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17"There are two types of laws: just and unjust. Every individual in a society has a responsibility to obey just laws and, even more importantly, to disobey and resist unjust laws."


Nowadays, a controversial and intricate issue has been brought in to focus, lots of people maybe have an attitude towards that individual obey just laws and resist unjust laws because of there are two types of laws: just and unjust as the statement promote. Nevertheless, making a hasty contestation is simplistic and ostensible, for balancing between its pros and cons, we should make a scrutiny in to the speaker’s claim and consider it comprehensively and systematically, in my point of view, that the law shouldn’t only be divided in to two types of laws: just and unjust, it is merely comparative significant that every individual in a society obey just laws and disobey and resist unjust laws.
To a certain extent , the arguer’s assertion has some merits primarily in that have sufficient support and logical proof although suffers form significant deficiencies .Firstly and basically, the purpose of the legislation is that establish moral criterion, restrict people’s action, conduct some activity, and promote the society’s progress steadily and harmoniously. Indeed every individual in a society has a responsibility to obey just laws, only if people observe principles that one’s safety and property are on safeguard, otherwise, the society is disordered and random let alone its prosperity and development. Additionally, every individual should disobey and resist unjust laws as well mend and improve the unreasonable rules, so that we can institute new and legitimate principle which is in favor of our society. Hence, the speaker’s assertion is partially disputable.

Despite the desirable part of the arguer’s assertion, we must be aware of that overextended underscore is inadvisable and problematical, in a short , I am skeptical the claim in two respects as the analysis as below.

On the one hand, it is illogical that divide laws into two types of laws: just and unjust. Thanks to individual’s perspective, value, culture, education is various and diverse, there will are different and a variety of opinions to judge the just and unjust laws. Since we can’t find an exact standard and it is vague and infeasible for us to divide the laws in to the just and unjust, the notion every individual hold that the legislation is fair is unreasonable and infeasible.

On the other hand, the view that every individual should obey just laws and disobey and resist unjust laws is comparative significances on the ground that the various and diverse criterion mentioned above. If every one observe the fair rule
and resist the unfair principle in one’s judge, the laws can’t restrict and conduct the people’s activity even result in that the society’s chaos and unstable. An case can indicate the argument that if every one decide whether go forward or stop by the criterion of their own mind not by the traffic light, what a confusion the traffic will be .Let alone that if we make a decision and choice by one’s standard about the nation affair, what a disordered scene the society will to be.

Based on the analysis made above, we can draw a conclusion we should estimate it profoundly and evenly, it is sensible and imperative for every individual in a society to obey just laws and disobey and resist unjust laws. To sum up , I maintain that law shouldn’t only be divided in to just and unjust, every individual in a society obey just laws and disobey and resist unjust laws is insofar correct and significant,
Due to that the laws conduct the people always widely and broadly and are unable to accord with everyone’s opinion, we still need to observe the legislation at present. Consequently, we need to seek a balance between obey laws and resist unreasonable laws.

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我们互助改一下好不好，我正在改你的呢。:loveliness:

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好，那你的在哪里？

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刚来寄托，你的需要修改的在哪里？我也给你修改下。 2# TSYZ20052009

