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bruce520UID: 2634940

4.22
People in increasing number are concerned about the controversial issue that homework is necessary for students. As far as I see, students can benefit a lot from the homework. Besides, homework is also do a big favor for both the students’ family and even the whole society. However, the unlimited amount of the homework can make a reactive effect for the students.

First of all, doing some homework can help students to reinforce the knowledge they learned from the class. Homework is a traditional but effient way of the education system to regulate students to make a review for the information which they received for school course. For instance, the students were been taught how to calculate area of a rectangle in the class, then s/he may rember the formulation in her of his mind. However, by the time the students who know the method to calculate, the process of study has not been finished. The students should pay more time to do some necessary excises to pratise it.


A equally important point is that, with the extra task after school, students have to spend some of their time on it, which reduce the opportunities to contact the unsafe factors in the society. As we know, teens are in a age who get not a judgement about the outside world in their mind. If there no other things they have to do in their free time, many uncertain things may affect their mature. According to a investagation of the three main web sites, more than 73.19% parents complain that they should spend more time to take care their kids for there are no homework assigned when the children back school.

Despite the homework could contribute directly both to the parents and students, the negative effect of large amount of homework can never be ignored. Study is not the only thing for students, they also get rights to relax themselves. What is more, it is not a appropriate when too much time is been occupied by homework. Just as the old saying goes: all work and not play makes Jack a dull boy.

To sum up, we appreciate a heathy result that homework could bring for students, that is also the aim for the teachers assigning the homework. Thereby, how to make the homework to serve a best suitable function is the key problem to be desired.

BriaIFUID: 2515589

People in increasing number(s) are concerned about the controversial issue that(about whether) homework is necessary for students. As far as I see, students can benefit a lot from the homework. Besides, homework is also do a big favor for both the students’ family and even the whole society. However, the unlimited amount of the homework can make a reactive effect for(have an effect on sb) the students.

First of all, doing some homework can help students to(help sb.do sth) reinforce the knowledge they learned from the class. Homework is a traditional but effient(efficient) way of the education system to regulate students to make a review for(of) the information which they received for school course. For instance, the students were been(?) taught how to calculate area of a rectangle in the class, then s/he may rember(remember) the formulation in her of his mind. However, by the time the students who know the method to calculate, the process of study has not been finished. The students should pay more time to do some necessary excises(exercise?) to pratise it.

A(n) equally important point is that, with the extra task after school, students have to spend some of their time on it, which reduce(s) the opportunities to contact the unsafe factors in the society. As we know, teens are in a age who get not a judgement about the outside world in their mind. If there no other things they have to do in their free time, many uncertain things may affect their mature. According to a investagation of the three main web sites(better tell the reviewers the name of those websites), more than 73.19% parents complain that they should spend more time to take care their kids for there are no homework assigned when the children back school.

Despite the(that) homework could contribute directly both to the parents and students, the negative effect of large amount of homework can never be ignored. Study is not the only thing for students, they also get rights to relax themselves. What is more, it is not a appropriate when too much time is been occupied by homework. Just as the old saying goes: all work and not play makes Jack a dull boy.

To sum up, we appreciate a heathy result that homework could bring for students, that is also the aim for the teachers assigning the homework. Thereby, how to make the homework to serve a best suitable(? better cross the word "suitable" out...best is enough) function is the key problem to be desired(desired? decided?).

Keep going~It would be perfect if you can reduce some of your typing errors:)
P.S. Hope u don't mind my correcting ur essay with Eng. directly...

greenroudUID: 2312800

People in increasing number are concerned about the controversial issue that homework is necessary for students. As far as I see, students can benefit a lot from the homework. Besides, homeworks is(\) also do a big favor for both the students’ families and even the whole society. However, the unlimited amount of the homework can make a reactive effect (惯用吗)for the students.% |$ ~! E7 X4 Z4 S6 n) p& `

First of all, doing some homeworks can help students to reinforce(用得好) the knowledge they learned from the class. Homework is a traditional but effient way of the education system to regulate students to make a review for the information which they received for school course. For instance, the students were been taught（语法？） how to calculate area of a rectangle in the class, then s/he may rember the formulation in her of his mind. However, by the time the students who know the method to calculate, the process of study has not been finished.（这句不通，缺谓语） The students should pay more time to do some necessary excises to pratise it. # f& a- Y

