作文本~~~

peterandmzUID: 2756308

4.6
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Generally speaking, I do not agree with the claim that it is in vain or waste money that a company advertises its product. For the advertisement in our life is increasing tremendously. If the advertisements do not have an effect on promoting their product, how could this phenomenon be happened?（去掉） Though, the consumers have been more sensible and wiser, I still hold the opinion that advertisement plays an integral role in the business market, for it has the following reasons.
$ Q! w/ c- J" M  t+ b* sFirst of all, Since industry revolution, industry development is remarkable, not only leads to  great social properties, but also numerous surplus products.（没主语） Thus, companies have to face the fierce competition. When a company is not willing to spend money on advertisement, its customers will be lost easily, for the consumers have seen and heard the same functional product of other companies' advertisements. When all consumers has been lost, how could a company survive in the market? So, it is crucial for companies to spend money on advertisement. - K5 M, [6 A# V$ V# Y
Another reason cannot be ignored is (2个谓语）that when a new product has been invented（为什么要用完成时？) , the fast(用the fastest 或者a fast way) way to let the public know is advertisement. By advertise(advertising) the new invention in the television, outside the door(去掉）, and(on the) internet, the product would be famous in a short of time(去掉）.Such is（去掉） often happened in our life, when  Apple, a famous personal computer company, prepares to display their new product iphone ,they invest a lot money on the advertisement. However,（2句之间没看出转折关系） the fact proves it pays to spend much money on the advertisement, for(去掉） thousands of people wait in line out of the store on the day of the iphone going to the market. So, there is no wonder that it is worth to spend money on advertisement.
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0 a/ d( z. h4 ?4 j. g( {Admittedly, consumer have become more sensible than before, because they really know what they need and what they want（重复你可以写他们知道他们缺什么）. When a people want to buy a new car,it is make（双谓语） no sense that you show him some advertisements of television and other things. But when he or she sees the advertisement which is relate(d) to the car, such as an advertisement of car cushions, he or she maybe have a thought to decide whether he or she should to buy one. This is the point that the advertisement may not have the ability to persuade the consumer to buy the product, but it can remind the consumers who have forgot to buy. 3 V4 r5 e* N4 p; v% y$ K5 G% E
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As far as I thought, advertisement have positive effects both on the company and consumer, for what I have mentioned above. Thus,I safely make the conclusion that it is valuable and efficient to spend money on the advertisement.

楼主语法问题比较严重，建议多做精读培养语感，有可能的话把作文给老师批吧，让我这种语法也不好的人批可能会耽误你

wyl_stevenUID: 2728535

Recently, there is a fierce debate whether it pays to choose the most difficult course even if it beyond our ability to learn in the college. In response to this claim, we need analyze the proposition comprehensively and systematically. In a sense, despite the merits of pursuing the hardest course I disagree with the statement that we should choose the most difficult course .for it has the following reasons.
First and foremost, there is no denying that the more difficult course we choose ,the more pressure we will confront. Thus, the students in the college should learn what they interest in. Interesting is the best teacher, the old proverb goes in hundreds years. It is interest that inspired us to explore the world and encouraged us to overcome the difficulties. If they just choose the most difficult course rather than they interest in, how could they tolerant the tedious course a d suffer more pressure. What is more important, several surveys have pointed that many suicides in the college relate to the high pressure in the study. Thus, if we choose the most difficult courses in the college, it will be indeed harmful for us.
Second, when students spare more effort and spend more time on the most difficult course in the college ,the claim seems fail to take in account the importance of the major courses, and it is wise and imperative for the college students to spend more energy and time on courses related to the major. Because when students graduate from college, they have to rely on their major skills to make money and survive in the society. And since the industry revolution, industry develops tremendously, results in not only numerous vacant jobs, but a higher requirement for the professional skills of students as well. Thus, compared with the importance of learning professional skills, it is waste time and in vain that students choose the most difficult courses.