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你好，这两天没上线。我把我的发上来。

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One of the most important progresses in the development of human society is the establishment of legislation system,which provides a basic decipline for individuals and groups.When it comes to that whether there are just and unjust laws and each individual should obey just laws and resist unjust laws,there are a host of different opinions held by different people.Undeniablly,laws regulats our daily action and make crucial contributions to hold the order of the whole society.Every individuals has a responsibility to obey the laws in most of the situations.
To begin with,law is the main part in the legislation system which is vital to the national regime.Usually one law is made for a specific area of the sociey and functions connectively eachother.Marriage jurisprudence is one of the basic law guiding people with their marriage life.It tells us what to do to take the responsibility and enjoy the rights.When a couple unfortunately have to divorce at last,how their fortune divided,who should take the child?Without the laws,such prolems can not be solved easily.Likewise,traffic act plays an omportant role in ordering each car run sequentially on the street and providing basic foundation when traffic accident occurs.Laws are the foudamental rules each individual should obey,if not,the order of the society will be destroyed and no one can lead a usual life at all.Laws tell the responsibility we should take and the rights we can enjoy,which contribute our main life.
In addition,when it comes to justy of the laws,an universal standard is need to just the laws.Obviously such a cretiria is difficult and even impossible for some degree to build up.Common sense tells us different persons have different attitudes towars the same thing and there is hardly a common standard to judge the laws.Moreover,if every individual judges laws and chooses to obey those they think just,no order can be held in the society and huge troubles will be cuaed.
Finally,it is undeniable that there are still some flawlessness in laws at present.These are no good to the progress of the hunman socity and should be modified through the legislational process other than the resist to the law.All the problems should be sovled under the circumastance of the legislation system and the destination of modification is to make the system more proper and benifical for the development of the society.
In sum,laws provide us with basic rules in our daily life and by no means every individual should obey them to hold the order for the whole society.Since the development of modern society is so fast,some laws may be not proper for situation now.Laws should and can only be modified through the lagislational process rather than choosing to obey the "just" and resist the "unjust" which do not have a common standard.

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好吧，我给你改，你也要把改的我的发给我哈。 6# TSYZ20052009

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没问题，正在呢，改好了就发上来了

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Nowadays, a controversial and intricate issue has been brought in to focus, lots of people maybe（may，或者把maybe放在句首） have an attitude towards（support即可，这样的表达比较少见） that individual obey just laws and resist unjust laws because of（because） there are two types of laws: just and unjust as the statement promotes. Nevertheless, making a hasty contestation is simplistic and ostensible, （句号）for balancing between its pros and cons, we should make a scrutiny in to(into) the speaker’s claim and consider it comprehensively and systematically, （句号）in my point of view, that the law shouldn’t only be divided in to(into) two types of laws(删除): just and unjust, （句号）it is merely comparatively significant that every individual in a society obey just laws and disobey and resist unjust laws.
To a certain extent , the arguer’s assertion has some merits primarily in that（指的是assertion吧？是的话用单数） have sufficient support and logical proof although （缺少主语）suffers form（from） significant deficiencies .Firstly and basically（Firstly即可）, the purpose of the legislation is that（to） establish moral criterion, restricting people’s action, conducting some activity, and promoting the society’s progress(progress of the society) steadily and harmoniously. Indeed every individual in a society has a(the) responsibility to obey (the) just laws, only if people observe principles that one’s(their) safety and property are on safeguard, otherwise, the society is(will be) disordered and random let alone its prosperity and development. Additionally, every individual should disobey and resist unjust laws as well (as) mend and improve(modify) the unreasonable rules, so that we can institute(set up) new and legitimate principle which is in favor of our society. Hence, the speaker’s assertion is partially disputable.

Despite the desirable part of the arguer’s assertion, we must be aware of that overextended underscore is inadvisable and problematical, in a short , I am skeptical (to) the claim in two respects as the analysis(discussed) as(删去as) below.

On the one hand, it is illogical that(to) divide laws into two types of laws(删): just and unjust. Thanks to individual’s perspective, value, culture, education is（are） various and diverse, there will are(be) different and（删） a variety of opinions to judge the just and unjust laws. Since we can’t find an exact standard and it is vague and infeasible for us to divide the laws in to the just and unjust, the notion every individual hold that the legislation is fair is unreasonable and infeasible.

On the other hand, the view that every individual should obey just laws and disobey and resist unjust laws is comparative significances on the ground that the various and diverse criterion mentioned above. If everyone observes the fair rule
and resists the unfair principle in one’s(his own) judge, the laws can’t restrict and conduct the people’s activity even result in that the society’s chaos and unstable(unstabilization). An(a) case can indicate the argument that if everyone decide whether go forward or stop by the criterion of their own mind(删) not by the traffic light, what a confusion the traffic will be .Let alone that if we make a decision and choice by one’s(our) standard about the nation affair, what a disordered scene the society will to be.

