issue5 全国统一课程 只写中国情况可以么？求拍！

starshaneUID: 2616355

TOPIC: ISSUE5 - "A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer."
WORDS: 425
TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2010/4/5 23:23:34

Specifically只写中国,不知道这样可不可行啊……

I cannot agree with the speaker that all students be given the same curriculum before they enter college when taking the national condition of China into consideration. Although it helps to mold qualify citizens by giving some basic academic courses, the diversity and discrepancy among China's different regions dictated the fact that different course should be provided according to the regional reality.

地区课程的重要性：社会自然文化差异性，需要不同课程preserve
In the first place, it would be culturally deleterious for a highly diversified country like China to implement national curriculums. China has grand territories and 34 provinces which differ from each other in terms of social, ethnical, natural condition and historic experience, and some regional schools have the responsibility to acquaintance students with their regional distinctive culture and history, especially schools that are designed for minorities. Otherwise those cultures easily fade in time. In Tibet, for example, students will have courses in Tibetan language and culture so as to better preserve Tibetan civilization. Some schools also provide courses in regional history which would not be covered in other school or college curriculum. Those courses with regional characteristics are necessary to maintain the cultural diversity in China.

地区课程的必然性：经济条件决定了有的地区无法推行一些课程
Moreover, the disparate economic development and level of educational system in China also denied the idea of a common national curriculum. There's huge income gap between the east and the west, accordingly the level of education that the local government is able to provide differs. Thus even the local schools are required to provide national curriculum, the students actually could not learn anything for a lack of teachers and equipment. Take myself-experience for instance. I have been a two-week volunteer teacher in a poor county in Ningxia Province, which is also a relatively underdeveloped province in the west. Although the local school had a teaching building and a playground and we could provide courses like math and English, there was no computer room or chemistry lab so that we could not give course in computer technology or lab experiment, which were possible in eastern regions where schools are better equipped. Other poor regions suffer the same shortage of equipment and teachers, whereas schools in fluent regions are able to provide even extra-curriculum activities catering to the needs and interests of their students.

让步，推行全国课程的好处   
However, admittedly some courses, such as public ethics and physical education, are generally beneficial to all students and can help them develop healthy mind and body and be reasonable, productive citizens, regardless of their aptitude and intelligence. Besides, such courses need little more than teachers and playgrounds, thus making the national curriculum more likely to be carried out and facilitate the higher education in college. Through a carefully designed national curriculum, students can be equally motivated in basic academic fields and are more likely to be well-prepared for challenges and competition in college.

打酱油……两种结合一下……
Taking all the factors above into consideration, I am positive that it well behooves China, and other nations as well, to set a common curriculum including basic knowledge in laws, science and art, while the depth of each course and other selective courses are left to the regional school’s discretion according to their respective conditions.


谢谢了~~~~

plukaUID: 2721764

I cannot agree with the speaker that all students be given the same curriculum before they enter college when taking the national condition of China into consideration. Although it helps to mold qualify（qualified） citizens by giving some basic academic courses, the diversity and discrepancy among China's different regions dictated（现在时） the fact that different course should be provided according to the regional reality.

In the first place, it would be culturally deleterious for a highly diversified country like China to implement national curriculums. China has grand territories and 34 provinces which differ from each other in terms of social, ethnical, natural condition and historic experience, and some regional schools have the responsibility to acquaintance（acquaint) students with their regional distinctive culture and history, especially schools that are designed for minorities. Otherwise those cultures easily fade in time. In Tibet, for example, students will have（是‘将会’有还是现在已经有了？时态） courses in Tibetan language and culture so as to better preserve Tibetan civilization. Some schools also provide courses in regional history which would not be covered in other school or college curriculum（有例子否）. Those courses with regional characteristics are necessary to maintain the cultural diversity in China.（T的重心在“全国性课程文化上有害”，但后文论证的重点是“地区性课程利于文化传承”，还是有些许差别的，建议修改T，要么就在后文突出“有害”的部分。）（论述挺多的，论证还可以提升。要么例子再详实些，要么面对此类论证有益或有害的问题，不妨试试对比论证，情景假设法之类，更加生动）


Moreover, the disparate economic development and level of educational system in China also denied the idea of a common national curriculum. There's huge income gap between the east and the west, accordingly the level of education that the local government is able to provide differs. Thus even（此句可用虚拟语气） the local schools are required to provide national curriculum, the students actually could not learn anything for a lack of teachers and equipment. Take myself-experience for instance. I have been a two-week volunteer teacher in a poor county in Ningxia Province, which is also a relatively underdeveloped province in the west. Although the local school had a teaching building and a playground and we could provide courses like math and English, there was no computer room or chemistry lab so that we could not give course in computer technology or lab experiment, which were possible in eastern regions where schools are better equipped.（表现出了东西两地区的硬件差异，但没有直接跟national curriculum联系起来。人家可不知道电脑技术啥的是不是national curriculum呀。不妨点出“对于某些全国性课程如电脑，碍于硬件设施，贫困地区开了等于没开云云”）（另，这个例子是要表现“一些全国性课程（比如英语数学）可以推广而另一些（比如电脑）不行”吗？若不是，私以为绿色句可以不要，多些笔墨描述其硬件不足可能更生动（大概是俺carp了= =）） Other poor regions suffer the same shortage of equipment and teachers, whereas schools in fluent regions are able to provide even extra-curriculum activities catering to the needs and interests of their students.（观点不错~从可行性方面分析很好。）