However, before we make a conclusion, we had better take another side into consideration. Admittedly, when we study in the college, we should enhance our ability and broaden our horizon, which means it is important for us to challenge the difficulty. We may not get a top score , when we choose a difficult course .but it will enrich our experience for we have to do our best to figure out the confused point in the course .The most difficult will no doubt be a great challenge and an opportunity for the talent students, however, for most of the students, they are too difficult to learn.

From the analysis made above, I commit to the optimal approach that we need to seek a balance and take an all-sided consideration. When we face a choice, we had better choose a course we interest in and it will not beyond our ability to learn.

wyl_stevenUID: 2728535

Recently, there is a fierce debate whether it pays to choose the most difficult course even if it beyond our ability to learn in the college. In response to this claim, we need analyze the proposition comprehensively and systematically. In a sense, despite the merits of pursuing the hardest course I disagree with the statement that we should choose the most difficult course .for it has the following reasons.
First and foremost, there is no denying that the more difficult course we choose ,the more pressure we will confront. Thus, the students in the college should learn what they interest in. Interesting is the best teacher, the old proverb goes in hundreds years. It is interest that inspired us to explore the world and encouraged us to overcome the difficulties. If they just choose the most difficult course rather than they interest in, how could they tolerant the tedious course a d suffer more pressure. What is more important, several surveys have pointed that many suicides in the college relate to the high pressure in the study. Thus, if we choose the most difficult courses in the college, it will be indeed harmful for us.
Second, when students spare more effort and spend more time on the most difficult course in the college ,the claim seems fail to take in account the importance of the major courses, and it is wise and imperative for the college students to spend more energy and time on courses related to the major. Because when students graduate from college, they have to rely on their major skills to make money and survive in the society. And since the industry revolution, industry develops tremendously, results in not only numerous vacant jobs, but a higher requirement for the professional skills of students as well. Thus, compared with the importance of learning professional skills, it is waste time and in vain that students choose the most difficult courses.

However, before we make a conclusion, we had better take another side into consideration. Admittedly, when we study in the college, we should enhance our ability and broaden our horizon, which means it is important for us to challenge the difficulty. We may not get a top score , when we choose a difficult course .but it will enrich our experience for we have to do our best to figure out the confused point in the course .The most difficult will no doubt be a great challenge and an opportunity for the talent students, however, for most of the students, they are too difficult to learn.

From the analysis made above, I commit to the optimal approach that we need to seek a balance and take an all-sided consideration. When we face a choice, we had better choose a course we interest in and it will not beyond our ability to learn.

shengyan1988UID: 2779324

Recently, there is a fierce debate whether it pays to choose the most difficult course even if it （加is，因为beyond 是介词不是动词）beyond our ability to learn in the college. In response to this claim, we need analyze the proposition comprehensively and systematically. In a sense, despite the merits of pursuing the hardest course I disagree with the statement that we should choose the most difficult course .for it has the following reasons.
First and foremost, there is no denying that the more difficult course we choose ,the more pressure we will confront. Thus, the students in the college should learn what they interest in（are interested in）. Interesting（用interest，可以做名词用的） is the best teacher, the old proverb goes in hundreds （of）years. It is interest that inspired us to explore the world and encouraged us to overcome the difficulties. If they just choose the most difficult course rather than they interest in(改成what they are interested in), how could they tolerant the tedious course a d suffer more pressure. What is more important, several surveys have pointed that many suicides in the college relate to the high pressure in the study. Thus, if we choose the most difficult courses in the college, it will be indeed harmful for(to) us.
Second, when students spare more effort and spend more time on the most difficult course in the college ,the claim seems fail（failed，seem后面加形容词，不能直接跟动词，或整句改成it seems that the claim fail….） to take in account the importance of the major courses, and it is wise and imperative for the（去掉，不用特指） college students to spend more energy and time on courses related to the major. Because when students graduate from college, they have to rely on their major skills to make money and survive in the society. And since the industry revolution, industry develops tremendously, results in not only numerous vacant jobs, but （also）a higher requirement for the professional skills of students（students of professional skills更好一些） as well. Thus, compared with the importance of learning professional skills, it is waste（wasting） time and in vain that students choose the most difficult courses.