An equally important point is that, with the extra task after school, students have to spend some of their time on it, which reduce the opportunities to contact the unsafe factors in the society. As we know, teens are in an age who(that) get not a judgement about the outside world in their mind. If there’re no other things they have to do in their free time, many uncertain things may affect their mature. According to an investagation of the three main web sites, more than 73.19% parents complain that they should spend more time to take care their kids for there are no homework assigned when the children back school. (这样的论点不错，btw是真的吗73.19%？这样的数字很醒目)

Despite the homework could contribute directly both to the parents and students, the negative effect of large amount of homework can never be ignored. Study is not the only thing for students, they also get rights to relax themselves. What is more, it is not a appropriate when too much time is been occupied by homework. Just as the old saying goes: all work and not play makes Jack a dull boy.（wow）

To sum up, we appreciate a heathy(这么关键的词还是不要错的好) result that homework could bring for students, that is also the aim for the teachers assigning the homework. Thereby, how to make the homework to serve a best suitable function is the key problem to be desired.
总体来看文章逻辑清晰，有新意，结尾段的总结也很恰如其分。
文中有些句法、语法错误。单词拼写的准确性，单复数问题，typo问题……一起努力

bruce520UID: 2634940

4.23政府是是否應該放多的錢在 access internet 上，而是public transportation
As the advancement of the modern society, the construction of the public  infranstruction draw more attention. For instance, some people hold that government should invest the money to the networking of Internet rather public. While, the opponents share the belief that public transportation should receive more care from the government. As far as I see, the importance of both of those public infranstruction should never be ignored, however, for today, our government should focus on the Internet more.

To beginning with, as a new invention of the modern society, Internet pratically serves a significant function in all of aspect of our life. That is the reason why we should notice it more. It is a undeinably fact that the invention of Networking started a new page of human history. With the spread of the Internet, people can communicate with each other more easily. For example, we need not to make a conference face to face but to express our view to the other members which are been compress into vedio packets transmited by the Internet. Recently, some other applications based on the Internet are increasing rapidly, thereby more money should be cast into the construction of the Internet.

Besides, Internet is not a perfect project which is still being buliting, and many problems may bring out if we do not spend enough energy on it. Although Internet contribute greatly to our daily lives, it is not without its defects such as the security of the web communities. The fact that every coin have two sides determin that we should do more work to improve the advantages instead of deny it for its disadvantages. Therefore, we should spare no effort to the access of the Internet.

Last but not least, with a heathy development of the Internet, the traditional problem, public transportation should also be pay more attention. The public transportation also contribute directly to the modern society, however, it is not the most serious trouble that we ecountered.

To sum up, both the access of the Inernet and public transportation should take into consideration of the government’s plan. While, there is a distinguish when we should manage more than one things, and the more important one should be marked out.

wyl_stevenUID: 2728535

People in increasing number are concerned about the controversial issue that homework is necessary for students. As far as I see, students can benefit a lot from the homework. Besides, homework is also do a big favor for both the students’ family and even the whole society. However, the unlimited amount of the homework can make a reactive effect for the students. p$ T3 K# ]+ k: D1 R- i* d0 X1 l' V+ U( u' Z1 W" t First of all, doing some homework can help students to reinforce the knowledge they learned acquiredfrom the class. Homework is a traditional but effient way of the education system to regulate students to make a review for the information which they received for school course. For instance, the students were been taught how to calculate area of a rectangle in the class, then s/he may rember the formulation in her of his mind. However, by the time the students who know the method to calculate, the process of study has not been finished. The students should pay more time to do some necessary excises to pratise it. + Q; H& u7 _+ _# u% _2 v) A# W# a5 h1 m : T$ W1 b' X l4 e" {9 ^% [ An equally important point is that, with the extra task after school, students have to spend some of their time on it, which reduced the opportunities to contact the unsafe factors in the society. As we know, teens are in a age who get not a judgement about the outside world in their mind. If there no other things they have to do in their free time, many uncertain things may affect their mature(mature is not a none ,future life). According to a investagation of the three main web sites, more than 73.19% parents complain that they should spend more time to take care their kids for there are no homework assigned when the children back school. % t: e' _ _. i% e/ S! C3 p* u ~ T( R1 ^0 g Despite the homework could contribute directly both to the parents and students, the negative effect of large amount of homework can never be ignored. Study is not the only thing for students, they also get rights to relax themselves. What is more, it is not a appropriate when too much time is been occupied by homework. Just as the old saying goes: all work and not play makes Jack a dull boy.呵呵 g# ?- X' s2 J' L# J " O8 K! |/ }1 S* p- B- sTo sum up, we appreciate a heathy result that homework could bring for students, that is also the aim for the teachers assigning the homework. Thereby, how to make the homework to serve a best suitable function is the key problem to be desired.
我觉得你的文章进步了不少啊 加油

