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荧荧UID: 134343

请给点意见.谢谢. 题目如下:
The true strengh of a country is best demonstrated by the willingness of its government to tolerate challenges from its owncitizens.

Does political toleration add to the strength of a country? As it ameliorates the relationship between the government and the public, favoring improving efficiency of the government, I agree with the title, regarding it as very important contribution to the strength of a country.
Political toleration to the challenge from citizens helps unite the government and the public together to develop a country. As common experience tells us, you will gain esteems and forgiveness from those who hold hostile attitude towards you. Similarly, if government does not present to be presumptuous and arbitrary pose, instead, focusing on the root of dissatisfactions well as well as best solutions and placing them on an equal position with itself, there would be more harmony between them. But extreme suppression will only provoke more aggression on people and affirm their will to go on challenging, which intensify the conflict, harming both sides. As a good case in point, in the Second World War, the betrayal deeds of Chinese government at that time exasperated reprobation throughout the country. A lot of petitions and large-scale demonstrations with the will to persuade the government to immediately plunge into the war against Japanese fascism sprang up. However, the government not only refused to satisfy with people’s demand, but also committed atrocious suppression, which violated even more righteous people. The more victims in the suppression, the more demonstration held, extremely weakening cohesion of the country and resulting the final collapse of the government.
The tendency to draw the focus of government’s attention on solving problems rather than suppression, toleration bringing more attention on problems enables the government to find out more flaws of its work and improve performance. In the process of getting close to problems causing sharp discrepancies, the government attains to get full observation of the negative effects of their policies and accumulation a lot of worthwhile suggestions from the people, which both facilitates the government to adopt effective measures in the future work. For example, in the early days of People’s Republic of China, left-side mistakes lead the government to apply a set of extreme economical policies to agriculture, which imposed great burden on farmers and heavily inhibited the development of agriculture. But it quickly wakes up after receiving complaints from farmers. After careful investigation and full discussion on problems reflected, a series of adjustment was made, which regains economical vitality for the village and more convince from the people for the government.
However, here comes a problem, should the government completely restrain its own principles and tolerate all challenges from citizens including evil ones? Definitely no. Government should never be moderate to commission threatening the people’s interests and the development of the country. It is up to make a set of laws to squash them.
In sum, with the relationship between the government and the people playing an important role in  strengthening the country, government has to resort to toleration of challenges of citizens except evil ones.

ken0405UID: 124994

这个文章比较头疼
当时我写的
用了jefferson的newspaper
还有martin luther king  jr。的civil disobedience
还有nixon的watergate scandel

ken0405UID: 124994

The true strengh of a country is best demonstrated by the willingness of its government to tolerate challenges from its owncitizens.

Does political toleration add to the strength of a country? As it ameliorates the relationship between the government and the public, favoring improving efficiency of the government, I agree with the title, regarding it as very important contribution to the strength of a country.(本文观点)

Political toleration to the challenge from citizens helps unite the government and the public together to develop a country.（主题句，我觉得再写点enhance national cohesion and patriotism 会跟好的）As common experience tells us, you will gain esteems and forgiveness from those who hold hostile attitude towards you. Similarly, if government does not present to be presumptuous and arbitrary pose, instead, focusing on the root of dissatisfactions well as well as best solutions and placing them on an equal position with itself, there would be more harmony between them. But extreme suppression will only provoke more aggression on people and affirm their will to go on challenging, which intensify the conflict, harming both sides. As a good case in point, in the Second World War, the betrayal deeds of Chinese government at that time exasperated reprobation throughout the country. A lot of petitions and large-scale demonstrations with the will to persuade the government to immediately plunge into the war against Japanese fascism sprang up. However, the government not only refused to satisfy with people’s demand, but also committed atrocious suppression, which violated even more righteous people. The more victims in the suppression, the more demonstration held, extremely weakening cohesion of the country and resulting the final collapse of the government. （你这段说了tolerance的好和坏处，我个人认为分会好一点）

The tendency to draw the focus of government’s attention on solving problems rather than suppression, toleration bringing more attention on problems enables the government to find out more flaws of its work and improve performance.主题句In the process of getting close to problems causing sharp discrepancies, the government attains to get full observation of the negative effects of their policies and accumulation a lot of worthwhile suggestions from the people, which both facilitates the government to adopt effective measures in the future work. For example, in the early days of People’s Republic of China, left-side mistakes lead the government to apply a set of extreme economical policies to agriculture, which imposed great burden on farmers and heavily inhibited the development of agriculture. But it quickly wakes up after receiving complaints from farmers. After careful investigation and full discussion on problems reflected, a series of adjustment was made, which regains economical vitality for the village and more convince from the people for the government.（和第一段是一个意思吧？是不是分开说好点，有它怎么好，没它有怎么不好）

However, here comes a problem, should the government completely restrain its own principles and tolerate all challenges from citizens including evil ones? Definitely no. Government should never be moderate to commission threatening the people’s interests and the development of the country. It is up to make a set of laws to squash them. （你让步没味道，我觉得举个例子看看？）

In sum, with the relationship between the government and the people playing an important role in strengthening the country, government has to resort to toleration of challenges of citizens except evil ones.（分情况对待，呵呵前几天有一篇说老师该不该到外面兼职的文章，你可看看，是每一品里的，我记得）
个人观点
还要叫斑竹看看才好
如果只我看
而斑竹不看的话
那就是我的不好了
呵呵
一家的话
只可以参考
我不是牛人
呵呵

tomatoeggsUID: 82073

The true strength of a country is best demonstrated by the willingness of its government to tolerate challenges from its own citizens.

