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发表于 2010-4-8 23:09:12 |只看该作者
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不好意思啊,课太多了,改的不及时

个人感觉开场白会不会太直接了.doc

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发表于 2010-4-9 23:27:13 |只看该作者
4.9 revised by Jack878  加油:)

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Human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals.& R: {, B( o" C1 L2 d
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Nowadays with the expedite development of human life and poplulation in increaing number(population growing rapidly), some people want to adjust(change) a large amount of land to farmland. In their opinion, farmland for housing and industry plays a more essencial role than saving for endangered animals. However, I maintain that they are both important for us human being.最好不要模棱两可的观点
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In the first place, it's undisputable that housing and industry benefits our life a lot in many ways. We can't image the situation that industry are stopped or houses are not enough for the increasing number of people, since industry and housing are our basical life facilities.$ p0 x3 [1 Y/ X$ x0 `
For example, the electronic fatory are resource of electronic at home or school or many other places. Stopping industry like electronic factory would cause a panic in public. Also farmland is essencial for us as we have to eat everyday.(逻辑问题,我们吃的是粮食,不是土地) Consequently, housing, industry are indispensable part of our life.- s" F' x- h7 R. o9 f

Moreover, endangered animals also need land where they could live. More and more animals are becoming endangered in recent days as their habit environment has been destroyed by human. It's generally accepted that animals are important to keep a ecological balance in our world. Furthermore, animals' dying out may cause a lot of serious problem, which we even can't predict now, to our human beings. Accordingly,  the animals, which is bound to die out, should be protected well by providing them a comfortable environment to live in. 3 O% e5 |/ n& F4 ?6 m7 U3 I
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To sum up, from what has been discussed above, I am fully convinced that the importance of housing and industry equates with providing areas for endangered animals. Both of them do a favor to make our huaman being live a better or more consistent life .
你这样两边都写,又都没有侧重点,也没有具体的例子细节支持,内容空洞,文章很难高分
建议支持某一观点,可以2正一反的写法,就是2段论述建工厂的好,1段说给动物也不错
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发表于 2010-4-18 20:09:43 |只看该作者
本帖最后由 zhezhe1011 于 2010-4-18 20:20 编辑

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being creative, rather than planning carefully, will come up with best solution to a problem


Nowadays, people in increasing number are beginning to realize that owning creativity is a good way to solve pproblem. Indeed creativty plays an important role in our life. However, Is that means being creative, not planning carefully, could always lead to the best answers? I don't agree with that, instead I take the view that both of them are essensial to solve a problem.

First of all, obviously planning carefully is a nice solution to problem. As we plan so many times when meeting with problems: we first synthesize the problem, then analyze the problem, last we set the steps to solve the problem. That's we often do. By the way of planning carefully, we could always get a satisfied answer.

Nevertheless, as I argued above that creativty is also benefitical to come up with a solution,  especially problems that never happened before. For instance, before printing technique was invented, man could only write by hands. We could image it's a big task to write a large mount of works only using hands. Untill someone in China invented the printing technique, people releaved from keeping writing by hands. Not only the printing technique, many other kinds of inventions improve our life a lot in all aspects. Most of these inventions come from inventors' creativity. Without creativty, many problems still existed now, such as writing only using hands mentioned above.

Moreover, sometimes creativty is associated with careful planning.  As an old going says, " Success is not occasion." One with creativty plans a lot for one's problems, and he or she also thinks about solutions in creative ways. In all, creativty and planning are not exclusive part in solving problems. It maybe better it they could work together.

All in all, as I discussed above, I could safely draw the conclusion that not only creativity but also planning could be benefit for thinging about answers to questions.

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