【Big Fish】03月16日Argument1--By 隐雾

隐雾UID: 2776185

The argument is apparently well presented but not thoroughly well reasoned. There is no evidence to prove that residents concerning with health cause Nature's Way to make a profit. By presenting the previous experience of Nature's Way, the popularity of sport clothes and health club now, as well a s the schoolchildren program about health, the argument recommends that a new store of the chain should be built in Plainsville. Though it is relatively sound, the argument suffers several flaws in reasoning.

First, the argument depends on the questionable assumption that residents who care about health are interested in stores which sell health food and other health-related products. Obviously, other possible alternatives are not taken into account to find how residents concern about their health and who are the actural customers of those stores.
First, it is not the only and the necessary way to eat health food or use health-related products when residents prefer to lead healthy lives. In fact, they may tend to take exercise, eat and sleep regularly, get rid of smoking, and take other usual measures that need no special health-related products. And those convenient behaviors are of course more acceptable around residents.
Besides, there is no evidence indicating that the customers of Nature's Way concern with healthy life. It is probable that to use health-related products is in fashion nowadays. Hence most residents who shop in such stores just follow the trend and they might be beyond those who tend to lead healthy lives.

Despite the flaws in the assumption, the argument fails to well arrange comparisons between profits made in previous Plainsville with that in today's; accordingly, the recommendation turns out unconvincing. Years ago, health food and other health-related products were fresh and attracted for their new ideas. Thus, residents bought such products guided by their curiosity.
Moreover, it is natural that new and strange products are always cheap at first to attract large amounts of customers. However, with such product industry developing, prices raise and residents get to know that health is not built by what products they use but by how they lead regular lives.

Another point worth discussing is that the argument commits a fallacy of hasty generalization. The argument presents that exercise clothes are well sold now.  Are exercise clothes on sale in this season? Health club, which nearly closed five years ago, has more member than ever and the classes are full. Have other similar local clubs already closed during the last five years so that residents can only choose this club and take the course? Schoolchildren who are required to participate in the 'fitness for life' program are regarded as potential customers of Nature's Way. If each student has ever exercised well and has a strong body, what do they need those health-related products for? Again, what do the stores expect if students are going to leave Plainsville when growing up? The argument can apparently not answer questions above. And either does it as to substantiate the conclusion.

On the whole, it remains an open question whether they should build the next new store in Plainsville. To better valuate the recommendation, one would need more information about the cost to build a next new store, whether health-caring residents prefer to eat health food, and how many similar stores are now in Plainsville to compete with.

cooltozeroUID: 2705603

放眼望去，好长啊~~~~ 服了~~




The argument is apparently well presented but not thoroughly well reasoned. There is no evidence to prove that residents concerning（concerned) with health cause（改成将来时态更好吧？） Nature's Way to make a profit. By presenting the previous experience of Nature's Way, the popularity of sport clothes and health club now, as well a s the schoolchildren program about health, the argument recommends that a new store of the chain should be built in Plainsville. Though it is relatively sound, the argument suffers several flaws in reasoning.

First, the argument depends on the questionable assumption that residents who care about health are interested in stores which sell health food and other health-related products. Obviously, other possible alternatives are not taken into account to find how residents concern about their health and who are the actural customers of those stores.
First, it is not the only and the necessary way to eat health food or use health-related products when residents prefer to lead healthy lives. In fact, they may tend to take exercise, eat and sleep regularly, get rid of smoking, and take other usual measures that need no special health-related products. And those convenient behaviors are of course more acceptable around residents.
Besides, there is no evidence indicating that the customers of Nature's Way concern with healthy life. It is probable that to use health-related products is in fashion nowadays（原文有说他们use health-products?而且你自己不是在上面已经否定了他们会use health-related products?). Hence most residents who shop in such stores just follow the trend and they might be beyond those who tend to lead healthy lives.

Despite the flaws in the assumption, the argument fails to well arrange comparisons between profits made in previous Plainsville with that in today's; accordingly, the recommendation turns out unconvincing. Years ago, health food and other health-related products were fresh and attracted(这个词没看懂） for their new ideas. Thus, residents bought such products guided by their curiosity.
Moreover, it is natural that new and strange products are always cheap at first to attract large amounts of customers. However, with such product industry developing, prices raise and residents get to know that health is not built by what products they use but by how they lead regular lives.（ 这一个漏洞，我是没看懂）

Another point worth discussing is that the argument commits a fallacy of hasty generalization. The argument presents that exercise clothes are well sold now. Are exercise clothes on sale in this season? Health club, which nearly closed five years ago, has more member than ever and the classes are full. Have other similar local clubs already closed during the last five years so that residents can only choose this club and take the course? Schoolchildren who are required to participate in the 'fitness for life' program are regarded as potential customers of Nature's Way. If each student has ever exercised well and has a strong body, what do they need those health-related products for? Again, what do the stores expect if students are going to leave Plainsville when growing up? The argument can apparently not answer questions above. And either（用neither吧？） does it as to substantiate the conclusion.  （本段红色的两句，我觉得原因有点牵强，运动服分季节的么？  学生的锻炼计划 在进行过程中，孩子们不是也有可能会购买一些体育用品么？ 你给了一个预设的前提就是：孩子们长大了才会买东西，在这个前提下，如果他们身体很好了，就不会买那些产品，如果身体不好，就买。）

On the whole, it remains an open question whether they should build the next new store in Plainsville. To better valuate the recommendation, one would need more information about the cost to build a next new store, whether health-caring residents prefer to eat health food, and how many similar stores are now in Plainsville to compete with.（末段的话，我觉得和前面少了点照应。 另外，你这个，"有多少竞争者" 为什么之前不提出来呢？我觉得也一个可以展开的点嘛）

总的来说，语言，结构上都不错，
我只是觉得在挑逻辑漏洞上，你和一般的这篇文章写的都不一样。。。。

herosylUID: 2672627

看完楼上的，觉得都是牛人，请问有牛人改改我的这篇不。请指教呀！
This argument is well-presented, but not thoroughly well-reasoned.
First of all, that previous experience is just effective in the past time, the market is changing rapidly. The previous experience can not guarantee anything. So that the conclusion the author cites is insufficient. In addition, there is no evidence to strongly support that Plainsville is an area has many such residents.
Secondly, the report which Plainsville merchants made is dubious, we do not know  when the report made, may be it was reported decades years ago, and now this is not the case at all. Even it was reported in the nearby times, we are also not to be told how many people are taken into account and how many respondants, the less people, the less credible it is. What's more, the shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs does not mean that the health food and some other products Nature's way made will suffer the same fate. In addition, the sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs does not indicate the people live there is in healthy lives. There are many alternatives to make it ouccr. It is entirely possible that the people like the fashoin style of the running shoes and exercise clothing, or may be they just like the comfort of the stuff and at the same time the people there do not like healthy lives at all. It is also possible that Plainsville is a city where many tourists often invest. And the tourists’ contribution is one of the reason why the stuff at all-time highs.
Thirdly, the local health club has more members than ever can not guarantee that the members will buy any products of Nature's way. As the author's say that it was nearly closed five years ago. That means may be the people indeed do not like the health and healthy lives. So there is an increasing number of people gain weight. That is the reason why the club's weight training classes is always full now.
Furthmore, the Plainsville's school chidren's program is insufficient to support that the author's anticipation. Fitness for life does not mean that younth should buy health food and other heath-related products.
In sum, the argument is indefensible as it stands, all of the author's evidence is insufficient to support that the Nature's way need to build a new store in Plainsville.