lily@@UID: 2661882

4.23政府是是否應該放多的錢在 access internet 上，而是public transportation/ M0 q7 i# A
2 Q& QAs the advancement of the modern society, the construction of the public  infranstruction( 这个词比较生，我查了字典出来了infrastructure，最好再确认一下） draw more  attention. For instance, some people hold that government should invest the money to the networking of Internet rather （than) public (transportation?）（貌似少词了，是这个意思吗？). While, the opponents share the belief that public transportation should receive more care from the government. As far as I see, the importance of both （of those public infranstruction 可以去掉，更加简洁） should never be ignored, however, for today, our government should focus on the Internet more.To beginning(begin) with, as a new invention of the modern society, Internet pratically serves a significant function in all of aspect(all aspects去掉of)  of our life. That is the reason why we should notice(貌似有点不妥，用focus on 怎么样？） it more. It is a undeinably fact that the invention of Networking started（去掉ed) a new page of human history. With the spread(widespread) of the Internet, people can communicate with each other more easily. For example, we need not to make a conference face to face but to express our view to the other members which are been compress into vedio packets transmited by the Internet. （有点长，不太容易理解，可以压缩一下，比如we can communicate fast through the Internet, for example, video conversations, rather than the long travel to make face-to-face conversations.) Recently, some other applications based on the Internet are increasing rapidly, thereby more money should be cast into the construction of the Internet. % ^6 B: T3 q+ U& z( Q2 f3 bBesides, Internet is not a perfect project which is still being buliting(built), and many problems may bring out（come out) if we do not spend enough energy(resource更好一些吧） on it. Although Internet contribute(s) greatly to our daily lives, it is not without its defects such as the security of the web communities. The fact that every coin have two sides determin(determines) that we should do more work(可以去掉work) to improve the advantages instead of deny it for its disadvantages. Therefore, we should spare no effort to the access of the Internet. ! N$ s8 {+ n( \! Y. |$ V1 x5 _( jLast but not least, with a heathy development of the Internet, the traditional problem, public transportation should also be pay(paid) more attention. The public transportation also contribute directly to the modern society, however, it is not the most serious trouble that we ecountered（encounter).(这段话貌似逻辑有点问题哦，好像在强调public transportation 的重要性，如果可以发展成internet 对public transportation的重要性，比如说网络系统可以用来实时监督交通状况，从而有助于减少traffic jam 之类的）0 Q, h( L; c6 I  W4 b1 G" P8 A  nTo sum up, both the access of the Inernet and public transportation should take（ be taken) into consideration of the government’s plan. While, there is a distinguish when we should manage more than one things, and the more important one( 加上一个----that is, the access to Internet,能够更加明确一些) should be marked out.

bruce520UID: 2634940

5.4
Twenty years from now, people will have more free time(leisure time) tham we do now.

The dramatic development of new technology makes it possible for us to deal with many things with the help of machine. Many peole believe that the with the aid of the modern technology more leisure time can be left in the next twenty years. However, people seem to fail to take into account the fact that the new appliances of the new technology is not so much to make our lives more leisure as accelerate the competion. Therefor, I hold opposite idea and believe that there are no more free time in the future society.

Admittedly, the modern methods, usually more efficient than the traditional way, contribute many to the convenience of the way we halding things nowadays. With the applicance of the modern technology, the productiveness of the industry have been improved qulickly by the revolution of the new technology. For example,as invention of the steamer, the industry of the the human history started a new page. The stastic data show that, the fortune which producted in the 19 century is far outweight the sum of human in the past thousands years. Moreover, the appliance of the new technology also bring us efficiency of our daily working. For instance, with the help of the computer, people can complete a table more agilly than draw it by hand.