Based on the analysis made above, we can draw a conclusion that we should estimate it profoundly and evenly, it is sensible and imperative for every individual in a society to obey just laws and disobey and resist unjust laws. To sum up , I maintain that law shouldn’t only be divided in to just and unjust, every individual in a society obey just laws and disobey and resist unjust laws is insofar correct and significant,Due to that the laws conduct the people always widely and broadly and are unable to accord with everyone’s opinion, we still need to observe the legislation at present. Consequently, we need to seek a balance between obey laws and resist unreasonable laws.
语法错误较多，人称要注意一下。
可以看看提纲再写，能稍微有条理一点。
挺不错，加油！

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给个邮箱吧，颜色这边不显示
我的邮箱：hd0517@gmail.com

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我的邮箱lynnzhangcd@yeah.net， 也在修改你的，刚开始写和修改，呵呵。

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修改如下，有不对或批得过的请指正
红色 错误
蓝色 评注
绿色 疑问
下划线 删去
17"There are two types of laws: just and unjust. Every individual in a society has a responsibility to obey just laws and, even more importantly, to disobey and resist unjust laws.
One of the most important progresses in the development of human society is the establishment of legislation（legal 或law） system, which provides a basic decipline （拼写错误）for individuals and groups. When it comes to that whether there are just and unjust laws and each individual should obey just laws and resist unjust laws, there are a host of different opinions held by different people. Undeniablly（undeniably）, laws regulats （regulates）our daily action and make crucial contributions to hold (感觉用hold不是很好keep吧)the order of the whole society. Every individuals has a（the） responsibility to obey the laws in most of the situations（in most situations 即可）
To begin with, law is the main part in the legislation system which is vital to the national regime（你下面举例展开说的好像不是围绕国家）. Usually one law（用law 就可表达你的意思了很少one law 这种说法） is made for a specific area of the sociey （society）and functions connectively each other(connectively 和each other 意思有些重复). Marriage jurisprudence is one of the basic law guiding people with（in）
their marriage life. It tells us what to do to take the responsibility and enjoy the rights. When a couple unfortunately have to divorce at last, how their fortune divided, who should take the child? Without the laws, such prolems （problems）can not be solved easily. Likewise, traffic act plays an omportant（important） role in ordering（order 做动词用的意思在这讲不合适conducting 好些） each car run sequentially on the street and providing basic foundation when traffic accident occurs. Laws are the foudamental（fundamental） rules each individual should obey, if not, the order of the society will be destroyed and no one can lead a usual life at all. Laws tell the responsibility we should take and the rights we can enjoy, which contribute（to） our main life. （这段主要是展开说法律和重要性，无论自己想说的是支持作者的还是反对的，每段突出中心，so 加上法律真的重要啊！我们要遵守法律的主旨鲜明的句子）
In addition, when it comes to justy（the just） of the laws, an universal standard is need to just the laws. Obviously such a cretiria （拼写错误）is difficult and even impossible for some degree（删除） to build up. Common sense tells us different persons have different attitudes towars（拼写错误） the same thing and there is hardly a common standard to judge the laws（加上just or unjust）. Moreover, if every individual judges laws and chooses to obey those they think just, no order can be held in the society and huge troubles will be cuaed（拼写错误）.
Finally, it is undeniable that there are still some flawlessness（flaws 即可） in laws at present. These are no good to the progress of the hunman（拼写错误） socity（拼写错误）and should be modified through the legislational（拼写错误） process other than the resist to the law. All the problems should be sovled（拼写错误） under the circumastance（拼写错误） of the legislation system and the destination of（ the） modification is to make the system more proper and benifical （拼写错误）for the development of the society.
In sum, laws provide us with basic rules in our daily life and by no means every individual should obey them to hold（keep） the order for the whole society. Since the development of modern society is so fast, some laws may be not proper for （the）situation now. Laws should and can only be modified through the lagislational（拼写错误） process rather than （主语面换了而却没添上）choosing to obey the "just" and resist the "unjust" which do not have a common standard.（想用长句子要好好看结构是否出错）

