5月22考的作文练习

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承认自己菜得一塌糊涂，但是不知道为什么还这么勇敢~
准备作文，从昨天，貌似托福备考才踏上正路。今天全面弄吧，写了篇224字的作文，无论如何，它是我写的第一篇托福作文。在整体风貌不变的前提下，把自己认为不对劲的词和句子先改改，稍后上传，写得不好，还请被和我一组的同志们多挑刺。

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5月5号作文，人们应该买自己国家的产品，即使比同类贵
In my opinion, people do need to buy things made in their own country.First of all, No evidences show that things made in their own country in generally have higher price than which made in foreign.Second, to buy things made in one's homeland may creat more alternative oppotunity  for the local people.they may lead the  development of mark which bring benefits to all of the people over the country. Third, commenly, things made in people's own country are approach the mark.In other words, the things need short-distance to be transported,which are more environmentally friendly then things made in other countries.It means that ,it can save fuel resources and may creat less waste and produce less air pollution such as automobile exhaust. In sustainable development needed, people should buy things made in their own country.What's more, inport things which are much cheaper than local ones may lead trade dispute , as any country wants to protect their own business.And some countries like to make their price low to rune other countris' instruction .Of course, a wise man do no willing to let that happen , just for the price of their own things are higher.  
Above all,it is no doult for people to buy things made in their own country.

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In my opinion, people do need to buy things made in their own country. First of all, No evidences show that things made in their own country in generally have higher price than which made in foreign. Second, to buy things made in one's homeland may creat more alternative oppotunity  for the local people. they may lead the  development of mark which bring benefits to all of the people over the country. Third, commenly, things made in people's own country are approach the mark.In other words, the things need short-distance to be transported, which are more environmentally friendly then things made in other countries. It means that ,it can save fuel resources and may creat less waste and produce less air pollution such as automobile exhaust. In sustainable development needed, people should buy things made in their own country.What's more, inport things which are much cheaper than local ones may lead trade dispute , as any country wants to protect their own business. And some countries like to make their price low to rune other countris' instruction .Of course, a wise man do no willing to let that happen , just for the price of their own things are higher.  
Above all, it is no doult for people to buy things made in their own country.

LZ 216个字数 有点不够哦，拼写注意下:-D 最好段落能分清晰，感觉没有开头 中间的body和 开头放在一起 逻辑有点乱，您觉得呢？

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