Although  the modern progress of the modern technology have improve the efficiency of our life, the stess of our daily lives increses day and day. The effcient society demand its people to fullfill their duties more effective within a more strict deadline. For example, the employyors alaways select their empleyeers by the standard of a completing their job as much as they can and as efficient as they can. That is to say, if the employeers who want to get a job opportunities should pay more time on their job.

Even in the next twenty years, with a future advancement of the technology, the leisure time of our lives can never rise. With the development of the modern society, the increasing demand of popele living conditions require a synchronous innovation of the technology, that is means there are still many things to do in the future. Thereby, the free time in the future.

To sum up, just as the word of Bernard Shaw, "the people who get on in this world are the people who get up and look for circumstances they want, and if they ccannot find them, make them. ", we should accept the fact people who want to hold a favorable position in the future society  could not be left more free time.

bruce520UID: 2634940

5.5号
It is generally believe that people shouldbuy the production of your own country because

it can support the development of economyin their country. This opinion, however, has been

doubted by more and more people who sharethe view that the goods which serve a better

quality should be selected. As far as Iconcerned, among the reasons is that buy the

productions of your country is not a gooddetermination to protect the local economy and

making a shopping decision in the worldwiderange would do good for a
country'sadvancement

of economy in the long run.

First of all, the choice of buying thingswhich made in your own country will not play a

positive role in enhancing the local economy.Many facts have illustrated it already. Most

important of all, as the trend of theglobal economic integration, separated economy body

cannot exist with itself. The World TradeOrganization's appearance has completely proved

this theory. What is more, in order tosearch a development, the local economy activities

should join the global economy family. Forexample, as a important part of the global

economy body, China never stop its effort to jointhe WTO since it established. And it

finally achieve the goal in 2001. In thepast few year, as a member of WTO, China receive


even more impact for the outside world andmake a prominent progress.

In the second place, caring more about thequality but where it produced when choose

commodity not only benefit the consumersnut also can spur the manufacture take more

consideration of the quality of theproductions. For one thing, we often hope to buy

something will worth with its cost. Forexample, if the television set which product in your

country cannot provide a good qualityguarantee you had better to convert your plan to

others. For another thing, with lose theoccupation of the market, the TV set companies in

your country will try their best to developthe new technology to improve themselves.

Last but not lest, people who usuallyprefer to the production which made by the foreign

corporations only is not wise consumerview. Although the life experience tells us that the

goods which are imported from the developedcountries usually provide a high quality, we

cannot never believe it is truth for ever.Just take the case of braking of Toyotaas the

example, many fans of the Toyota cars got hurt both in the physical andmental in this case

for their loyal belief of the well-know brandof "Toyota".

To sum up, make a shopping plan on the viewof consumer-oriental is not only a good concept

for the product or but also for theconsumers themselves. In the consumers' place, they can

obtain a high-quality service is they makea right consumer view. In the other place, for

the manufacture, the healthy consumer viewwill guide them develop in a healthy way.

wyl_stevenUID: 2728535

Twenty years from now, people will have more free time(leisure time) tham we do now.) X, p) [5 w1 d6 Q

# `& I7 r& P, }5 _+ U4 M4 UThe dramatic development of new technology makes it possible for us to deal with many things with the help of machines. Many peole believe that the[删] with the aid of the modern technology more leisure time can be left in the next twenty years. However, people seem to fail to take into account the fact that the new applicances of the new technology are not so much to make our lives with more leisure as to accelerate the competion. Therefore, I hold opposite idea and believe that there are no more free time in the future society.这点就不对了 no more 表示不再……
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Admittedly, the modern methods, usually more efficient than the traditional way, contribute many to the convenience of the way we halding(??) things nowadays(这句不太对 many用错了 the convenience of the way也不对,建议从新再组织). With the application of the modern technology, the productiveness of the industry has been improved greatly by the revolution of the new technology. For example,as invention of the steamer, the industry of the the human history started a new page（可以这样表述吗？industy turn to a new chaptar）. The stastic data shows that, the fortune which producted in the 19 century is far outweight the sum of human in the past thousands years. Moreover, the appliance of the new technology also bring us efficiency of our daily working. For instance, with the help of the computer, people can complete a table more agilly than draw it by hand.这一段貌似和题目关系不大啊…… 有点跑题了
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% r' a6 C. U; b3 {, uAlthough  the modern progress of the modern technology has improve the efficiency of our life, the stess of our daily lives increses day and day. The effcient society demand its people to fullfill their duties more effectively within a more strict deadline. For example, the employers alaways select their empleyees by the standard of a completing their job as much as they can and as best as they can. That is to say, if the employeers who want to get a job opportunities should pay more time on their job.. A3 C: P" Q( ?1 Z

