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小囧字UID: 2752429

上次贴错了。。。太对不起了。。。。
0716
Allstudents should be required to take basic science classes even if they are notthis major.
Facing high speed of science developing, itcost more and more time to keep up with the latest technology. Some argumentfocus on whether we should ignore the basic science.
There are many reasons for standingpositive side.
Without saying that themost advanced science stands on the ground of the basic ones, it is “commonsense” which is used widely in society. That is to say, no matter howprofessional a person is, he use some basic things to deal with daily things aswell. Could you image a chemist who doesn’t have any knowledge of maths have aeasy life? Everything, even seemed so stupid, will turn to a huge obstacle whenyou don’t learn or experience—of course, on the other hand, experience isanother kind of study. Now, It leads us to another reason to spend time inthese “old theory”. Review history, you can find a hardworking story behindevery finding. Thousands of scientists work for truth day and night. Paying moreattention to basic is memorialize for their contribution. What’s more, thereisn’t just memory on the foundation, but also spiritual education. It is importantfor researchers to be ready to devote to investigation . Doing research ishard, but it is worthy.
On contrary, there are some neglect voice. Theyinsist “study what you need”, unlike the first people, they define knowledge as“what they major in.” Considering that science is developing sophisticate, itis hard to keep up with the change in spite of studying basic which they arenot major
Inmy point of view, even if take knowledge who are major, it is more important tohave a good foundation of science. To learn the knowledge who doesn’t majorgives man wide vision. Refer to wide vision, more and more findings happen inthe crossing area of many fields. It is a sign: it is essential to study foundationof technology

longxue26UID: 2687755

楼主 有没有word的

您这贴上去的都是作文的全部?

longxue26UID: 2687755

改完了 有问题直接找我吧
也辛苦同学批改我的作文了

小囧字UID: 2752429

0729Doyou agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people should tryseveral different jobs before they take a long term career.
Work is a way to contribute one’s share to society.Today, with the development of people’s cognition, many people regard career tobe a way to recognize personally value. That is the reason why many peopleconfuse when facing the determination of career.
On this background, more and more peoplechose trial many jobs instead of taking one. There are some remarkable reasonsfor doing this.
Considering the speedy development ofinternet technology, handling subjects is no longer different as before. The computermakes all the knowledge available. Do you want to be an accountant? What youneed is a computer with wiifi, what you need to do is just googling it. Thenyou can learn it wherever you want. Especial for young, when experimentdifferent jobs, they are able to fix their thought about career. That will benefittheir whole life. In this aspect, young people should try some possibilities.
There is an old Chinese saying “knowledgeis no burden.” Kinds of work can be regard as a challenge to push young to learn, to communicate, to make mistake and to solve. It wouldn’t be a bad thing. An recentlystudy demonstrates that people who have done several jobs are more approachingto achieve their goals. Indeed , this kind of people always have objectivecognition about environment and their ability.
Compared with the supportive opinion,people think it is useless to try different things. Reviewing history, focusingis important for people to become top in his career. And changeable, is a phenomenonof regardless, which has huge damage to one’s way becoming excellent. What isworse, a changeable people probably have no idea about which career to chooseforever.
Without considering the personal problemabout choice, every job will be a series of repeatition when you done it. Peoplealways hate whatever job they take up instead of loving it. Consulting friends around,few people “love” their job, they just treat job as “job”.
In conclusion, the view of “regarding firstjob as the last one” maybe a good way to have a peaceful life, but I prefer tohave more jobs before making final decision. More practice could give youthmore chance to prepare for the difficult which will preface in their career, orat least to steel their wills. It is an indispensable quality to become successful.
不好意思。。。不会插入附件。。。