However, before we make a conclusion, we had better take another side into consideration. Admittedly, when we study in the college, we should enhance our ability and broaden our horizon, which means it is important for us to challenge the difficulty. We may not get a top score , when we choose a difficult course .but it will enrich our experience for we have to do our best to figure out the confused point in the course .The most difficult （加courses）will no doubt be a great challenge and an opportunity for the（去掉） talent （用talented，talent是名词）students, however, for most of the students, they are too difficult to learn.

From the analysis made above, I commit to the optimal approach that we need to seek a balance and take an all-sided consideration. When we face a choice, we had better choose a course we interest in and it will not （用is not,因前面有when表假设）beyond our ability to learn.

总体感觉不错，用词很有水平，结构清晰，观点有说服力，但是语法方面问题还是有点严重。还有发现一个问题，就是人称混乱，有的地方用第一人称we，有的地方用第三人称the students，一篇文章应该用统一的人称书写，请注意。后来发现我也有这种问题，但是自己看的时候没有发现，看别人的文章才发现的，所以给别人修改是个很好的机会，也能帮助自己发现问题。:p

bruce520UID: 2634940

Recently, there is a fierce debate whether it pays to choose the most difficult course even if it beyond our ability to learn in the college. In response to this claim, we need analyze the proposition comprehensively and systematically. In a sense, despite the merits of pursuing the hardest course I disagree with the statement that we should choose the most difficult course .for it has the following reasons. ; a7 N: W7 r0 w  \) d
First and foremost, there is no denying that the more difficult course we choose ,the more pressure we will confront. Thus, the students in the college should learn what they interest in. Interesting [这个是形容词的哦] is the best teacher, the old proverb goes in hundreds years [此句改成这样更好赛：the old proverb，Interest
is the best teacher，goes in hundreds years]. It is interest that inspired us to explore the world and encouraged us to overcome the difficulties. If they just choose the most difficult course【courses】 rather than they interest in[换我就用interested ], how could they tolerant the tedious course a d suffer more pressure. What is more important, several surveys have pointed that many suicides in the college relate to the high pressure in the study. Thus, if we choose the most difficult courses in the college, it will be indeed harmful for us.' H1 U5 k6 |: E2 R6 @
Second, when students spare more effort and spend more time on the most difficult course in the college ,the claim seems fail to take in account the importance of the major courses, and it is wise and imperative for the college students to spend more energy and time on courses related to the major. Because when students graduate from college, they have to rely on their major skills to make money and survive in the society. And since the industry revolution, industry develops tremendously, results in not only numerous vacant jobs, but a higher requirement for the professional skills of students as well. Thus, compared with the importance of learning professional skills, it is waste time and in vain that students choose the most difficult courses.9 X: ^4 O$ H% w9 U2 z) h
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However, before we make a conclusion, we had better take another side into consideration. Admittedly, when we study in the college, we should enhance our ability and broaden our horizon, which means it is important for us to challenge the difficulty. We may not get a top score , when we choose a difficult course .but it will enrich our experience for we have to do our best to figure out the confused point in the course .The most difficult will no doubt be a great challenge and an opportunity for the talent students, however, for most of the students, they are too difficult to learn.
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2 Y) Q0 U4 j7 v' ?5 xFrom the analysis made above, I commit to the optimal approach that we need to seek a balance and take an all-sided consideration. When we face a choice [这样更有语感哈：face to choose], we had better choose a course we interest in and [加上therefore貌似更流畅，估计你想用来做定语，但是最好换成定语从句，而不是and关系]it will not beyond our ability to learn.

词汇很丰富哈，加强一下语法就什么OK了，真是看了别人的才知道啥子叫语法问题啊

wyl_stevenUID: 2728535

4.20整理一周 重新回来

Recently, there is a growing public concern over the issue that whether it pays or not to reserve land for human beings rather than endangered animals. Different people have different answers due to their respective point of view. On balance, my view is that the final judgment should depend on a case by case analysis. At the first glance, the opinion that human beings deserve more land than endangered animals seems to be somewhat appealing, but further reflection tells me that I cannot agree with it for the following reasons.