9 D, I' o& F) }6 S. KEven in the next twenty years, with a future advancement of the technology, the leisure time of our lives can never rise. With the development of the modern society, the increasing demand of popele living conditions require a synchronous innovation of the technology, that is means there are still many things to do in the future. Thereby, the free time in the future./ c4 j  ^, @: v7 ?
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To sum up, just as the word of Bernard Shaw, "the people who get on in this world are the people who get up and look for circumstances they want, and if they ccannot find them, make them. ", we should accept the fact that people who want to hold a favorable position in the future society  could not be left more free time.

tonyyoucanUID: 2806157

Twenty years from now, people will have more free time(leisure time) tham（than） we do now.

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The dramatic development of new technology makes it possible for us to deal with many things with the help of machine. Many peole(people) believe that the with the aid of the modern technology more leisure time can be left in the next twenty years. However, people seem to fail to 个人感觉这里 两个to 和 后面的两个 the 放在一起不太好 建议删除一个)take into account the fact that the new appliances of the new technology is not so much to make our lives more leisure as accelerate the competion(competition). Therefor,(Therefore) I hold opposite idea and believe that there are no more free time in the future society.


Admittedly, the modern methods, usually more efficient than the traditional way, contribute many to the convenience of the way we halding(handling) things nowadays（这句话the modern methods作为主语，缺少谓语，contribute不能做the modern methods的谓语。）. With the applicance(appliance) of the modern technology, the productiveness of the industry have been improved qulickly（quickly） by the revolution of the new technology. For example, as invention of the steamer, the industry of the the去掉一个 human history started a new page. The stastic（statistic） data show that, the fortune which producted produced in the 19 century is far outweight exceed the sum of human in the past thousands years. Moreover, the appliance of the new technology also bring us efficiency of our daily working. For instance, with the help of the computer, people can complete a table more agilly
？？ than draw it by hand. 4 ?% n( A# @, J

Although the modern progress of the modern technology have improve the efficiency of our life, the stess stress of our daily lives increses increases day and day（day by day）. The effcient
efficient
society demand its people to fulfill take their duties more effective within a more strict deadline. For example, the employyors employers alaways always select their empleyeers employees by the standard of a completing their job as much as they can and as efficient as they can. That is to say, if the employers who want to get a job opportunities should pay more time on their job.  L( j0 v( c' `! Z* a

Even in the next twenty years, with a future advancement of the technology, the leisure time of our lives can never rise. With the development of the modern society, the increasing demand of popele (people )living conditions require a synchronous innovation of the technology, that is means 去掉 is there are still 将来时（there will still be）many things to do in the future. Thereby, the free time in the future（句子还没写完）.! _+ e" L4 E- f  M" P

To sum up, just as the word of Bernard Shaw, "the people who get on in this world are the people who get up and look for circumstances they want, and if they ccannot can not find them, make them. "（作者真有才）, we should accept the fact people who want to hold a favorable position in the future society  could not be left more free time.

hzd515976083UID: 2487213

8# bruce520 修改见附件

canoe03UID: 2786666

It is generally believe that people should buy the production of your own country because it can support the development of economy in their country. This opinion, however, has been doubted by more and more people who share the view that the goods which serve a better quality should be selected. As far as I concerned, among the reasons is that buy the productions of your country is not a good determination to protect the local economy and making(这个句子有点长，不知道making在这里用对了吗？还是make？) a shopping decision in the worldwide range would do good for a country's advancement of economy in the long run.

