裸写..跪求意见..我知道写得不好

yanyun1603UID: 2741629

什么东西都没看就现写了一篇..自觉不怎么的，但毕竟还是希望别人能给点意见...
ISSUE 2
The speaker suggests that any kind of competition will have more bad effects than positive ones on most societies. But as we all know, as competition is the most impossible thing to avoid in this era, if the truth is just like what the speaker says, then the whole human race's evolution would become a thorough tragedy for it has been accompanied by competition all the way.

Grantedly, just like most people, I never truly enjoy any form of competition myself. In a competition, all one’s success only means a failure to the other. This inevitable monster follows people everywhere. As, in most cases, people have no choice but face it, we can say that there is actually no winner in a competition. Most of the times they just keep you in pressure and drive you seeking after something impassively------something that you even don’t know whether you want or not. Sometimes those matches even reduce friends to strangers, lovers to enemies. If you once bought a book in university not because you really enjoyed it but just your roommate had borrowed the same one from the library several days before, then you will understand it.

Although competition exerts pressure on people, I have to admit that it does play a crucial role in most societies. Can’t endure the atmosphere of people fighting with each other anymore, many people nowadays yearn that kind of life led by the two guys in the film, The Fight Club, which encourages people to escape from the society so that to avoid competition. When it comes to me, I’d like to say I want to burn all my IKA furniture into ashes, live in a house with broken roofs and care nothing but eat, sleep and sex too. However, in real life, I know I will never choose to act that. Not because I’m not brave enough, but I think once a person was born, there are following responsibilities he has to take. Lots of things are waiting for us to deal with and a great number of people who are still suffering are waiting for us to take care. Competition can be used to pick out the most capable people for our society, or we can say, the most suitable people to do various things. In politics, in economy, in every aspect of our life, if everyone tries to escape from competition, then no talent people will stand out to deal with the tough things that occur in the development of societies and the road of future may seems dim as a result of it.

Besides ensuring that everyone is at his suitable position, the pressure caused by competition which we all hate can be judged from other angles. In some cases it can be turned into a stimulus when treated properly which can be used to stimulate people or society to be more devoted to their
self-development. Here’s a not that good example, maybe too extreme, but it’s imagic. The sense of competition irritated by the two world wars and the cold war does contribute to the growth of the world’s military force to a great extent. We may hold negative opinions towards the process sometimes, but we should ponder the consequences justly.

In sum, despite the gloomy feelings that competitions may leave people, they always have long term benefits for most societies. Competitions give impetus to development. There is an old saying :not developing is equal to recession. A Society without competition is doomed to step back to it’s origin no matter how harmonious it may seem superficially.

yanyun1603UID: 2741629

真的没人给我点意见每...跪求啊

海王泪UID: 2673613

让自己的作文被改主要有以下几种途径：
1、参与/组建互助小组；
2、主动出击，到别人的习作中改别人的文章，然后留下连接请求回拍，绝大部分情况下版友都会很负责的回拍的；
3、斑竹定期会开习作修改铺，在里面占位置就可以让斑竹修改你的习作；
4、同主题写作时会规定参与的版友按照一定的回贴顺序进行互改；
5、坐等别人来拍，由于习作量很大，这种概率很小，所以效率也很低，建议不要采用。

建议主动出击修改他人文章并留链回拍，也可以进而认识版友建立长期伙伴关系。^_^

yanyun1603UID: 2741629

谢谢。。 3# 海王泪

yanyun1603UID: 2741629

楼上怎么了,,,