The first and the foremost reason why I support above statement is that  diversity ecology will make our life  in a more security situation. For example,  some endangered animals are very  valuable for its genes will  give our answers to the questions which have puzzles us for hundreds years. There is no denying that some endangered animals have lived for thousands years, such as some kinds of reptile After many years evolved. their body contains specific gene to resist some vital  disease like some sorts of  cancer and AIDS. If we have not caught the opportunity to make a better environment to them, once they died out, we have to study by ourselves which costs a much longer time. So we may get many benefits to reserve more land for endangered animals.

There is also a further, more subtle, point to consider. When we reserve more land for endangered animals, they many have more chance to survive. If they died out, what we have to done to protect them is all in vain. which also leads to a result that our offspring has to see their fossils in the museum.
On the contrary, if we give their more land to live in and take care of them. Not only do they live longer ,but our children will have a chance to see them as well. And it will  enrich their experience and broaden their horizon. What is more important, Instead of being used by human beings, the original land environment will be reserved at the same time. In short, when we want to exploit more land, we should not ignore the importance of reserving endangered animals.

However, before we draw the conclusion, we had better to see the other side of the claims. Adimttedly, twenty first century leads to not only a more prosperous society, but also a drastic increasing population over the world. Our limited space has to contain more people to live. In order to live a more comfortable life for people, we have to enlarge our cities. But, we have many other ways to reach the goal, such as saving the city room by reducing the personal cars and increasing public transportation and building more high buildings to offer more room for people. By these ways, we can save much room and need less land.

Judging from all evidence offered, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that it is more critical to give more land to endangered animals

bruce520UID: 2634940

Recently, there is a growing public concern over the issue that whether it pays or not to reserve land for human beings rather than endangered animals. Different people have different answers due to their respective point of view. On balance, my view is that the final judgment should depend on a case by case analysis. At the first glance, the opinion that human beings deserve more land than endangered animals seems to be somewhat appealing, but further reflection tells me that I cannot agree with it for the following reasons[我觉得你的中心句还是直接的好] c5 Y( F3 l  j. m

The first and the foremost reason why I support above statement is that  diversity ecology will make our life  in a more security situation. For example,  some endangered animals are very  valuable for its genes will  give our answers to the questions which have puzzles us for hundreds years. There is no denying that 【这个句式套在这貌似不是很合适】some endangered animals have lived for thousands years, such as some kinds of reptile After many years evolved. their body contains specific gene【复数了吧？】 to resist some vital  disease like some sorts of  cancer and AIDS. If we have not caught the opportunity to make a better environment to them, once they died out,【和上一句没搭配好，once换掉】 we have to study by ourselves which costs a much longer time. So we may get many benefits to reserve more land for endangered animals.
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There is also a further, more subtle,【这里 的逗号多余的吧】 point to consider. When we reserve more land for endangered animals, they many have more chance to survive. If they died out, what we have to done to protect them is all in vain. which also leads to a result that our offspring has to see their fossils in the museum.【这和上文难道不是说的同一理由的？】
On the contrary, if we give their more land to live in and take care of them. Not only do they live longer ,but our children will have a chance to see them as well. And it will  enrich their experience and broaden their horizon. What is more important, Instead of being used by human beings, the original land environment will be reserved at the same time. In short, when we want to exploit more land, we should not ignore the importance of reserving endangered animals.8 F5 m+ b8 L& ]2 m' F  I

However, before we draw the conclusion, we had better to see the other side of the claims. Adimttedly, twenty first century leads to not only a more prosperous society, but also a drastic increasing population over the world. Our limited space has to contain more people to live. In order to live a more comfortable life for people, we have to enlarge our cities. But, we have many other ways to reach the goal, such as saving the city room by reducing the personal cars and increasing public transportation and building more high buildings to offer more room for people. By these ways, we can save much room and need less land.【这一段的让步写的精彩】

