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"Technologies not only influence but actually determine social customs and ethics."
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According to the speaker, the technologies influencing social customs and ethics also play a decisive role. Yetare social customs and ethics depending on technologies totally, as the statement contends? Although I agree with that technologies can influence social customs and ethics which there is far more to affect than technologies. Thus the speaker overrates the significance of technologies as a power to impact the customs and ethics.


Technologies influence the social customs and ethics: the human have rewritten the history with modern views, lighting the dark ages and tempering those crazy years of foolishness. For example, hurricane, tornado, and volcanic eruption are confusing to the people thousands years before who ignorantly contributed these phenomenon to the wrath of god or divine retribution in superstition. Whereas, the gallop in technology and science unmasks the law of phenomenon above which is just the power of nature. Consequencely, the sun worship, ancestor worship, exorcism and other types of superstitions gradually go out of our lives. Similarly, Industrial Revolution in Britain paved the way for the emancipation of women, which was the beginning of the women’s liberation.
Technologies influence the social ethics. For instance, the breakthrough and discoveries in genetic lead to a general recognition that intermarriage against nature and evolution may result in diseased features. Moreover, Industrial Revolution in Britain paved the way for the emancipation of women, which was the beginning of the women’s liberation. Additionally, abortion, the killing of unborn person is exactly derived from the development of medical technology. In short, technologies affect the social ethics and customs beyond all doubt.

Nevertheless, we still should not make the hasty generalization that technologies determine social customs and ethics because such as cultural backgrounds and economical degree make a difference as well. Instead, the social customs and ethics determine technologies. For instance, the euthanasia which is invented for a release to some extent is murder away from ethics, thus a statutory restriction is inevitable. In addition, the nuclear weapon which for the peace yet contribute Hiroshima the explosion to a devastated city. Besides, the cyber crimes developed from the network in turn have been the main causes of restricting sound network. Therefore, technologies do not determine the social customs and ethics, on the country, technologies are been resolved by the social customs and ethics.

To sum up, the speaker exaggerates the significance of technologies which but influential rather than decesive.
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According to the speaker, the technologies influencing social customs and ethics also play a decisive role. Yet are social customs and ethics depending(dependent) on technologies totally, as the statement contends? Although I agree with(删) that technologies can influence social customs and ethics which there is far more to affect than technologies. Thus the speaker overrates the significance of technologies as a power to impact the customs and ethics.

Technologies influence the social customs and ethics(这段写的是technology对social customs的影响没提到对ethics的作用): the human have rewritten the history with modern views, lighting the dark ages and tempering those crazy years of foolishness. For example, hurricane, tornado, and volcanic eruption are confusing to the people thousands years before who ignorantly contributed these phenomenon to the wrath of god or divine retribution in superstition. Whereas, the gallop in technology and science unmasks the law of phenomenon above which is just the power of nature. Consequencely, the sun worship, ancestor worship, exorcism and other types of superstitions gradually go out of our lives. Similarly, Industrial Revolution in Britain paved the way for the emancipation of women, which was the beginning of the women’s liberation.(非限和emancipation语义重复了,不如说成 which terminated the prejudice of women’s lack of work force)

Technologies influence the social ethics. For instance, the breakthrough and discoveries in genetic lead to a general recognition that intermarriage against nature and evolution may result in diseased features. Moreover, Industrial Revolution in Britain paved the way for the emancipation of women, which was the beginning of the women’s liberation.(相同的句子怎么会重复的) Additionally, abortion, the killing of unborn person is exactly derived from the development of medical technology. In short, technologies affect the social ethics and customs beyond all doubt.(abortion的例子作者应该更详细的说明和ethics的关系否则不能达到cogent的效果)

Nevertheless, we still should not make the hasty generalization that technologies determine social customs and ethics because such as cultural backgrounds and economical degree make a difference as well. Instead, the social customs and ethics determine technologies. For instance, the euthanasia which is invented for a release to some extent is murder away from ethics, thus a statutory restriction is inevitable. In addition, the nuclear weapon which for the peace yet contribute Hiroshima the explosion to a devastated city. Besides, the cyber crimes developed from the network in turn have been the main causes of restricting sound network. Therefore, technologies do not determine the social customs and ethics, on the country, technologies are been resolved by the social customs and ethics.

To sum up, the speaker exaggerates the significance of technologies which but influential rather than decesive.  
1.        文章的逻辑比较清晰
2.        字数不够,主要是例子很多但没有深入分析,和我argument的毛病一样

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