anitaxjaUID: 2758421

Work is a way to contribute one’s share to society.Today, with the development of people’s cognition(cognition不宜和development连用，至于用什么我暂时木有idea..), many people regard career to be a way to recognize personally(personal) value. That is the reason why many people are confused when facing the determination of career. On this background, more and more people chose trial many jobs instead of taking one (try several jobs before determine their final career). There are some remarkable reasonsfor doing this. Considering the speedy development of internet technology, handling subjects is no longer different as before. The computer makes all the knowledge available. Do you want to be an accountant? What you need is a computer with wiifi, what you need to do is just googling it. Then you can learn it(指代不清，建议改为the skills) wherever you want. Especially for youngsters, when experiment(experiencing) different jobs, they are able to fix(不准确) their thought about career. That will benefit their whole life. In this aspect, young people should try some possibilities.(possibilities在之前都没提到过，这里突然冒出来很突兀，还不如用different jobs) There is an old Chinese saying “knowledge is no burden.” Different kind of work can be regard as a challenge to push youngsters to learn, to communicate, to make mistake and to solve. It wouldn’t be a bad thing. An recently study demonstrates that people who have done several jobs are more approaching to achieve(achieving，approach to中的to是介词) their goals. Indeed , this kind of people always have objective(clear) cognition about environment and their ability. Compared with the supportive opinion,people think it is useless to try different things. Reviewing history, focusing is important for people to become top in his career. And changeable, is a phenomenon of regardless, which has huge damage to one’s way becoming excellent.(i cannot figure out your point by these two sentences!)What is worse, a changeable people probably have no idea about which career to chooseforever. Without considering the personal problem about choice, every job will be a series of repeatition when you done it. People always hate whatever job they take up instead of loving it. Consulting friends around,few people “love” their job, they just treat job as “job”. $ ^0 u( F5 }7 X+ i5 V% ` H In conclusion, the view of “regarding firstjob as the last one” maybe a good way to have a peaceful life, but I prefer tohave more jobs before making final decision. More practice could give youthmore chance to prepare for the difficult which will preface in their career, orat least to steel their wills. It is an indispensable quality to become successful.8 v% l 我觉得LZ的很多意思都没有表达清楚，语法和逻辑结构上也有不少问题。有点CHINGLISH的味道。另外，观点也不是很清晰，为什么不把主题句放在top sentence呢？另外，题目要求的是对该说法阐述你的理由，而不是默认该说法正确，然后给出解释。当然了，这两种做法的具体实现内容相近，但是还是不可以混为一谈。建议LZ多操练。我的点评可能有些直接，望LZ谅解，大家一起进步吧

hachi1991UID: 2586806

Work is a way to contribute one’s share to society.Today, with the development of people’s cognition, many people regard career to be (as) a way to recognize personally (personal or individual) value. That is the reason why many people are confused when facing the determination of career. (^Based) On this background, more and more people chose trial many jobs instead of taking one(choose to try different jobs before picking one as a long-term career.恩，个人认为，在自己想不出比较圆满的句子的情况下，参考topic的句子并非不可取~ ) . There are some remarkable reasons for doing this.

Considering (Thank to) the speedy development of internet technology, handling subjects is no longer (^as) different(difficult?) as before. The(删) computer makes all the knowledge available. Do you want to be an accountant? What (All that 是不是好一点) you need is a computer with wi-fi, what you need to do is just googling（to google） it. Then you can learn(study on) it wherever you want (to). Especial(ly) for young people, when experiment (experiencing) different jobs, they are able to fix their thought about career. That will benefi ttheir whole life. In this aspect, young people should try some possibilities.
There is an old Chinese saying “knowledgeis no burden.” Kinds of work can be regard as a challenge to push young to learn, to communicate, to make mistake and to solve. It wouldn’t be a bad thing. An recentlystudy demonstrates that people who have done several jobs are more approachingto achieve their goals. Indeed , this kind of people always have objectivecognition about environment and their ability.5 @( w7 A! O# h9 `6 e) }
Compared with the supportive opinion,people think it is useless to try different things. Reviewing history, focusingis important for people to become top in his career. And changeable, is a phenomenonof regardless, which has huge damage to one’s way becoming excellent. What isworse, a changeable people probably have no idea about which career to chooseforever.
Without considering the personal problemabout choice, every job will be a series of repeatition when you done it. Peoplealways hate whatever job they take up instead of loving it. Consulting friends around,few people “love” their job, they just treat job as “job”. , q6 _- L$ H; b0 b+ t" [; v+ n/ {
In conclusion, the view of “regarding firstjob as the last one” maybe a good way to have a peaceful life, but I prefer tohave more jobs before making final decision. More practice could give youthmore chance to prepare for the difficult which will preface in their career, orat least to steel their wills. It is an indispensable quality to become successful.

细节方面Anita同学都改得相当认真了~我看了一下，觉得差不多是我想要改的了~
这里我主要提一些建议吧~
第一，思路清晰很重要，虽然说每段开头列个一二三可能会显得很死板，但是至少一目了然，知道你想要讲的是什么~最好每段都有topical sentence~
第二，小囧是不是还不习惯英文的打字，这方面要多多练习哦，在英文打字方面中国学生都比较慢，刚开始打的时候多少都会有些不习惯，但练得多了慢慢就会好的~
第三，用词的准确度以及基本的词性方面，小囧可能刚刚开始准备，相信随着词汇量的扩展，以及阅读练习的增多，这方面会有很大提高的~
基本就是这些了，这样说还OK吧？有什么问题大家讨论~哈哈`