Judging from all evidence offered, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that it is more critical to give more land to endangered animals
楼主写作功底确实不错，只需注意论证逻辑就ok了，还有，好像又写错题了

wyl_stevenUID: 2728535

Recently,there is a growing public concern over the issue that whether a 11 months study of a year is indispenserable for a student. I my mind, determining whether something  should or should not be done could be weighed in many aspects.Different people have different answers duo to their respective point of view.On balance ,my view is that the final judgment should depend on a case by case analysis of the two situation. At fist glance the opinion that a student study 11 month of a year seems to be somewhat appealing,but further reflection tells me that I cannot agree with it for the following reasons.
First and foremost, too much time on study will  exert  negative effect on the student. A recently survey shows that a proper playing will not occupy a student's too much time, in fact, it is unhealthy for a student for a long time study. After a long term study in the college or high school,  a student will be tired  in  both the physical and psychological.   
if he continue study during the holidays, his or her energy will  be exhaust. What is more important,  a long time study  has another passive influence on a student. Which is his or her interest in studying will be gradually lost. He or she may be tired or even afraid at the mere mention of study. As an old going said 'All work no play makes  Jack a dull boy'. So it is unadvisable to study for 11 months.
There is also a further more subtle point to consider. For some senior students, such as college students or graduate students ,they need much time to do some investigation or to do his own career. Because  the development of the society leads to fierce competition, which requires a college student with the skill of dealing the problem by themselves. So if they spend 11 months to attend classes,  they will lose chance to be a internship student in a famous company during the holidays. In a short, a better education needs student more experience rather than the knowledge.

However, when we draw the conclusion, we had better to look at the other side of the claim. Admittedly, hard work will no doubt make a student have more chance to stand out, especially in some basic subjects, like math or physics. These courses requires more theories, which request a student to attend more class to learn. But for some certain subjects which are more practical, they request a student to spend more time on working in the society to interpret the views the teacher gave in the class. So for some students, it is sensible for them to spend more time in the society.

Judgment from all the point offered above. I can safely draw the conclusion that if a student attend classes for 11 months, he or she would not receive a better education.

DaisyTwinsUID: 2797670

Recently,there is a growing public concern over the issue that whether a 11 months study of a year is indispenserable（indispensable) for a student. In my mind, determining whether something  should or should not be done could be weighed in many aspects.(这句不错借鉴一下嘻嘻）Different people have different answers due to their respective point of view.On balance ,my view is that the final judgment should depend on a case by case analysis of the two situation. At fist glance the opinion that a student study 11 month of a year seems to be somewhat appealing,but further reflection tells me that I cannot agree with it for the following reasons. # P: K( u" U( U; I3 T; f; {
First and foremost, too much time on study will  exert  negative effect on the student. A recently survey shows that a proper playing will not occupy a student's too much time, in fact, it is unhealthy for a student for(after) a long time study. After a long term study in the college or high school,  a student will be tired  in  both the physical and psychological.   
! c0 w7 \' V" Y2 A; Kif he continue study during the holidays, his or her energy will  be exhaust. What is more important,  a long time study  has another passive influence on a student. Which is his or her interest in studying will be gradually lost. He or she may be tired or even afraid at the mere mention of study. As an old going said 'All work no play makes  Jack a dull boy'. So it is unadvisable (inadvisable) to study for 11 months. ; g/ z2 }$ E' n5 |" y- r
There is also a further more subtle point to consider. For some senior students, such as college students or graduate students ,they need much time to do some investigation or to do his own career. Because  the development of the society leads to fierce competition, which requires a college student with the skill of dealing the problem by themselves. So if they spend 11 months to attend classes,  they will lose chance to be a internship student in a famous company during the holidays. In a short, a better education needs student more experience rather than the knowledge.
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  e2 M# _+ C! G  B5 F, kJudgment from all the point offered above. I can safely draw the conclusion that if a student attend classes for 11 months, he or she would not receive a better education.

楼主的用词还有句式还是很值得我学习的，写作的功底很很深啊，认识认识了

missyoucrazyUID: 2745188

Recently,there is a growing public concern over the issue that whether a 11 months study of a year is indispenserable for a student. In
my mind, determining whether something  should or should not be done could be weighed in many aspects.Different people have different answers duo to their respective point of view.On balance ,my view is that the final judgment should depend on a case by case analysis of the two situation. At fist glance the opinion that a student study 11 month of a year seems to be somewhat appealing,but further reflection tells me that I cannot agree with it for the following reasons.

