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Knowledge is power
In the modern world, technology and knowledge are the significant sources of successful development of country. Without technology and knowledge, any country cannot develop very fast. I believe that improving schools is the vital factor in successful development of country, reasons are following:
When I was young, my teachers told me that I should study hard and devote my whole life to develop our country. Students are playing a critical role in nation-building, so we should not neglect the influence of this group. Schools, especially colleges or universities pouring into the current world as a fashion are appealing to growing individuals. For example, a lot of scientists learn the new technology from universities and some business men go back to universities to learn MBA in order to improve their own abilities. Only do schools have the high quality, the students who come from these schools will be the all-round development individuals
In the 21st century, the development of technology is the fatal factory to a country. As far as I am concerned, technology not only can improve the quality of citizens, but also will promote the status of a nation in the whole world. Nowadays, a majority of new products benefits our life and there are many convenience and comfort. With the improvement of schools, the technology will also become increasingly sophisticated. It is no exaggeration[ɪ to say that school and technology, school and the nation-developing can not be separated.
All in all, the quality of schools becomes an indispensable part of our national construction. So I am firmly convinced that improving schools is the vital factor in successful development of country.

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Newspapers and magazines are the best way of learning about a foreign country.

In the 20th century, it is widely acknowledged that newspapers and magazines are the indispensable part of our society. Some people enjoy learning about a foreign country through newspapers and magazines. In my opinion, newspapers and magazines are the sources of obtain the information about a foreign nation, however, Internet becomes a vital source and takes the place of them in the modern life.
As far as I concerned, newspapers and magazines were very popular in 18th and 19th. Citizens in the past were fond of getting information from newspapers and magazines and what can affect on their opinions to a great extent are form newspapers and magazines. So it was very common slight on the street that everyone held a newspaper or a magazine. Plus, suffering the internet seems to be more luxurious for a majority city dwellers.
The dawn of the new century witnessed that the increasing popularity of internet. Internet pouring in the current society as a fashion are appealing to growing individuals. As for me, I am crazy about the American culture and I always scan the web pages to meet my requirements. I assume that Internet is a widely, deeply, endless source for people in the whole world. Coincident with the advancement of technology, it is no exaggeration to say that we has been submerged by the resourceful internet, in large measure, and we cannot live normally without internet. The experts point out that the population of using the internet will still be the tendency of increasing. So along with the advancement of modern world, it is an inevitable result and there is no way to avoid it.
All in all, newspapers and magazines are very important to some people but I believe that the internet plays a critical role in our life and it is more significant than newspaper and magazines.

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这位童鞋你在求改帖里贴出的链接地址无效啊。。我只能找到你这个帖了。。=.=

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In the 20th century, it is widely acknowledged that newspapers and magazines are the indispensable parts of our society. Some people enjoy learning about a foreign country through newspapers and magazines. In my opinion, newspapers and magazines are the sources of to obtain the information about a foreign nation, however, the Internet becomes a vital source and takes the place of them in the modern life. (The question is about whether newspapers/magazines are the best. You can INFER that since the Internet takes them over->the Internet is better->newspapers/magazines are not the best, but you need to clearly state this chain of reasoning for your reader to relate to. Otherwise, you're asking your readers to guess at what exactly your opinion is.)

As far as I am concerned, newspapers and magazines were very popular in 18th and 19th centuries?. Citizens in the past were fond of getting information from newspapers and magazines and what can affect on their opinions to a great extent are from newspapers and magazines. So it was very common slight on the street that everyone held a newspaper or a magazine. Plus, suffering? (I guess you mean 'surfing'?...) the internet seems to be more luxurious for a majority city dwellers.

The dawn of the new century witnessed that the increasing popularity of the internet. the Internet pouring in the current society as a fashion? are appealing to growing individuals? (You mean...teenagers?). As for me, I am crazy about the American culture and I always scan the web pages to meet my requirements (What 'requirements'?). I assume that the Internet is a widely, deeply, endless source for people in the whole world. Coincident with the advancement of technology, it is no exaggeration to say that we have been submerged by the resourceful internet, in a large measure, and we cannot live normally without the internet. The experts point out that the population of using the internet will still be the tendency of increasing?. So along with the advancement of the modern world, it is an inevitable result and there is no way to avoid it.