Does political toleration add to the strength of a country? As it ameliorates（这个词太文绉绉了，很少用的。） the relationship between the government and the public, favoring improving efficiency of the government, I agree with the title, regarding it as very important contribution to the strength of a country.最后一句表达不太清晰。

Political toleration to the challenge from citizens helps unite the government and the public together to develop a country. As common experience tells us, you will gain esteems and forgiveness from those who hold hostile attitude towards you（这一句应改为： You will gain esteems if you forgive those who hold hostility towards you.）. Similarly, if government does not present to be presumptuous and arbitrary pose, instead, focusing on the root of dissatisfactions well as well as best solutions and placing them on an equal position with itself, there would be more harmony between them. But extreme suppression will only provoke more aggression on people and affirm their will to go on challenging, which intensify the conflict, harming both sides. As a good case in point, in the Second World War, the betrayal deeds of Chinese government at that time exasperated reprobation throughout the country. A lot of petitions and large-scale demonstrations with the will to persuade the government to immediately plunge into the war against Japanese fascism sprang up. However, the government not only refused to satisfy with people’s demand, but also committed atrocious suppression, which violated even more righteous people. The more victims in the suppression, the more demonstration held, extremely weakening cohesion of the country and resulting the final collapse of the government.
如果你举的例子是有关国民党的，我想这欠妥。要想想老米和国民党的关系！即使是用了这个例子，我希望你还是好好组织一下语言，因为从倒数第三句开始表达很有问题，有种不知所云的感觉。另，能否举一举全世界都熟悉的例子？

The tendency to draw the focus of government’s attention on solving problems rather than suppression, toleration bringing more attention on problems enables the government to find out more flaws of its work and improve performance. In the process of getting close to problems causing sharp discrepancies, the government attains to get full observation of the negative effects of their policies and accumulation a lot of worthwhile suggestions from the people, which both facilitates the government to adopt effective measures in the future work. For example, in the early days of People’s Republic of China, left-side mistakes lead the government to apply a set of extreme economical policies to agriculture, which imposed great burden on farmers and heavily inhibited the development of agriculture. But it quickly wakes up after receiving complaints from farmers. After careful investigation and full discussion on problems reflected, a series of adjustment was made, which regains economical vitality for the village and more convince from the people for the government.

However, here comes a problem, should the government completely restrain its own principles and tolerate all challenges from citizens including evil ones? Definitely no. Government should never be moderate to commission threatening the people’s interests and the development of the country. It is up to make a set of laws to squash them.

In sum, with the relationship between the government and the people playing an important role in strengthening the country, government has to resort to toleration of challenges of citizens except evil ones.最后一段还要提一提这是conditional tolerance. 建议：整篇重新整理一下思绪和语言。期待你的修改篇。并不一定急着去写其它类型的文章了。

荧荧UID: 134343

真的谢谢你们！下面是我的修改篇， 请继续给以批评指正。再次感谢！

In terms of the problem of whether political toleration add to the strength of country, I agree with the title if the challenge is reasonable, for which not only helps stabilize the society but also contribute to improve performance of the government, both crucial to strengthen a country.
Demonstrations serve as one of crucial factors threatening the stability as well as prosperousness of a country, requiring governments’ toleration to deal with them well. Demonstrations intending to be against government’s certain policy often causes great hostility between citizens and the government, tending to sharpen discrepancies, which heavily shakes the base of a society. Take strikes for example, as the creator of the wealth of the whole society, workers’ refusal to go on production will inevitably cause a great damage to social productivity. Especially in department of transportation, strikes will immediately result the whole system to fall into paralysis. For the sake of normal operation of the society, on the tine of swords of discrepancies, government could only choose to tolerate to e relax discrepancies in some degree.
By drawing more of the government’s attention to the essence of potential problems, toleration endows the government a pair of glasses enabling it to focus on flaws existing in work. Having been calmed down to how to solve problems by toleration, the government attains to get full observation of the negative effects of their policies and accumulation a lot of worthwhile suggestions from the people. On the basis of these truest materials directly from citizens, it is possible for the government to make effective adjustments and help quicken the pace of development. For example, in the early days of People’s Republic of China, left-side mistakes lead the government to apply a set of extreme economical policies to agriculture, which imposed great burden on farmers and heavily inhibited the development of agriculture. But complaints immediately wake up the government to careful investigation and full discussion on problems reflected, a series of adjustment was accompanied at the same time. So that reputation was regained, with even more convince from citizens putting on the government, which set good base for future effective application of new policies.
However, here comes a problem, should the government completely restrain its own principles and tolerate all challenges from citizens including evil ones? Definitely no. Government should never be moderate to commission threatening the people’s interests and the development of the country. It is up to make a set of laws to squash them. For instance, no government will not and should not tolerate any challenge committed by terrorists.
In sum, challenges confined to no violation to morals, common values and interest of multitudes from citizens should be treated with more toleration rather than suppression, on considering their influence on relationship between government and citizens as well as the function as a mirror to reflect latent problems on governments’ performance.

荧荧UID: 134343

请给予修改篇的平改。谢谢

ken0405UID: 124994

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