First and foremost, too much time on study will  exert  negative effect on the student. A recently survey shows that a proper playing will not occupy a student's too much time。In fact, it is unhealthy for a student for a long time study. After a long term study in the college or high school,  a student will be tired   both physically and psychologically.  if he continue study during the holidays, his or her energy will  be exhausted. What is more important,  a long time study  has another passive influence on a student. Which is his or her interest in studying will be gradually lost.（这句话的语法我看不懂，which引导？）
He or she may be tired or even afraid at the mere mention of study. As an old going said 'All work no play makes  Jack a dull boy'. So it is unadvisable to study for 11 months.

There is also a further more subtle point to consider. For some senior students, such as college students or graduate students ,they need much time to do some investigation or to do his own career,because the development of the society leads to fierce competition, which requires a college student with the skill of dealing the problem by themselves. So if he/she spends
11 months to attend classes,  he/she
will lose chance to be a internship student in a famous company during the holidays. In short, a better education needs student more experience rather than the knowledge.
However, when we draw the conclusion, we had better to look at the other side of the claim. Admittedly, hard work will no doubt make a student have more chance to stand out, especially in some basic subjects, like math or physics. These courses require
more theories, which request a student to attend more classes to learn. But for some certain subjects which are more practical, they request a student to spend more time on working in the society to interpret the views the teacher gave in the class. So for some students, it is sensible for them to spend more time in the society.

Judgment from all the points
offered above. I can safely draw the conclusion that if a student attend classes for 11 months, he or she would not receive a better education.
文章结构很清晰，思维流畅，用词上也很准确多变。减少语法失误我想就挺完美的了。

wyl_stevenUID: 2728535

26# missyoucrazy

修饰influence 要是不放在后面似乎有点头重脚轻的感觉

wyl_stevenUID: 2728535

Recently, there is a increasing public concern on the issue that  whether a student should receive a daily homework. Determining whether something should or should not be done could be weighed in many aspects. Different have different opinions attitude toward this question due to their own point of view. For my perspective, the final judgment should depend on a case by case analysis ,at the first glance, the opinion that the benefits of  doing daily homework is somewhat appealing. however, the further reflection tells me that I cannot agree with it for the following reasons.
First and foremost reason why I support the statement above is daily homework will be a burden for a student. For instance, in most of the Chinese universities, every student will take at least five or six courses in  each semester. If every teacher assign homework everyday, how could a student deal with ? What is more, a recent survey shows proper play time will improve the efficiency of study, in fact, It is unhealthy for a student study  for a long time. So after a student take courses in the daytime. they deserve to enjoy their own time rather than the considerable homework.
There is also a further ,more subtle, point to consider. All the homework is given by a professor, it will limits a student's innovate abilities. The industry revolution ,industry developed drastically, leads  to not only a prosperous society ,but a worldwide technology transformation as well. Nowadays
,college students  should meet the requirement of the society that an excellent person would be able to investigate new things. Thus, more energy and time should be spend in a lab or other innovate researches. Moreover ,part time researches will enrich students' experience and broaden their horizon. In short, instead of homework, it is better for a student to determine his own work.

However, when we draw a conclusion, we had better take the other side of the claim into consideration. Admittedly ,daily homework will reinforce proficiency of the knowledge which we acquired and refresh our memory on the difficult points. But when we have already learnt well, it is not wise for us to repeat work. In my point of view, according to a conclusion of scientist that a weekly homework will contribute directly to a students, a student will receive a better education if a teacher assigns homework in a relatively long time.

To sum up, daily homework has positive effects on  students, however, it cannot compete with the impact of canceling it when take into what I have mentioned above into consideration.