小囧字UID: 2752429

0803Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A job with more vacation time but a low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation time.
Vacation is a period of time to relax. Some people can use holiday to do some things which enrich one’s life, some people can use holiday to do some things which make they feel relax, compared with these ones’ who know how to use vacation, the other group of human who just use their day-off in laying in the couch or watching meaningless soap opera seem more than shame. In brief, I stand on the side of reducing time to have fun.
First, people who fall in love with vacation is always short of desire to become a winner. Viewing forefathers’ history, only the ones who work day and night had made huge contribution for human society. Benjamin Franklin is the best example among thousands of truth holding forward opinion. He was birth in an organize family. Because of economic reason, he just went to school for few days. Most of people who had the same situation with Franklin, but he became one of the greatest people in American history. We can say that the most important part of Franklin’s success is his hard-working. That is, Franklin had no holiday.
Second, vacation is an easy way to confuse ability to self-determinate. Do you have this feeling? When one is working, he or she can be independent, but after a period of time to relax, he or she is a little emotional, or in the other words, he or she becomes dependent. The research shows the difficult in daily life is easier to influence people who have just back from free-time than the ones work for a while. Scientists deduce that holiday activities ,no matter watching TV or attending party, are kinds of communication with human being, result in people’s dependent reaction directly.
In sum, considering these two reasons and the truth that I am a person who is less of ability to control myself, I will choose a job with less vacation time but a high salary instead of one with more vacation but less salary time.

lxg198607UID: 2564115

Vacation is a period of time to relax. Some people can use holiday to do some things which enrich one’s life（their lives）, some people can use holiday to do some things which make they feel relaxed, compared with these ones’ (去)who know how to use vacation, the other group of human who just use their day-off in laying in the couch or watching meaningless soap opera seem more than shame. In brief, I stand on the side of reducing time to have fun.
楼主是写的关于薪金和假期的选择么，则么通篇没看到关于钱的。。
First, people who fall in love with vacation is（are） always short of desire to become a winner. Viewing forefathers’ history, only the ones who work day and night had made huge contribution for(to) human society. Benjamin Franklin is the best example among thousands of truth holding forward opinion. He was birth in an organize(d) family. Because of economic reason, he just went to school for few days. Most of people who had the same situation with Franklin, but he became one of the greatest people in American history. We can say that the most important part of Franklin’s success is his hard-working（例子论证不充分啊）. That is, Franklin had no holiday.(楼主语法要注意)

Second, vacation is an easy way to confuse ability to self-determinate. Do you have this feeling?(这句有点chingish,do yo feel the same way?) When one is working, he or she can be independent, but after a period of time to relax, he or she is a little emotional, or in the（删掉） other words, he or she becomes dependent. The research shows the difficulty in daily life is easier to influence people who have just back from free-time than the ones work for a while. Scientists deduce that holiday activities ,no matter watching TV or attending party, are kinds of communication with human being, result in people’s dependent reaction directly.

"In sum, considering these two reasons and the truth that I am a person who is less (lack)of ability to control myself, I will choose a job with less vacation time but a high salary instead of one with more vacation but less salary time.

anitaxjaUID: 2758421

Vacation is a period of time to relax. Some people can use holiday to do some things which enrich one’s life（their lives）, some people can use holiday to do some things which make they feel relax. Compared with these ones’(删) who know how to use vacation, the other group of human who just use their day-off in laying in the couch or watching meaningless soap opera seem more than shame. In brief, I stand on the side of reducing time to have fun. (主旨句不明确，之提到了假期，没提到钱)

First, people who fall in love with vacation is always short of desire to become a winner. Viewing forefathers’ history, only the ones who work day and night had made huge contribution for（to） human society. Benjamin Franklin is the best example among thousands of truth holding forward opinion. He was birth(born) in an organized family. Because of economic reasons, he just went to school for few days. Most of people who(删) had the same situation with Franklin, but he became one of the greatest people in American history. We can say that the most important part of Franklin’s success is his hard-working. That is, Franklin had no holiday. （例子不充分，题干的前提是工作中，你的例子是学习）

Second, vacation is an easy way to confuse ability to self-determinate. Do you have this feeling? When one is working, he or she can be independent, but after a period of time to relax, he or she is a little emotional, or in the other words, he or she becomes dependent. The research shows the difficulty in daily life is easier to influence people who have just back from free-time than the ones work for a while. Scientists deduce that holiday activities ,no matter watching TV or attending party, are kinds of communication with human being, result in people’s dependent reaction directly. (vacation 的概念和holiday,break不一样，lZ要搞清楚再行文、举例)

In sum, considering these two reasons and the truth that I am a person who is less of ability to control myself, I will choose a job with less vacation time but a high salary instead of one with more vacation but less salary time.

