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Money or time? This difficult dilemmaremains: in most case, people hardly can find a job with not only high salarybut also plenty leisure time. I believe that a job with more vacation time buta low salary is better because it provides more time to accompany family,benefits for health, which we need to do everything and brings more inspire forme.

A job with more vacation is preferablebecause it provides plenty of time we can spend on with our family or friends,which can bring us deep happiness. For example, I love my son who are only twoyears old, but I merely have time to take care of him due to I am always on mybusiness trip. Were I have more vacation, I could live with him more days thatmoney can never change for. Because of this, I think that more avocations aresuperior to high salary.

Additionally, more vacation is betterbecause it helps us relax from the pressure that caused by heavy work. As amatter of fact, modern society has witness a large number of employees are livein risk of occupational diseases, which probably arises by stressed work. Basedon the risk of having diseases, a job have more chances to take a break is abetter option than caring excessively about the money.

Finally, I think having more time to takeavocation is the right choice because the vacation is actually will facilitatethe efficiency of work. Take myself for example. I am a graphic designer, whonormally will sit before the computer over 10 hours per day. Every time after Ifinished several projects, my brain is almost been squeezed out. I really needa period of vacation to replenish my thought and find my inspire back to go ondoing my job.

Ultimately, I feel that take a job withmore vacation time but a low salary is the correct one. I believe this becausemore vacation matches what I expected: more time to stay with family, healthliving and more inspire.

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Additionally, more vacation is better because it helps us relax from the pressure that(删掉） caused by heavy work. As a matter of fact, modern society has witness a large number of employees are livein (living in )risk of occupational diseases, which probably arises by stressed work. Basedon the risk of having diseases, a job have more chances to take a break is abetter option than caring excessively about the money.

Finally, I think having more time to take a vocation is the right choice because the vacation is actually will(will actually) facilitate(improve) the efficiency of work. Take myself for example. I am a graphic designer, wh onormally will sit before the computer over 10 hours per day. Every time after I finished several projects, my brain is almost been squeezed out. I really need a period of vacation to replenish my thought and find my inspire back to go on doing（continue) my job.

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Ultimately, I feel that take(taking) a job with more vacation time but a low salary is the correct one(a correct choice). I believe this because more vacation matches what I expected(expect): more time to stay with family, health(y) living and more inspire.
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PS：通过自身的例子来论证，很有说服力。。没想到这位考友已经成为光荣的妈妈了，还保持着积极的进取心，向你学习。。祝你考T成功！

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Do you agree ordisagree with the following statement? Students should not take part-time jobswhile they are studying in universities.







The issue athand is whether the student should take part-time jobs or not while they arestill at college. This issue is controversial because the part-time job isnormally considered as a mainly reason that would disturb the students' studyin universities. However, I believe that taking part-time jobs is the betteroption because of the following reasons.

First of all,taking part-time jobs are preferable because it provide students chances toearn some money, which can partly reduce the pressure caused by the growingtuition. For example, I major in painting and I need some money to afford thepaints, canvas or even traveling to some place with great landscape. Apart-time job can resolve these problems. It actually benefits my studies.Because these jobs can help me earn some money, I think taking part-time jobsis superior to only studying in universities.

Additionally,having the jobs is better because it could bring us more experiences that cannot learn in the universities. The four-year jobs taught me a large number ofthings such as how to work with partners, how to struggle for my own profits,how to make friends. All of these experiences could not been obtained frombooks or teachers. Base on these precious experiences, taking a part-time jobis a better option than only studying from books.

Finally, I thinkpart-time job is the right choice because it gives students opportunities toapply their knowledge in a real world work situation. Still take myself forexample, in the final year of college, I got a part-time job, draw someillustrator for a publishing houses, which led me to make a big progress atthat time and getting the formal job there as soon as I graduated. I like thepart-time job over staying at the college due to this opportunity.

Ultimately, Ifeel that students should take some part-time jobs while they are studying inuniversity is the correct choice. I believe this because the part-time job canprovide the opportunities to earn money, gain experience and enhance theprofessional skill.