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According to a recent statistic on the internet, colleges in growing numbers require all students to take basic science classes even though they are not this major. The majority of people are against it, considering extra studies bring about unhealthy impact on physical growth of students. Contrary to the opinion of numerous people is my heartleft agreement with the idea that students should all take basic science curriculums. Thus they can make a great number of friends; also, it will enhance their job opportunities in the future.
   To begin with, it will increase their job opportunities in the future by taking these courses. In the first place, the students' knowledge will expand, especially for those whose major is not about science. Comparing a person with broad knowledge with another one without, the company would definitely choose the first one. In the second place, obviously, the man taking those curriculums would have more things to talk about with others. When you find the same topic with the superintendent, he will be more likely to accept you.
  Another advantages to taking science classes is that the students will have more chances to succeed in their future causes. When he take these classes, he may meet hundreds of people, consequently he will make lots of friends, which are crucial to their future success. Also, if he become a leader in a science company, it is better to him to make some best choices, which are to his enterprise what water is to a fish. What's more, when a person handle some basic scientific knowledge, such as how to eat is good for health, what's the best way to take exercise and so on.，he would have good physical fitness and live longer. The longer he lives , the more likely he will be succeed.
  Nonetheless, there are still millions of people hold the opinion that taking extra courses will bring about unhealthy impact on physical growth of students. They argue that the students are already busy nowadays, if taking more courses, they will have less time to take exercise, in consequence their physical fitness will be weaker and weaker, while health is the basic equipment of a person. So they are against it.
   Although there are some disadvantages to taking science classes, they mean nothing when the advantages are taken into consideration. By having these courses, not only can you enhance your job opportunities in the future, but also increase the chances to success. From my point of view, it is the best choice for students to taking science classes.

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According to a recent statistic on the internet, colleges in growing numbers require all students to take basic science classes even though they are not this major. The majority of people are against it, considering extra studies bring about unhealthy impact on physical growth of students. Contrary to the opinion of numerous people is my heartleft(heartfelt) agreement(disagreement)这种观点性错误尽量避免哦 with the idea that students should all take basic science curriculums. Thus they can make a great number of friends; also, it will enhance their job opportunities in the future.
* _! s7 V2 \( i% _0 z9 k   To begin with, it will increase their job opportunities in the future by taking these courses. In the first place, the students' knowledge will expand, especially for those whose major is not about science. Comparing a person with broad knowledge with another one without, the company would definitely choose the first one.（再深入说一下basic science curriculum的在这方面的好处更好） In the second place, obviously, the man taking those curriculums would have more things to talk about with others. When you find the same topic with the superintendent, he will be more likely to accept you.
\Another advantages to taking science classes is that the students will have more chances to succeed in their future causes. When he take(takes) these classes, he may meet hundreds of people, consequently he will make lots of friends(建议改成有更多机会MAKE FRIENDS), which are crucial to their future success. Also, if he become a leader in a science company, it is better to him to make some best choices, which are to his enterprise what water is to a fish. What's more, when a person handle some basic scientific knowledge, such as how to eat is good for health, what's the best way to take exercise and so on.，he would have good physical fitness and live longer. The longer he lives , the more likely he will be succeed.
Nonetheless, there are still millions of people hold the opinion that taking extra courses will bring about unhealthy impact on physical growth of students. They argue that the students are already busy nowadays, if taking more courses, they will have less time to take exercise, in consequence their physical fitness will be weaker and weaker, while health is the basic equipment of a person. So they are against it
   Although there are some disadvantages to taking science classes, they mean nothing when the advantages are taken into consideration. By having these courses, not only can you enhance your job opportunities in the future, but also increase the chances to success. From my point of view, it is the best choice for students to taking science classes.
作者的思维很发散，想到的很多理由都很不错，句子、单词都用的很好。但是，感觉每个论点都有一些散，建议不要写太多点，紧紧捉住其中几个深入分析一下，越specific越好。个人意见哦~加油