小囧字UID: 2752429

谢谢同组人的修改~~~
让我受益匪浅~~！！
一起加油~~！！

小囧字UID: 2752429

谢谢同组人的批改~

0805
Doyou agree or disagree with the following statement? Younger school children(ages five to ten) should be required to study art and music in addition tomath, science, history and language.
Childhood should be the happiest and thefreest time in the whole lifetime. but some researchers show that childhoodalso is the most important time of people’s brain and have directly influenceon people’s intelligence. Whether let younger school children should study artlessons besides major ones has become a hot topic among people，especially among the young parents and heated debates are right ontheir way. But in my view, younger children should learn more lessons no matterwhich kind of knowledge and they should learn as much as possible.
Obviously, more knowledge, more chances. Withthe increasing of population and reducing of employment, it is becoming harderand harder to get a job. Most of purpose that people sent their children is togive him or her more preparation for entering society.
On the other hand, this can give childrenmore choices when children grow up and have ability to judge their career. Ithink parents prefer being blame to do much when children were young than beingheated by doing nothing. This is because a strict parent who spends time andmoney in young people’s art education is responsible at least.
In addition, knowing art can enrich one’senjoyment. there is an old saying that knowledge is never a burden. No mentionthe people who final choice art as their career, a plenty of people get lot of satisfactionduring art. Children can release from the abstract theory.
By the way, music and painting classes havepositive impact on people both intellectually and emotionally. Albert Einstein,for example, is both a prestigious physician and an outstanding violin player. Thinkingback to his early experience learning music, he said that music had asignificant influence on his physic study, because it not only inspired hiscreative thinking but also built his patient personality. it is not hard for usto see that art and music lessons are most likely motivated and inspiring forpeople instead of being a waste of time as people considered.
In sum, I stand on the side that Youngerschool children (ages five to ten) should be required to study art and music inaddition to math, science, history and language. Furthermore, I think it isnecessary to do this.

wendychuengUID: 2811319

修改了，在附件里 小囧字--feedback by wendy.doc (64 KB, 下载次数: 3)

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改好了

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0807
这次超时了好多。。因为忘了看时间了。。。
0805
Doyou agree or disagree with the following statement? Students should not takepart-time jobs while they are studying in universities.
University, unlike primary school or highschool, gives more free space to students to take part in society life. On thisground, some college student chooses to get a part-time job. Whereas, someexperts put forward a lot of shortages in this phenomenon. Nowadays, whethertake part-time jobs in daily life has become a hot topic among people, especiallyamong the young and heat debates are right on their way.
Some students stand on the negative sideand think it is a ridiculous to take part-time jobs. To begin with, it iscommon to think it can have huge damage to one’s study. In form by severaluniversities shows there are 80 percents people who spend their free time towork have fail one of their major at least. What’s more, taking part time jobcan lead a teenager who is short for self-control touch dry part in society anddevote it. In some way, it can be fatal.
In contrary, I stand on the side thatpeople can benefit from their part-time jobs and it has nothing to do withtheir school work.
In my view, getting part-time job is a wayto improve one’s grades instead of depressing it. It is goes without sayingthat getting a payment job could get a payback with which can reduce parents’burden and it can be crucially if you come from a poor family or enrich student’smethod life. Just thinking the numberless practice you can get from part-timejob. Deep theories we learn in university comes from practice, they areabstract to take in, but you can get concrete things throw practice. That iswhy economic students have to enter bank, chemical students have to go intolab, medical have to get intern-time. What’s more, the experience of workcannot be replace by theory. You need to learn how to deal with emergency, howto handle instruments and how to increase efficiency? These problems are smallbut also importance and experiment is unique way to solve them. That is a reasonthat we need get part-time jobs.
What’s more, part-time jobs can give peoplemore chances to communicate with people around. It is obvious important tostudy theory in college, but I think it is more important to know how to talkwith people. In actual life, every job has to communicate with a plenty ofpoles: bosses, workmates, enemy, customers…A research shows a truth that peopleknows how to describe is easy to approach success. So we can say, communicationcan regard as an essential class in university. On this background, a websiteinvestigates some people and result get attention from the whole educationfield: about 55percents people think it is totally wrong to regardless the rolethat communication take in daily life and think students should createopportunity to enhance communication skill, like getting a part-time job. Fromthis conclusion, the approaching to getting a part-time job has becoming mainstream.
To sum up, I think part-time job has moreadvantages for students’ growing than its disadvantage for backing students’improvement in long term.

伶女UID: 2797207

改在这里啦:loveliness: