关于ISSUE例子的问题

thanatos111UID: 2695845

这几天看了不少例子，但还是觉得不够理想。
如果举举自己学科的例子行不？比如我是学材料的，那么像Flory与尼龙，伯努利方程（Bernoulli equation）之类的，说说其重大贡献与划时代意义，同时还有不经意间发现某些定理等等，这样至少在教育，科学这两类上有话可说撒~
但是还是担心是不是太偏了？是不是作文要求不能涉及到太过专业的东西？
还有，我俱到的一个例子，四大文明古国，涉及到以下内容，从wiki上down的：
The Chinese scholar Liang Qichao put forward a theory in 1900 that there were four great ancient civilizations in his verse essay, The Pacific Ocean in the 20th Century (二十世纪太平洋歌).[22] The four civilizations were ancient China, Babylon, ancient India and ancient Egypt. Liang Qichao divided the history of the world into three ages: "river age", "sea age", and "ocean age". The four great civilizations were in the river age and all of them developed along rivers. The view of Liu Yizheng is that before "river age" there was a "mountain age". However, not all civilizations experienced "mountain age". It is influenced by geographical environment. The original Chinese civilization came from "mountain age" and then expanded to vast river valley. For civilizations on islands or near seashores, the conditions are different.
This was an early version of the "Four great ancient civilizations" theory (simplified Chinese: 四大文明古国; traditional Chinese: 四大文明古國; pinyin: Sì Dà Wénmíng Gǔ Guó) which is used in the study of history in China. This theory refers to four civilizations (China, Babylon, India and Egypt) as cradles of civilization.[23]

我用到了“The Chinese scholar Liang Qichao put forward a theory in 1900 that there were four great ancient civilizations in his verse essay, The Pacific Ocean in the 20th Century (二十世纪太平洋歌).[22] The four civilizations were ancient China, Babylon, ancient India and ancient Egypt. ”能原文超么？。。。。。。因为这里说到作者了啊，应该算是引用吧？还是说我要改改？

求解答，谢谢^ ^

海王泪UID: 2673613

• think about the issue in relation to your own ideas and experiences, to events you have read about or observed, and to people you have known; this is the [url=]knowledge[/url] base from which you will develop compelling reasons and examples in your argument that reinforce, negate, or qualify the claim in some way

The readers know that a writer can earn a high score by giving multiple examples or by presenting a single, extended example.

本学科的例子当然是被允许的。关键是
1.例子是否很好地支持你该段的论点（起因、特征等等）；
2.过于专业的例子要注意避免阅读障碍；尽量做到，即使人物、成果换成A和B等代号依然不影响理解读者理解
3.学科的例子要注意是否是extended one,即例子的特性不只局限于你的学科，其他学科也如此一般能够证明你的观点（如果现象缺乏常识上的共性，最好就多学科举例）


WIKI的资料貌似也属于ETS的雷同检测范围（待求证），关于雷同请参考这个：

Your essay responses on the analytical writing section will be reviewed by ETS essay-similarity-detection software and by experienced essay readers during the scoring process. In light of the high value placed on independent intellectual activity within United States graduate schools and universities, ETS reserves the right to cancel test scores of any test taker when there is substantial evidence that an essay response includes, but is not limited to, any of the following:

出现以下情况者（不仅仅局限于以下情况），ETS将保留取消其考试成绩的权利：

• text that is substantially similar to that found in one or more other GRE essay responses;

全文本质上（思想）/大体上（表述）与其他GRE作文相似

• quoting or paraphrasing, without attribution, language or ideas that appear in published or

unpublished sources;

[引用或意译]（语言、想法或观点）而不指明出处

• unacknowledged use of work that has been produced through collaboration with others without

citation of the contribution of others;

不事先声明地使用了与他人合作撰写的成果，不说明他人的贡献

• essays that are submitted as work of the examinee when the ideas or words have, in fact, been borrowed from elsewhere or prepared by another person.

从他处或别人的准备中借来的思想或语言

维基等等上看到的，个人认为
1）要么用自己的语言进行大改，和原文差异较大
2）要么就干脆就大大方方地注明出处，关键是发表对该想法、观点的看法，说出如何支持自己的论点。

P.S.引用内容均来自AW INTRO～^_^

thanatos111UID: 2695845

2# 海王泪
非常感谢，这样以后永别处的例子吾就有素了