argument11--欢迎拍文7月17日作业

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT11 - The following appeared in a memo from the mayor of the town of West Egg.

"Two years ago, our consultants predicted that West Egg's landfill, which is used for garbage disposal, would be completely filled within five years. During the past two years, however, town residents have been recycling twice as much aluminum and paper as they did in previous years. Next month the amount of material recycled should further increase, since charges for garbage pickup will double. Furthermore, over ninety percent of the respondents to a recent survey said that they would do more recycling in the future. Because of our residents' strong commitment to recycling, the available space in our landfill should last for considerably longer than predicted."
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TIME: 00:30:00
DATE: 2010-07-17 15:40:57

In the memo of the town of West Egg, the author says that the available space in their land fill should last for considerably longer than predicted because of their residents' strong commitment to recycling. However there are several logical flaws make the conclusion unconvincing.

Firstly, the argument only refers to the recycling of garbage like aluminum and paper in the past two years. That is to say the mayor leaves other kinds of garbage like plastic and industrial waste out of his or her consideration without any further information. Without the proportion of aluminum and paper, we cannot draw a conclusion about whether the residents' measures of recycling have really played a positive role in preserving their available space in their land fill. There's possibility that other kinds of garbage have surged its increase sharply, and the recycling of aluminum and paper played only a small part.

Furthermore, even if we can substantiate what the forgoing assumptions that they have constructively preserved available space by recycling. However only cites what have been and will be recycled only involves one side of factors that have effects on the garbage disposal. Since more they recycle not means less garbage. Only with the newly added amount of garbage minus the amount they recycled we can know the net amount garbage that will dispose.

Even if the amount of material recycled further increased, without operations, they can still not guarantee their achievement of their aim.
As to garbage disposal, the crucial part is people's living habits and customs. That is to say the government and residents should carry out a more comprehensive system of measure but not only increasing recycling and recycled materials.

Furthermore the author provides us a data to support the conclusion, which is not enough and also not convincing.
As a common sense, not only individuals are creating garbage, the most important factor that should not be left behind is company. Even if the involved person is a generalized concept of people that contains business entity, without consideration of proportion of garbage each of them produces, the cited ninety percent is not enough to make people optimistic. Without more detailed study, even with resident’s commitment to recycling, the conclusion of the memo is still unconvincing.
Moreover, garbage is only one factor that may encroach the available space in their landfill, only with this factor and without consideration of others, the conclusion of the memo is in absence of acceptable grounds. It is a common phenomenon that illegal construction and business are engulfing our cities’ available spaces.
In summary, what the memo used to support the reason are lacking information and further study. The survey and facts need other detailed data together to make the conclusion convincing.

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In the memo of the town of West Egg, the author says that the available space in their land fill should last for considerably longer than predicted because of their residents' strong commitment to recycling. However there are several logical flaws make （making）the conclusion unconvincing.
Firstly, the argument only refers to the recycling of garbage like aluminum and paper in the past two years. That is to say the mayor leaves other kinds of garbage like plastic and industrial waste out of his or her consideration without any further information. Without the proportion of aluminum and paper, we cannot draw a conclusion about whether the residents' measures of recycling have really played a positive role in preserving their available space in their land fill. There's possibility that other kinds of garbage have surged its increase sharply, and the recycling of aluminum and paper played only a small part.
Furthermore, even if we can substantiate what the forgoing assumptions that they have constructively preserved available space by recycling. However only cites what have been and will be recycled only involves one side of factors that have effects on the garbage disposal. Since more they recycle not means less garbage. Only with the newly added amount of garbage minus the amount they recycled we can（can we倒装） know the net amount garbage that will dispose.
Even if the amount of material recycled further increased, without operations, they can still not guarantee their achievement of their aim.
As to garbage disposal, the crucial part is people's living habits and customs. That is to say the government and residents should carry out a more comprehensive system of measure but not only increasing recycling and recycled materials.
Furthermore the author provides us a data to support the conclusion, which is not enough and also not convincing.
As a common sense, not only individuals are creating garbage, the most important factor that should not be left behind is company. Even if the involved person is a generalized concept of people that contains business entity, without consideration of proportion of garbage each of them produces, the cited ninety percent is not enough to make people optimistic. Without more detailed study, even with resident’s commitment to recycling, the conclusion of the memo is still unconvincing.


Moreover, garbage is only one factor that may encroach the available space in their landfill, only with this factor and without consideration of others, the conclusion of the memo is in absence of acceptable grounds. It is a common phenomenon that illegal construction and business are engulfing our cities’ available spaces.


In summary, what the memo used to support the reason are lacking information and further study. The survey and facts need other detailed data together to make the conclusion convincing.

语言成熟流畅，阐述观点时直截了当。
觉得倒数第二段可有可无，文中说的是有其他方式吞食城市的可利用土地，而题中主要说的是可用填埋垃圾的土地，对上文攻击没有增添力量。
楼主的思路别有特色，想问下是有意而为之的吗？以避免撞车或雷同？

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2# Ocean~Spray
是有意而为之，这也有状态的关系，今天写起来比较顺手，可能和题目有关吧。对于你，我建议你尽量使自己思路开阔，然后也会心情比较顺畅，我说的是写作文的时候