However, admittedly（however本身可以有让步的意思，跟admittedly选一个就OK) some courses, such as public ethics and physical education, are generally beneficial to all students and can help them develop healthy mind and body and be reasonable, productive citizens, regardless of their aptitude and intelligence.（前面讨论的是地域差别，这里让步也该是regardless of the regional disparities吧） Besides, such courses need little more than teachers and playgrounds, thus making the national curriculum（curriculum有“全部课程”的意思，此处如果只提出一两门可以全国化，是否用courses就好了？） more likely to be carried out and facilitate the higher education in college. Through a carefully designed national curriculum, students can be equally motivated in basic academic fields and are more likely to be well-prepared for challenges and competition in college（此句略显突兀。前几段都在讲全国性课程不好，本段前半段让步的不过是“某些课程”“可行”，这里突然跳到“全国性课程有好处”，有点断，后面也没有进一步解释）.


Taking all the factors above into consideration, I am positive that it well behooves China, and other nations as well（不是说specially talk about China咩，没有提示就跳出other nations了）, to set a common curriculum including basic knowledge in laws, science and art（这一部分论证不足，全文只用了个让步段来谈，没讲透）, while the depth of each course and other selective courses are left to the regional school’s discretion according to their respective conditions.
个人觉得把中国当蓝本讨论是OK的，但没必要非得明白地点出来specifically for China呀，地域差异哪里都有，并非中国独有，随便一说大家都明白的。表明讨论中国，额，感觉有点奇怪= =

分论点都OK的，让步段弱了，没能支撑起平衡观点，所以结尾可以考虑不要用平衡，仍以地区为主体，稍微让步下。平衡观点的话双方要势均力敌哇。

以上~

starshaneUID: 2616355

2# pluka

我想通了，的确没必要点名中国，只是都举中国为例好了……可是这样是不是不够complex的要求啊……

I cannot agree with the speaker that all students be given the same curriculum before they enter college. Although it helps to mold qualified citizens by giving some basic academic courses, the diversity and discrepancy among different regions dictate the fact that different course should also be provided according to the regional reality.
第一段就不提CHINA了

地区课程的重要性：社会自然文化差异性，需要不同课程preserve
In the first place, it would be culturally deleterious for a highly diversified country to implement national curriculums. Take the case of China for instance. China has grand territories and 34 provinces which differ from each other in terms of social, ethnical, natural condition and historic experience, and some regional schools have the responsibility to acquaintance students with their distinctive culture and history otherwise those cultures easily fade in time. In Tibet, for example, students have courses taught in Tibetan language on Tibetan history and culture so as to better preserve Tibetan civilization, while other Tibetan students who received their education in other province usually had little idea about Tibetan language and history, just like a foreigner. If a common curriculum was enforced in Tibet, it is possible that the next generation would forget about their cultural identities easily. Likewise in the U.S.A, some states with aboriginals and minority groups provide courses in regional history to help students understand their cultures and traditions. In this sense, courses with regional characteristics are necessary to maintain the cultural diversity.

嗯的确应该用对比、类比


地区课程的必然性：经济条件决定了有的地区无法推行一些课程
Moreover, the disparate economic development and level of educational system in different regions also denied the idea of a common national curriculum. Again in China, there's huge income gap between the east and the west, accordingly the level of education that the local government is able to provide differs. Therefore if a national curriculum includes courses like computer science or French, it stands a good chance that the students actually could not learn anything for a lack of teachers and equipment. Take myself-experience for instance. I have been a two-week volunteer teacher in a poor county in Ningxia Province, which is also a relatively underdeveloped province in the west. Although the local school had a teaching building and a playground and we could provide courses like math and English, there was no computer room or chemistry lab so that we could not give course in computer technology or lab experiment, which were common in eastern regions where schools are better equipped. Other poor regions suffer the same shortage of equipment and teachers, whereas schools in fluent regions are able to provide even extra-curriculum activities catering to the needs and interests of their students.


However, some courses, such as public ethics and physical education, are generally beneficial to all students and can help them develop healthy mind and body and be reasonable, productive citizens, regardless of their cultural identities and origins. （intelligence和abilities是用得无厘头了）Besides, such courses need little more than teachers and playgrounds, thus making the courses more likely to be carried out and facilitate the higher education in college. Through a few carefully designed national courses, students can be equally motivated in basic academic fields and are more likely to be well-prepared for challenges and competition in college. Currently in China, Math, Chinese, English and Ethics are compulsory national courses taught in almost every school. These courses help general students to learn basic skills and values to be rational individuals in the society. For this reason, several selected national core courses seem feasible and conducive.






Taking all the factors above into consideration, I am positive that it well behooves nations to set a core curriculum including basic knowledge in language, science and ethics, while the depth of each course and other selective courses are left to the regional school’s discretion according to their respective conditions.

改过要清晰点么？话说我不是想写平衡观点的，平衡的话估计还得加一段，专门说统一核心课程对学生以后受大学教育的好处……太多了……

再次感谢PLUKA每次的enlightenment！确实受益匪浅啊~~~

plukaUID: 2721764

没啥其他建议，清晰多啦。我也觉得平衡比较难办，有保留的反对比较好写。