【Big Fish】3月14日Argument167-By jjooyy

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT167 - A folk remedy* for insomnia, the scent in lavender flowers, has now been proved effective. In a recent study, 30 volunteers with chronic insomnia slept each night for three weeks on lavender-scented pillows in a controlled room where their sleep was monitored. During the first week, volunteers continued to take their usual sleeping medication. They slept soundly but wakened feeling tired. During the second week, the volunteers discontinued their medication. As a result, they slept less soundly than the previous week and felt even more tired. During the third week, the volunteers slept longer and more soundly than in the previous two weeks. This shows that over a short period of time lavender cures insomnia.
*A folk remedy is usually a plant-based form of treatment common to traditional forms of medicine, ones that developed before the advent of modern medical services and technology.

The argument maintains that the scent in lavender flowers are effective, supported by a recent study. After thorough consideration, it is not so substantiated as it was on the surface.

To begin with, the symptoms of the volunteers in the third week do not necessarily result from the use of lavender. Perhaps, the ease of insomnia is because of the stop of taking pillows. When volunteers get used to not taking medicine to help sleep, they are likely to sleep naturally, thus more soundly and sleeping longer. With no information to compare the effect of other elements, the correlation between lavender and insomnia remains to be seen.

In addition, even assuming the correlation mentioned above is true, the writer wrongly equate one week to a short period of time, and sleeping less soundly, feeling less tired to cure. Is three week short enough for lavender to cure insomnia? Or is it long enough to cure voluntaries? In addition, from the study, it can only be said that they were better than before, which is not cured. Therefore, from what the study present, it is not believable to say lavender cures insomnia over a short period.

Finally, even if the assumptions above are true, effectiveness cannot be proved from that. Whether it is effective for lavender flowers curing insomnia depends on what standards one set to compare with, which the study does not clearly presents. For instance, if comparing with the time takes to help sleeping, lavender, which takes at least three weeks is not effective, in comparison with sleeping medication can help people in no time. On the contrary, judging by the result of the medications, the scents of lavender are effective.

To conclude, the conclusion that the scent in lavender flowers are effective for insomnia is unpersuasive, for it may not be the lavender-scented pillow that help voluntaries feel better, and other explanations should be checked.

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1# jjooyy

TOPIC: ARGUMENT167 - A folk remedy* for insomnia, the scent in lavender flowers, has now been proved effective. In a recent study, 30 volunteers with chronic insomnia slept each night for three weeks on lavender-scented pillows in a controlled room where their sleep was monitored. During the first week, volunteers continued to take their usual sleeping medication. They slept soundly but wakened feeling tired. During the second week, the volunteers discontinued their medication. As a result, they slept less soundly than the previous week and felt even more tired. During the third week, the volunteers slept longer and more soundly than in the previous two weeks. This shows that over a short period of time lavender cures insomnia.
*A folk remedy is usually a plant-based form of treatment common to traditional forms of medicine, ones that developed before the advent of modern medical services and technology.

The argument maintains that the scent in lavender flowers are effective, supported by a recent study. After thorough consideration, it is not so substantiated as it was on the surface.

To begin with, the symptoms of the volunteers in the third week do not necessarily result from the use of lavender. Perhaps, the ease of insomnia is because of the stop of taking pillows. 这里前一句是一个点,后一句是一个点.When volunteers get used to not taking medicine to help sleep, they are likely to sleep naturally, thus more soundly and sleeping longer. With no information to compare the effect of other elements, the correlation between lavender and insomnia remains to be seen.还是论证太少了.楼主给出了两个点,但为什么不充分论证呢...这也是楼主说为什么不够数字的原因啊了,相信只要楼主多点论证,作文一定会有质的飞跃.

In addition, even assuming the correlation mentioned above (上面说了什么关系了呢?lavender可以注失眠?还是?) is true, the writer wrongly equate one week to a short period of time, and sleeping less soundly, feeling less tired to cure. Is three week short enough for lavender to cure insomnia? Or is it long enough to cure voluntaries? In addition, from the study, it can only be said that they were better than before, which is not cured. 读到这里我想楼主在这一段第一句说的correlation应是指lavender可以注失眠Therefore, from what the study present, it is not believable to say lavender cures insomnia over a short period.

Finally, even if 这个让步好像有点问题 the assumptions above are true, effectiveness cannot be proved from that. Whether it is effective for lavender flowers curing insomnia depends on what standards one set to compare with, which the study does not clearly presents. For instance, if comparing with the time takes to help sleeping, lavender, which takes at least three weeks is not effective, in comparison with sleeping medication can help people in no time. On the contrary, judging by the result of the medications, the scents of lavender are effective.

To conclude, the conclusion that the scent in lavender flowers are effective for insomnia is unpersuasive, for it may not be the lavender-scented pillow that help voluntaries feel better, and other explanations should be checked.


楼主的让步要注意一下,我以前也和你一样常用让步,寄托上面个贴很不错,建议楼主看看https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=921368&extra=page%3D1%26amp%3Bfilter%3Dtype%26amp%3Btypeid%3D512