Argument1 我的第一篇，请多多指教

Roxy90UID: 2855005

我的第一篇Argument，希望大家多多指教。万分感谢！！

TOPIC: ARGUMENT1 - The following appeared in a memorandum written by the vice president of Nature's Way, a chain of stores selling health food and other health-related products.
"Previous experience has shown that our stores are most profitable in areas where residents are highly concerned with leading healthy lives. We should therefore build our next new store in Plainsville, which has many such residents. Plainsville merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs. The local health club, which nearly closed five years ago due to lack of business, has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. We can even anticipate a new generation of customers: Plainsville's schoolchildren are required to participate in a 'fitness for life' program, which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age."


The argument that building a new store in Plainsville where people are highly concerned with health will make a profit for Nature's Way is well-presented, but not well-reasoned. It omits some important points that must be addressed to substantiate the argument.

The first dubious assumption is that the high demand for running shoes and exercise clothing at all time, which is reported by local merchants, reveals that people in Plainsville care about health. But it is unwarranted. What if it is a fashionable trend to wear sports clothes in Plainsville, but nothing about health? What if people here are not required to wear ties and suits for work, so they feel like wearing running shoes and exercise clothing because of their comfort and cheap? Since the arguer fails to address the alternatives above, this assumption is weakened.

The second poor assumption is that the phenomenon that the local health club backs to life after five-year's closure reflects people's concerns with health. However, the conclusion of this statement may be weakened by demonstrating another possible cause of its prosperity. If improved economic conditions and enhanced management of the club's structure lead to a significantly increased demand among residents, the rise in demand for the local health club would provide an alternative explanation for the prosperity and weaken the argument.

The third questonable assumption is that, even assuming people in Plainsville pay lots of attention on health, they will also buy health food. Nevertheless, the reasoning of line is problematic. It is possible that they do not believe that health food or other health-related products are helpful, but would like to spend time and money on doing exercise. Especially for the new generation of Plainsville, perhaps the main point of 'fitness for life' program is to let children do more exercise and strengthen their body. In this sense, the new store of Nature's Way might not be suitable to build in Plainsville.

Since the argument leaves several key issues, it is not sound or persuasive. To strengthen the argument, the arguer should include the items discussed above. In this sense, the arguer should find more information to support the point and enable the argument more thorough and convincing.

zhangjunzjUID: 2658970

第一篇能写成这样已经很不错了。虽然论据方面还不是很有强的说服力，但是可以看出有你自己的风格和特色。很好，继续保持

Roxy90UID: 2855005

谢谢您的回复，让我看到了希望呢
那怎样才能加强论据的说服力呢

Roxy90UID: 2855005

谢谢您的回复，让我看到了希望呢
那怎样才能加强论据的说服力呢

zhangjunzjUID: 2658970

论据的说服力我也很难具体说明，但我觉得还是你在反驳是找的切入点吧，一般来说ARGUMENT的错误都差得不多，关键是看你能否看出是哪一类的错误，看出之后还要列举一些其他的可能性，对于可能性的列举就是论据的所在，我觉得可能性不在于多，在于你能把其中之一清楚明白的详细阐述出来，而不是一两句话带过。这就是所谓的有说服力吧。
我理解的，不知道帮上你没