All in all, newspapers and magazines are very important to some people but I believe that the internet plays a critical role in our life and it is more significant than newspaper and magazines. (Yeah okay..but what do all these have to do with the question? I'm yet to see anything related to whether newspapers or magazines are better or worse compared to the Internet ABOUT LEARNING ABOUT A FOREIGN COUNTRY.)

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你的用词和表达方式有些需要注意一下，像是中文翻译的痕迹但是翻成中文也感觉不通 =.= 主要的问题是论述，题目是报纸/杂志是不是了解外国的最好方式，你全篇除了一句话（I'm crazy about the American culture..）之外完全没有提到了解外国。。=.= 这样写等于整篇白写。。

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Newspapers and magazines are the best way of learning about a foreign country.
In the 20th century, it is widely acknowledged that newspapers and magazines are the indispensable part of our society. Some people enjoy learning about a foreign country through newspapers and magazines. In my opinion, newspapers and magazines are the sources of obtain the information about a foreign nation, however, Internet becomes a vital source and takes the place of them in the modern life.
As far as I concerned, newspapers and magazines were very popular in 18th and 19th. Citizens in the past were fond of getting information from newspapers and magazines and what can affect on their opinions to a great extent are form newspapers and magazines. So it was very common slight on the street that everyone held a newspaper or a magazine. Plus, suffering the internet seems to be more luxurious for a majority city dwellers.(还可以用这个表达，受教了)
The dawn of the new century witnessed that the increasing popularity of internet. Internet pouring in the current society as a fashion are （is）appealing to growing individuals.(an increase number of individuals ) As for me, I am crazy about the American culture and I always scan the web pages to meet my requirements. I assume that Internet is a widely, deeply, endless source for people in the whole world. Coincident with the advancement of technology, it is no exaggeration to say that we has been submerged by the resourceful internet, in large measure, and we cannot live normally without internet. The experts point out that the population of using the internet will still be the tendency of increasing. So along with the advancement of modern world, it is an inevitable result and there is no way to avoid it.
All in all, newspapers and magazines are very important to some people but I believe that the internet plays a critical role in our life and it is more significant than newspaper and magazines.

同学的文章用词和句子的结构都不错，应该是有功底的人，但是我觉得题目的意思是问报纸和杂志是最好的了解国外的方式，在突出报纸和杂志作用方面楼主写得很好，我觉得如果多联系一下如何通过这些了解国外的情况会更切题。
多写点，就会好的，加油!

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4.1（09.3.7）
It better to use own knowledge and experience to solve question, or ask other people for advice.
In our life, we all will face kinds of problems. when it comes to talking about whether we should ask other people for advice or use own knowledge and experience to solve question, the ideas are varying from people to people. Some people assume that they will solve question by asking other people because they believe that other people have more knowledge and experience than themselves. In my opinion, however, I am in favor of the another opinion that we should use own knowledge and experience to solve question for the following reasons:
Firstly, I think our knowledge and experience is enough to solve some questions. I will give you a example: I visited Yunnan in my last summer vacation for one month. I was really engrossed with the scenery of Lijiang and I lost my way. I could not recognize the direction, so I asked someone for help in the street. I asked many people but I could not understand their accent and I did not know their meaning. The only thing I could do was using my map by myself.
Secondly, I think if we always depend on other people, How can we solve problems that one day we are alone. For example, if we lost in a forest, we cannot call the police, We do not have a map, we also cannot ask someone for help. what can we do ? Just wait the superman help us? No! We should survive us by ourselves such as recognizing the direction by some stars or the sun, living by some fruits, vegetables and animals. We should use our own knowledge and experience to solve problems.
Thirdly, I am not rare to see that a majority of college students cannot adapt the life without their parents. They are so depending on their families that cannot existence in the cruel society. Experts point out that it is an extremely serious problem, so effective measures should be taken before things get worse. I think parents have to let their children do everything by themselves. Plus, I trust that the ability of solving question by using own knowledge and experience can encourage us to learn more knowledge.
All in all, I am firmly convinced that we should use own knowledge and experience to solve question and we have to be independent.

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