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2010.4.3
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should be allowed to use mobile phone in public transportation (plane, train, bus)?

Nowadays, communications become more and more convenient by using mobile phones. Mobile phones have been an important necessities for people’s lifes. However, should people be allowed to use mobile phone in public transportation? In my opinion, we should analyse this problem on a case-by-case basis.

In some places such as plane, I agree that mobile phone use should be baned or be allowed to use with limit. As everyone knows that signals emit by cell phones will interfere with signals which is indispensable for the plane to exchange information with the ground stations. If cell phone calling or text messaging is permitted, the navigation signals of the plane will be disturbed, and a disaster will be around the corner. Considering that cell phone are such smart like a computer, many people use it to read papers, watch TV or play games, I suggest that every plane should have a device to shield signals of cell phones to cut off their communications with outsides. Then people can use their cell phones to do what they want except calling or text messaging. I think this will be a better solution than only to shut off everyone’s cell phones.

In other places such as train and bus, there’s question of common courtesy. Some cellphone users seem to think the person on the other end is deaf. They usually shout into their phones, disturbing everyone around, who may be trying to read, work or doze in peace. I agree that cell phones can be used in these places without to disturb others. Rings of their cell phone should be turned down. And they should take a moment to find a private place for long business or personal calls. If such a place is deficient, they should finish their call as soon as possible and with a low sound or instead of using text messaging.

In summary, cell phone can be used in some places such as train and bus without disturbing others. In some places such as plane, for a safe consideration, people should not be allowed to use cell phone or use it with signals being disconnected.

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题目：Government should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletes such as state-sponsored Olympic teams

文章：Art and sports both play a unique role in today's society. Despite various responses people may have on the topic concerning the issue regarding the finance of these two fields. I, given the chance, prefer to endorse that art has the primary consideration.

First and foremost, art represents various culture and elements. It remains the evidence of human beings' long history. Any religion can not live without art, which help people realize the faith of church and gospels. Each and every revolution in this world is accompanied by the emergence of art in that artists acutely sense the circumstances and they reflect their sensations with sophisticated techniques in their works. No doubt it's vital to grasp the past and take advantage of it to make our current life better.

In addition, artists are those who barely consider money so that there are always myriads of artists died of starvation and poverty. On the contrary, athletes especially the distinguished ones gain more money by endorsing some products and starring in commercials on TV. Not only are athletes more easily obtain reputation and money, but also they are more likely to get involved in business and thus earn income. In order not to interfere artists' characteristics, putting more resources into the industry which seem on edge today is practical and unavoidable.

Finally, art as a means of recreation are suitable and beneficial for all people. Watching landscape paintings sooth fatigue and stress from work, and acquiring the ability to appreciate classical arts enhances critical thinking and aesthetic sensation for students.

On the other hand, sponsoring sports activities also has merits. The sponsorship improves people's enthusiasm in exercising which benefits physical health. There are also a multitude of sports fans who regard sports programs as an inevitable part of their spare time propensities, so the government should not ignore the inclination of vast majorities of people.

In sum, people in charge should take both culture elements seriously. My heartfelt agreement to the idea that arts hold more vital status is, however, coincident with many people. The weak arts industry requires more capital to maintain its vitality.

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Nowadays, communications become more and more convenient by using mobile phones. Mobile phones have been an(后面是复数哦) important necessities for people’s lifes (lives). However, should people be allowed to use mobile phone in public transportation? In my opinion, we should analyse (analyze)this problem on a case-by-case basis.

In some places such as plane, I agree that mobile phone use should be baned(banned) or be allowed to use with limit. As everyone knows that signals emit by cell phones will interfere with signals which is indispensable for the plane to exchange information with the ground stations. If cell phone calling or text messaging is permitted, the navigation signals of the plane will be disturbed, and a disaster will be around the corner. Considering that cell phone are such smart like a computer, many people use it to read papers, watch TV or play games, I suggest that every plane should have a device to shield signals of cell phones to cut off their communications with outsides. Then people can use their cell phones to do what they want except calling or text messaging. I think this will be a better solution than only to shut off everyone’s cell phones. (呵呵，到后面还有升华，很不错)
In other places such as train and bus, there’s question of common courtesy. Some cell phone users seem to think the person on the other end is deaf. They usually shout into their phones, disturbing everyone around, who may be trying to read, work or doze in peace. I agree that cell phones can be used in these places without to disturb others. Rings of their cell phone should be turned down. And they should take a moment to find a private place for long business or personal calls. If such a place is deficient, they should finish their call as soon as possible and with a low sound or instead of using text messaging.

In summary, cell phone can be used in some places such as train and bus without disturbing others. In some places such as plane, for a safe consideration, people should not be allowed to use cell phone or use it with signals being disconnected.
觉得LZ文章写的很精练，错误点也不多，呵呵~