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TOPIC: ISSUE51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
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TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2010/3/7 17:33:57
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The efficiency in education is a hot issue people are frequent talking about nowadays, after all, education is long being considered as the fundamental element of development in science. But is education be really effective only when it is specifically designed according to individual's needs and interests. In my opinion, I agree with the speaker insofar that in terms of education, interest is the best teacher. However, specifically designed education will absolutely waste limited resources and for the majorities, merely addicted to one aspect is not appropriate for the society.


Admittedly, interest does have its significance in education. Common sense tells us that human beings do have their inner desire to search for the unknown world to fulfill their interest. On the other hand, interest always gives us inspirations in developing new method to solving the toughest problems in the world in accordance to what people need. Meeting the individual needs and interests of students will be a way to create a more open and free atmosphere in academia and therefore better benefit the development of the society.


However, specifically designed education for each student can lead to ponderous burden to the financial system of the country when considering the cost. In almost every country, education resources such as teachers, classrooms and other media implement are in urgent need. To meet every individual's need, more money should be paid by the government and other aspects of the country will surely be lacking in financial support. Also, it is unnecessary in reality, because not all students are truly absored in studying and specific resources spent on them is totally wasteful. To have a thorough consideration, only when the positive effect offsets its costs, the policy can be appropriate. But at least for the present, the assumption is impossible as it stands.


Furthermore, although we have enough money to apply such policy to give specifically designed education, it's not wise decision ether. Society of today is more complex and diversified than ever, what we need most are people of eminent abilities in various aspects rather than people addicting to only one skill. Even Bill Gates, the wealthiest man in world who dropped out of Havard half-way, is strongly against the policy. He encourages people to be excelled in more aspects of the world and acquire more general skills of the society, and suggests that the education should enhance students' awareness of adaptability to society. What’s worse, specific education may contribute to certain bad habits, such as self- centered trend and unwillingness to cooperate, both of which impede the progress of the individual in such a interconnected society.


Therefore, first we must concede that properly satisfying the individual's need and interest do have its positive side. Then, more method should be come up with to tackle the issue of its feasibility. We should have more alternative classes for students to choose from and more students are interested in science should be allowed to participate in scientific research. Moreover, plenty of competitions in all kinds of aspects in academia should be encouraged, thus giving more chances for students to realize as well as show their interests and help make a positive circulation in education.


In conclusion, although interests can do much good to students' motivation in study, it doesn't mean we should make the specifically designed education for every student's need and interest. After all, Education resources are limited and people should have the requirement to be excel in different aspects of the world.

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1# nieyong
The efficiency in education is a hot issue people are frequent（ly） talking about nowadays, after all, education is long being considered as the fundamental element of development in science. But is education （be） really effective only when it is specifically designed according to individual's needs and interests. （？）In my opinion, I agree with the speaker insofar that in terms of education, interest is the best teacher. However, specifically designed education will absolutely waste limited resources and for the majorities, merely addicted to one aspect is not appropriate for the society.


Admittedly, interest does have its significance in education. Common sense tells us that human beings do have their inner desire to search for the unknown world to fulfill their interest. On the other hand, interest always gives us inspirations in developing new method to solving（solve） the toughest problems in the world in accordance to what people need. Meeting the individual needs and interests of students will be a way to create a more open and free atmosphere in academia and therefore better benefit the development of the society.（个人感觉，这一段论证太泛，没有紧扣兴趣对教育的重要性，反而涉及到对社会的好处，解决重大问题上去了，本来这一段就单薄，这么一来就感觉没什么说服力。）


However, specifically designed education for each student can lead to ponderous burden to the financial system of the country （when considering the cost ）这句多余. In almost every country, education resources such as teachers, classrooms and other media implement are （in urgent need）改成in shortage更清楚. To meet every individual's need, more money should be paid by the government and other aspects of the country will surely （be lacking）（lack就可以了） in financial support. Also, it is unnecessary in reality, because not all students are truly absored？？？ in studying and specific resources spent on them is totally wasteful. To have a thorough consideration, only when the positive effect offsets its costs, the policy can be appropriate. But at least for the present, the assumption is impossible as it stands.（论述太多，可以考虑加些论据。而且句式，单词变化不多，注意少用被动语态）


Furthermore, although we have enough money to apply such policy to give specifically designed education（although改成Given会好些）, it's not wise decision ether. Society of today is more complex and diversified than ever, what we need most are people of eminent abilities in various aspects rather than people addicting to only one skill. Even Bill Gates, the wealthiest man in world who dropped out of Havard half-way, is strongly against the policy. He encourages people to be excelled in more aspects of the world and acquire more general skills of the society, and suggests that the education should enhance students' awareness of adaptability to society. What’s worse, specific education may contribute to certain bad habits, such as self- centered trend and unwillingness to cooperate, both of which impede the progress of the individual in such a interconnected society. （特殊化教育如何会导致以自我为中心，不愿意合作这些毛病呢？Lz有必要给出合理的逻辑连接吧）


Therefore, first（ly） we must concede that properly satisfying the individual's need and interest do have its positive side. Then, more method should be come up with to tackle the issue of its feasibility. We should have more alternative classes for students to choose from and more students are interested in science should be allowed to participate in scientific research.（这句问题比较多，全面修改Students can have more alternative classes to choose and more chances to participate scientific research as long as they have interesting） Moreover, plenty of competitions in all kinds of aspects in academia should be encouraged, thus giving more chances for students to realize as well as show their interests and help make a positive circulation in education.(用长句的确可以，不过要保证别人能够看得懂而且这个句式不要那么死板，感觉lz的长句有一些问题，比如最后一句as well as 后面应该跟同谓语，前面是giving后面却变成了动词原形，明显不一致)


In conclusion, although interests can do much good to students' motivation in study, it doesn't mean we should make the specifically designed education for every student's need and interest. After all, Education resources are limited and people should have the requirement to be excel in different aspects of the world.（改成全面发展会好些）

总结
整体论证思路应该差不多了，正反论证，最后总结。不过语言运用方面还有些不足，我也存在这方面的问题，一起加油吧！
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