sum up, it is a general way to know a person by observing his act, behavior and dress. However, sometimes we may feel difficult to know someone just hiding something while not showing it on the surface unless you are so intellectual and sophisticated enough to analyze every minor detail on their face and act.



TOPIC: ARGUMENT145 - A new study collected data that shows that people who snore are more likely to gain weight than are people who do not snore. It is well known that many people who snore also stop breathing frequently during the night for a few seconds, a condition called sleep apnea. The interruption of breathing wakes the person-often so briefly that the waking goes unnoticed-and can leave the person too tired during the day to exercise. Anyone who snores, therefore, should try to eat less than the average person and to exercise more.
WORDS: 350
TIME: 00:30:00
DATE: 2010-2-28 22:59:12

The statement points out that it is a healty way for the people who snores to eat less and to exercise more than average person. To support the conclusion, the writer cites the reasons below, the interruption of breathing that wakes person often in the night leave the person too tired to exercise in the day. However, it is too opinionated and unjustifiable to draw a conclusion just from a study without authority and some unreasonable analyses.


First, the statement don't provide enough information about  how the sample was collected and organized. Whether the amount of people are sufficient to cover the most conditions is open to doubt. Without such information, we can also assume that the main reason of gaining weight is that they also eat more at this season which is a eating habits of local people.

Also the information of the institution researching the study are needed, whether it belongs to the government or a legal organization. Otherwise, the authority of the study is open to doubt, it is totally that the institution was hired by a company which sells sports equipment whose main purpose is to sell the stocking equipment. If so, the study may act a role of liar.

In my observation, these people do not really wake up when snoring which sometimes we regard as the high quality of sleeping. Let alone these people feel tired in the day. Even we admit the waking is the true situation, common sense tell us, which costs more energy and lead people anxious. Thus what we shoule see is that they become thin and weak but not gain more weigh. And we see nothing to show they do little exercise. The investment is far more enough to demonstrate and describe the real life conditon.

Even assume the foregoing reasons of the writter is correct and justifiable, do we have other means to solve these problem? Such us some drug that can help increase the quality of sleeping or stop snoring. At least, eating less is not a good way to lose weigh which may result in innutrition, resulting in a worse conditon.



In sum, the statement is logically false and the reasons provided just convince the conclusion unwarranted. To really analyze the problem, we need the precise information about the sample and institution. The information whether these people often wakes up in the night and they don't exercise is also useful.
这是经过Word修改 略增了内容之后的
我首先自己分析一下自己的问题吧：语句用的比较简单 单词也没有难的 这个缺点 因为第一考的时候 用的复杂句子很多 估计词不达意 分很低  
                                                        优点是  每个句子所要表达的意思基本说清楚了、希望大家指教  并相应给出你自己认为的分数 我好认清自己的水平
大家对我的不足要犀利的指出来啊 不用担心说的过分 说的越过分越好

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1# binghuoshenlong
改好了

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1(加入that is,) the interruption(s) of breathing。。。。。。。。。原文中用的interruption
2the amount of people are (is) sufficient to cover the most conditions。。。。。。the amount of people 不是复数吗 怎么用is
3Even we admit the waking is the true situation, common sense tells us, which（which引导的从句修饰哪个成分？） costs more energy and lead people anxious.。。。。。。。。。。。common sense tells us 是用作插入语， which代表上面的situation 这样有错吗
谢谢楼主的忠言 。。后天考 一定认真 不犯拼写错误了