First of all, the choice of buying things which made in your own country will not play a positive role in enhancing the local economy. Many facts have illustrated it already. Most important of all, as the trend of the global economic integration, separated economy body cannot exist with itself(也许solely会好点儿). The World Trade Organization's appearance has completely proved this theory. What is more, in order to search a development, the local economy activities should join the global economy family. For example, as a(an) important part of the global economy body, China never stop its effort to join the WTO since it established. And it finally achieve(achieved) the goal in 2001. In the past few year(years), as a member of WTO, China receive even more impact for the outside world and make a prominent progress.(这一段的论据似乎不怎么支持论点)

In the second place, caring more about the quality but where it produced when choose commodity not only benefit the consumers nut(but) also can spur the manufacture take more consideration of the quality of the productions. For one thing, we often hope to buy something will (be) worth with its cost. For example, if the television set which product(made或者manufactured或者produced) in your country cannot provide a good quality guarantee you had better to convert your plan(choice) to others. For another thing, with lose(这里不能用一个动词) the occupation of the market, the TV set companies in your country will try their best to develop the(a) new technology to improve themselves(这里看起来有些别扭，是改进TV公司呢，还是改进质量？).

Last but not lest, people who usually prefer to(不要to) the production which made by the foreign corporations only is not wise consumer view(看的不大懂，句子不是很顺畅，请斟酌). Although the life experience tells us that the goods which are imported from the developed countries usually provide a high quality, we cannot never(could never像楼主这样说的话会有问题的) believe it is truth for ever. Just take the case of braking of Toyota as the(a) example(丰田车的油门踏板问题), many fans of the Toyota cars got hurt both in the physical and mental in this case for their loyal belief of the well-know brand of "Toyota".

To sum up, make a shopping plan on the view of consumer-oriental is not only a good concept for the product or but also for the consumers themselves. In the consumers' place, they can obtain a high-quality service is they make a right consumer view(表述有问题). In the other place, for the manufacture, the healthy consumer view will guide them develop in a healthy way(此话有点不合题).
(楼主开始写得很好，但是到后来就像变了个人儿。。。有些语法错误，有些句子也不大通顺。论据貌似也不那么充分，尤其是第四段，好像又写到反面去了。楼主改改还是很好的一片文章，结构不错的。鉴于本人的英语水平也不怎么样，要是说错了，请谅解，呵呵。。。。)

bruce520UID: 2634940

5.6
The concept that parents makes should  make a decision for their children is somewhat widely accepted, and people who sharing the belief in it assert that children will lose themselves in making a choice without the help of their parents. Nonetheless, it seems to me that there are valid concerns that children should try to decide their own selection when taking into consideration both their mature in characteristic shaping and the ability cultivation.

In the first place, the process that making a choice themselves for their own contribute greately to form a character that to determin things with their own sight. Learn to make a good decision themselves is a valuable opportunity for children to train themselves to adapt their future lives. For example, if been asked to select a high school, children will more familiar with how to judge things in the future than children who make their selection by their parents. With the pratice of making a selection in their own opinion, the children can adapt the real society fastly. What is more, the capacity of make a decision is also a indispensiable demand of achieve in children's future lives. Therefoe, konwing how to make a decision themselves is a siginificant choice for children to cultivate themselves into a determinated man.

For second, make a decision themselves can teached children how to live a life of independence in the future. As the growth of age, children should try to live without their family in their future lives. In that way, try to make a decision is the first step of getting indenpence.

Undeniably, for the reason of age, children usually often lacks of the experience on determination. There are many mistakes they will make when encounter something they must make a choice of. However, it does not matter of those mistakes because this is just the trial of cultivation for children. However parents can provide some advices for children to make a determination to avoid the mistakes as possible as we can.

To sum up, I think although children may make some mistakes in making a decision themselves to some degree, most impacts exerted by the forward pace of the action that making a choice themselves are desirable and beneficial. We should take some measures to guide the direction of how to make a selection themselves in a proper way and minimum the probability of the mistakes they will make.

DaisyTwinsUID: 2797670

楼主举的例子还是很不错的，只是在写复杂句子的时候注意下语法否则很难理解，简单易懂是最重要的，不足之处还请指教，加油！BY DAISYTWINS

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