有些拼写错误比较多，自己先用word自动检查拼写错误。后面的拼写错误我就没改了，一些长句子感觉结构不是很清楚。要加强扣主题。呵呵，有批得过的地方和不准确的情见谅
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蓝色：修改
红色：删除
绿色：疑问
Nowadays, a controversial and intricate issue has been brought in to focus, lots of people(应该是The speaker吧？) maybe(may) have an attitude(用assertion感觉好一些)
towards that individual (should) obey just laws and resist unjust laws because of(because,引导从句) there are two types of laws: just and unjust, as the statement promotes. Nevertheless, making a(this，用making不恰当) hasty contestation is too simplistic and ostensible. For balancing between its pros and cons, we should make a(close) scrutiny in to the speaker’s claim and consider it comprehensively and systematically. In my point of view, that the law shouldn’t only be simply divided in to two types of laws: just and unjust, and it is merely comparative significant that every individual in a society obeys just laws and disobeys and resists unjust laws.
To a certain extent , the arguer’s assertion has some merits primarily in that have sufficient support and logical proof although suffers form(from) significant deficiencies .Firstly and basically, the purpose of the legislation is that
to establish moral criterion, to restrict people’s action, to conduct some activity, and to promote the society’s progress steadily and harmoniously. Indeed every individual in a society has a(the) responsibility to obey just laws, only if people observe principles that one’s safety and property are on safeguard, otherwise, the society is(will be) disordered and random let alone its prosperity and development. Additionally, every individual should disobey and resist unjust laws as well mend and improve (by mending and improve?) the unreasonable rules, so that we can institute new and legitimate principles which is(are) in favor of our society. Hence, the speaker’s assertion is partially disputable.

Despite the desirable (disputable?) part of the arguer’s assertion, we must be aware of that overextended underscore is inadvisable and problematical.
In a short , I am skeptical to the claim in two respects as the
analysis(analyzed)
as below.

On the one hand, it is illogical that (to) divide laws into two types of laws: just and unjust. Thanks to that individual’s perspective, value, culture, education is(are) various and diverse, there will are(be)
different and a variety of opinions to judge the just and unjust laws. Since we can’t find an exact standard and it is vague and infeasible for us to divide the laws in to(into) the just and unjust, the notion every individual holds that the legislation is fair is unreasonable and infeasible.

On the other hand, the view that every individual should obey just laws and disobey and resist unjust laws is comparatively
significances(significant？)
on the ground that(due to，并不是引导从句) the various and diverse criterion mentioned above. If everyone observes the fair rule and resists the unfair principle in one’s (his or her own)
judge (judgment), the laws can’t restrict and conduct the people’s activity even result in that the society’s chaos and unstable (unstableness). An case can indicate the argument that if everyone decides whether to go forward or to stop by the criterion of their own mind
but not by the traffic light, what a confusion the traffic will be！Let alone that if we make a decisions and choices by one’s (our own) standard about the national affairs, what a disordered scene the society will to be!

Based on the analysis made above, we can draw a conclusion we should estimate it profoundly and evenly. It is sensible and imperative for every individual in a society to obey just laws and disobey and resist unjust laws. To sum up , I maintain that law shouldn’t only be divided in to just and unjust, and that every individual in a society obey just laws and disobey and resist unjust laws is insofar correct and significant.

Due to that the laws conducting the people always widely and broadly and are unable to accord with everyone’s opinion, we still need to observe the legislation at present. Consequently, we need to seek a balance between obeying laws and resisting unreasonable laws.
从句和从句连接词使用要注意一下，断句不够明确。
论述的层次清楚，可以举例或使用其他方法增强说服力。

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