DaisyTwinsUID: 2797670

Recently, there is a increasing public concern on the issue that  whether a student should receive a daily homework. Determining whether something should or should not be done could be weighed in many aspects. Different have
different opinions attitude toward this question due to their own point of view. For my perspective, the final judgment should depend on a case by case analysis ,at the first glance, the opinion that the benefits of  doing daily homework is somewhat appealing. however, the further reflection tells me that I cannot agree with it for the following reasons.
+ Z, o, F, @5 f" v% q% `First and foremost reason why I support the statement above is daily homework will be a burden for a student. For instance, in most of the Chinese universities, every student will take at least five or six courses in  each semester. If every teacher assign homework everyday, how could a student deal with ? What is more, a recent survey shows the proper play time will improve the efficiency of study, in fact, It is unhealthy for a student study  for a long time. So after a student take courses in the daytime. they deserve to enjoy their own time rather than the considerable homework. 5 b2 G7 \, B5 \* J) s& I. n, i
There is also a further ,more subtle, point to consider. All the homework is given by a professor, it will limits a student's innovate abilities. The industry revolution ,industry developed drastically, leads  to not only a prosperous society ,but a worldwide technology transformation as well. Nowadays
8 f4 l+ J. `% }' z( k$ c. Q,college students  should meet the requirement of the society that an excellent person would be able to investigate new things. Thus, more energy and time should be spend in a lab or other innovate researches. Moreover ,part time researches will enrich students' experience and broaden their horizon. In short, instead of homework, it is better for a student to determine his own work.
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However, when we draw a conclusion, we had better take the other side of the claim into consideration. Admittedly ,daily homework will reinforce proficiency of the knowledge which we acquired and refresh our memory on the difficult points. But when we have already learnt well, it is not wise for us to repeat work. In my point of view, according to a conclusion of scientist that a weekly homework will contribute directly to a students, a student will receive a better education if a teacher assigns homework in a relatively long time.
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To sum up, daily homework has positive effects on  students, however, it cannot compete with the impact of canceling it when take into what I have mentioned above into consideration.

读上去很顺，偶实在是改不出来哪有问题了，例子也觉得很不错，偶还是要继续学习学习。。。

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Recently, there is a increasing public concern on the issue that  whether a student should receive a daily homework. Determining whether something should or should not be done could be weighed in many aspects. Different (individuals) have different opinions attitude(redundancy, omit the word "attitude) toward this question due to their own point of view. For my perspective, the final judgment should depend on a case by case analysis ,at the first glance, the opinion that the benefits of  doing daily homework is somewhat appealing. h(H)owever, the further reflection tells me that I cannot agree with it for the following reasons.

First and foremost reason why I support the statement above is daily homework will be a burden for a student. For instance, in most of the Chinese universities, every student will take at least five or six courses in  each semester. If every teacher assign homework everyday, how could a student deal with ? What is more, a recent survey shows proper play time will improve the efficiency of study, in fact, It is unhealthy for a student study  for a long time. So after a student take courses in the daytime. they deserve to enjoy their own time rather than the considerable homework. (Good point!)

There is also a further ,more subtle, point to consider. All the homework is given by a professor, it will limits a student's innovate abilities. The industry revolution ,industry developed drastically,(I cannot understand the structure here... do you mean the "Industrial Revolution"? If yes, then you need to cross the "industry developed drastically" part out for brevity) leads  to not only a prosperous society ,but a worldwide technology transformation as well. Nowadays college students  should meet the requirement of the society that an excellent person would be able to investigate new things. Thus, more energy and time should be spend in a lab or other innovate researches. Moreover ,part time researches will enrich students' experience and broaden their horizon. In short, instead of homework, it is better for a student to determine his own work.

However, when we draw a conclusion, we had better take the other side of the claim into consideration. Admittedly ,daily homework will reinforce proficiency of the knowledge which we acquired and refresh our memory on the difficult points. But when we have already learnt well, it is not wise for us to repeat work. In my point of view, according to a conclusion of scientist that a weekly homework will contribute directly to a students, a student will receive a better education if a teacher assigns homework in a relatively long time.

To sum up, daily homework has positive effects on  students, however, it cannot compete with the impact of canceling it when take(taking) into(should be omitted) what I have mentioned above into consideration.

It's a good essay overall~Keep going:)