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Methods of Eliminating Wordiness 学习笔记
心直口快~去没必要修饰，没必要矫情 少用名词加介词
1. Eliminate unnecessary determiners and modifiers
Wordy->Concise 去掉kind /sort/ type of,所谓强调的actually,particular 之流
Any particular type of dessert is fine with me.(去掉type of )
Balancing the budget by Friday is an impossibility without some kind of extra help.(去掉kind of)
Wordy
For all intents and purposes, American industrial productivity generally depends on certain factors that are really more psychological in kind than of any given technological aspect.
2. Change phrases into single words
Wordy ->Concise
The employee with ambition... ambitous
The department showing the best performance... best-performing
Jeff Converse, our chief of consulting, suggested at our last board meeting the installation of microfilm equipment in the department of data processing. 介词+名词->V. or Ad.
As you carefully read what you have written to improve your wording and catch small errors of spelling, punctuation, and so on, the thing to do before you do anything else is to try to see where a series of words expressing action could replace the ideas found in nouns rather than verbs.
3. Change unnecessary that, who, and which clauses into phrases
少用定语从句。。。
Wordy
The report, which was released recently...
4. Avoid overusing expletives at the beginning of sentences
少用 phrases of the form it + be-verb or there + be-verb. followed by a noun and a relative clause beginning with that, which, or who Wordy
It is the governor who signs or vetoes bills.
There are four rules that should be observed: ...
5. Use active rather than passive verbs
多用主动
6. Avoid overusing noun forms of verbs
名词至动词
7. Reword unnecessary infinitive phrases
不定式。。。。
Some infinitive phrases can be converted into finite verbs or brief noun phrases. Making such changes also often results in the replacement of a be-verb with an action verb.
Wordy
The duty of a clerk is to check all incoming mail and to record it.
A shortage of tellers at our branch office on Friday and Saturday during rush hours has caused customers to become dissatisfied with service.
8. Replace circumlocutions with direct expressions
Wordy
At this/that point in time...Now,then
In accordance with your request...as you requeated
Here are some other common circumlocutions that can be compressed into just one word:
好表。自己留了不贴。。。写作文时 嘿嘿凑字数把那表右边换左边~~~~~
Wordy
It is possible that nothing will come of these preparations.
She has the ability to influence the outcome.
It is necessary that we take a stand on this pressing issue.
Redundant Categories
常识知道是描述啥类的，就没必要附类名了
Wordy
During that time period, many car buyers preferred cars that were pink in color and shiny in appearance.
The microscope revealed a group of organisms that were round in shape and peculiar in nature. | 
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